Run: 2026-06-24-01KVX3B08NMPPJNN7DYKQFAHJN

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50.8s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The third deadbolt stuck, same as it always did. Rory threw her shoulder against the door and it groaned open, the smell of cumin and turmeric from the curry house below hitting her like a wall. Ptolemy wound between her ankles, chirping his displeasure at the late hour. "Yes, I know. You're starving. You're always starving." She kicked the door shut behind her and dumped her delivery bag on the kitchen counter, knocking over a stack of Eva's research scrolls. The cat followed her to the cupboard, tail flicking with impatience. "You ate four hours ago. Don't give me that look." Ptolemy meowed again. Louder. Rory cracked open a tin of cat food and spooned it into his bowl. He attacked it like he hadn't eaten in weeks. She straightened up, pressing her palms into the small of her back. Twelve hours on the moped. Her spine felt like someone had taken a hammer to it. Yu-Fei had her running deliveries across half of South London because two of the other drivers called in sick, and the tips had been rubbish, and now she had to— Three knocks. Precise. Measured. She froze. Eva wasn't due back from Cardiff until tomorrow. Nobody else knew this address. She kept it that way for a reason. Ptolemy's head came up from the bowl, ears swivelling. Rory grabbed the cricket bat Eva kept behind the bookshelf and crossed to the door. She checked the peephole. One amber eye. One black. Platinum blond hair slicked back from a face she'd spent three months trying to forget. "Open the door, Aurora." Her grip tightened on the bat. "Piss off, Lucien." "I can hear you holding a weapon through the wood. Put it down and open the door." "Or what? You'll charming your way through? Last time you charmed your way anywhere, I ended up with a split lip and a cleaning bill." Silence. Then, quieter: "I didn't ask him to do that." "No. You just left me standing in an alley behind a demon club while your associates sorted out their business. Same thing, isn't it?" Ptolemy had abandoned his food and was sniffing at the gap under the door, tail up. Traitor. "There are people looking for you. Not the kind who knock." "Then I'm popular. Congratulations. Go away." "Aurora." His voice dropped. Not a command. Something closer to the tone he'd used that night in Marseille, when he'd told her things he'd never told anyone. "Please." She hated that word in his mouth. Hated how it undid something in her chest she'd spent months bolting shut. She set the bat against the wall and undid the deadbolts. One. Two. Three. The door opened. Lucien stood in the dim hallway in a charcoal suit that cost more than her annual rent, ivory-handled cane tucked under one arm. He looked the same. Impeccable. Controlled. Except for a dark stain on his left cuff that could have been wine but wasn't, and the way his jaw tightened when he saw her face. "You look terrible," he said. "Twelve-hour shift. Some of us work for a living." His gaze dropped to the cricket bat behind her. "Charming." "Effective." She stepped back. Not an invitation. Just making space. "Five minutes. Start talking." He entered the flat like he belonged in it, scanning the piles of books, the scrolls, Eva's conspiracy-board wall of string and photographs and Post-it notes. Ptolemy trotted over and butted his head against Lucien's trouser leg. Lucien bent and scratched behind the cat's ears without looking down. "Coventry's circle is active again." The name landed like a punch to the sternum. Rory's hand found the kitchen counter and gripped it. "I thought that was handled." "Handled. Not resolved. There's a difference, as you well know." "I know that I walked away from it. From all of it. That was the arrangement." Lucien turned to face her. The hallway light caught his mismatched eyes, and for a moment she saw the thing underneath the tailored suit and the careful manners. The thing his father had given him. The thing that made the air in the room feel heavier when he was angry. "Coventry has your name. Your real one. Not the one on your delivery licence, not the one on your flat agreement. He found the Cardiff connection." The curry smell from below suddenly made her stomach turn. She crossed her arms, fingers digging into her own sleeves. The crescent scar on her left wrist throbbed, a phantom ache from a fall she'd taken when she was nine. "How." "That's what I'm trying to determine. I need access to Eva's research. The work she did on the Avaros tethers last spring." "Eva's not here. And her research isn't yours to take." "I'm not taking anything. I'm asking." "You don't ask, Lucien. You arrange. You broker. You make people think they're choosing when you've already set the board." He tilted his head. The faintest flicker of something crossed his face. Amusement, maybe. Or recognition. "Is that what you think happened in Marseille?" "I think you knew what was going to happen in that alley and you left anyway because it was convenient for your arrangement with Sable. I think you let me believe I was part of the operation when I was just bait." "I never—" "You let me believe a lot of things." The cat jumped onto the counter between them, knocking a stack of index cards to the floor. Neither of them moved to pick them up. Lucien set his cane against the wall. Without it, he seemed somehow less composed. Smaller, though he wasn't small. His hand went to his cuff, fingers brushing the dark stain, and he caught her watching. "It's not mine." "Didn't say it was." "You were thinking it." "I was thinking you owe me an explanation, not a fashion report." He stepped closer. Not predatory. Careful. Like approaching something that might bolt. "Coventry's circle found a way to trace anyone who's touched an Avaros tether. You touched one. In Marseille, when you pulled me out of that warehouse. You didn't just pull me out, Aurora. You bound yourself to the same frequency." The room seemed to shrink. Rory stared at him. "You never mentioned that part." "I didn't know. Not then." "And now? How long have you known now?" His silence answered for him. She lunged. Not at him. At her jacket, slung over the back of Eva's reading chair. She dug through the pockets until her fingers closed around her phone. "Three months. You've known for three months and you—" "I've been trying to fix it. That's what I do. I fix things." "You fix things for other people! That's the whole bloody point of you! You broker deals and you move pieces and you walk away clean while everyone else—" "Aurora." "Don't. Don't say my name like that." "Like what?" Like it means something. Like you're tasting it. Like you've been practising it in rooms I'm not in. She shoved past him and grabbed the cricket bat. He didn't flinch. Didn't step back. Just stood there in Eva's cramped, book-filled flat, smelling of expensive cologne and someone else's blood, watching her with those impossible eyes. "If Coventry can trace me, then he can trace Eva. She's the one who mapped the tethers. She's the one who—" "I know. That's why I'm here." Ptolemy meowed. The index cards lay scattered across the floor like fallen leaves, covered in Eva's tight, obsessively neat handwriting. Rory's phone buzzed. A text from an unknown number. She looked down. Three words. No punctuation. *Found you, Malphora.