Run: 2026-07-01-01KWEA4M7ZA4SE8XFMDMG3NE4B

Run Details

Model:: Claude Sonnet 5 (Reasoning, Low)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 30.9s
Cost:: $0.024370
Provider:: Amazon Bedrock

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
80.75%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
61.50%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
12.99%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
66.67%	Name drop frequency	(details)
76.47%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
0.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
89.31%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
71.79%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
91.92%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
84.57%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
100.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
47.50%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Technical jargon density	(details)
34.09%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
59.09%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
72.5552%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The oak stones marked the boundary the way scars mark skin—old wounds healed wrong, jutting at angles that made no sense until you stood close enough to feel the wrongness humming in them. Rory counted seven as she passed between the nearest pair, though she would have sworn, glancing back, that there were only five.

"Don't," Nyx said, before she could look again. Their voice arrived like breath against her ear though they walked a full pace behind her, a smear of deeper dark against the ordinary dusk of Richmond Park. "Counting them is how she keeps you."

"I thought Isolde was expecting us."

"Expecting isn't the same as inviting."

The grass changed first. Rory felt it through the soles of her boots before she registered it with her eyes—a give and spring that no London park had any right to have, as though the earth itself were breathing beneath her. Then the light changed, and she stopped walking altogether, because the sun that had been sinking orange over the Thames a moment ago was gone, replaced by a sourceless silver glow that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere, pooling in the hollows between wildflowers that should not have been blooming in November.

Bluebells. Foxglove. Something with petals the deep violet of a bruise that she didn't have a name for, its scent heavy and sweet and faintly, wrongly, like copper.

"It's beautiful," she said, and heard how stupid it sounded even as she said it.

"It wants you to think so." Nyx's edges rippled, uneasy, a shadow trying to fold itself smaller. "This place remembers being something else. Before the Courts made it pretty."

Behind them both, the third member of their party made a small, strangled sound. Rory turned to find Eva frozen mid-step, one hand pressed to her sternum, staring at the trees.

"They're breathing," Eva said.

She wasn't wrong. The oaks that ringed the clearing swelled and contracted with a slow, arboreal patience, bark shifting like ribs beneath skin, and when the wind—if it was wind—moved through their branches, the sound that came back wasn't rustling leaves but something closer to a sigh let out through a hundred throats at once. Rory's stomach dropped somewhere around her knees. She thought of the crescent scar on her wrist, an old, ordinary hurt, and found herself gripping it through her sleeve like a talisman.

"Time moves differently here," she said, mostly to steady her own voice. "Isolde told me. An hour could be minutes. Or days."

"Comforting," Eva muttered, not moving her eyes from the trees.

They went on. The path—if it was a path, and not simply the place where the flowers happened to grow thinner—curved gently downward, deeper into the grove, and the quality of the silence deepened with it. Not an absence of sound but a fullness, a held breath. Rory became aware of her own pulse, of the small wet sounds of her own breathing, magnified as though the grove were listening to her from the inside.

Something chimed, far off and high, like glass struck with a fingernail. Then again, closer. Rory's hand went to the Heartstone Pendant at her throat before she'd consciously decided to move it, and found it warm—not hot, not the burning pulse it gave near a Hel rift, but a low banked warmth, like a coal remembering fire.

"That's not the portal warning," she said.

"No." Nyx had gone very still, more shadow than shape now, pooling low near her feet. "That's her."

A light kindled ahead of them between two standing stones taller than the rest, a soft phosphorescence that resolved, as they approached, into a ring of small stones arranged with unnerving precision, each one glowing faintly from within like a swallowed star. Beyond the ring, the ground fell away into a hollow filled with mist that moved against itself in slow spirals, and in the center of the hollow grew a single tree unlike any of the others—white-barked, black-leaved, hung with fruit the deep red of the pendant at Rory's throat.

Eva reached for one of the low-hanging branches before Rory could stop her.

"I wouldn't," said a voice like wind through reeds, and Isolde stepped out of the mist as though she had always been standing there and the mist had simply chosen, at that moment, to reveal her.

She left no footprints. Rory watched for them anyway, some stubborn animal part of her brain unwilling to accept it even having been told, and found only unbroken grass behind the seer's bare feet, wildflowers standing untouched where she'd walked through them.

