Run: 2026-07-01-01KWEA5Y6GD71BXK9D33QGJFHH

Run Details

Model:: Claude Sonnet 5 (Reasoning, Low)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 32.3s
Cost:: $0.025150
Provider:: Amazon Bedrock

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
75.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
67.38%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
53.40%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
50.00%	Name drop frequency	(details)
0.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
11.14%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
98.10%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
84.62%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
87.57%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
81.30%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
45.37%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Technical jargon density	(details)
93.75%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
34.62%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
72.7418%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The standing stones marked the edge of the world Rory knew, and she felt the change the moment she stepped between them—a pressure against her skin like walking through the surface tension of water, gone as soon as it came.

"Well," Nyx said, their voice a whisper even though there was no wind to carry it. "That's new."

Rory turned to ask what they meant, and the question died in her throat.

The grove had been small from the outside—a clearing between oaks, glimpsed through Richmond Park's autumn haze. But there was no outside anymore. The trees here stretched impossibly high, their bark silver-grey and smooth as bone, branches interlacing overhead to form a canopy that filtered the light into something soft and directionless, gold-green and shifting like the inside of a wave. Wildflowers carpeted the ground in colors Rory didn't have names for—not quite blue, not quite violet, pulsing faintly as if they breathed.

"Isolde said an hour in here could be minutes or days," Rory said, mostly to hear her own voice, to prove it still worked the way she expected it to.

"Comforting," Nyx murmured.

They moved deeper. The quiet pressed in around them, not empty but full—full of small sounds Rory couldn't place, a distant chime like glass struck softly, a susurrus that might have been leaves or might have been breathing. Her boots made no sound on the moss. She looked down and saw why: the ground gave slightly beneath her weight and sprang back, leaving no print, no crushed blade of grass, as though the grove simply refused to remember she'd been there.

"I don't like that," she muttered.

"You get used to it," said Isolde from somewhere ahead, though Rory hadn't seen her move. The Half-Fae stood beside a tree that hadn't been there a moment before—or maybe it had, and Rory's eyes had simply failed to catch it. Isolde's silver hair drifted around her though there was still no wind, and her lavender eyes caught the strange light and held it, twin coins of glow.

"Where does it end?" Rory asked.

"It doesn't, exactly." Isolde's mouth curved, not quite a smile. "You are asking the wrong question."

"Of course I am." Rory rubbed her thumb over the crescent scar on her wrist, an old habit when she was nervous, and pressed on before the seer could offer another riddle. The Heartstone Pendant lay cool against her collarbone—cool, not warm, which she took as some small comfort. No Hel portal here, at least. Not yet.

The path—if it could be called a path, more a suggestion in the way the flowers parted—curved around an outcropping of pale stone veined with something that glittered like captured starlight. Rory reached out to touch it before she could stop herself.

"I wouldn't," Nyx said, appearing at her elbow with the silent suddenness that still made her flinch, months after she'd gotten used to their company. Their form flickered at the edges, not quite solid in the strange light, violet eyes tracking the stone with something like recognition.

"Why not?"

"Because it's memory," Nyx said. "Fae stone holds what it touches. Touch it back, and it might decide to hold you a while too."

Rory withdrew her hand slowly, unnerved by how badly she'd wanted to touch it anyway—a pull low in her chest, curiosity threaded with something like hunger. She glanced at Isolde, who watched her with an expression unreadable as weather.

"That happens here," Isolde said. "The grove wants. It is very old, and very lonely, and it has learned that mortals are curious things."

"Comforting," Rory echoed Nyx's earlier word, and got a low, whispering laugh in return.

They walked on. The trees thinned into a wider space where the light pooled gold and heavy, and Rory stopped, breath catching, because ahead of them the ground fell away into a hollow filled with water so still and dark it looked like a sheet of obsidian, and reflected in it was not the canopy above but a sky she had never seen—wrong stars, wrong constellations, a moon too large and the color of a bruise.

"Is that real?" she breathed.

"As real as anything else you're standing in," Isolde said. "Which is to say—ask that question again once you've decided what real means to you."

Rory crouched at the water's edge, careful not to let her fingers break the surface. Her own reflection stared back, but subtly wrong—her hair longer, a scar across her cheek that didn't exist, eyes a shade darker than blue. For a heartbeat the reflection smiled when she did not.

She stood up fast, heart hammering.

