Run: 2026-07-01-01KWE998K7W7NYRZHYMYBB1P96

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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The glass slipped from Rory's hand and hit the bar top with a crack that turned three heads. "Careful there." Silas didn't look up from the till, counting notes with the unhurried precision of a man who'd once counted something else, somewhere else. "That's the second one this week." "Sorry." Rory reached for a cloth, eyes still fixed on the door. A woman had walked in wearing a coat that cost more than Rory's monthly rent, hair the colour of expensive whisky, cut into the kind of severe bob that said *I have people who do this for me now*. She scanned the room the way people scan rooms when they're used to being looked at first. Then she saw Rory, and the polish cracked. "Rory? Rory Carter?" "Ffion." The name came out before Rory could stop it, thick with something she hadn't expected to feel. Cardiff. Rain against lecture hall windows. Ffion Pryce, who used to steal chips off Rory's plate and call it a tax for putting up with her. "God. Look at you." Ffion's laugh had an edge to it now, something clipped and rehearsed. "London suits you. Or does it? You're pulling pints." "Delivering food, mostly. This is just where I live." Rory gestured vaguely upward, toward the flat above the bar, then felt stupid for explaining. "What about you? Last I heard you were doing your training contract at some firm in Bristol." "Foyle & Ashworth. Made senior associate eighteen months ago." Ffion said it the way people say things they've said many times before, worn smooth from repetition. She settled onto the stool beside Rory without asking, coat still on, like she wasn't planning on staying. "I'm in town for a case. Client dinner went sideways, thought I'd find somewhere quiet." "This is quiet." Silas set a napkin down in front of her, unprompted. "What can I get you?" "Macallan, neat. Whatever's oldest." He raised an eyebrow, just barely, and moved off to pour it. Rory caught the look he gave her over Ffion's shoulder. *Friend of yours?* it seemed to ask. Rory didn't have an answer yet. "You always said you'd never touch whisky," Rory said. "Called it liquid regret, or something equally dramatic." "Did I?" Ffion turned the glass Silas placed before her, watching the light catch the amber. "I say a lot of things that don't survive contact with a law degree." "How's your mum? Still doing the Sunday roasts?" "She passed. Two years ago March." Ffion said it flat, the way you say something you've had to say too many times to too many people who didn't know what to do with it. "Cancer. It was quick, at least." "Ffion, I'm-" "Don't." Not sharp. Just tired. "Everyone says the same thing and it doesn't change anything. I got through the funeral. I got through the will. I got through going back to work three days later because the Hendricks acquisition wouldn't wait for grief." She took a drink, longer than the first. "You would've hated the eulogy, actually. Very corporate. My brother wanted to read a poem and I told him poems don't pay for a burial plot." Rory said nothing. The Ffion she remembered would have read the poem herself, badly, crying through half of it, and not cared who watched. "You didn't come," Ffion said, quieter now. "The funeral. I know you were in London by then, but I sent word through your mother." "I didn't know your mum sent anything. Things were bad that year." Rory's fingers found the crescent scar on her wrist, an old habit, worrying at skin that had healed a decade ago. "I was still getting out of something. I wasn't really taking calls." "Evan." Ffion said the name like it tasted of something. "I remember him. Charming little bastard, wasn't he? Everyone thought so, right up until they didn't." "You knew?" "I saw the bruise you covered with foundation at Megan's twenty-first. Badly, I might add. You always were rubbish at makeup." Ffion's mouth twisted, not quite a smile. "I should've said something. I told myself it wasn't my business." "It wasn't." "No. It was worse than that. It was easier not to." Ffion turned the glass again, slower. "That's rather become my speciality. Things being easier not to." Silas drifted back down the bar, refilling a glass two seats over, close enough to listen without seeming to. Rory had watched him do this a hundred times, gathering the room's secrets the way other men collected stamps. "Do you ever think about switching? Going back to something real?" Rory asked. "You used to want to do human rights work. Legal aid. You had that whole plan, the one with the flowchart." "The flowchart." Ffion actually laughed at that, something genuine breaking through. "God, I'd forgotten the flowchart. I think I still have it somewhere. Filed under 'things I meant to become.'" "So what happened?" "Foyle & Ashworth happened. Sixty-hour weeks happened. A flat in Clifton with a view I'm never home to look at happened." Ffion finished the whisky in one motion, set the glass down with a click. "You want to know the truth? I'm good at it. Genuinely good. Turns out I'm better at making rich men richer than I ever would have been at saving anyone." "That's not the same as wanting it." "No." Ffion looked at her properly then, and something old surfaced behind the polish, something that remembered being twenty and certain of things. "You always did see straight through people. Infuriating, that. I'd forgotten how much." "Not through you, apparently. Missed the whole senior associate, dead mother, whisky-drinking thing entirely." "Ten years, Rory. People change when you're not looking." Ffion reached for her coat, movements suddenly economical, done. "That's rather the horror of it, isn't it? You blink, and it's a decade, and you're someone your twenty-year-old self wouldn't recognise." "Staying for another?" "Can't. Early train back." Ffion stood, smoothed the coat that had never really come off. Then she paused, hand on the bar's edge, and for a second the senior associate slipped and something rawer showed through. "It was good, seeing you. I mean that. Whatever this is." A gesture, vague, taking in the bar, the flat above, the whole shape of Rory's life. "It suits you better than the law ever would have." "Ffion." She'd already half-turned toward the door. "Send me something. An address. A number. Anything real." Ffion's smile didn't reach her eyes. "I'll try." The door swung shut behind her, green neon flickering across the glass as it settled. Rory stared at the empty stool, at the ring of condensation left by a whisky glass, and understood with a small, cold certainty that she wouldn't hear from Ffion Pryce again.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Rory gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
