Run: 2026-07-01-01KWEA2YV12SMSH4KQR988MP05

Run Details

Model:: Claude Sonnet 5 (Reasoning)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 32.2s
Cost:: $0.025330
Provider:: Amazon Bedrock

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
57.14%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
76.50%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
38.91%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
87.91%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
92.33%	Name drop frequency	(details)
25.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
91.77%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
79.30%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
89.05%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
0.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
80.47%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
99.53%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Technical jargon density	(details)
86.54%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
100.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
80.1486%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The oaks marked the boundary the way tombstones mark a grave—old, weathered things standing sentinel in a circle that had no business existing in the middle of Richmond Park. Rory counted seven of them as she approached, though she would have sworn there were only five a moment before.

"You feel that?" Nyx's voice slid out from the shadow at her shoulder, less a whisper than the memory of one. Their form rippled at the edges, uncertain here, as though the grove itself resisted their nature.

"Feel what?"

"The air. It's holding its breath."

Rory didn't understand what that meant until she stepped between two of the standing stones and the sound of London simply stopped. No distant traffic, no wind through October leaves, no birdsong. The silence had weight to it, pressing against her eardrums like she'd descended too fast into deep water.

The Heartstone Pendant lay cool against her collarbone. That, at least, was unchanged—no warmth, no pulse. Wherever this was, it wasn't Hel. Not yet.

Beyond the stones, the park was gone. In its place stretched a clearing bathed in light that came from nowhere and everywhere, a soft golden wash with no discernible sun to cast it. Wildflowers carpeted the ground in impossible profusion—reds and violets and a blue so deep it looked black, all blooming together in defiance of any season Rory had ever known. She crouched and touched one, half-expecting her fingers to pass through illusion, but the petals were real, cool and slightly damp, as though the dew had never burned off.

"October flowers," she murmured. "In November light. This place doesn't know what season it wants to be."

"It doesn't have to choose," Nyx said. "Time isn't a straight road in here. It's more like—" They paused, searching for words in a language too small for what they meant. "A river that loops back on itself."

Behind them, the gap between the standing stones had already begun to look less like an exit and more like a rumor of one, a smudge of grey London sky glimpsed through gauze.

They walked. The ground gave slightly beneath Rory's boots, spongy as moss though it looked like ordinary grass, and small motes of light drifted between the flower stems like pollen caught in a breeze that didn't exist. She reached out to touch one and it scattered into a dozen smaller motes, each one chiming faintly, a sound so high and delicate she felt it more in her teeth than her ears.

"Careful," Nyx said. "Not everything that looks harmless is."

"Story of my life."

The trees changed as they went deeper—oak give way to something silver-barked and impossibly tall, its branches knitting overhead into a canopy that filtered the golden light into shifting lattices on the ground. Rory caught herself staring up too long, transfixed by the way the leaves seemed to whisper without any wind to move them, and nearly walked into a low-hanging branch strung with what she first took for spiderwebs.

They weren't webs. They were threads of pale light, strung bough to bough, vibrating faintly like harp strings plucked by unseen fingers. When she leaned close, she heard voices in them—fragments, really, half a laugh, a single word in a language that hurt her ears to parse, the tail end of someone's sob. Gone as soon as she noticed them.

"Isolde said the grove remembers things," Rory said, her voice dropping without meaning to. "I thought she meant history books. Not—" She gestured helplessly at the threads. "This."

"She wasn't lying," Nyx said. "The Fae rarely do, when they can help it. But she wasn't telling the whole truth, either. There rarely is one, in a place like this."

A sound broke the hush then—not a threat, but a kind of low, resonant hum, like a bell struck and left to ring for a hundred years. It seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere, the same way the light did, and Rory felt it settle into her sternum, a vibration that made the Heartstone Pendant tremble faintly against her skin. Not the deep pulse it gave near a Hel portal—something gentler, curious. As if the grove itself had noticed her noticing it.

She stopped walking. "Is that—is it looking at us?"

"Everything in here is looking at us," Nyx said. "The question is whether it's decided we're welcome."

They pressed on, and the trees thinned into a second clearing, smaller than the first, ringed by stones that glittered faintly with a dusting of frost despite the golden warmth of the air. In the center of the clearing, a shallow pool reflected no sky at all—only darkness, and within that darkness, points of light that might have been stars or might have been something else entirely, watching back.