"Isolde." Rory made herself say it plainly, an anchor thrown into strange water. "You said you'd help us find the rift."

"I said I would show you where the Veil grows thin." Isolde's lavender eyes moved over the three of them slowly, cataloguing, and there was something in the look that made Rory feel measured, weighed, found wanting or worthy by some scale she couldn't see. "Whether that is help depends on what you do once you see it."

"That's not an answer."

"It is only not the answer you wanted." A small smile, not unkind. "Come. The grove is patient, but the hour it swallows will not give itself back gently."

She turned, and the mist parted before her like a curtain drawn by unseen hands, and beyond it the ground continued to slope downward into a dark that was not merely the absence of Isolde's strange light but something older than it, something the light itself seemed to be holding at bay.

Rory looked once at Nyx, whose violet eyes had narrowed to slivers, and once at Eva, whose face had gone the particular pale of someone recalculating every decision that had led her to this moment. Then she looked at the dark beyond the mist, where the chiming sound came again, softer now, almost like an invitation, and she made herself walk toward it, because turning back had never once, in the whole of her life, been a door that stayed open.

The wildflowers did not bend beneath her feet. She tried not to think about what that meant.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	11
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	22
tagDensity	0.5
leniency	1
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

80.75%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1039

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"gently"
count	2

adverb	"very"
count	1

adverb	"slowly"
count	1

highlights

0	"gently"
1	"very"
2	"slowly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

61.50%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1039

totalAiIsms

found

word	"stomach"
count	1

word	"comforting"
count	1

word	"silence"
count	1

word	"pulse"
count	2

word	"warmth"
count	1

word	"resolved"
count	1

word	"measured"
count	1

highlights

0	"stomach"
1	"comforting"
2	"silence"
3	"pulse"
4	"warmth"
5	"resolved"
6	"measured"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches

maxInWindow

found

label	"stomach dropped/sank"
count	1

highlights

0	"stomach dropped"

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	44
matches	(empty)

12.99%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

"feel"

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"
1	"happened to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	54
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	54
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1030
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	14
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

66.67%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

902

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.33

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Richmond	1
Park	1
London	1
Thames	1
November	1
Nyx	4
Eva	5
Heartstone	1
Pendant	1
Hel	1
Rory	12
Isolde	3

persons

0	"Nyx"
1	"Eva"
2	"Rory"
3	"Isolde"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Park"
2	"London"
3	"Thames"
4	"November"
5	"Heartstone"
6	"Hel"

globalScore

0.835

windowScore

0.667

76.47%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"glow that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere, pooling in the hollows between wildflowers that should not have been blooming in November"

0.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

3.883

wordCount

1030

matches

0	"Not an absence of sound but a fullness, a held breath"
1	"not hot, not the burning pulse it gave near a Hel rift, but a low banked warmth, like a coal remembering fire"
2	"not the burning pulse it gave near a Hel rift, but a low banked warmth, like a coal remembering fire"
3	"not merely the absence of Isolde's strange light but something older than it, something the light itself seemed t"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	54
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

36.79

std

27.82

0.756

sampleLengths

0	55
1	43
2	6
3	6
4	94
5	28
6	15
7	29
8	31
9	4
10	86
11	22
12	10
13	75
14	57
15	7
16	18
17	91
18	13
19	36
20	42
21	21
22	58
23	4
24	29
25	52
26	81
27	17

89.31%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"was gone"
1	"been told"

71.79%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

156

matches

0	"were breathing"
1	"wasn't rustling"
2	"were listening"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.111

matches

0	"The oak stones marked the boundary the way scars mark skin—old wounds healed wrong, jutting at angles that made no sense until you stood close enough to feel the wrongness humming in them."
1	"Rory felt it through the soles of her boots before she registered it with her eyes—a give and spring that no London park had any right to have, as though the earth itself were breathing beneath her."
2	"The oaks that ringed the clearing swelled and contracted with a slow, arboreal patience, bark shifting like ribs beneath skin, and when the wind—if it was wind—moved through their branches, the sound that came back wasn't rustling leaves but something closer to a sigh let out through a hundred throats at once."
3	"The path—if it was a path, and not simply the place where the flowers happened to grow thinner—curved gently downward, deeper into the grove, and the quality of the silence deepened with it."
4	"Rory's hand went to the Heartstone Pendant at her throat before she'd consciously decided to move it, and found it warm—not hot, not the burning pulse it gave near a Hel rift, but a low banked warmth, like a coal remembering fire."
5	"Beyond the ring, the ground fell away into a hollow filled with mist that moved against itself in slow spirals, and in the center of the hollow grew a single tree unlike any of the others—white-barked, black-leaved, hung with fruit the deep red of the pendant at Rory's throat."

