Run: 2026-07-01-01KWE9KP45RJT1YE52H3457WX0

Run Details

Model:: Claude Sonnet 5 (Reasoning, Low)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 31.9s
Cost:: $0.024650
Provider:: Amazon Bedrock

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
85.88%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
57.63%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
83.99%	Name drop frequency	(details)
69.35%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
13.95%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
84.23%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
96.30%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
98.04%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
33.53%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Technical jargon density	(details)
89.29%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
100.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
80.4061%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The oak stones marked the boundary the way a held breath marks the moment before a scream — Rory felt it before she saw it, a pressure behind her sternum that eased only when she stepped between two of the ancient trunks and into air that tasted like rain on hot stone.

"Well," Nyx said, their voice sliding out of the shadow at her shoulder like smoke finding a crack in a door. "That's new."

The grove did not look like Richmond Park anymore. The path they'd followed — dirt and old leaves, ordinary as bread — dissolved somewhere behind them into moss the color of a bruise, thick and faintly luminous, threading between roots that arched overhead like the ribs of something long dead and very large. Wildflowers grew in defiance of every season Rory had ever lived through: white bells beside orange trumpets beside black-throated things that turned, slow as clock hands, to face her as she passed.

"Don't touch those," Isolde said, without looking back. She walked ahead of them with the unhurried certainty of someone crossing her own kitchen in the dark, silver hair swaying though there was no wind Rory could feel. "They remember teeth better than they remember flowers."

"Comforting," Rory muttered, and tucked her hands into her jacket pockets, fingers brushing the cool weight of the Heartstone pendant beneath her shirt. It sat quiet against her collarbone. No warmth. No portal here, then — or none close enough to matter.

The light had no source she could find. It came from everywhere and nowhere, a soft golden haze that clung to the undersides of leaves and pooled in the hollows between roots, and when she looked up through the canopy she saw not sky but more canopy, branches receding into a green-gold dimness that never quite resolved into anything as simple as a treetop. Somewhere far off — or near, distance seemed a negotiable concept — something sang. Not birdsong. Lower than that. A sound like a cello played by someone who had only ever heard one described.

"How far in does it go?" she asked.

"Further than in," Isolde said. "And not as far as out."

"Right. Riddles. Should've expected riddles."

A soft huff of breath that might have been Nyx laughing, or might have been the wind finally arriving, three seconds late and from the wrong direction.

They walked. Time did something strange almost immediately — Rory noticed it the way you notice a word is missing from a sentence before you can name which word. Her legs ached like she'd been walking an hour. The light hadn't shifted at all. She glanced at Nyx, whose form flickered at the edges here, less solid than usual, as though the grove's peculiar light didn't know quite what to do with a creature made of the space between things.

"You're thinner," she said.

"I feel thinner." Nyx lifted a hand — more suggestion of a hand than hand — and watched violet light bleed faintly through it. "This place doesn't like solid things. Or it likes them too much and wants to make them less so. Hard to say which."

"Both," Isolde said. "It is Fae-touched. It remembers what it means to be between."

They came to a stream that had no business existing, cutting sideways through roots without a sound, its water black and glassy and utterly still despite the current Rory could see moving beneath the surface, like something breathing under a sheet. Small motes of light drifted along just above the water, unbothered by wind, and when one drew close to her face she saw it wasn't light at all but a tiny creature, wings like stained glass, its body a soft coal-ember red.

"Don't," Isolde said again, softer this time, almost gentle, as Rory's fingers rose without her quite deciding to move them. "They'll follow the warmth of you home. And they don't do well outside the Veil. Neither, I think, would you do well, carrying one."

Rory pulled her hand back. The little creature hovered a moment longer, regarding her with an attention that felt entirely too intelligent for something the size of a fingernail, then spiraled off into the dark beneath the roots.

"This place," she said, mostly to fill the silence, "is beautiful."

"Yes." Isolde stopped at the stream's edge, silver hair pooling around her shoulders without touching the ground, without touching anything, it seemed, the way nothing about her ever quite touched the world she moved through. "It is also hungry. Beauty and hunger wear the same face here. You would do well to remember that before you decide which one you're looking at."

"Great pep talk," Nyx said. "Very reassuring. Ten out of ten."

They crossed the stream on stones that hadn't been there a moment before — Rory would have sworn to it, would have sworn the black water ran unbroken from bank to bank, and then there were stones, flat and pale and dry, spaced exactly as far apart as a human stride. She stepped onto the first one and felt it hum faintly beneath her boot, a vibration like a struck bell fading into silence, and did not look down to see what might be moving beneath the water's black glass.

On the far side the trees opened into a clearing where the light thickened into something almost solid, hanging in the air in slow, drifting sheets like curtains nobody had hung, and standing stones — smaller cousins to the ones at the boundary — ringed a patch of grass so green it looked wet, though when Rory crouched to touch it, it was dry and warm as skin.

"We're close," Isolde said, and for the first time since they'd entered, something in her ancient, ageless voice had gone quiet and careful, the way people go quiet near things that might be sleeping. "This is where I dream. Where the visions come clearest."

Rory straightened, and looked at the ring of stones, and felt the same pressure return behind her sternum that she'd felt at the grove's threshold — not a held breath this time, but something waiting to be spoken.

"Then let's hear it," she said. "Whatever it is you brought us here to see."