1"Ffion actually laughed at that [actually]"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.386
leniency0.772
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.07
82.30% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1130
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count2
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"really"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
91.15% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1130
totalAiIsms2
found
0
word"scanned"
count1
1
word"eyebrow"
count1
highlights
0"scanned"
1"eyebrow"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences46
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences46
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences79
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords12
totalWords1130
ratio0.011
matches
0"I have people who do this for me now"
1"Friend of yours?"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions42
wordCount593
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity3.04
worstName"Ffion"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Ffion"
discoveredNames
Rory17
Cardiff1
Pryce2
Ffion18
Silas4
persons
0"Rory"
1"Ffion"
2"Silas"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore0
windowScore0
84.21% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences38
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"not quite a smile"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1130
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences79
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean26.28
std20.25
cv0.771
sampleLengths
018
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212
356
48
53
644
725
841
959
1018
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1235
1317
1430
158
1640
172
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1924
2024
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252
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2738
2834
2930
303
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327
3336
3414
3540
363
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381
396
409
418
4246
97.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences46
matches
0"being looked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs113
matches
0"wasn't planning"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences79
ratio0
matches(empty)
93.75% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount594
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.04713804713804714
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.013468013468013467
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences79
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences79
mean14.3
std9.71
cv0.679
sampleLengths
018
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312
439
517
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73
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105
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1216
139
1424
1517
1626
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214
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247
256
269
278
2816
2914
308
3134
326
332
343
352
3646
3726
383
3921
407
4117
4233
4312
4410
4516
462
4728
4811
492
80.59% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.5063291139240507
totalSentences79
uniqueOpeners40
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences41
matches
0"Then she saw Rory, and"
1"Then she paused, hand on"
ratio0.049
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount5
totalSentences41
matches
0"She scanned the room the"
1"She settled onto the stool"
2"He raised an eyebrow, just"
3"She took a drink, longer"
4"She'd already half-turned toward the"
ratio0.122
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount38
totalSentences41
matches
0"The glass slipped from Rory's"
1"Silas didn't look up from"
2"Rory reached for a cloth,"
3"A woman had walked in"
4"She scanned the room the"
5"The name came out before"
6"Ffion Pryce, who used to"
7"Ffion's laugh had an edge"
8"Rory gestured vaguely upward, toward"
9"Ffion said it the way"
10"She settled onto the stool"
11"Silas set a napkin down"
12"He raised an eyebrow, just"
13"Rory caught the look he"
14"*Friend of yours?* it seemed"
15"Rory didn't have an answer"
16"Ffion turned the glass Silas"
17"Ffion said it flat, the"
18"She took a drink, longer"
19"Rory said nothing."
ratio0.927
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences41
matches(empty)
ratio0
87.91% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences13
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"A woman had walked in wearing a coat that cost more than Rory's monthly rent, hair the colour of expensive whisky, cut into the kind of severe bob that said *I …"
56.82% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Rory reached, eyes still fixed on the door"
1"Ffion's mouth twisted, not quite a smile"
2"Ffion turned, slower"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Ffion actually laughed at that (laugh)"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.123
leniency0.246
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.035
85.8124%