Run: 2026-07-01-01KWEAAHASG9X6N8PTBKACNZ74

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The knock came in a specific pattern. Two, pause, one. Lucien's pattern. Rory froze with her hand on the deadbolt, the third one, the stubborn one that always stuck halfway. Ptolemy yowled from his perch on a stack of grimoires and darted under the sofa, which told her everything the knock hadn't. Cats didn't hide from delivery men. She opened the door anyway. "You look terrible," she said. "Charmed to see you too, Laila." The name landed like a slap, deliberate and precise. He knew what he was doing, using the alias instead of Rory, instead of Aurora, folding three months of silence into a single word. His charcoal suit had a tear along the left shoulder seam, and a shallow cut traced his jaw, already scabbing over at the edges. "You're bleeding." "Astute as ever." "That's not an answer." "No," he said, "it's really not, is it." He didn't move to come in, just stood there in the narrow hallway with his cane held wrong, weight leaning into it rather than merely resting on it. The ivory handle had a fresh nick near the top, pale wood showing through the lacquer. Something had tried to take that cane from him. Something had nearly succeeded. "You could ask nicely." "Could I." "Lucien." "Fine." He exhaled through his nose, and for a moment the amber eye caught the hallway light while the black one swallowed it whole. "Might I trouble you for five minutes of your evening, Rory. There. Nicely." She stepped back from the door, not quite an invitation, more a lack of objection, and he took it as permission because he always did. He limped past her into the flat, and the scent of him arrived a half-second later, bergamot and something underneath it that reminded her of matchstick heads, the phosphorus tang of things about to catch fire. "Sit before you fall over." "I don't fall." "You're doing a marvellous impression of it." He lowered himself onto her sofa anyway, cane across his knees like a sceptre he'd forgotten how to wield, and Ptolemy's tail flicked once from beneath the cushions before vanishing further into shadow. Rory crossed to the kitchenette, filled a glass with water she didn't think he'd drink, and set it on the table between them like a peace offering neither of them had asked for. "Last time you turned up like this," she said, "you told me it'd be the last time." "Did I." "You did. Very dramatic. Something about closed doors and better left alones." "I say a great many dramatic things. Half of them are even true." "Which half was this?" He looked at her then, properly, the way he used to before everything went sideways between them, before the argument in this exact room about the debt he'd taken on her behalf and the price he hadn't mentioned until it was already being collected. "The half where I meant it," he said. "And the half where I'm sitting on your sofa regardless." "That's the same half." "Is it? How inconvenient." She crossed her arms, leaned against the counter, put distance between them that the small flat didn't really allow for. Three metres, maybe. The books stacked along the walls seemed to lean in, listening. "Who did this to you?" "A disagreement. Regarding payment." "Yours or someone else's?" "Does it matter?" "It matters to me whether I'm patching you up because of your own stupidity or because you're still doing this. Taking on other people's debts like it's a hobby." Something flickered across his face, there and gone, quick as the black eye catching light. "You sound like you care." "I sound like someone who spent a month scrubbing your blood out of that sofa cushion last time. Forgive me for not wanting an encore." "Ah." He set the cane aside, laid it flat across the coffee table with a care that suggested it cost him something to let go of it even for a moment. "So this is about the upholstery." "Lucien." "I missed the way you say my name like that. Like a warning." "You should've thought of that before you disappeared for three months and then bled on my doorstep." "I didn't disappear. I was occupied." "With what?" "Staying alive, mostly. It's rather time-consuming." She crossed the room before she'd decided to, knelt in front of him, reached for the cut along his jaw without asking permission because asking would've meant admitting why her hands wanted to move at all. He went very still under her fingers, the kind of stillness that took effort. "This needs cleaning." "It's fine." "It's not fine, it's going to scar." "I have several. One more won't ruin the collection." "That's not the point." "Then what is the point, Rory?" Her fingers stopped at his jaw, close enough to feel the warmth radiating off skin that wasn't quite human, wasn't quite anything nameable. His good eye held hers, steady, waiting, and the black one gave nothing away at all, a door shut against whatever moved behind it. "The point is you don't get to vanish and then show up bleeding and expect me to just," she stopped, searched for the word, found only the wrong ones. "Expect me to just let you back in like nothing happened." "I don't expect that." "Then why are you here?" "Because there was nowhere else I'd rather bleed." The honesty of it landed harder than any deflection could have, and for a moment neither of them moved, her hand still at his jaw, his gaze fixed on her like she was the only steady thing in a room that had started tilting. Then the sound came, distant but unmistakable, glass breaking two floors down, followed by a voice shouting something in a language that definitely wasn't English and definitely wasn't friendly. Lucien's head turned toward the door before she'd even registered the noise, every line of him gone taut, the wounded stillness replaced by something coiled and ready. "They followed you," she said. "It would appear so." "Lucien." "In my defence," he said, already reaching for the cane, already rising despite the way his leg buckled slightly on the first attempt, "I did say five minutes."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.17