"Don't look too long," Nyx said quietly, and for once there was no dry amusement in their voice at all. "The Fae realms don't just show reflections. Sometimes they offer them."

"Offer them how?"

"You don't want to find out."

They skirted the pool, and the deeper they went the more Rory felt the grove's attention on her, a weight like being watched from every direction and none, patient and vast and utterly without malice—which somehow made it worse. The flowers brushed her ankles and left the faintest tingling warmth, like static, like being touched by something that wanted to know her by taste. Somewhere far off, that glass-chime sound rang again, closer this time, and beneath it, almost too low to hear, something that might have been laughter or might have been wind moving through hollow reeds.

"We're close," Isolde said, and there was something almost gentle in it, a rare softness cutting through her usual riddling remove. "The heart of the grove does not forgive haste. Walk slow. Breathe slow. It will know you are trying, and that will matter more than you think."

Rory nodded, throat tight, and made herself slow her steps, matching her breath to the strange golden hush around her. Ahead, through a final curtain of drooping silver branches, she could see a clearing brighter than the rest, lit from no visible source, wildflowers grown so thick they formed a carpet of impossible color—and standing at its center, something waiting.

She did not know yet what it was. But she felt, with a certainty that settled into her bones like cold water, that it had been waiting a very long time, and that it already knew her name.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

75.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"said Isolde from somewhere ahead [somewhere]"
1	"Nyx said quietly [quietly]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.615

leniency

rawRatio

0.125

effectiveRatio

0.125

67.38%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1073

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"softly"
count	1

adverb	"slightly"
count	1

adverb	"slowly"
count	1

adverb	"very"
count	3

adverb	"utterly"
count	1

highlights

0	"softly"
1	"slightly"
2	"slowly"
3	"very"
4	"utterly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

53.40%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1073

totalAiIsms

found

word	"tension"
count	1

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"comforting"
count	2

word	"weight"
count	2

word	"flickered"
count	1

word	"unreadable"
count	1

word	"echoed"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	1

highlights

0	"tension"
1	"whisper"
2	"comforting"
3	"weight"
4	"flickered"
5	"unreadable"
6	"echoed"
7	"warmth"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells

narrationSentences

matches

0	"was nervous"

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount	0
hedgeCount	0
narrationSentences	49
filterMatches	(empty)
hedgeMatches	(empty)

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	59
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	74
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1059
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	19
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

50.00%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

890

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.8

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

3.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Rory	16
Richmond	1
Park	1
Nyx	6
Isolde	7
Half-Fae	1
Heartstone	1
Pendant	1
Hel	1

persons

0	"Rory"
1	"Nyx"
2	"Isolde"
3	"Half-Fae"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Park"

globalScore

0.601

windowScore

0.5

0.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"not quite blue, not quite violet, pulsing faintly as if they breathed"
1	"not quite violet, pulsing faintly as if they breathed"
2	"not quite a smile"
3	"something like recognition"
4	"not quite solid in the strange light, violet eyes tracking the stone with something like recognition"
5	"something like hunger"
6	"looked like a sheet of obsidian, and refl"

11.14%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

1.889

wordCount

1059

matches

0	"not empty but full"
1	"not the canopy above but a sky she had never seen"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	59
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

34.16

std

26.74

0.783

sampleLengths

0	40
1	18
2	14
3	83
4	30
5	3
6	81
7	6
8	68
9	6
10	16
11	57
12	42
13	47
14	2
15	24
16	39
17	24
18	14
19	76
20	5
21	25
22	49
23	6
24	31
25	3
26	6
27	98
28	48
29	60
30	38

98.10%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"being touched"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount	0
totalVerbs	154
matches	(empty)