Rory crouched at its edge, drawn despite the unease coiling low in her stomach. Her reflection didn't look quite right in the water; her hair seemed longer, her eyes a shade darker, her expression carrying a weariness she didn't recognize in herself. For one disorienting second, the reflection smiled when she hadn't.

She stood up fast, heart hammering. "Nyx."

"I saw." Their voice had lost its usual detachment, gone tight and low. "Don't look again."

"What was that?"

"A place like this doesn't just remember the past," Nyx said. "Sometimes it shows you futures. Or things that could be you, if you'd made different choices. It's not always kind about which."

Rory pressed a hand to her chest, to the pendant, to the too-fast beat of her own heart beneath it, grounding herself in something that was unmistakably hers. The silence pressed in again, thick and listening, and somewhere beyond the trees that hum continued, patient, endless, indifferent to the small trembling thing she was in the face of it.

"Isolde," she said quietly, "better have a good reason for sending us in here."

"She always does," Nyx said. "Whether we like the reason is another matter entirely."

Ahead, through a break in the silver trees, Rory caught the first glimpse of firelight—warm, orange, achingly ordinary against the golden strangeness of the grove—and beneath it, the suggestion of a figure standing very still, silver hair catching the glow like something spun from moonlight.

They walked toward it, and the flowers turned their faces to follow.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

57.14%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"She gestured helplessly [helplessly]"
1	"she said quietly [quietly]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.464

leniency

0.929

rawRatio

0.154

effectiveRatio

0.143

76.50%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1064

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"slightly"
count	2

adverb	"really"
count	1

adverb	"helplessly"
count	1

adverb	"very"
count	1

highlights

0	"slightly"
1	"really"
2	"helplessly"
3	"very"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

38.91%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1064

totalAiIsms

found

word	"grave"
count	1

word	"sentinel"
count	1

word	"whisper"
count	2

word	"silence"
count	2

word	"weight"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	2

word	"pulse"
count	2

word	"transfixed"
count	1

word	"stomach"
count	1

highlights

0	"grave"
1	"sentinel"
2	"whisper"
3	"silence"
4	"weight"
5	"warmth"
6	"pulse"
7	"transfixed"
8	"stomach"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	52
matches	(empty)

87.91%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	67
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	47
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1053
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	10
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

92.33%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

867

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.15

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

1.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Richmond	1
Park	1
London	2
October	1
Heartstone	2
Pendant	2
Hel	2
Rory	10
Nyx	7
Ahead	1

persons

0	"Rory"
1	"Nyx"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Park"
2	"London"
3	"October"
4	"Hel"

globalScore

0.923

windowScore

25.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"looked like ordinary grass, and small mot"
1	"seemed longer her eyes a shade darker, her expression carrying a weariness she didn't recognize in herself"

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

0.95

wordCount

1053

matches

0	"not a threat, but a kind of low, resonant hum, like a bell struck"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	67
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

33.97

std

25.26

0.744

sampleLengths

0	49
1	37
2	2
3	6
4	50
5	24
6	91
7	17
8	38
9	33
10	71
11	9
12	4
13	70
14	60
15	28
16	31
17	83
18	9
19	17
20	69
21	52
22	7
23	16
24	3
25	33
26	59
27	14
28	14
29	45
30	12

91.77%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"was unchanged"
1	"was gone"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount	0
totalVerbs	140
matches	(empty)

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.149

matches

0	"The oaks marked the boundary the way tombstones mark a grave—old, weathered things standing sentinel in a circle that had no business existing in the middle of Richmond Park."
1	"That, at least, was unchanged—no warmth, no pulse."
2	"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in impossible profusion—reds and violets and a blue so deep it looked black, all blooming together in defiance of any season Rory had ever known."
3	"The trees changed as they went deeper—oak give way to something silver-barked and impossibly tall, its branches knitting overhead into a canopy that filtered the golden light into shifting lattices on the ground."
4	"When she leaned close, she heard voices in them—fragments, really, half a laugh, a single word in a language that hurt her ears to parse, the tail end of someone's sob."
5	"A sound broke the hush then—not a threat, but a kind of low, resonant hum, like a bell struck and left to ring for a hundred years."
6	"Not the deep pulse it gave near a Hel portal—something gentler, curious."
7	"In the center of the clearing, a shallow pool reflected no sky at all—only darkness, and within that darkness, points of light that might have been stars or might have been something else entirely, watching back."
8	"Her reflection didn't look quite right in the water; her hair seemed longer, her eyes a shade darker, her expression carrying a weariness she didn't recognize in herself."
9	"Ahead, through a break in the silver trees, Rory caught the first glimpse of firelight—warm, orange, achingly ordinary against the golden strangeness of the grove—and beneath it, the suggestion of a figure standing very still, silver hair catching the glow like something spun from moonlight."

