Run: 2026-07-01-01KWE9Y6EXK7AV0DXMB7YG7AZT

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass slipped from her hand before Rory recognised the face across the bar. It didn't shatter, just clattered against the counter and rolled, spilling the dregs of a gin and tonic across the polished wood. Silas, three feet away and stacking clean tumblers, didn't even look up. "Careful," he said. "That's the good stock." She wasn't listening. She was looking at the man who'd just walked through the door of the Raven's Nest like he owned the place, shaking rain from a coat that cost more than her monthly wage, and she was thinking, quite clearly, *that can't be him.* "Tom?" The man turned. Recognition flickered, then something else, something practiced, slid over his face like a mask settling into place. "Rory Carter. God, look at you." He crossed the room. Three years ago, Tom Whitfield had worn the same trainers for two straight years and argued with baristas over the ethics of oat milk. Now his shoes gleamed, Italian leather, and his handshake carried the firm, rehearsed grip of someone who'd been taught to shake hands by someone else. "You look..." "Successful," he said. "You can say it." "I was going to say different." He laughed, but it came out clipped, a laugh with the edges sanded off. He sat on the stool beside her without asking, the way people do when they've forgotten they ever needed permission. "Whisky. Neat. Whatever's top shelf," he told Silas, who raised an eyebrow at Rory before turning to the bottles. "Since when do you drink whisky neat?" "Since Zurich." "You went to Zurich." "I live in Zurich. Well. Geneva, technically, but nobody outside finance cares about the difference." He turned the stool slightly, angling his knees toward her in that way men did when they wanted you to notice they still could. "What about you? Last I heard you were doing law at Cardiff." "I dropped out." "Right. Right, I remember something about that." He didn't remember. She could tell from the way his eyes flicked toward the row of bottles behind Silas's head, cataloguing labels instead of memories. "So what, ah, what is it you're into now?" "Delivery. For a Chinese restaurant in Soho." The silence that followed lasted a beat too long. Silas set the whisky down between them, unhurried, and gave Rory a look she'd learned to read over the past year, *want me to stay close?* She shook her head, barely, and he retreated to the far end of the bar, close enough to hear, far enough to pretend he wasn't listening. "That's, ah." Tom turned his glass a quarter turn. "That's good. Honest work." "Don't do that." "Do what?" "That voice. Like you're being kind to a stray." Something flickered behind his eyes, the ghost of the boy who used to sit up with her until three in the morning arguing about Kant, about whether ethics could exist without consequence. That boy would have laughed. This one just took a drink. "Sorry. It's been a long week. Big presentation tomorrow, the kind that decides whether I make partner or spend another two years grinding." He said it like an apology and a boast in the same breath. "You remember how I used to talk about changing the system from the inside?" "I remember you crying after you found out your uni fund manager put your dad's pension into a fossil fuel index." "Yeah, well." He didn't finish the sentence. He didn't need to. The silence did the work, sketching in three years of compromises she hadn't been there to watch him make. "Does it feel different?" she asked. "The inside." "Feels like a very expensive coat," he said, "that doesn't quite fit." She almost laughed, the old warmth flickering somewhere under her ribs, that easy rhythm they used to have, finishing each other's jokes before the punchline landed. Then he glanced at his watch, an unconscious tell, checking the time like he was already halfway out the door. "Someone waiting for you?" "Client dinner. I shouldn't even be here, just, saw the sign, thought of you." He looked almost sheepish saying it, almost the version of him she remembered. "You used to talk about this street all the time. Said you'd disappear into London one day and I'd never hear from you again." "You didn't." "I noticed." He said it lightly, but his knuckles had gone pale around the glass. "Tried finding you a few times. Facebook. Then not-Facebook, when Facebook stopped being a thing people admitted to using." "I changed my number after Evan." The name landed between them like a dropped plate. Tom's jaw tightened, just slightly, the whisky forgotten in his hand. "He still calling you?" "No." She didn't elaborate. Some doors, once shut, deserved to stay that way, even for old friends, even for the ones who used to threaten to break Evan's nose over pub phone calls at 2 a.m. "I'm fine, Tom." "You always said that when you weren't." "Maybe I got better at it." He studied her for a long moment, the way he used to when they'd stayed up debating something that mattered, back before mattering became a luxury neither of them could afford. Something in his expression softened, cracked open just enough to let the old Tom peer through, tired, uncertain, human. "I think about Cardiff sometimes," he said. "How simple it seemed. Stupid, obviously, we thought overdraft limits were the height of financial crisis. But simple." "You could still call. Simple or not." "I could." He didn't sound convinced. He glanced at his watch again, and this time didn't bother hiding it. "I should go. Client's the type who counts minutes." "Of course." He stood, buttoned his coat with fingers that didn't quite manage the top button on the first try, and for a second he hesitated, like there was something else he meant to say, some door he wanted to leave open a crack. Instead, he reached into his coat and set a card on the bar. Cream stock, embossed letters, a bank logo she didn't recognise. "In case you ever want to catch up properly. Not, you know." He gestured vaguely at the bar, at her, at the whole unplanned collision of their lives. "Not like this." She didn't pick up the card. He left a twenty beside his untouched whisky and walked out into the rain-slicked street, the green neon sign throwing his shadow long and thin across the pavement before the door swung shut behind him. Silas drifted back down the bar, wiping a glass that was already clean, watching her with the quiet patience of a man who'd spent decades reading what people didn't say. "Old flame?" "Old friend." She turned the whisky glass slowly, watching the last inch of amber catch the light. "Not sure which of us left first."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"He looked almost [almost]"
1"He gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.321
leniency0.642
rawRatio0.118
effectiveRatio0.075
78.07% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1140
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"lightly"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"very"
2"lightly"
3"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
69.30% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1140
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"flickered"
count2
1
word"eyebrow"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"silence"
count2
4
word"warmth"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"eyebrow"
2"flicked"
3"silence"
4"warmth"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences51
matches(empty)
86.83% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences51
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences87
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen52
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords9
totalWords1140
ratio0.008
matches
0"that can't be him."
