Run: 2026-07-01-01KWE8TJRR08MMZKDZZ1KBRYB2

Run Details

Model:: Claude Sonnet 5
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 30.6s
Cost:: $0.024930
Provider:: Amazon Bedrock

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
85.29%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
46.08%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
69.60%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
100.00%	Name drop frequency	(details)
0.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
96.27%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
86.95%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
90.86%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
0.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
27.57%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Technical jargon density	(details)
62.50%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
100.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
75.5039%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert fiction writer.

Always keep the following rules in mind:
- Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang.
- Write in active voice
- Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle.
- Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions.
- Convey events and story through dialogue.
- Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety.
- Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech
- Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself.
- Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action.
- Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe"

When writing text:
- NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely.
- NEVER end with foreshadowing.
- NEVER write further than what I prompt you with.
- AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions.
- STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.

User/Human

Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response:
<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Continue the story using the following instructions:
<instructions>
Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
</instructions>

Model response

The standing stones marked the edge of it, two rows of ancient oak leaning toward each other like old men sharing a secret. Rory stopped between them, one boot still in Richmond Park, the other somewhere else entirely.

"You feel that?" 

Nyx's whisper curled around her ear, though when she turned there was only a smudge of deeper shadow beneath the nearest oak, stretched too long for the angle of the sun.

"Feel what?"

"The air. It's thinking about you."

Rory rubbed her arms. The hair on them had gone electric, standing at attention like she'd walked through a wall of static. Beyond the stones, the light had changed. It wasn't sunset, wasn't dawn, wasn't any hour she had a name for — a gold-green haze that made the wildflowers underfoot glow like they'd swallowed lanterns.

"Isolde said an hour in here could be a minute out there. Or a week." She stepped through fully, and the temperature dropped, then rose, then settled into something that felt like the inside of a greenhouse. "Brilliant. Love not knowing if I'll come home to my flat or a pile of dust where my flat used to be."

"You worry too much about buildings."

"Someone has to. Silas would kill me if I got his bar demolished by a time slip."

The grove opened ahead of them, wider than it had any right to be given the size of the clearing she'd seen from outside. Trees she didn't recognise — silver-barked, with leaves that chimed faintly when the wind moved through them, a sound like distant glass bells — ringed a hollow full of flowers in colours that didn't belong to any English spring. Blues so deep they looked black. Reds that pulsed, slow, like a heartbeat.

"Those aren't blooming," Rory said. "They're breathing."

"Everything in here breathes a little." Nyx's form solidified at her side, tall and edgeless, violet eyes tracking the tree line. "Fae places don't like being empty. They fill themselves up with what they remember."

"Remember from where?"

"Wherever they were before they were here."

That wasn't an answer, but nothing Nyx said ever was, not really. Rory let it go and pressed on, boots sinking into moss so soft it felt like walking on the top of a cloud. No twigs snapped. No birds called. The only sound besides the chiming leaves was her own breathing, and beneath that, something else — a low hum, almost musical, coming from everywhere and nowhere, like the ground itself had a pulse.

She crouched at the edge of a shallow pool ringed with white stones. The water was perfectly still, mirror-flat, and it didn't reflect the canopy above. It reflected clouds — but wrong ones, in colours that had no business being clouds, drifting across a sky she couldn't see when she looked up.

"Nyx. Come look at this."

They drifted over, and for a moment their reflection didn't appear in the water at all, just an absence shaped roughly like a person. 

"That's a scrying pool. Old. Older than the grove, probably." A flicker of something crossed their voice, quieter than usual. "I haven't seen one since before I was — before."

"Before you were a person?"

"Before I was Aldric." They said the name like it belonged to someone else, which, Rory supposed, it did now. "Don't touch it. Pools like that like to show you things you don't want to see, and then they don't let you look away."

She pulled her hand back an inch from the surface, heart thudding harder than the distance warranted. The pendant at her throat had gone warm, warmer than it usually did, a small insistent heat against her collarbone.