79.30%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

881

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"grave—old, weathered things"
1	"lay cool against her"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.049943246311010214

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.019296254256526674

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	67
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

15.72

std

11.62

0.739

sampleLengths

0	29
1	20
2	21
3	16
4	2
5	6
6	22
7	10
8	18
9	8
10	8
11	6
12	2
13	7
14	26
15	29
16	29
17	4
18	13
19	7
20	24
21	7
22	33
23	2
24	35
25	34
26	3
27	6
28	4
29	33
30	37
31	3
32	19
33	31
34	7
35	14
36	13
37	1
38	5
39	26
40	27
41	34
42	12
43	10
44	3
45	6
46	9
47	8
48	33
49	36

89.05%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	2
diversityRatio	0.5522388059701493
totalSentences	67
uniqueOpeners	37

0.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount	0
totalSentences	43
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

80.47%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Their form rippled at the"
1	"She crouched and touched one,"
2	"They paused, searching for words"
3	"She reached out to touch"
4	"They weren't webs."
5	"They were threads of pale"
6	"She gestured helplessly at the"
7	"It seemed to come from"
8	"She stopped walking."
9	"They pressed on, and the"
10	"Her reflection didn't look quite"
11	"She stood up fast, heart"
12	"Their voice had lost its"
13	"she said quietly"
14	"They walked toward it, and"

ratio

0.349

99.53%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The oaks marked the boundary"
1	"Rory counted seven of them"
2	"Nyx's voice slid out from"
3	"Their form rippled at the"
4	"Rory didn't understand what that"
5	"The silence had weight to"
6	"The Heartstone Pendant lay cool"
7	"That, at least, was unchanged—no"
8	"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in"
9	"She crouched and touched one,"
10	"They paused, searching for words"
11	"The ground gave slightly beneath"
12	"She reached out to touch"
13	"The trees changed as they"
14	"Rory caught herself staring up"
15	"They weren't webs."
16	"They were threads of pale"
17	"Rory said, her voice dropping"
18	"She gestured helplessly at the"
19	"A sound broke the hush"

ratio

0.721

100.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Wherever this was, it wasn't"
1	"As if the grove itself"

ratio

0.047

0.00%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The oaks marked the boundary the way tombstones mark a grave—old, weathered things standing sentinel in a circle that had no business existing in the middle of …"
1	"Their form rippled at the edges, uncertain here, as though the grove itself resisted their nature."
2	"She crouched and touched one, half-expecting her fingers to pass through illusion, but the petals were real, cool and slightly damp, as though the dew had never…"
3	"The ground gave slightly beneath Rory's boots, spongy as moss though it looked like ordinary grass, and small motes of light drifted between the flower stems li…"
4	"The trees changed as they went deeper—oak give way to something silver-barked and impossibly tall, its branches knitting overhead into a canopy that filtered th…"
5	"When she leaned close, she heard voices in them—fragments, really, half a laugh, a single word in a language that hurt her ears to parse, the tail end of someon…"
6	"It seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere, the same way the light did, and Rory felt it settle into her sternum, a vibration that made the Heartstone Pendan…"
7	"As if the grove itself had noticed her noticing it."
8	"In the center of the clearing, a shallow pool reflected no sky at all—only darkness, and within that darkness, points of light that might have been stars or mig…"
9	"Rory pressed a hand to her chest, to the pendant, to the too-fast beat of her own heart beneath it, grounding herself in something that was unmistakably hers."

86.54%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Rory said, her voice dropping without meaning to"

100.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"she murmured (murmur)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.321

leniency

0.643

rawRatio

0.111

effectiveRatio

0.071

80.1486%