Run: 2026-07-01-01KWEA637BMN6DVWWDJ38CRZ9X

Run Details

Model:: Claude Sonnet 5
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 31.3s
Cost:: $0.024990
Provider:: Amazon Bedrock

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
74.28%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
74.28%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
74.83%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
80.94%	Name drop frequency	(details)
0.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
97.75%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
88.55%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
72.87%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
88.56%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
98.04%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
33.53%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Technical jargon density	(details)
34.09%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
100.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
77.2572%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert fiction writer.

Always keep the following rules in mind:
- Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang.
- Write in active voice
- Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle.
- Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions.
- Convey events and story through dialogue.
- Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety.
- Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech
- Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself.
- Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action.
- Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe"

When writing text:
- NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely.
- NEVER end with foreshadowing.
- NEVER write further than what I prompt you with.
- AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions.
- STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.

User/Human

Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response:
<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Continue the story using the following instructions:
<instructions>
Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
</instructions>

Model response

Rory ducked under the last standing stone and the temperature dropped, though there was no wind to explain it. The oak marking the boundary stood twisted and pale, its bark grey as old bone, and beyond it the world simply stopped making sense.

"Right," she said. "That's new."

Behind her, Nyx flowed through the gap between stones like smoke pouring the wrong direction, reforming into something roughly human-shaped once they'd cleared the threshold. Their violet eyes had gone wide, which Rory hadn't known was possible for a being without proper eyelids.

"I felt that," Nyx whispered. "Like stepping out of my own skin."

"You don't have skin."

"I have a very convincing opinion of skin, and it just got left behind at the tree line."

The grove opened in front of them, and Rory's breath caught somewhere behind her sternum. Wildflowers carpeted the ground in colours that didn't belong to any November she'd ever lived through — violent blues, a yellow so saturated it looked lit from within, petals that seemed to breathe in slow rhythm. The air smelled of crushed mint and something older, like rain on stone that had never been touched by rain before.

"It's not cold," she said, surprised. "It should be cold. It's Richmond Park in bloody November."

"Time doesn't keep its manners here," Nyx said. "Neither does temperature, apparently."

She took a step forward and her boot came down soundlessly on a patch of moss, no crunch, no give, nothing. She looked down. No print. No bent stem. She stamped, just to check, feeling faintly ridiculous.

"Ground's not playing along either."

"Isolde said the grove doesn't hold weight it doesn't want to." Nyx drifted rather than walked, their form rippling at the edges like heat over tarmac. "Or possibly she said something about geese. Her riddles blur together after the second century of listening to them."

Deeper in, the trees changed. Where the oaks near the boundary looked merely old, the ones further in looked wrong — trunks spiralled in on themselves, bark patterned like the whorls of a fingerprint, branches heavy with fruit that glowed a soft internal gold, pulsing faintly like the Heartstone Pendant did near a portal. Rory's hand went to her collarbone without thinking, feeling for the warmth of the pendant through her jumper. Cool. Quiet. Whatever this place was, it wasn't Hel-touched, not exactly.

"Don't eat the fruit," Nyx said.

"I wasn't going to eat the fruit."

"You were looking at the fruit the way you look at a kebab at two in the morning."

"That's slander."

A sound drifted through the trees, high and thin, almost a song, almost just wind moving through something that wasn't quite reed and wasn't quite bone. Rory froze, hand dropping to the hilt of the Fae-forged blade at her hip out of pure reflex. The moonsilver felt colder than usual against her palm, colder than the grove itself, humming faintly like a struck glass.

"What is that?"

"Could be birds," Nyx said, though they didn't sound convinced. "Could be the grove remembering a sound it heard once. Places like this hold onto things. Echoes. Not always dangerous ones."

"Not always is doing a lot of work in that sentence."

They pressed on, and the light changed again — not dimming, exactly, but thickening, gold going amber, shadows pooling in places that shouldn't have cast any. Rory's eyes caught on a ring of mushrooms, perfectly circular, each cap a deep unsettling violet that matched Nyx's eyes so closely she glanced between the two twice before convincing herself it was coincidence. She stepped wide around the ring without needing to be told why.

