Run: 2026-07-01-01KWE8XH89K3A1ZFMF45JM5FB7

Run Details

Model:: Claude Sonnet 5 (Reasoning)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 33.2s
Cost:: $0.025310
Provider:: Amazon Bedrock

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
85.86%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
81.15%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
50.00%	Name drop frequency	(details)
0.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
9.16%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
97.64%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
89.84%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
85.00%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
100.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
71.43%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
60.00%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
12.99%	Technical jargon density	(details)
69.44%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
56.25%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
75.6252%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The standing stones marked the edge of the world Rory knew, and she felt the change the moment she stepped past them—a pressure behind her ears, like diving too deep in a swimming pool, followed by a release that left her ears ringing in the sudden quiet.

"Careful," Nyx murmured beside her, their voice threading through the air like smoke finding a draft. "The boundary doesn't like to be crossed quickly."

Behind them, Richmond Park had been gray with early morning fog, the kind of grudging almost-light that passed for dawn in an English November. Here, the sky held no sun she could find, and yet everything was awash in a soft golden haze, as though the light came from the air itself rather than any single source. Wildflowers she didn't recognize—blooms of deep violet with centers that seemed to pulse faintly, like slow heartbeats—grew in tangled profusion between roots so massive they might have been the bones of some buried giant.

"It's beautiful," she said, and hated how small her voice sounded.

"It is many things." Nyx's form rippled at the edges, uncertain here in a way they hadn't been in London's alleys and underpasses. "Beautiful is rarely the only one."

The Heartstone Pendant lay cool against her collarbone—cool, not warm, which meant no portal nearby, which meant she could almost relax. Almost. She kept one hand near the hilt of the Fae blade at her hip, its moonsilver cold even through the leather sheath, a small mercy in air that felt thick and warm as held breath.

They moved deeper. The path—if it was a path, if anything here followed rules she understood—curved between trees whose leaves chimed faintly when the wind touched them, a sound like wet fingers on crystal glasses. Rory found herself listening for a melody in it and almost thought she heard one before it slipped away.

"How much time has passed?" she asked. "Since we came in?"

"Unanswerable," Nyx said. "That's rather the point of this place."

She didn't like that answer. She liked it less when she glanced back and couldn't find the standing stones anymore, only more trees, more golden haze, more flowers turning their strange faces toward a light with no source.

The clearing opened without warning, the trees simply stepping back from a wide circle of grass so green it looked wet, though her boots came away dry. In the center stood a pool of water so still it might have been glass, its surface holding the golden sky like a second heaven trapped beneath the first.

"Isolde," Nyx called, though the clearing seemed empty. "We've come as you asked."

For a long moment nothing answered but the chiming leaves. Then the air near the pool folded—that was the only word Rory's mind could offer, folded, like paper creasing along an invisible line—and Isolde stood there, silver hair pooling around her feet, pale lavender eyes finding Rory's without any of the searching a normal gaze would need.

"You left no trace on the way in," Isolde said. It wasn't quite a greeting. "That pleases me. Doorways remember who is gentle with them."

"I didn't feel gentle," Rory admitted. "I felt like I was being turned inside out."

"Both can be true." Isolde's mouth curved, not quite a smile. "Walk with me. The grove has more to show you than water and old trees, though the water and the trees have their own lessons."

She led them along the pool's edge, and Rory saw now that the stillness of the water was a lie—beneath the surface, shapes moved, slow and vast, shadows of things too large for a pool of that size to contain. She stopped walking.

"What's down there?"

"Memory," Isolde said. "Some of it mine. Some of it older than the grove itself. The water does not distinguish; it simply keeps what it is given." She did not slow her pace, so Rory forced her feet to follow, throat tight.

They passed beneath an archway of interlocking branches grown so deliberately that Rory couldn't believe no one had shaped them, until Isolde said, without being asked, "No hand touched these but the trees' own will. They grow toward agreement, given enough centuries."

Rory reached out without quite deciding to and let her fingers brush the bark. It was warm—not sun-warm, but warm like skin, like something breathing slow and patient beneath the surface. She drew her hand back too fast, heart hammering, and caught Nyx watching her with an expression she couldn't read on a face made of shifting dark.