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.203

matches

0	"The standing stones marked the edge of the world Rory knew, and she felt the change the moment she stepped between them—a pressure against her skin like walking through the surface tension of water, gone as soon as it came."
1	"The grove had been small from the outside—a clearing between oaks, glimpsed through Richmond Park's autumn haze."
2	"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in colors Rory didn't have names for—not quite blue, not quite violet, pulsing faintly as if they breathed."
3	"The quiet pressed in around them, not empty but full—full of small sounds Rory couldn't place, a distant chime like glass struck softly, a susurrus that might have been leaves or might have been breathing."
4	"The Half-Fae stood beside a tree that hadn't been there a moment before—or maybe it had, and Rory's eyes had simply failed to catch it."
5	"The Heartstone Pendant lay cool against her collarbone—cool, not warm, which she took as some small comfort."
6	"The path—if it could be called a path, more a suggestion in the way the flowers parted—curved around an outcropping of pale stone veined with something that glittered like captured starlight."
7	"Rory withdrew her hand slowly, unnerved by how badly she'd wanted to touch it anyway—a pull low in her chest, curiosity threaded with something like hunger."
8	"The trees thinned into a wider space where the light pooled gold and heavy, and Rory stopped, breath catching, because ahead of them the ground fell away into a hollow filled with water so still and dark it looked like a sheet of obsidian, and reflected in it was not the canopy above but a sky she had never seen—wrong stars, wrong constellations, a moon too large and the color of a bruise."
9	"Her own reflection stared back, but subtly wrong—her hair longer, a scar across her cheek that didn't exist, eyes a shade darker than blue."
10	"They skirted the pool, and the deeper they went the more Rory felt the grove's attention on her, a weight like being watched from every direction and none, patient and vast and utterly without malice—which somehow made it worse."
11	"Ahead, through a final curtain of drooping silver branches, she could see a clearing brighter than the rest, lit from no visible source, wildflowers grown so thick they formed a carpet of impossible color—and standing at its center, something waiting."

84.62%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

907

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"lay cool against her"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.050716648291069456

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.013230429988974642

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	59
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

17.95

std

13.37

0.745

sampleLengths

0	40
1	16
2	2
3	14
4	17
5	6
6	38
7	22
8	30
9	3
10	3
11	35
12	8
13	35
14	6
15	16
16	25
17	27
18	6
19	10
20	6
21	32
22	17
23	6
24	2
25	31
26	11
27	25
28	22
29	2
30	5
31	19
32	26
33	13
34	5
35	19
36	14
37	3
38	73
39	5
40	10
41	15
42	15
43	24
44	10
45	6
46	20
47	11
48	3
49	6

87.57%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	0
diversityRatio	0.5254237288135594
totalSentences	59
uniqueOpeners	31

81.30%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Somewhere far off, that glass-chime"

ratio

0.024

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"They moved deeper."
1	"Her boots made no sound"
2	"She looked down and saw"
3	"Their form flickered at the"
4	"She glanced at Isolde, who"
5	"They walked on."
6	"Her own reflection stared back,"
7	"She stood up fast, heart"
8	"They skirted the pool, and"
9	"She did not know yet"

ratio

0.244

45.37%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The standing stones marked the"
1	"Nyx said, their voice a"
2	"Rory turned to ask what"
3	"The grove had been small"
4	"The trees here stretched impossibly"
5	"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in"
6	"Rory said, mostly to hear"
7	"They moved deeper."
8	"The quiet pressed in around"
9	"Her boots made no sound"
10	"She looked down and saw"
11	"The Half-Fae stood beside a"
12	"Isolde's silver hair drifted around"
13	"Isolde's mouth curved, not quite"
14	"Rory rubbed her thumb over"
15	"The Heartstone Pendant lay cool"
16	"The path—if it could be"
17	"Rory reached out to touch"
18	"Nyx said, appearing at her"
19	"Their form flickered at the"

ratio

0.829

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	41
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

0.00%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The trees here stretched impossibly high, their bark silver-grey and smooth as bone, branches interlacing overhead to form a canopy that filtered the light into…"
1	"The quiet pressed in around them, not empty but full—full of small sounds Rory couldn't place, a distant chime like glass struck softly, a susurrus that might h…"
2	"The path—if it could be called a path, more a suggestion in the way the flowers parted—curved around an outcropping of pale stone veined with something that gli…"
3	"Her own reflection stared back, but subtly wrong—her hair longer, a scar across her cheek that didn't exist, eyes a shade darker than blue."
4	"Somewhere far off, that glass-chime sound rang again, closer this time, and beneath it, almost too low to hear, something that might have been laughter or might…"
5	"But she felt, with a certainty that settled into her bones like cold water, that it had been waiting a very long time, and that it already knew her name."

93.75%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Isolde's mouth curved, not quite a smile"

34.62%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
1	"she muttered (mutter)"
2	"she breathed (breathe)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.5

leniency

rawRatio

0.231

effectiveRatio

0.231

72.7418%