Run: 2026-07-01-01KWEA4M3AR29AET93D2DKHX4N

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass slipped in Rory's hand, and she caught it against the bar rim before it could shatter. "Aurora Carter. Christ, I thought you were dead." The voice cut through the low murmur of the Raven's Nest, through the clink of ice and the Miles Davis record hissing on Silas' turntable. Rory set the glass down slow, deliberate, the way she'd learned to do everything since London. She didn't turn round straight away. "Ffion." "Don't 'Ffion' me like you're not shocked." Ffion Pryce dropped onto the stool across the bar, dumping a battered leather satchel beside her. Same wild curls, though shorter now, same gap in her front teeth when she grinned. Three years hadn't touched her much. "Last I heard, you'd vanished off the face of the earth. Your mam wouldn't even say where you'd gone. Just that you were 'finding yourself.'" She made air quotes with both hands. "Sounded like code for a breakdown, if I'm honest." "Close enough." "You look..." Ffion's eyes tracked over her, the black hair, the flat stare, the sleeves pulled down over her wrists. "Different." "It's called ageing." "No, I mean." Ffion frowned, searching. "You used to talk with your hands. Remember? Professor Whitfield used to say you'd knock someone's pint over one day, mid-argument about tort law." Rory picked up a rag and wiped a ring of condensation off the bar, though there wasn't one there. "People change." "Clearly." Ffion laughed, but it didn't land right, thin at the edges. "So what, you work here now? Thought you were meant to be some big-shot barrister by now. Weren't you top of the year?" "Things didn't pan out." "Things didn't pan out," Ffion repeated, like she was testing the words for a hidden seam. "That's it? Aurora Carter, valedictorian, future QC, and that's the whole story?" "That's the whole story." Silas emerged from the back room, ducking beneath the low doorframe with the ease of a man who'd done it ten thousand times. He caught the shift in the air before he caught the conversation, the way he always did, and gave Rory a look she'd learned to read: *friend or problem?* She answered with the smallest shake of her head. He nodded once and drifted down the bar, out of earshot but not out of range. Ffion watched him go, then leaned in. "Boyfriend?" "Boss." "Right." A pause. "You still with Evan?" The rag stopped moving. "No." "Good," Ffion said, too quickly, like she'd been waiting years to say it. "Never liked him. Always thought there was something off. The way he used to check your phone at parties. Called it 'looking out for you.'" She shook her head. "Should've said something back then. Sorry I didn't." "Wasn't your job to say anything." "Wasn't anyone's job, apparently, because none of us did." Ffion's jaw tightened. "You dropped off every group chat. Stopped coming to the Thursday thing. I called maybe six times before I gave up." "I got the voicemails." "And?" "And I didn't call back. I know." The admission sat between them, plain and unadorned, no excuse trailing after it. Ffion studied her for a long moment, something flickering behind her eyes, hurt trying to disguise itself as curiosity. "What happened to your wrist?" Rory hadn't realised her sleeve had ridden up. She tugged it back down over the crescent scar, an old motion, automatic. "Old story." "You used to tell me everything. Two a.m. phone calls, remember? You cried down the phone about failing a mock trial once. Actual tears over a fake courtroom." "I remember." "So what happened to that girl?" Rory finally looked up, and something in her face made Ffion sit back an inch. "She learned some things don't survive contact with the real world." The words came out flatter than she meant, or maybe exactly as flat as she meant, she couldn't tell any more. Ffion blinked, caught off guard by the edge in it. "That's bleak, even for you." "Yeah, well." Rory picked the glass back up, turned it under the light, checking for streaks that weren't there. "I've had practice." Ffion reached across the bar and, for a second, Rory thought she might actually take her hand, the old gesture, warm and unthinking, the way she used to when Rory failed an exam or got dumped by some forgettable boy in second year. But she stopped short, fingers hovering, then withdrew, resting them instead on the scarred wood of the bar top. "I still think about that night before graduation. You said you were going to change the world. Cardiff's own Amal Clooney, you said, laughing at yourself even as you said it." "I remember that too." "Do you ever miss it? Law, I mean. All of it?" Rory thought of the wig she'd never worn, the pupillage she'd never started, the version of herself that existed only in old photographs and her mother's hopeful phone calls. She thought, too, of things Ffion couldn't possibly imagine, things with names like Malphora that lived behind a bookshelf door in the back of this very bar, things that made courtroom ambition look like a child's game of pretend. "Sometimes." "That's not a real answer." "It's the only one I've got." Ffion exhaled, long and slow, and reached for her satchel like she might actually leave, then didn't, hand frozen on the strap. "I'm not trying to have a go at you. I just." She stopped, tried again. "I lost my best mate and nobody ever told me why. I'd like to know if there's a version of you left in there that still wants to be found." Rory opened her mouth to answer, and that was when the phone in her back pocket buzzed once, sharp and insistent, a pattern she'd learned to recognise blind. Not her regular mobile. The other one. The one Silas had given her with a warning about who might call and when. She didn't need to check it to know. Down the bar, Silas had already straightened, one hand resting near the hidden latch behind the gin bottles, eyes fixed on her with a question that wasn't really a question at all. "Ffion, I need a minute." "You're joking. We haven't even ordered drinks-" "I mean it. Stay here. Don't move." She was already coming round the bar, already shrugging off the rag apron, already feeling the old version of herself, the law student, the crier, the girl who used to tell Ffion everything, peel away like a layer of skin she no longer had use for. "Rory-" "Two minutes." She didn't look back at the hurt blooming across Ffion's face. She couldn't afford to. Not with Silas already pulling the bookshelf wide, not with the green glow of the neon sign outside flickering once, twice, in a pattern that meant trouble was already through the door.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.222