"You felt it," Nyx said. Not a question.

"It felt alive."

"Everything here is alive in ways your world has forgotten how to be," Isolde said. "That is the cost of your Veil's strengthening, child. Barriers protect, but they also dull. Out here, the world still remembers what it is to want."

They came, at last, to a second clearing, smaller, ringed by wildflowers that leaned inward as if listening. In its center grew a single tree unlike the others—black-barked, its leaves the deep crimson of the Heartstone at Rory's throat, and as she stepped closer the pendant flared warm against her skin for the first time since they'd entered the grove.

"That's not gluttony's mark," Rory said slowly, remembering the amber warning glow she'd learned to fear near rifts. "It's warm, but it's not that kind of warm."

"No," Isolde agreed. "This tree remembers Dymas, but it does not belong to it. Everything that crosses between realms leaves something behind, Aurora. Even light. Even warmth. This grove has caught centuries of it, drop by drop, like rain gathering in a cupped leaf."

Rory looked up into the crimson canopy, and for one dizzying moment she thought she saw, tangled in the leaves, the faint golden shimmer of amber sky—another world's light, trapped here, waiting.

"Is that dangerous?" she asked.

Isolde's silver head tilted, lavender eyes catching the strange doubled light. "Everything wondrous is dangerous, in its way," she said. "The question you should be asking is whether it is dangerous to you, specifically, today. And that answer I have not yet found."

Somewhere behind them, the pool of memory rippled without wind, and Rory felt, more than heard, something vast turning over in its depths.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"Rory said slowly [slowly]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.563

leniency

rawRatio

0.056

effectiveRatio

0.056

85.86%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1061

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"quickly"
count	1

adverb	"deliberately"
count	1

adverb	"slowly"
count	1

highlights

0	"quickly"
1	"deliberately"
2	"slowly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

81.15%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1061

totalAiIsms

found

word	"pulse"
count	1

word	"crystal"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	1

word	"depths"
count	1

highlights

0	"pulse"
1	"crystal"
2	"warmth"
3	"depths"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	46
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	60
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	49
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1048
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	15
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

50.00%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

767

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.69

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

3.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Rory	13
Richmond	1
Park	1
English	1
November	1
Nyx	6
London	1
Heartstone	2
Pendant	1
Fae	1
Isolde	8

persons

0	"Rory"
1	"Nyx"
2	"Pendant"
3	"Isolde"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Park"
2	"English"
3	"London"

globalScore

0.653

windowScore

0.5

0.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"centers that seemed to pulse faintly, like slow heartbeats—grew in tangled profusion between roots so massive they might have been the bones of some buried giant"
1	"seemed empty"
2	"not quite a smile"
3	"as if listening"

9.16%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

1.908

wordCount

1048

matches

0	"No hand touched these but"
1	"not sun-warm, but warm like skin, like something breathing slow"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	60
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

33.81

std

20.73

0.613

sampleLengths

0	47
1	24
2	91
3	11
4	29
5	57
6	54
7	11
8	10
9	38
10	56
11	13
12	57
13	25
14	15
15	36
16	43
17	3
18	42
19	42
20	58
21	8
22	3
23	41
24	60
25	27
26	44
27	32
28	5
29	43
30	23

97.64%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"being asked"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount	0
totalVerbs	142
matches	(empty)

