Run: 2026-07-01-01KWE90WCRJHA9Z72VHNZMF3ZF

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The bottle of Talisker slipped from Rory's grip and hit the bar mat with a thud that made three regulars turn their heads. "Laila Carter. Still can't hold your drink, I see." Nobody had called her that in six years. Rory's fingers curled around the neck of the bottle, steadying it, steadying herself, before she turned toward the voice. The woman standing at the end of the bar wore a charity-shop parka two sizes too big, sleeves swallowing her hands to the knuckle. Her hair, once a river of copper that used to catch every lecture hall's fluorescent light, hung thin and thatched, the colour gone dull as rust. But the eyes. Sharp green, restless, the same eyes that used to scan a moot court room and find every weakness in an argument before the opposing side even opened their mouth. "Ffion?" "Don't look so shocked. I haven't died. Not yet, anyway." Rory set the bottle down properly this time. Behind her, Silas caught her eye from the far end of the bar, one eyebrow raised, a silent question she waved off with a small shake of her head. *I've got this.* "What are you doing in Soho?" "Could ask you the same." Ffion pulled out a stool, lowered herself onto it like her knees had aged forty years since university. "Last I heard, you were going to be some hotshot barrister. Chambers in Cardiff Bay. Big house. The whole bit." "Plans change." "Clearly." Ffion's gaze swept the bar, the maps on the walls, the black-and-white photographs of men who'd probably never existed under the names printed beneath them. "You work here now?" "Deliver food, mostly. Live upstairs." "Bit of a step down from silk, Laila." "Nobody calls me that anymore." "I do." Ffion's mouth curved, not quite a smile. "Someone has to remember who you used to be." Rory poured two whiskies without asking, set one in front of Ffion. The old habit, the one where neither of them ever had to say what the other needed. Ffion's hand shook when she picked up the glass, just slightly, just enough that Rory noticed and pretended not to. "You still doing law?" "Dropped out second year. After you left." Ffion drank. "Funny, that. You vanish off the face of the earth and I fall apart right behind you. Like we were tied together and you cut the rope from your end." "Ffion-" "No, it's fine. Water under it, and all that." She waved a sleeve at nothing. "I'm not here to guilt you. Much." "Then why are you here?" "Would you believe coincidence?" "No." Ffion laughed, short and dry, more cough than humour. "Smart girl. Always were." She turned the glass in slow circles on the bar top, watching the amber catch the low light. "Heard you were in London. Small world, university friends. Someone mentioned a girl matching your description working deliveries for a Chinese place near Soho. Golden something." "Golden Empress." "That's the one." Ffion's eyes flicked up. "Took me three weeks to work up the nerve to actually look for you." Rory's stomach tightened. "Why the nerve?" "Because last time I saw you, you had a split lip and wouldn't tell any of us why, and then a week later you were gone. No calls. No texts. Nothing." She set the glass down harder than she meant to, the crack of it against wood sharper than her voice. "We were meant to be reading for the bar together, Laila. Remember? Chambers in the same building, competing for the same pupillages, growing old and insufferable arguing over case law in some pub exactly like this one." "I remember." "Do you? Because from where I was standing, you just erased it. Erased all of us." Ffion's sleeve rode up as she reached for the whisky again, and Rory caught sight of it before Ffion tugged the fabric back down: a constellation of bruising along the inner arm, yellow-green fading to fresh violet, the unmistakable topography of needle tracks. Neither of them said anything about it. "I didn't erase you," Rory said finally. "I ran. There's a difference." "Feels the same from the other side." "What happened to you?" "Life." Ffion's laugh had no warmth left in it at all now. "Turns out not everyone gets a knight in shining armour to whisk them off to London. Some of us just had the flat get repossessed, the tuition loans call in, and a very persuasive bloke who said he could make the numbers disappear if I did him a few small favours." She held up the sleeve-covered arm, a small, terrible flourish. "Spoiler. The favours don't stay small." Rory's throat had gone dry. "Ffion, I can help. Silas knows people, he could-" "I don't need rescuing." The sharpness returned to her voice, the old debater's edge, the girl who'd once argued a hostile examiner into an apology in front of the whole seminar. "I need what I came for." "Which is?" Ffion reached into the parka's oversized pocket, and for one lurching second Rory braced for a blade, a syringe, anything the last six years might have taught her old friend to carry. Instead, Ffion's hand emerged with a creased photograph, the edges soft and grey from handling. It was the two of them. Second year. Graduation gowns from a mock trial they'd staged for a laugh, grinning like nothing in the world could touch them. "I need you to tell me it gets better," Ffion said, and her voice cracked clean down the middle. "Because right now, Laila, I am one bad decision away from not being here to ask twice." The door behind her opened, cold air rolling in ahead of a man Rory had never seen, broad-shouldered, hands buried in the pockets of a coat too clean for the company he clearly expected to find. Ffion didn't turn around, but her spine went rigid, the photograph crushed suddenly in her fist. "He followed me," she whispered.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Rory said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.319