Isolde turned, lavender eyes catching the drifting gold light and holding it like a held flame, and said nothing at all, which frightened Rory more than any answer could have.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"Isolde said again [again]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.56

leniency

rawRatio

0.071

effectiveRatio

0.071

85.88%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1062

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"very"
count	2

adverb	"utterly"
count	1

highlights

0	"very"
1	"utterly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

57.63%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1062

totalAiIsms

found

word	"could feel"
count	1

word	"comforting"
count	1

word	"weight"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	2

word	"resolved"
count	1

word	"flickered"
count	1

word	"silence"
count	2

highlights

0	"could feel"
1	"comforting"
2	"weight"
3	"warmth"
4	"resolved"
5	"flickered"
6	"silence"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	43
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

"notice"

hedgeMatches

(empty)

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	54
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	66
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1075
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	15
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

83.99%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

909

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.32

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Rory	12
Richmond	1
Park	1
Heartstone	1
Isolde	7
Nyx	5

persons

0	"Rory"
1	"Isolde"
2	"Nyx"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Park"

globalScore

0.84

windowScore

69.35%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"tasted like rain on hot stone"

13.95%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

1.86

wordCount

1075

matches

0	"not sky but more canopy, branches receding into a green-gold dimness"
1	"not a held breath this time, but something waiting to be spoken"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	54
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

41.35

std

28.25

0.683

sampleLengths

0	52
1	23
2	85
3	45
4	42
5	98
6	8
7	11
8	5
9	27
10	80
11	4
12	47
13	14
14	83
15	44
16	38
17	11
18	62
19	11
20	90
21	68
22	44
23	38
24	15
25	30

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	43
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount	0
totalVerbs	144
matches	(empty)

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.167

matches

0	"The oak stones marked the boundary the way a held breath marks the moment before a scream — Rory felt it before she saw it, a pressure behind her sternum that eased only when she stepped between two of the ancient trunks and into air that tasted like rain on hot stone."
1	"The path they'd followed — dirt and old leaves, ordinary as bread — dissolved somewhere behind them into moss the color of a bruise, thick and faintly luminous, threading between roots that arched overhead like the ribs of something long dead and very large."
2	"No portal here, then — or none close enough to matter."
3	"Somewhere far off — or near, distance seemed a negotiable concept — something sang."
4	"Time did something strange almost immediately — Rory noticed it the way you notice a word is missing from a sentence before you can name which word."
5	"\"I feel thinner.\" Nyx lifted a hand — more suggestion of a hand than hand — and watched violet light bleed faintly through it."
6	"They crossed the stream on stones that hadn't been there a moment before — Rory would have sworn to it, would have sworn the black water ran unbroken from bank to bank, and then there were stones, flat and pale and dry, spaced exactly as far apart as a human stride."
7	"On the far side the trees opened into a clearing where the light thickened into something almost solid, hanging in the air in slow, drifting sheets like curtains nobody had hung, and standing stones — smaller cousins to the ones at the boundary — ringed a patch of grass so green it looked wet, though when Rory crouched to touch it, it was dry and warm as skin."
8	"Rory straightened, and looked at the ring of stones, and felt the same pressure return behind her sternum that she'd felt at the grove's threshold — not a held breath this time, but something waiting to be spoken."

84.23%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

899

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"beside black-throated things"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.05116796440489433

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.012235817575083427

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	54
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

19.91

std

16.38

0.823

sampleLengths

0	52
1	21
2	2
3	9
4	44
5	32
6	8
7	29
8	8
9	23
10	6
11	2
12	11
13	8
14	56
15	14
16	2
17	3
18	15
19	8
20	5
21	6
22	5
23	27
24	2
25	27
26	9
27	6
28	36
29	4
30	24
31	23
32	3
33	11
34	41
35	42
36	20
37	24
38	5
39	33
40	11
41	35
42	27
43	5
44	6
45	51
46	39
47	68
48	34
49	10

96.30%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	2
diversityRatio	0.6296296296296297
totalSentences	54
uniqueOpeners	34

98.04%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Somewhere far off — or"

ratio

0.029

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"She walked ahead of them"
1	"It sat quiet against her"
2	"It came from everywhere and"
3	"Her legs ached like she'd"
4	"She glanced at Nyx, whose"
5	"They came to a stream"
6	"she said, mostly to fill"
7	"They crossed the stream on"
8	"She stepped onto the first"

ratio

0.265

33.53%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The oak stones marked the"
1	"Nyx said, their voice sliding"
2	"The grove did not look"
3	"The path they'd followed —"
4	"Wildflowers grew in defiance of"
5	"Isolde said, without looking back"
6	"She walked ahead of them"
7	"Rory muttered, and tucked her"
8	"It sat quiet against her"
9	"The light had no source"
10	"It came from everywhere and"
11	"A sound like a cello"
12	"A soft huff of breath"
13	"Time did something strange almost"
14	"Her legs ached like she'd"
15	"The light hadn't shifted at"
16	"She glanced at Nyx, whose"
17	"Nyx lifted a hand —"
18	"They came to a stream"
19	"Isolde said again, softer this"

ratio

0.853

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	34
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

0.00%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"It came from everywhere and nowhere, a soft golden haze that clung to the undersides of leaves and pooled in the hollows between roots, and when she looked up t…"
1	"A soft huff of breath that might have been Nyx laughing, or might have been the wind finally arriving, three seconds late and from the wrong direction."
2	"They came to a stream that had no business existing, cutting sideways through roots without a sound, its water black and glassy and utterly still despite the cu…"
3	"The little creature hovered a moment longer, regarding her with an attention that felt entirely too intelligent for something the size of a fingernail, then spi…"
4	"They crossed the stream on stones that hadn't been there a moment before — Rory would have sworn to it, would have sworn the black water ran unbroken from bank …"

89.29%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Isolde said, without looking back"

100.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Rory muttered (mutter)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.48

leniency

0.96

rawRatio

0.083

effectiveRatio

0.08

80.4061%