Run: 2026-07-01-01KWE9Q90JXKH1N0XH1K2FXXN7

Run Details

Model:: Claude Sonnet 5
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 30.8s
Cost:: $0.024190
Provider:: Amazon Bedrock

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
94.70%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
68.19%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
66.67%	Name drop frequency	(details)
0.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
0.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
96.27%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
87.11%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
67.18%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
0.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
67.67%	Technical jargon density	(details)
83.33%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
100.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
77.7036%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert fiction writer.

Always keep the following rules in mind:
- Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang.
- Write in active voice
- Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle.
- Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions.
- Convey events and story through dialogue.
- Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety.
- Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech
- Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself.
- Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action.
- Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe"

When writing text:
- NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely.
- NEVER end with foreshadowing.
- NEVER write further than what I prompt you with.
- AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions.
- STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.

User/Human

Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response:
<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Continue the story using the following instructions:
<instructions>
Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
</instructions>

Model response

Rory ducked under the low-hanging branch of the standing oak, and the world changed before she'd fully straightened up.

"Bloody hell," she said. "That's not right."

The sky wasn't a sky. It hung low and violet-grey, streaked with colours she didn't have names for, and it didn't move the way clouds moved. It breathed.

"It's not meant to be right," Nyx said, their voice sliding out from the shadow of the standing stone. "The Grove doesn't answer to your rules. Weather. Time. Any of it."

Rory turned to check that the way back was still there, and found only more wildflowers, purple and gold, stretching between the trees where the park path should have been. Behind her, Cardiff and London and every ordinary thing she'd ever known had simply stopped existing.

"Comforting," she said.

The Heartstone Pendant sat warm against her collarbone, warmer than it had any right to be this far from a Hel portal, and she pressed two fingers to it without meaning to.

"It's not a rift," Nyx said, catching the gesture. "Don't fret. The Grove sits between realms, not inside one. Different sort of wrongness."

"There's a hierarchy of wrongness now."

"There's always been a hierarchy of wrongness."

They walked. The grass didn't so much bend under her boots as lean away from them, rippling outward in slow circles like she'd stepped into still water. Every few feet, a flower turned its face toward her — not toward the light, because there was no single source of light to turn toward, but toward *her*, tracking her the way a sunflower tracked the sun.

"They're watching me."

"They're curious," Nyx said. "Everything here is curious. It doesn't get visitors."

Something answered from deep in the trees, a sound like a bell struck underwater, long and warping and gone before Rory could place a direction to it. She stopped walking.

"What was that?"

"I don't know."

"You don't know?"

"I've been here twice in three hundred years, Aurora. I'm not the tour guide you think I am." A ripple of dark humour in the whisper. "Isolde is."

They found her without looking, the way Rory suspected everyone found Isolde — she simply became visible, sitting on a fallen log silvered with a moss that pulsed faintly, in and out, like a heartbeat. Her bare feet rested in a bed of wildflowers that hadn't been crushed at all.

"You came," Isolde, "though the coming was never in question. Only the coming *here*, to this place, in this hour that is not an hour."

"You said you had something to show me."

"I said many things. Some of them were true." Isolde rose without any visible effort, no push of hands against knees, simply upright. "Walk with me, before the grove decides you're supper rather than guest. It hasn't decided yet."

Rory glanced at Nyx.

"She's joking," Nyx said. "Probably."

They went deeper, past trees that had bark like poured glass, translucent enough that Rory could see shapes moving inside the trunks — slow, coiling shapes, the size of her forearm, drifting upward through the wood like fish through water. She reached out despite herself and Isolde's hand caught her wrist before she made contact.

"Don't. They sleep in there for centuries. Waking one before its season is unkind, to it and to you."

"What are they?"

"Dreams that took root. Or roots that learned to dream. The grove has never clarified which, and I've stopped asking." Isolde's lavender eyes didn't blink so much as pulse, slow and deliberate. "This way. The stones want to speak."

The standing stones grew thicker here, no longer marking a boundary but forming something like a spiral, each one taller than the last, moss-crowned, humming faintly under Rory's palm when she pressed it flat against the nearest.

"They're not just stones."

"No."

"They're—" She struggled for the word, feeling something under her hand that was almost a pulse, almost breath, almost speech. "They're listening."

"They've been listening for longer than your species has had a written word for it." Isolde's mouth curved, not quite a smile. "Isn't it a marvellous thing, to be so small and so heard."

The path — if it was a path, if anything here deserved so plain a word — opened into a clearing bathed in light with no visible sun, and Rory's breath caught properly for the first time since stepping through the oaks. Wildflowers didn't just bloom here; they moved in slow unison, a field of colour breathing in time with the pulsing moss, in time with the stones, in time, she realised with a chill crawling up her spine, with her own heartbeat.

"It's matching me," she said.

"It matches everyone," Nyx, stepping into the clearing behind her, solid now, their violet eyes taking in the space with something that wasn't quite wonder but ran close to it. "For as long as they're welcome."

"And if I'm not welcome?"

"Then you'll know," Isolde said, "because it will stop."

As if in answer, the flowers all turned at once — not toward Rory, this time, but toward the far tree line, where the shadows between the trunks had gone a deeper black than shadow should allow, thick as poured ink, and utterly, unnervingly still.

Rory's hand found the hilt of the Fae-forged blade at her hip without conscious decision, moonsilver cold even through the leather sheath.

"Isolde."

"I see it."

"Is that meant to happen?"