leniency0.34
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
75.92% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1038
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"really"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count2
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"very"
2"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
71.10% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1038
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"traced"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count1
4
word"flickered"
count1
5
word"warmth"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"traced"
2"weight"
3"flicked"
4"flickered"
5"warmth"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences39
matches(empty)
69.60% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences39
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences83
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1038
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions7
wordCount688
uniqueNames4
maxNameDensity0.44
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory3
Aurora1
Ptolemy2
English1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Aurora"
2"Ptolemy"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences29
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"not quite an invitation, more a lack of objection, and he took it as permission because he always did"
1"quite human, wasn't quite anything nameable"
2"quite anything nameable"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1038
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences83
matches
0"take that cane"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs63
mean16.48
std18.95
cv1.15
sampleLengths
012
146
25
35
46
557
62
73
84
98
1057
114
122
131
1437
1561
165
173
187
1966
2017
212
2212
2313
244
2544
2618
274
284
2934
305
314
324
333
3429
3515
365
3725
3837
391
4013
4117
426
432
446
4550
463
472
487
499
96.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences39
matches
0"being collected"
88.89% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs120
matches
0"was doing"
1"was already being"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences83
ratio0
matches(empty)
86.74% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount689
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.055152394775036286
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.01451378809869376
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences83
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences83
mean12.51
std11.09
cv0.887
sampleLengths
07
13
22
318
422
56
65
75
86
99
1024
1124
122
133
144
158
1628
1716
189
194
204
212
221
2324
2413
2525
2636
275
283
297
3033
3133
3217
332
3412
3513
364
3744
388
3910
404
414
4220
433
4411
455
464
474
483
4929
81.93% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.5060240963855421
totalSentences83
uniqueOpeners42
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences33
matches
0"Then the sound came, distant"
ratio0.03
13.94% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount17
totalSentences33
matches
0"She opened the door anyway."
1"He knew what he was"
2"His charcoal suit had a"
3"He didn't move to come"
4"He exhaled through his nose,"
5"She stepped back from the"
6"He limped past her into"
7"He lowered himself onto her"
8"He looked at her then,"
9"She crossed her arms, leaned"
10"He set the cane aside,"
11"She crossed the room before"
12"He went very still under"
13"Her fingers stopped at his"
14"His good eye held hers,"
15"she stopped, searched for the"
16"he said, already reaching for"
ratio0.515
5.45% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount30
totalSentences33
matches
0"The knock came in a"
1"Rory froze with her hand"
2"Ptolemy yowled from his perch"
3"Cats didn't hide from delivery"
4"She opened the door anyway."
5"The name landed like a"
6"He knew what he was"
7"His charcoal suit had a"
8"He didn't move to come"
9"The ivory handle had a"
10"Something had tried to take"
11"Something had nearly succeeded."
12"He exhaled through his nose,"
13"She stepped back from the"
14"He limped past her into"
15"He lowered himself onto her"
16"Rory crossed to the kitchenette,"
17"He looked at her then,"
18"She crossed her arms, leaned"
19"The books stacked along the"
ratio0.909
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences33
matches(empty)
ratio0
6.80% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"He limped past her into the flat, and the scent of him arrived a half-second later, bergamot and something underneath it that reminded her of matchstick heads, …"
1"He went very still under her fingers, the kind of stillness that took effort."
2"Her fingers stopped at his jaw, close enough to feel the warmth radiating off skin that wasn't quite human, wasn't quite anything nameable."
3"The honesty of it landed harder than any deflection could have, and for a moment neither of them moved, her hand still at his jaw, his gaze fixed on her like sh…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.113
leniency0.226
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
79.8877%