1"want me to stay close?"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions18
wordCount787
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity0.64
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Rory3
Raven1
Nest1
Tom4
Whitfield1
Italian1
Silas5
Kant1
Evan1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Raven"
2"Tom"
3"Whitfield"
4"Silas"
5"Evan"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
82.43% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences37
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite manage the top button on the first try, and for a second he hesitated, like there was something else he meant to say, some door he wanted to leave open a crack"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1140
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences87
matches
0"stay that way"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean21.11
std18.48
cv0.875
sampleLengths
014
134
27
346
41
520
66
753
82
97
106
1134
1219
137
142
154
1651
173
1841
197
2061
2113
223
232
249
2543
2650
2721
2830
298
3012
3146
324
3351
342
3534
366
3720
384
3939
407
416
4250
4325
447
4528
462
4765
4831
496
98.38% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences51
matches
0"been taught"
21.03% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs149
matches
0"wasn't listening"
1"was looking"
2"was thinking"
3"wasn't listening"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences87
ratio0
matches(empty)
95.03% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount788
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.04568527918781726
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.01015228426395939
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences87
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences87
mean13.1
std11.32
cv0.864
sampleLengths
014
122
212
33
44
53
643
71
83
917
106
114
1224
1325
142
153
164
176
1814
1920
2019
217
222
234
2439
2512
263
2710
2822
299
307
319
3252
339
344
353
362
379
3832
395
406
4136
4214
4321
447
454
4619
476
482
4912
75.48% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.4942528735632184
totalSentences87
uniqueOpeners43
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences46
matches
0"Then he glanced at his"
1"Instead, he reached into his"
ratio0.043
2.61% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences46
matches
0"It didn't shatter, just clattered"
1"She wasn't listening."
2"She was looking at the"
3"He crossed the room."
4"He laughed, but it came"
5"He sat on the stool"
6"he told Silas, who raised"
7"He turned the stool slightly,"
8"He didn't remember"
9"She could tell from the"
10"He said it like an"
11"He didn't finish the sentence"
12"He didn't need to."
13"She almost laughed, the old"
14"He looked almost sheepish saying"
15"He said it lightly, but"
16"She didn't elaborate"
17"He studied her for a"
18"He didn't sound convinced"
19"He glanced at his watch"
ratio0.543
3.48% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount42
totalSentences46
matches
0"The glass slipped from her"
1"It didn't shatter, just clattered"
2"Silas, three feet away and"
3"She wasn't listening."
4"She was looking at the"
5"The man turned."
6"Recognition flickered, then something else,"
7"He crossed the room."
8"He laughed, but it came"
9"He sat on the stool"
10"he told Silas, who raised"
11"He turned the stool slightly,"
12"He didn't remember"
13"She could tell from the"
14"The silence that followed lasted"
15"Silas set the whisky down"
16"Tom turned his glass a"
17"Something flickered behind his eyes,"
18"That boy would have laughed."
19"This one just took a"
ratio0.913
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences46
matches
0"Now his shoes gleamed, Italian"
ratio0.022
57.14% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"She was looking at the man who'd just walked through the door of the Raven's Nest like he owned the place, shaking rain from a coat that cost more than her mont…"
1"Something flickered behind his eyes, the ghost of the boy who used to sit up with her until three in the morning arguing about Kant, about whether ethics could …"
2"He studied her for a long moment, the way he used to when they'd stayed up debating something that mattered, back before mattering became a luxury neither of th…"
95.59% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He said, but his knuckles had gone pale around the glass"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.151
leniency0.302
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.5123%