"Good instinct," Nyx said. "Fae rings aren't polite about visitors who wander through uninvited."

"I've read a book or two."

"Books lie. Or simplify, which is worse."

The path — if it could be called that, since nothing marked it beyond the flowers seeming to lean slightly away from where their feet might land — curved around an outcrop of stone veined with something that glittered like crushed starlight had been poured into the cracks. Rory crouched, fingers hovering an inch above the surface, feeling heat radiate off it despite the stone looking cold as any granite back home.

"Careful," Nyx said, and for once there was no dry amusement in it.

"I'm not touching it."

"Good. Some of these stones remember hands. Not fondly."

She stood, wiping her palm on her jeans though she hadn't actually made contact, some old instinct insisting on it anyway. Further ahead, past a curtain of hanging vines strung with tiny bell-shaped flowers that chimed faintly when the non-existent wind moved them, the trees thinned into a clearing bathed in that thick amber light, and at its centre stood nothing at all — just empty space that seemed to bend the light around it wrong, like a held breath made visible.

"Nyx."

"I see it."

"Is that—"

"I don't know what that is," Nyx said, and their voice had lost every trace of whisper-dry humour it usually carried. "And I've been old a very long time."

Rory's hand tightened around the dagger's hilt, the moonsilver blade catching the amber light and throwing it back in threads of cold white, and she took one more step toward the clearing's edge, close enough now to feel the air there prickle against her skin like static before a storm.

"Well," she said, low. "Isolde did say she'd meet us near the heart of the place."

"She also once told me the moon owed her a favour. I wouldn't take everything she says as a map."

Rory didn't answer. She was watching the bent light shiver, fold, and slowly resolve itself into the shape of a woman with silver hair pooling around her bare feet, feet that left no mark at all on the flowers beneath them.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"Nyx drifted rather [rather]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.306

leniency

0.611

rawRatio

0.091

effectiveRatio

0.056

74.28%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

972

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"very"
count	2

adverb	"perfectly"
count	1

adverb	"slightly"
count	1

adverb	"slowly"
count	1

highlights

0	"very"
1	"perfectly"
2	"slightly"
3	"slowly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

74.28%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

972

totalAiIsms

found

word	"weight"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	1

word	"echoes"
count	1

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"resolve"
count	1

highlights

0	"weight"
1	"warmth"
2	"echoes"
3	"whisper"
4	"resolve"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	42
matches	(empty)

74.83%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	67
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	62
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	978
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	18
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

80.94%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

724

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.38

worstName

"Nyx"

maxWindowNameDensity

worstWindowName

"Nyx"

discoveredNames

Nyx	10
Rory	9
November	1
Deeper	1
Heartstone	1
Pendant	1
Hel-touched	1
Fae-forged	1

persons

0	"Nyx"
1	"Rory"
2	"Pendant"

places

(empty)

globalScore

0.809

windowScore

0.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"petals that seemed to breathe in slow rhythm"
1	"quite reed and wasn't quite bone"
2	"quite bone"
3	"space that seemed to bend the light around it wrong, like a held breath made visible"

97.75%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

1.022

wordCount

978

matches

0	"not dimming, exactly, but thickening, gold going amber, shadows pooling in places"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	67
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

25.74

std

25.06

0.974

sampleLengths

0	43
1	5
2	43
3	12
4	4
5	18
6	72
7	16
8	12
9	37
10	5
11	45
12	83
13	6
14	7
15	18
16	2
17	64
18	3
19	31
20	11
21	72
22	14
23	6
24	7
25	72
26	13
27	4
28	9
29	82
30	1
31	3
32	2
33	29
34	50
35	16
36	20
37	41

88.55%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"been touched"
1	"been poured"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