Isolde didn't answer right away, and the not-answering said more than words could have. The bell-sound came again, closer now, warping through the amber-violet air, and the moss beneath their feet stopped its slow pulsing entirely, holding still as held breath.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	12
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	41
tagDensity	0.293
leniency	0.585
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

94.70%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

943

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"utterly"
count	1

highlights

"utterly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

68.19%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

943

totalAiIsms

found

word	"comforting"
count	1

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"pulsed"
count	1

word	"pulse"
count	2

word	"chill"
count	1

highlights

0	"comforting"
1	"whisper"
2	"pulsed"
3	"pulse"
4	"chill"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	39
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount	0
hedgeCount	0
narrationSentences	39
filterMatches	(empty)
hedgeMatches	(empty)

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	65
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	44
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans

markdownWords

totalWords

949

ratio

0.002

matches

0	"her"
1	"here"

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	15
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

66.67%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

675

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.48

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

worstWindowName

"Isolde"

discoveredNames

Rory	10
Cardiff	1
London	1
Heartstone	1
Pendant	1
Hel	1
Isolde	8
Nyx	6
Fae-forged	1

persons

0	"Rory"
1	"Pendant"
2	"Isolde"
3	"Nyx"

places

0	"Cardiff"
1	"London"
2	"Hel"

globalScore

0.759

windowScore

0.667

0.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"something like a spiral, each one taller tha"
1	"not quite a smile"
2	"quite wonder but ran close to it"

0.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

3.161

wordCount

949

matches

0	"not toward the light, because there was no single source of light to turn toward, but toward her, tracking her the way a sunflower tracked the s"
1	"no longer marking a boundary but"
2	"not toward Rory, this time, but toward the far tree line"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"check that the"

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

21.57

std

19.52

0.905

sampleLengths

0	19
1	7
2	28
3	31
4	46
5	3
6	32
7	23
8	6
9	7
10	65
11	3
12	12
13	30
14	3
15	3
16	3
17	28
18	50
19	25
20	8
21	39
22	4
23	5
24	55
25	19
26	3
27	39
28	37
29	4
30	1
31	22
32	34
33	83
34	5
35	36
36	5
37	9
38	45
39	22
40	1
41	3
42	5
43	41

96.27%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"been crushed"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount	0
totalVerbs	111
matches	(empty)

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.092

matches

0	"Every few feet, a flower turned its face toward her — not toward the light, because there was no single source of light to turn toward, but toward her, tracking her the way a sunflower tracked the sun."
1	"They found her without looking, the way Rory suspected everyone found Isolde — she simply became visible, sitting on a fallen log silvered with a moss that pulsed faintly, in and out, like a heartbeat."
2	"They went deeper, past trees that had bark like poured glass, translucent enough that Rory could see shapes moving inside the trunks — slow, coiling shapes, the size of her forearm, drifting upward through the wood like fish through water."
3	"The path — if it was a path, if anything here deserved so plain a word — opened into a clearing bathed in light with no visible sun, and Rory's breath caught properly for the first time since stepping through the oaks."
4	"Wildflowers didn't just bloom here; they moved in slow unison, a field of colour breathing in time with the pulsing moss, in time with the stones, in time, she realised with a chill crawling up her spine, with her own heartbeat."
5	"As if in answer, the flowers all turned at once — not toward Rory, this time, but toward the far tree line, where the shadows between the trunks had gone a deeper black than shadow should allow, thick as poured ink, and utterly, unnervingly still."

87.11%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	676
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	37
adverbRatio	0.05473372781065089
lyAdverbCount	11
lyAdverbRatio	0.016272189349112426

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	65
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

14.6

std

12.58

0.862

sampleLengths

0	19
1	4
2	3
3	5
4	21
5	2
6	19
7	12
8	30
9	16
10	3
11	32
12	9
13	14
14	6
15	7
16	2
17	25
18	38
19	3
20	4
21	8
22	27
23	3
24	3
25	3
26	3
27	26
28	2
29	35
30	15
31	25
32	8
33	23
34	16
35	4
36	4
37	1
38	40
39	15
40	19
41	3
42	32
43	7
44	37
45	4
46	1
47	20
48	2
49	22

67.18%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	8
diversityRatio	0.47692307692307695
totalSentences	65
uniqueOpeners	31

0.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount	0
totalSentences	30
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"It hung low and violet-grey,"
1	"She stopped walking."
2	"They found her without looking,"
3	"Her bare feet rested in"
4	"They went deeper, past trees"
5	"She reached out despite herself"
6	"She struggled for the word,"

ratio

0.233

0.00%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Rory ducked under the low-hanging"
1	"The sky wasn't a sky."
2	"It hung low and violet-grey,"
3	"Nyx said, their voice sliding"
4	"Rory turned to check that"
5	"The Heartstone Pendant sat warm"
6	"Nyx said, catching the gesture"
7	"The grass didn't so much"
8	"Every few feet, a flower"
9	"Something answered from deep in"
10	"She stopped walking."
11	"A ripple of dark humour"
12	"They found her without looking,"
13	"Her bare feet rested in"
14	"Isolde rose without any visible"
15	"Rory glanced at Nyx."
16	"They went deeper, past trees"
17	"She reached out despite herself"
18	"Isolde's lavender eyes didn't blink"
19	"The standing stones grew thicker"

ratio

0.933

100.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"As if in answer, the"

ratio

0.033

67.67%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"They went deeper, past trees that had bark like poured glass, translucent enough that Rory could see shapes moving inside the trunks — slow, coiling shapes, the…"
1	"As if in answer, the flowers all turned at once — not toward Rory, this time, but toward the far tree line, where the shadows between the trunks had gone a deep…"

83.33%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Isolde's mouth curved, not quite a smile"

100.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags	8
fancyCount	0
fancyTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	41
tagDensity	0.195
leniency	0.39
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

77.7036%