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.167

matches

0	"The standing stones marked the edge of the world Rory knew, and she felt the change the moment she stepped past them—a pressure behind her ears, like diving too deep in a swimming pool, followed by a release that left her ears ringing in the sudden quiet."
1	"Wildflowers she didn't recognize—blooms of deep violet with centers that seemed to pulse faintly, like slow heartbeats—grew in tangled profusion between roots so massive they might have been the bones of some buried giant."
2	"The Heartstone Pendant lay cool against her collarbone—cool, not warm, which meant no portal nearby, which meant she could almost relax."
3	"The path—if it was a path, if anything here followed rules she understood—curved between trees whose leaves chimed faintly when the wind touched them, a sound like wet fingers on crystal glasses."
4	"Then the air near the pool folded—that was the only word Rory's mind could offer, folded, like paper creasing along an invisible line—and Isolde stood there, silver hair pooling around her feet, pale lavender eyes finding Rory's without any of the searching a normal gaze would need."
5	"She led them along the pool's edge, and Rory saw now that the stillness of the water was a lie—beneath the surface, shapes moved, slow and vast, shadows of things too large for a pool of that size to contain."
6	"\"Some of it mine. Some of it older than the grove itself. The water does not distinguish; it simply keeps what it is given.\" She did not slow her pace, so Rory forced her feet to follow, throat tight."
7	"It was warm—not sun-warm, but warm like skin, like something breathing slow and patient beneath the surface."
8	"In its center grew a single tree unlike the others—black-barked, its leaves the deep crimson of the Heartstone at Rory's throat, and as she stepped closer the pendant flared warm against her skin for the first time since they'd entered the grove."
9	"Rory looked up into the crimson canopy, and for one dizzying moment she thought she saw, tangled in the leaves, the faint golden shimmer of amber sky—another world's light, trapped here, waiting."

89.84%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

782

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"lay cool against her"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.04475703324808184

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.010230179028132993

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	60
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

17.47

std

13.32

0.763

sampleLengths

0	47
1	16
2	8
3	24
4	33
5	34
6	11
7	23
8	6
9	21
10	1
11	35
12	3
13	32
14	19
15	7
16	4
17	3
18	7
19	5
20	33
21	27
22	29
23	8
24	5
25	10
26	47
27	10
28	5
29	10
30	6
31	9
32	11
33	25
34	40
35	3
36	3
37	3
38	39
39	42
40	14
41	17
42	27
43	5
44	3
45	3
46	15
47	26
48	18
49	42

85.00%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	4
diversityRatio	0.55
totalSentences	60
uniqueOpeners	33

100.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Then the air near the"
1	"Somewhere behind them, the pool"

ratio

0.057

71.43%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"she said, and hated how"
1	"She kept one hand near"
2	"They moved deeper."
3	"She didn't like that answer."
4	"She liked it less when"
5	"It wasn't quite a greeting."
6	"She led them along the"
7	"She stopped walking."
8	"She did not slow her"
9	"They passed beneath an archway"
10	"It was warm—not sun-warm, but"
11	"She drew her hand back"
12	"They came, at last, to"

ratio

0.371

60.00%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The standing stones marked the"
1	"Nyx murmured beside her, their"
2	"Here, the sky held no"
3	"Wildflowers she didn't recognize—blooms of"
4	"she said, and hated how"
5	"Nyx's form rippled at the"
6	"The Heartstone Pendant lay cool"
7	"She kept one hand near"
8	"They moved deeper."
9	"The path—if it was a"
10	"Rory found herself listening for"
11	"She didn't like that answer."
12	"She liked it less when"
13	"The clearing opened without warning,"
14	"Nyx called, though the clearing"
15	"It wasn't quite a greeting."
16	"Isolde's mouth curved, not quite"
17	"She led them along the"
18	"She stopped walking."
19	"She did not slow her"

ratio

0.8

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	35
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

12.99%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The standing stones marked the edge of the world Rory knew, and she felt the change the moment she stepped past them—a pressure behind her ears, like diving too…"
1	"Wildflowers she didn't recognize—blooms of deep violet with centers that seemed to pulse faintly, like slow heartbeats—grew in tangled profusion between roots s…"
2	"She kept one hand near the hilt of the Fae blade at her hip, its moonsilver cold even through the leather sheath, a small mercy in air that felt thick and warm …"
3	"They came, at last, to a second clearing, smaller, ringed by wildflowers that leaned inward as if listening."

69.44%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Nyx called, though the clearing seemed empty"
1	"Isolde's mouth curved, not quite a smile"

56.25%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
1	"Rory admitted (admit)"
2	"Isolde agreed (agree)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.438

leniency

0.875

rawRatio

0.214

effectiveRatio

0.188

75.6252%