135

matches

0	"was watching"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.075

matches

0	"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in colours that didn't belong to any November she'd ever lived through — violent blues, a yellow so saturated it looked lit from within, petals that seemed to breathe in slow rhythm."
1	"Where the oaks near the boundary looked merely old, the ones further in looked wrong — trunks spiralled in on themselves, bark patterned like the whorls of a fingerprint, branches heavy with fruit that glowed a soft internal gold, pulsing faintly like the Heartstone Pendant did near a portal."
2	"They pressed on, and the light changed again — not dimming, exactly, but thickening, gold going amber, shadows pooling in places that shouldn't have cast any."
3	"The path — if it could be called that, since nothing marked it beyond the flowers seeming to lean slightly away from where their feet might land — curved around an outcrop of stone veined with something that glittered like crushed starlight had been poured into the cracks."
4	"Further ahead, past a curtain of hanging vines strung with tiny bell-shaped flowers that chimed faintly when the non-existent wind moved them, the trees thinned into a clearing bathed in that thick amber light, and at its centre stood nothing at all — just empty space that seemed to bend the light around it wrong, like a held breath made visible."

72.87%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

724

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"tiny bell-shaped flowers"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.062154696132596686

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.022099447513812154

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	67
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

14.6

std

13.18

0.903

sampleLengths

0	19
1	24
2	3
3	2
4	25
5	18
6	5
7	7
8	4
9	18
10	15
11	36
12	21
13	6
14	10
15	8
16	4
17	21
18	3
19	2
20	3
21	8
22	5
23	26
24	19
25	5
26	49
27	18
28	1
29	1
30	9
31	6
32	7
33	18
34	2
35	26
36	18
37	20
38	3
39	10
40	21
41	11
42	26
43	34
44	12
45	4
46	10
47	6
48	7
49	48

88.56%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	4
diversityRatio	0.5671641791044776
totalSentences	67
uniqueOpeners	38

98.04%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Further ahead, past a curtain"

ratio

0.029

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Their violet eyes had gone"
1	"she said, surprised"
2	"She took a step forward"
3	"She looked down."
4	"She stamped, just to check,"
5	"They pressed on, and the"
6	"She stepped wide around the"
7	"She stood, wiping her palm"
8	"she said, low"
9	"She was watching the bent"

ratio

0.294

33.53%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Rory ducked under the last"
1	"The oak marking the boundary"
2	"Their violet eyes had gone"
3	"The grove opened in front"
4	"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in"
5	"The air smelled of crushed"
6	"she said, surprised"
7	"She took a step forward"
8	"She looked down."
9	"She stamped, just to check,"
10	"Nyx drifted rather than walked,"
11	"Rory's hand went to her"
12	"Whatever this place was, it"
13	"A sound drifted through the"
14	"Rory froze, hand dropping to"
15	"The moonsilver felt colder than"
16	"Nyx said, though they didn't"
17	"They pressed on, and the"
18	"Rory's eyes caught on a"
19	"She stepped wide around the"

ratio

0.853

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	34
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

0.00%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in colours that didn't belong to any November she'd ever lived through — violent blues, a yellow so saturated it looked lit from…"
1	"Where the oaks near the boundary looked merely old, the ones further in looked wrong — trunks spiralled in on themselves, bark patterned like the whorls of a fi…"
2	"Rory's eyes caught on a ring of mushrooms, perfectly circular, each cap a deep unsettling violet that matched Nyx's eyes so closely she glanced between the two …"
3	"The path — if it could be called that, since nothing marked it beyond the flowers seeming to lean slightly away from where their feet might land — curved around…"
4	"Further ahead, past a curtain of hanging vines strung with tiny bell-shaped flowers that chimed faintly when the non-existent wind moved them, the trees thinned…"

34.09%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Nyx drifted rather, their form rippling at the edges like heat over tarmac"
1	"she said, low"

100.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Nyx whispered (whisper)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.278

leniency

0.556

rawRatio

0.1

effectiveRatio

0.056

77.2572%