Run: 2026-07-01-01KWE8SMJFV3ANS9NJWYQZSV0N

Run Details

Model:: Claude Sonnet 5 (Reasoning)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 32.7s
Cost:: $0.025170
Provider:: Amazon Bedrock

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
80.30%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
49.69%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
33.33%	Name drop frequency	(details)
0.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
82.38%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
91.49%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
79.17%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
81.30%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
89.95%	Technical jargon density	(details)
17.86%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
87.50%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
76.4321%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The oak stones marked the boundary the way a held breath marks the moment before speaking. Rory felt it before she saw it — a pressure against her skin, like walking into a room where everyone had just stopped talking about her.

"You feel that?" she asked.

"Feel is a generous word for what I do." Nyx's voice curled out from the shadow at her shoulder, barely more than a disturbance in the air. "I feel the absence of feeling. This place doesn't know what to make of me."

Isolde had gone ahead without them, silver hair catching light that had no clear source, and when Rory glanced down she understood why the Half-Fae left no footprints. The ground here wasn't entirely ground. It shimmered faintly at the edges of her vision, grass and soil resolving into solidity only when she looked at it directly, dissolving into something softer, stranger, the moment her attention wandered.

"Mind the roots," Isolde said, not turning. "They remember being stepped on. They hold grudges."

Rory looked down at the gnarled shapes threading through the grass and decided not to ask whether that was metaphor.

The grove opened before them like a held secret finally given up. Wildflowers she didn't have names for spilled in drifts of impossible color — blues that ached, yellows that seemed to hum audibly at the edge of hearing. Somewhere close, water moved, though she couldn't see a stream. The air smelled of crushed thyme and rain that hadn't fallen yet.

"It's beautiful," she said, and hated how inadequate it sounded even as she said it.

"It is trying to be," Isolde replied. "The Grove shows you beauty because beauty is easier for mortal eyes to hold than truth. Look sideways, and you will see less kindness."

Rory tried it — a slow, deliberate slide of her gaze to the periphery — and for half a heartbeat the flowers were bones, white and delicate, arranged with the same careless abundance. She snapped her eyes back and the flowers were flowers again, and her heart thudded once, hard, against her ribs.

"Charming," Nyx murmured. "I like it here already."

They went deeper. The path — if it could be called a path, since it seemed to exist only where their feet chose to fall — wound between standing stones older than the oaks that ringed the boundary. Some were carved with symbols that shifted if she stared too long, spirals becoming eyes becoming spirals again. Others were bare, weathered smooth, and those, somehow, felt older still.

"Time moves strangely here," Isolde said, as if reading the question before Rory had fully formed it. "What feels like an hour to you may be a heartbeat outside these stones. Or a season. The Grove does not keep mortal time. It keeps its own."

"That's not remotely reassuring."

"It was not meant to be."

The Heartstone Pendant warmed faintly against Rory's collarbone, a small insistent pulse she'd almost forgotten it was capable of. She pressed two fingers to it through her shirt, frowning.

"It's warm."

Nyx's shadow-shape rippled, drawing closer, violet eyes sharpening to twin points of interest. "That stone wakes near portals to Hel. This is Fae ground."

"Maybe the boundaries aren't as clean as we think," Rory said.

"Nothing here is clean," Isolde said, and for once there was no riddle in it, only a flat, weary honesty that made the hair on Rory's arms rise.

They pressed on. The trees thickened, trunks silvered like the moonsilver of the blade at Rory's hip, and their canopies wove overhead so densely that the sky vanished into a lace of leaf-shadow. Fireflies — if that's what they were — drifted between the trunks in slow, deliberate patterns, and when one drifted close enough Rory saw it wasn't an insect at all but a mote of pure light, no wings, no body, simply glowing and alive.

"Don't touch them," Isolde said, though Rory hadn't reached out. "They are memories that escaped. If you touch one, it will show you what it remembers. Sometimes that is a gift. Sometimes it is a theft."

"A theft of what?"

"Of the not-knowing. Some things are kinder unknown."

They came to a clearing where the wildflowers gave way entirely to something like still water, black and glassy, though no wind stirred its surface and no ripple marked their approach. Rory crouched at its edge, and her reflection did not crouch with her. It stood, instead, looking back at her with an expression she hadn't made, something between pity and recognition.

She stood up fast, heart hammering. "Isolde."

"The Mirrorpool shows what waits," Isolde said, coming to stand beside her, gazing down without fear. "Not always what will happen. Only what waits, patiently, for the chance."

"That's not the same thing?"

"No. Waiting things can be starved."

Rory looked back at the water. Her reflection was gone now, replaced by ordinary stillness, her own startled face staring up at her as it should. She let out a breath she hadn't realized she was holding.

"This place likes to test people," Nyx observed, drifting low along the water's edge, their shadow-form elongating unnaturally across the black glass without disturbing it. "I find that almost endearing."

"You would."

Deeper still, the grove began to hum — not sound exactly, but a vibration felt in the teeth, in the small bones of the ear. Isolde slowed her pace, silver hair drifting though there was no wind to move it.

"We are close," she said. "The heart of the Grove does not welcome uninvited guests kindly. Walk only where I walk. Speak only when spoken to, if anything speaks. And Aurora—" she turned, lavender eyes catching what little light there was and holding it like captured stars, "—do not let it flatter you. Wonder is not the same as safety."