leniency0.638
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.043
84.98% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount999
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"very"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
69.97% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount999
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"eyebrow"
count1
1
word"silk"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"stomach"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count1
5
word"lurching"
count1
highlights
0"eyebrow"
1"silk"
2"flicked"
3"stomach"
4"warmth"
5"lurching"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences39
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences39
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences71
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen62
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords3
totalWords999
ratio0.003
matches
0"I've got this."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions28
wordCount578
uniqueNames4
maxNameDensity2.6
worstName"Ffion"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Ffion"
discoveredNames
Talisker1
Rory11
Silas1
Ffion15
persons
0"Talisker"
1"Rory"
2"Silas"
3"Ffion"
places(empty)
globalScore0.202
windowScore0
66.67% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences30
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"not quite a smile"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount999
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences71
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean22.7
std23.19
cv1.021
sampleLengths
023
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227
382
41
510
640
76
843
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1030
115
128
135
1418
1549
164
1739
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205
214
221
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242
2521
266
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282
2959
307
3112
327
334
3479
3514
3637
372
3847
3928
4036
4136
4216
435
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences39
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs89
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences71
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount584
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount20
adverbRatio0.03424657534246575
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.010273972602739725
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences71
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences71
mean14.07
std13.14
cv0.934
sampleLengths
023
19
28
319
424
526
63
729
81
910
108
1129
123
136
1423
1520
162
1726
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208
215
229
239
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2517
2620
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289
2930
301
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327
335
344
351
369
3722
3826
392
407
4114
423
433
4451
4537
462
4759
487
497
97.18% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.6338028169014085
totalSentences71
uniqueOpeners45
92.59% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences36
matches
0"Instead, Ffion's hand emerged with"
ratio0.028
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount7
totalSentences36
matches
0"Her hair, once a river"
1"*I've got this.*"
2"She waved a sleeve at"
3"She turned the glass in"
4"She set the glass down"
5"She held up the sleeve-covered"
6"It was the two of"
ratio0.194
15.56% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount32
totalSentences36
matches
0"The bottle of Talisker slipped"
1"Nobody had called her that"
2"Rory's fingers curled around the"
3"The woman standing at the"
4"Her hair, once a river"
5"Rory set the bottle down"
6"*I've got this.*"
7"Ffion pulled out a stool,"
8"Ffion's gaze swept the bar,"
9"Ffion's mouth curved, not quite"
10"Rory poured two whiskies without"
11"The old habit, the one"
12"Ffion's hand shook when she"
13"She waved a sleeve at"
14"Ffion laughed, short and dry,"
15"She turned the glass in"
16"Ffion's eyes flicked up"
17"Rory's stomach tightened."
18"She set the glass down"
19"Ffion's sleeve rode up as"
ratio0.889
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences36
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences14
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The bottle of Talisker slipped from Rory's grip and hit the bar mat with a thud that made three regulars turn their heads."
1"Her hair, once a river of copper that used to catch every lecture hall's fluorescent light, hung thin and thatched, the colour gone dull as rust."
2"Sharp green, restless, the same eyes that used to scan a moot court room and find every weakness in an argument before the opposing side even opened their mouth…"
58.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Ffion's mouth curved, not quite a smile"
1"She set, the crack of it against wood sharper than her voice"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.064
leniency0.128
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.043
82.8429%