Run: 2026-07-01-01KWE8Q30H66BB0CR2YBM69DXK

Run Details

Model:: Claude Sonnet 5 (Reasoning)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 38.1s
Cost:: $0.029170
Provider:: Amazon Bedrock

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
90.25%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
75.63%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
92.68%	Name drop frequency	(details)
0.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
83.33%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
81.76%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
80.42%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
100.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
11.28%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Technical jargon density	(details)
0.00%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
100.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
77.1786%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert fiction writer.

Always keep the following rules in mind:
- Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang.
- Write in active voice
- Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle.
- Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions.
- Convey events and story through dialogue.
- Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety.
- Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech
- Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself.
- Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action.
- Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe"

When writing text:
- NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely.
- NEVER end with foreshadowing.
- NEVER write further than what I prompt you with.
- AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions.
- STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.

User/Human

Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response:
<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Continue the story using the following instructions:
<instructions>
Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
</instructions>

Model response

The standing stones rose out of the bracken like teeth breaking through gum, grey and lichen-crusted, older than the oaks that ringed them. Aurora counted seven as she passed between the first pair, though she could've sworn there'd been five a moment ago.

"Don't count them," Nyx said, their voice a rustle at her shoulder. "They don't like it."

"They're rocks."

"They're doors."

The air changed the moment she crossed the threshold — thicker, sweeter, like breathing through honeycomb. Richmond Park fell away behind her, the distant thrum of traffic swallowed whole. Aurora turned to check it was still there and found only more trees, silver-barked and impossibly tall, their canopies lost somewhere in a sky that wasn't quite dusk and wasn't quite dawn.

"Rory." Nyx's shadow-form rippled, thinning at the edges like smoke caught in a draft. "Stay close. The Grove doesn't take kindly to wandering feet."

"Feels like it's already decided what it thinks of me."

She held up her hand. Her skin had taken on a faint opalescent sheen, catching light that had no visible source. The crescent scar on her wrist itched, sharp and sudden, gone as quickly as it came.

Wildflowers carpeted the ground in colours she didn't have names for — blues that verged into violet, a red that pulsed faintly like something alive. She crouched to touch one and it curled away from her fingers, retracting into the soil with a sound like a held breath released.

"Guess it doesn't want to be picked."

"Wise flower."

They walked on. The path — if it could be called that — wound between roots thick as her waist, silver bark peeling back in curls that looked like parchment. Aurora reached out to touch one and Nyx's hand, dark and cool as river water, caught her wrist.

"That's not bark."

"What is it, then?"

"Skin. Old skin. The trees here remember being something else."

She pulled her hand back, wiped it on her jeans though nothing had touched her. Somewhere off to the left, a sound rippled through the clearing — not quite bells, not quite laughter, a chiming that made the hair on her arms stand up.

"Please tell me that's birds."

"It's not birds."

"Brilliant."

The Heartstone pendant warmed against her collarbone, a small insistent heat that hadn't been there a moment before. She pressed her palm flat over it, felt the pulse of it sync — for a heartbeat — with her own.

"That's new."

"The pendant's Dymasian. This place doesn't much care for Hel's fingerprints." Nyx's violet eyes tracked the tree line, restless. "It's noticing you."

"The Grove is noticing me."

"Everything in the Grove is the Grove."

They came upon the pool without warning — the trees simply opened and there it was, black glass water fed by no visible stream, its surface so still it might have been solid. Aurora crept to the edge and found no reflection staring back. Just the sky, wrong-coloured and swirling faintly, as though someone had stirred it with a finger.

"Isolde said the grove was hidden. She didn't say it'd feel like standing inside someone's dream."

"Closer to a memory," Nyx said. "One that hasn't decided yet if it wants you in it."

A twig snapped somewhere behind them, dry and deliberate. Aurora spun, hand going instinctively to her hip where the Fae blade sat sheathed, its moonsilver edge cold even through the leather. Nothing there. Just more silver trunks, more curling shadows, and that damned chiming sound again, closer now, threading between the trunks like it was searching for her specifically.

"Nyx."

"I hear it."

"Is it dangerous?"

"Everything here is dangerous. The question is whether it's dangerous to you."