Rory nodded, throat tight, the pendant's warmth a small insistent heartbeat against her skin, the fireflies drifting like scattered thoughts through the silver trees, and somewhere ahead, past the hum and the black water and the watching stones, something ancient waited to see what she would do.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	14
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	32
tagDensity	0.438
leniency	0.875
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

100.00%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount	1015
totalAiIsmAdverbs	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

80.30%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1015

totalAiIsms

found

word	"shimmered"
count	1

word	"resolving"
count	1

word	"pulse"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	1

highlights

0	"shimmered"
1	"resolving"
2	"pulse"
3	"warmth"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches

maxInWindow

found

label	"let out a breath"
count	1

highlights

0	"let out a breath"

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	46
matches	(empty)

49.69%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"
1	"began to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	64
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	56
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1023
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	13
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

33.33%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

767

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.83

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Nyx	4
Isolde	8
Rory	14
Half-Fae	1
Heartstone	1
Pendant	1
Deeper	1

persons

0	"Nyx"
1	"Isolde"
2	"Rory"
3	"Half-Fae"
4	"Pendant"

places

(empty)

globalScore

0.587

windowScore

0.333

0.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"yellows that seemed to hum audibly at the edge of hearing"
1	"as if reading the question before Rory had fully formed it"
2	"something like still water, black and glassy"
3	"something between pity and recognition"

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

0.978

wordCount

1023

matches

0	"not sound exactly, but a vibration felt in the teeth, in the small bones of the ear"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	64
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

29.23

std

22.06

0.755

sampleLengths

0	42
1	5
2	42
3	66
4	15
5	20
6	61
7	15
8	31
9	53
10	8
11	67
12	45
13	4
14	6
15	29
16	2
17	24
18	11
19	28
20	77
21	36
22	4
23	8
24	62
25	7
26	28
27	5
28	6
29	37
30	30
31	2
32	40
33	60
34	47

82.38%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"were carved"
1	"were — drifted"
2	"was gone"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

149

matches

0	"was holding"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.109

matches

0	"Rory felt it before she saw it — a pressure against her skin, like walking into a room where everyone had just stopped talking about her."
1	"Wildflowers she didn't have names for spilled in drifts of impossible color — blues that ached, yellows that seemed to hum audibly at the edge of hearing."
2	"Rory tried it — a slow, deliberate slide of her gaze to the periphery — and for half a heartbeat the flowers were bones, white and delicate, arranged with the same careless abundance."
3	"The path — if it could be called a path, since it seemed to exist only where their feet chose to fall — wound between standing stones older than the oaks that ringed the boundary."
4	"Fireflies — if that's what they were — drifted between the trunks in slow, deliberate patterns, and when one drifted close enough Rory saw it wasn't an insect at all but a mote of pure light, no wings, no body, simply glowing and alive."
5	"Deeper still, the grove began to hum — not sound exactly, but a vibration felt in the teeth, in the small bones of the ear."
6	"\"The heart of the Grove does not welcome uninvited guests kindly. Walk only where I walk. Speak only when spoken to, if anything speaks. And Aurora—\" she turned, lavender eyes catching what little light there was and holding it like captured stars, \"—do not let it flatter you. Wonder is not the same as safety.\""

91.49%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	716
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	34
adverbRatio	0.04748603351955307
lyAdverbCount	16
lyAdverbRatio	0.0223463687150838

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	64
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

15.98

std

11.75

0.735

sampleLengths

0	16
1	26
2	5
3	27
4	15
5	28
6	6
7	32
8	7
9	8
10	20
11	12
12	27
13	10
14	12
15	15
16	7
17	24
18	33
19	20
20	3
21	5
22	3
23	35
24	18
25	11
26	17
27	28
28	4
29	6
30	19
31	10
32	2
33	13
34	11
35	11
36	28
37	3
38	30
39	44
40	10
41	26
42	4
43	8
44	31
45	13
46	18
47	6
48	1
49	16

79.17%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	1
diversityRatio	0.484375
totalSentences	64
uniqueOpeners	31

81.30%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Somewhere close, water moved, though"

ratio

0.024

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"It shimmered faintly at the"
1	"she said, and hated how"
2	"She snapped her eyes back"
3	"They went deeper."
4	"She pressed two fingers to"
5	"They pressed on."
6	"They came to a clearing"
7	"It stood, instead, looking back"
8	"She stood up fast, heart"
9	"Her reflection was gone now,"
10	"She let out a breath"
11	"she turned, lavender eyes catching"

ratio

0.293

0.00%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The oak stones marked the"
1	"Rory felt it before she"
2	"Nyx's voice curled out from"
3	"Isolde had gone ahead without"
4	"The ground here wasn't entirely"
5	"It shimmered faintly at the"
6	"Isolde said, not turning"
7	"Rory looked down at the"
8	"The grove opened before them"
9	"Wildflowers she didn't have names"
10	"The air smelled of crushed"
11	"she said, and hated how"
12	"Rory tried it — a"
13	"She snapped her eyes back"
14	"They went deeper."
15	"The path — if it"
16	"Some were carved with symbols"
17	"Others were bare, weathered smooth,"
18	"Isolde said, as if reading"
19	"The Heartstone Pendant warmed faintly"

ratio

0.951

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	41
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

89.95%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"Isolde had gone ahead without them, silver hair catching light that had no clear source, and when Rory glanced down she understood why the Half-Fae left no foot…"
1	"Wildflowers she didn't have names for spilled in drifts of impossible color — blues that ached, yellows that seemed to hum audibly at the edge of hearing."

17.86%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Isolde said, not turning"
1	"Isolde said, as if reading the question before Rory had fully formed it"
2	"Isolde said, coming to stand beside her, gazing down without fear"

87.50%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
1	"Nyx observed (observe)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.375

leniency

0.75

rawRatio

0.167

effectiveRatio

0.125

76.4321%