leniency0.444
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.91% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1146
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"very"
2"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1146
totalAiIsms0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences46
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences46
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences88
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords3
totalWords1146
ratio0.003
matches
0"friend or problem?"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions38
wordCount734
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity2.18
worstName"Ffion"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Ffion"
discoveredNames
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Raven1
Nest1
Miles1
Davis1
London1
Pryce1
Ffion16
Silas4
Malphora1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Raven"
2"Davis"
3"Pryce"
4"Ffion"
5"Silas"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.41
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences37
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1146
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs60
mean19.1
std20.71
cv1.084
sampleLengths
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247
31
485
52
621
73
830
919
102
1135
124
1328
144
1577
167
171
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197
204
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236
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254
261
277
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3021
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346
3515
3611
3731
385
3922
4062
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4311
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451
465
476
4822
4945
97.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences46
matches
0"got dumped"
98.22% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs131
matches
0"was testing"
1"was already coming"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences88
ratio0
matches(empty)
93.22% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount712
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount34
adverbRatio0.047752808988764044
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.011235955056179775
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences88
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences88
mean13.02
std10.99
cv0.844
sampleLengths
018
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225
316
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131
143
156
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1719
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214
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287
291
301
313
324
334
341
3513
3629
378
386
3912
4021
414
421
437
4413
4519
465
478
4813
492
65.53% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.45454545454545453
totalSentences88
uniqueOpeners40
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences45
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount12
totalSentences45
matches
0"She didn't turn round straight"
1"She made air quotes with"
2"He caught the shift in"
3"He nodded once and drifted"
4"She shook her head"
5"She tugged it back down"
6"She thought, too, of things"
7"She stopped, tried again"
8"She didn't need to check"
9"She was already coming round"
10"She didn't look back at"
11"She couldn't afford to."
ratio0.267
26.67% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount39
totalSentences45
matches
0"The glass slipped in Rory's"
1"The voice cut through the"
2"Rory set the glass down"
3"She didn't turn round straight"
4"Ffion Pryce dropped onto the"
5"She made air quotes with"
6"Ffion's eyes tracked over her,"
7"Ffion frowned, searching"
8"Rory picked up a rag"
9"Ffion laughed, but it didn't"
10"Ffion repeated, like she was"
11"Silas emerged from the back"
12"He caught the shift in"
13"He nodded once and drifted"
14"Ffion watched him go, then"
15"The rag stopped moving."
16"Ffion said, too quickly, like"
17"She shook her head"
18"Ffion's jaw tightened"
19"The admission sat between them,"
ratio0.867
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences45
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences24
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Silas emerged from the back room, ducking beneath the low doorframe with the ease of a man who'd done it ten thousand times."
1"Rory thought of the wig she'd never worn, the pupillage she'd never started, the version of herself that existed only in old photographs and her mother's hopefu…"
2"Down the bar, Silas had already straightened, one hand resting near the hidden latch behind the gin bottles, eyes fixed on her with a question that wasn't reall…"
3"She was already coming round the bar, already shrugging off the rag apron, already feeling the old version of herself, the law student, the crier, the girl who …"
4"Not with Silas already pulling the bookshelf wide, not with the green glow of the neon sign outside flickering once, twice, in a pattern that meant trouble was …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
94.44% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"the Miles Davis record hissing (hiss)"
1"Ffion laughed (laugh)"
2"Ffion repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.074
leniency0.148
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.111
83.1985%