The flowers near her feet had begun to open wider, petals unfurling to catch a light that still had no source, and for one dizzying second Aurora felt the whole grove inhale around her — the air pressing close, warm, curious, like a held breath deciding whether to let go.

"There," Nyx said, and their form solidified fully for the first time since they'd crossed the stones, becoming something almost solid, almost human-shaped, plated in shifting dark. "Through there."

A gap between two trees revealed a second clearing beyond, smaller, ringed by mushrooms the size of dinner plates that glowed faintly amber at their caps. Threads of silver mist hung low over a bed of moss so vivid green it hurt to look at directly.

"That wasn't there before."

"The Grove rearranges itself. Time doesn't sit right here, remember. An hour outside could be a day in here. Or the other way round."

"Comforting."

Aurora stepped through the gap and the temperature dropped, sharp enough to raise gooseflesh along her arms. The mushrooms pulsed once, in unison, like they'd noticed her passing. She fought the urge to touch one, remembering the flower's flinch, remembering that skin wasn't bark here and bark might not be bark either.

"Isolde's close," Nyx said. "I can feel her wards. Thin as gauze but they're there."

"How can you tell?"

"Because mine are itching."

The mist thickened as they went, curling around Aurora's ankles like something with intention, tugging gently at the hem of her jeans. She kept walking, kept her hand near the blade, kept the pendant's warmth as an anchor against her chest. Every few steps the chiming sound circled closer, never quite revealing its source, and every few steps the flowers turned — actually turned, stems creaking — to track her passing.

"It's watching me."

"It's curious about you." Nyx paused at the clearing's far edge, where the mushrooms gave way to a wall of tangled thorn vines strung with tiny white blossoms. "That's not nothing. The Grove doesn't get curious about mortals often."

"Should I be flattered or terrified?"

"Both, generally, in my experience."

Beyond the thorns, faint and silver, something moved — a shape too tall to be human, too slender to be anything Aurora had a name for, gliding between the trunks without disturbing a single leaf.

"Nyx."

"I see her."

"That's Isolde?"

"That's Isolde's grove telling us she knows we're here." Nyx's voice dropped to something almost reverent. "Which means she's already decided whether to let us find her."

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	8
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	46
tagDensity	0.174
leniency	0.348
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

90.25%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1026

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"quickly"
count	1

adverb	"gently"
count	1

highlights

0	"quickly"
1	"gently"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

75.63%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1026

totalAiIsms

found

word	"pulsed"
count	2

word	"pulse"
count	1

word	"comforting"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	1

highlights

0	"pulsed"
1	"pulse"
2	"comforting"
3	"warmth"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	42
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount	0
hedgeCount	0
narrationSentences	42
filterMatches	(empty)
hedgeMatches	(empty)

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	80
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	49
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1038
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	13
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

92.68%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

785

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.15

worstName

"Nyx"

maxWindowNameDensity

1.5

worstWindowName

"Nyx"

discoveredNames

Park	1
Nyx	9
Heartstone	1
Fae	1
Aurora	9

persons

0	"Nyx"
1	"Aurora"

places

"Park"

globalScore

0.927

windowScore

0.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"quite dusk and wasn't quite dawn"
1	"quite dawn"
2	"looked like parchment"
3	"not quite bells, not quite laughter, a chiming that made the hair on her arms stand up"
4	"not quite laughter, a chiming that made the hair on her arms stand up"

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches	0
per1kWords	0
wordCount	1038
matches	(empty)

83.33%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"called that — wound"
1	"remembering that skin"

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

19.96

std

20.33

1.019

sampleLengths

0	43
1	16
2	2
3	2
4	61
5	24
6	10
7	37
8	49
9	7
10	2
11	48
12	3
13	4
14	10
15	44
16	5
17	3
18	1
19	39
20	2
21	22
22	5
23	7
24	60
25	16
26	17
27	59
28	1
29	3
30	3
31	12
32	50
33	29
34	46
35	4
36	24
37	1
38	52
39	15
40	4
41	4
42	71
43	3
44	39
45	6
46	5
47	35
48	1
49	3

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	42
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