* Her blood went cold. She looked up at Lucien, and whatever he saw on her face made every trace of composure drain from his own. "Show me." She turned the phone toward him. He read the screen. Read it again. His hand closed around his cane so fast the ivory handle creaked. "When did you arrive at this flat?" "Twenty minutes ago. Maybe less." "Did you take your usual route?" "I don't have a usual route, I—" "Aurora. Did anyone follow you tonight?" The cat hissed at the window. Both of them turned. The curtain shifted. Not from wind. The latch on the fire escape was turning.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"She stepped back [back]"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.057
leniency0.113
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.038
96.37% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1379
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.99% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1379
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"measured"
count1
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"scanning"
count1
3
word"resolved"
count1
4
word"stomach"
count1
5
word"throbbed"
count1
6
word"flicker"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"silence"
2"scanning"
3"resolved"
4"stomach"
5"throbbed"
6"flicker"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
highlights
0"blood went cold"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences110
matches
0"was angry"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences110
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences159
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords3
totalWords1379
ratio0.002
matches
0"Found you, Malphora."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions40
wordCount862
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.81
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Eva7
South1
London1
Three3
Cardiff1
Ptolemy6
Marseille1
Post-it1
Lucien6
Rory6
One3
Like4
persons
0"Eva"
1"Ptolemy"
2"Post-it"
3"Lucien"
4"Rory"
5"Like"
places
0"South"
1"London"
2"Cardiff"
3"Marseille"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences54
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like someone had taken a hammer to"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1379
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences159
matches
0"used that night"
1"hated that word"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs86
mean16.03
std14.65
cv0.913
sampleLengths
048
18
235
310
44
581
64
723
89
919
1020
114
129
1317
1425
1510
1624
1717
1811
196
2028
2134
223
2356
245
259
2610
2714
2848
295
3018
315
3210
3316
3450
3526
3640
371
3822
3910
406
4120
4216
438
4442
452
468
4725
4835
493
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs153
matches
0"was sniffing"
1"was turning"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences159
ratio0.006
matches
0"Yu-Fei had her running deliveries across half of South London because two of the other drivers called in sick, and the tips had been rubbish, and now she had to—"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount867
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.02191464821222607
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.002306805074971165
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences159
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences159
mean8.67
std7.81
cv0.9
sampleLengths
09
127
212
38
424
511
610
73
81
914
109
1112
125
1311
1430
152
161
171
182
198
205
218
229
2315
244
253
262
2715
284
296
303
3117
3225
331
349
3524
3616
371
3811
396
404
413
4220
431
447
4513
4611
471
481
491
65.83% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.42138364779874216
totalSentences159
uniqueOpeners67
76.63% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences87
matches
0"Just making space."
1"Just stood there in Eva's"
ratio0.023
91.26% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences87
matches
0"She kicked the door shut"
1"He attacked it like he"
2"She straightened up, pressing her"
3"Her spine felt like someone"
4"She kept it that way"
5"She checked the peephole."
6"Her grip tightened on the"
7"His voice dropped"
8"She hated that word in"
9"She set the bat against"
10"He looked the same."
11"His gaze dropped to the"
12"She stepped back"
13"He entered the flat like"
14"She crossed her arms, fingers"
15"He tilted his head."
16"His hand went to his"
17"He stepped closer."
18"His silence answered for him."
19"She dug through the pockets"
ratio0.322
74.94% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount67
totalSentences87
matches
0"The third deadbolt stuck, same"
1"Rory threw her shoulder against"
2"Ptolemy wound between her ankles,"
3"She kicked the door shut"
4"The cat followed her to"
5"Ptolemy meowed again."
6"Rory cracked open a tin"
7"He attacked it like he"
8"She straightened up, pressing her"
9"Her spine felt like someone"
10"Yu-Fei had her running deliveries"
11"Eva wasn't due back from"
12"Nobody else knew this address."
13"She kept it that way"
14"Ptolemy's head came up from"
15"Rory grabbed the cricket bat"
16"She checked the peephole."
17"Platinum blond hair slicked back"
18"Her grip tightened on the"
19"Ptolemy had abandoned his food"
ratio0.77
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences87
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Lucien stood in the dim hallway in a charcoal suit that cost more than her annual rent, ivory-handled cane tucked under one arm."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.019
leniency0.038
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.5344%