"That's new," she said, tugging the Heartstone free of her shirt. The crimson stone pulsed steadily, brighter than the ambient gold-green light around them, like it had found something to answer to.

"There's a rift somewhere near," Nyx said. "Or something that remembers being one."

"In a Fae grove?"

"The Veil doesn't care about borders as much as people think. Thin places pool together sometimes, like water finding the same low ground."

They moved on, deeper, the trees thickening until the strange gold light dimmed to something dappled and green, filtered through leaves that chimed softer here, more like wind chimes heard through a closed window. Rory's palms had gone damp. Every few steps, she caught movement at the edge of her sight — a shape resolving into nothing when she turned her head, a flicker of pale limb between trunks that vanished before she could be sure she'd seen it at all.

"Are we being followed?"

"We're being observed. Different thing. For now."

"Comforting."

The ground sloped upward, and the moss gave way to smooth grey stone, worn in a spiral pattern that had clearly been carved rather than grown, though by whom or with what tools she couldn't begin to guess. At the centre of the spiral stood a single standing stone, smaller than the ones at the boundary, half-swallowed by roots that had grown through it rather than around it, like the tree and the stone had been fighting a very slow war for centuries.

Carved into its surface, worn nearly smooth, were symbols that made her eyes water if she looked at them too long — not because they were frightening, but because they seemed to shift the longer she stared, resolving into different shapes each time.

"Isolde's markers," Nyx said, crouching to trace one without touching it. "This is close to her territory. We're near where she'll be."

"You can read that?"

"I can recognise it. Reading is a different skill and one I never had even when I had hands to hold a book."

Rory laughed, short and surprised, the sound swallowed almost instantly by the hush of the grove, like the place itself had reached out and taken it from her mouth. The pendant pulsed warmer against her skin, and somewhere beyond the trees, faint as breath, she heard something that might have been a voice, speaking words she almost understood, in a language that felt older than the stone under her boots.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	8
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	31
tagDensity	0.258
leniency	0.516
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

85.29%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1020

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"really"
count	1

adverb	"perfectly"
count	1

adverb	"very"
count	1

highlights

0	"really"
1	"perfectly"
2	"very"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

46.08%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1020

totalAiIsms

found

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"electric"
count	1

word	"pulsed"
count	3

word	"pulse"
count	1

word	"flicker"
count	2

word	"resolving"
count	2

word	"comforting"
count	1

highlights

0	"whisper"
1	"electric"
2	"pulsed"
3	"pulse"
4	"flicker"
5	"resolving"
6	"comforting"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	39
matches	(empty)

69.60%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"begin to"
1	"seemed to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	62
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	46
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1028
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	12
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

772

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

0.91

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

1.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Richmond	1
Park	1
English	1
Nyx	5
Rory	7
Heartstone	1

persons

0	"Nyx"
1	"Rory"
2	"Heartstone"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Park"

globalScore

windowScore

0.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"felt like the inside of a greenhouse"
1	"felt like walking on the top of a cloud"

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches	0
per1kWords	0
wordCount	1028
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	62
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

28.56

std

25.46

0.892

sampleLengths

0	38
1	3
2	31
3	2
4	6
5	56
6	59
7	6
8	17
9	76
10	7
11	35
12	3
13	7
14	75
15	52
16	5
17	24
18	30
19	5
20	44
21	37
22	32
23	13
24	4
25	23
26	81
27	4
28	7
29	1
30	83
31	43
32	22
33	4
34	23
35	70

96.27%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"been carved"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