134

matches

0	"was searching"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.113

matches

0	"The air changed the moment she crossed the threshold — thicker, sweeter, like breathing through honeycomb."
1	"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in colours she didn't have names for — blues that verged into violet, a red that pulsed faintly like something alive."
2	"The path — if it could be called that — wound between roots thick as her waist, silver bark peeling back in curls that looked like parchment."
3	"Somewhere off to the left, a sound rippled through the clearing — not quite bells, not quite laughter, a chiming that made the hair on her arms stand up."
4	"She pressed her palm flat over it, felt the pulse of it sync — for a heartbeat — with her own."
5	"They came upon the pool without warning — the trees simply opened and there it was, black glass water fed by no visible stream, its surface so still it might have been solid."
6	"The flowers near her feet had begun to open wider, petals unfurling to catch a light that still had no source, and for one dizzying second Aurora felt the whole grove inhale around her — the air pressing close, warm, curious, like a held breath deciding whether to let go."
7	"Every few steps the chiming sound circled closer, never quite revealing its source, and every few steps the flowers turned — actually turned, stems creaking — to track her passing."
8	"Beyond the thorns, faint and silver, something moved — a shape too tall to be human, too slender to be anything Aurora had a name for, gliding between the trunks without disturbing a single leaf."

81.76%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

778

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"pressing close, warm, curious, like"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.05398457583547558

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.016709511568123392

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	80
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

12.98

std

10.27

0.792

sampleLengths

0	23
1	20
2	12
3	4
4	2
5	2
6	16
7	13
8	32
9	14
10	10
11	10
12	5
13	16
14	16
15	25
16	24
17	7
18	2
19	3
20	27
21	18
22	3
23	4
24	10
25	15
26	29
27	5
28	3
29	1
30	18
31	21
32	2
33	19
34	3
35	5
36	7
37	33
38	11
39	16
40	16
41	6
42	11
43	9
44	22
45	2
46	26
47	1
48	3
49	3

80.42%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	4
diversityRatio	0.5125
totalSentences	80
uniqueOpeners	41

100.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Somewhere off to the left,"
1	"Just the sky, wrong-coloured and"
2	"Just more silver trunks, more"

ratio

0.077

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"She held up her hand."
1	"Her skin had taken on"
2	"She crouched to touch one"
3	"They walked on."
4	"She pulled her hand back,"
5	"She pressed her palm flat"
6	"They came upon the pool"
7	"She fought the urge to"
8	"She kept walking, kept her"

ratio

0.231

11.28%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The standing stones rose out"
1	"Aurora counted seven as she"
2	"Nyx said, their voice a"
3	"The air changed the moment"
4	"Richmond Park fell away behind"
5	"Aurora turned to check it"
6	"Nyx's shadow-form rippled, thinning at"
7	"She held up her hand."
8	"Her skin had taken on"
9	"The crescent scar on her"
10	"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in"
11	"She crouched to touch one"
12	"They walked on."
13	"The path — if it"
14	"Aurora reached out to touch"
15	"She pulled her hand back,"
16	"The Heartstone pendant warmed against"
17	"She pressed her palm flat"
18	"Nyx's violet eyes tracked the"
19	"They came upon the pool"

ratio

0.897

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	39
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

0.00%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The standing stones rose out of the bracken like teeth breaking through gum, grey and lichen-crusted, older than the oaks that ringed them."
1	"Aurora turned to check it was still there and found only more trees, silver-barked and impossibly tall, their canopies lost somewhere in a sky that wasn't quite…"
2	"Her skin had taken on a faint opalescent sheen, catching light that had no visible source."
3	"The path — if it could be called that — wound between roots thick as her waist, silver bark peeling back in curls that looked like parchment."
4	"The Heartstone pendant warmed against her collarbone, a small insistent heat that hadn't been there a moment before."
5	"Just the sky, wrong-coloured and swirling faintly, as though someone had stirred it with a finger."
6	"She fought the urge to touch one, remembering the flower's flinch, remembering that skin wasn't bark here and bark might not be bark either."

0.00%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Nyx said, their voice a rustle at her shoulder"
1	"Nyx's violet eyes, restless"

100.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags	4
fancyCount	0
fancyTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	46
tagDensity	0.087
leniency	0.174
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

77.1786%