91.92%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	914
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	45
adverbRatio	0.04923413566739606
lyAdverbCount	13
lyAdverbRatio	0.014223194748358862

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	54
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

19.07

std

15.51

0.813

sampleLengths

0	33
1	22
2	8
3	28
4	7
5	6
6	6
7	4
8	37
9	53
10	1
11	1
12	26
13	15
14	17
15	12
16	14
17	17
18	4
19	3
20	52
21	7
22	24
23	12
24	10
25	10
26	3
27	33
28	11
29	28
30	12
31	3
32	42
33	7
34	16
35	2
36	42
37	49
38	13
39	36
40	4
41	38
42	13
43	8
44	45
45	13
46	4
47	13
48	16
49	52

84.57%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	1
diversityRatio	0.5185185185185185
totalSentences	54
uniqueOpeners	28

100.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Then the light changed, and"
1	"Then again, closer."
2	"Then she looked at the"

ratio

0.075

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Their voice arrived like breath"
1	"she said, and heard how"
2	"She wasn't wrong."
3	"She thought of the crescent"
4	"she said, mostly to steady"
5	"They went on."
6	"She left no footprints."
7	"She turned, and the mist"
8	"She tried not to think"

ratio

0.225

47.50%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The oak stones marked the"
1	"Rory counted seven as she"
2	"Nyx said, before she could"
3	"Their voice arrived like breath"
4	"The grass changed first."
5	"Rory felt it through the"
6	"Something with petals the deep"
7	"she said, and heard how"
8	"Nyx's edges rippled, uneasy, a"
9	"Rory turned to find Eva"
10	"She wasn't wrong."
11	"The oaks that ringed the"
12	"Rory's stomach dropped somewhere around"
13	"She thought of the crescent"
14	"she said, mostly to steady"
15	"Eva muttered, not moving her"
16	"They went on."
17	"The path—if it was a"
18	"Rory became aware of her"
19	"Something chimed, far off and"

ratio

0.825

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	40
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

0.00%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The oak stones marked the boundary the way scars mark skin—old wounds healed wrong, jutting at angles that made no sense until you stood close enough to feel th…"
1	"Rory felt it through the soles of her boots before she registered it with her eyes—a give and spring that no London park had any right to have, as though the ea…"
2	"Then the light changed, and she stopped walking altogether, because the sun that had been sinking orange over the Thames a moment ago was gone, replaced by a so…"
3	"The oaks that ringed the clearing swelled and contracted with a slow, arboreal patience, bark shifting like ribs beneath skin, and when the wind—if it was wind—…"
4	"Rory became aware of her own pulse, of the small wet sounds of her own breathing, magnified as though the grove were listening to her from the inside."
5	"A light kindled ahead of them between two standing stones taller than the rest, a soft phosphorescence that resolved, as they approached, into a ring of small s…"
6	"Beyond the ring, the ground fell away into a hollow filled with mist that moved against itself in slow spirals, and in the center of the hollow grew a single tr…"
7	"Rory watched for them anyway, some stubborn animal part of her brain unwilling to accept it even having been told, and found only unbroken grass behind the seer…"
8	"She turned, and the mist parted before her like a curtain drawn by unseen hands, and beyond it the ground continued to slope downward into a dark that was not m…"
9	"Rory looked once at Nyx, whose violet eyes had narrowed to slivers, and once at Eva, whose face had gone the particular pale of someone recalculating every deci…"
10	"Then she looked at the dark beyond the mist, where the chiming sound came again, softer now, almost like an invitation, and she made herself walk toward it, bec…"

34.09%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Eva muttered, not moving her eyes from the trees"
1	"Rory made, an anchor thrown into strange water"

59.09%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Eva muttered (mutter)"
1	"Rory made (make)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.364

leniency

0.727

rawRatio

0.25

effectiveRatio

0.182

72.5552%