133

matches

0	"were frightening"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.097

matches

0	"It wasn't sunset, wasn't dawn, wasn't any hour she had a name for — a gold-green haze that made the wildflowers underfoot glow like they'd swallowed lanterns."
1	"Trees she didn't recognise — silver-barked, with leaves that chimed faintly when the wind moved through them, a sound like distant glass bells — ringed a hollow full of flowers in colours that didn't belong to any English spring."
2	"The only sound besides the chiming leaves was her own breathing, and beneath that, something else — a low hum, almost musical, coming from everywhere and nowhere, like the ground itself had a pulse."
3	"It reflected clouds — but wrong ones, in colours that had no business being clouds, drifting across a sky she couldn't see when she looked up."
4	"Every few steps, she caught movement at the edge of her sight — a shape resolving into nothing when she turned her head, a flicker of pale limb between trunks that vanished before she could be sure she'd seen it at all."
5	"Carved into its surface, worn nearly smooth, were symbols that made her eyes water if she looked at them too long — not because they were frightening, but because they seemed to shift the longer she stared, resolving into different shapes each time."

86.95%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

770

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"ambient gold-green light"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.048051948051948054

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.016883116883116882

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	62
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

16.58

std

12.32

0.743

sampleLengths

0	23
1	15
2	3
3	31
4	2
5	6
6	4
7	18
8	7
9	27
10	37
11	22
12	6
13	17
14	24
15	39
16	6
17	7
18	5
19	2
20	21
21	14
22	3
23	7
24	12
25	23
26	3
27	3
28	34
29	13
30	13
31	26
32	5
33	24
34	20
35	10
36	5
37	20
38	24
39	17
40	20
41	11
42	21
43	7
44	6
45	4
46	23
47	34
48	5
49	42

90.86%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	2
diversityRatio	0.5645161290322581
totalSentences	62
uniqueOpeners	35

0.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount	0
totalSentences	37
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"It wasn't sunset, wasn't dawn,"
1	"She stepped through fully, and"
2	"She crouched at the edge"
3	"It reflected clouds — but"
4	"They drifted over, and for"
5	"They said the name like"
6	"She pulled her hand back"
7	"she said, tugging the Heartstone"
8	"They moved on, deeper, the"

ratio

0.243

27.57%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The standing stones marked the"
1	"Rory stopped between them, one"
2	"Nyx's whisper curled around her"
3	"Rory rubbed her arms."
4	"The hair on them had"
5	"It wasn't sunset, wasn't dawn,"
6	"She stepped through fully, and"
7	"The grove opened ahead of"
8	"Trees she didn't recognise —"
9	"Blues so deep they looked"
10	"Reds that pulsed, slow, like"
11	"Nyx's form solidified at her"
12	"That wasn't an answer, but"
13	"Rory let it go and"
14	"The only sound besides the"
15	"She crouched at the edge"
16	"The water was perfectly still,"
17	"It reflected clouds — but"
18	"They drifted over, and for"
19	"A flicker of something crossed"

ratio

0.865

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	37
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

0.00%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"It wasn't sunset, wasn't dawn, wasn't any hour she had a name for — a gold-green haze that made the wildflowers underfoot glow like they'd swallowed lanterns."
1	"Trees she didn't recognise — silver-barked, with leaves that chimed faintly when the wind moved through them, a sound like distant glass bells — ringed a hollow…"
2	"They moved on, deeper, the trees thickening until the strange gold light dimmed to something dappled and green, filtered through leaves that chimed softer here,…"
3	"Every few steps, she caught movement at the edge of her sight — a shape resolving into nothing when she turned her head, a flicker of pale limb between trunks t…"
4	"At the centre of the spiral stood a single standing stone, smaller than the ones at the boundary, half-swallowed by roots that had grown through it rather than …"
5	"Carved into its surface, worn nearly smooth, were symbols that made her eyes water if she looked at them too long — not because they were frightening, but becau…"
6	"The pendant pulsed warmer against her skin, and somewhere beyond the trees, faint as breath, she heard something that might have been a voice, speaking words sh…"

62.50%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"She stepped, and the temperature dropped, then rose, then settled into something that felt like the inside of a greenhouse"

100.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags	5
fancyCount	0
fancyTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	31
tagDensity	0.161
leniency	0.323
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

75.5039%