Run: 2026-07-07-01KWZ41M6418TRV3E5THHS82N3

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Model:
Aion 3.0
Duration:
1m 11s
Cost:
$0.026953
Provider:
AionLabs

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The green neon sign buzzed against the November drizzle, casting its sickly glow across the wet pavement of Soho. Inside The Raven's Nest, the Tuesday crowd had thinned to three regulars nursing their drinks in silence and a couple in the corner who spoke in hushed tones over a shared bottle of red. Silas polished a glass behind the bar, his left leg shifted to a position that had become second nature over fifteen years — weight on the right, the left angled just so. The knee ached tonight. It always ached when the weather turned. The door swung open, bringing with it a gust of cold air and the smell of rain on asphalt. A man stood in the entrance, shaking water from an expensive overcoat. Tall, silver-haired, with the kind of tan that came from holidays in places where the sun never set rather than any honest work. He scanned the room with practiced eyes — a habit Silas recognized because he'd once had it himself. The man's gaze landed on the bar. On Silas. His hand froze mid-shake, water dripping from the cuff of his coat onto the floor. "Well." The glass in Silas' hand stopped moving. He set it down on the rubber mat with a soft clink. "Julian." Julian Ashworth — because that was the name he'd worn in Prague, in Berlin, in the three ops they'd run together before the fourth one went sideways — smiled. It didn't reach his eyes. "Sixteen years. And here you are, behind a bar." He stepped closer, his shoes clicking against the worn wood floor. "I thought you'd be dead by now." "Disappointed?" Julian laughed — a short, sharp sound that died in the space between them. He slid onto a barstool and draped his wet coat over the back. Up close, the years had been kinder to him than to most. The silver hair was distinguished rather than aged. The lines around his eyes suggested someone who laughed often, or wanted people to think he did. His hands, when he placed them flat on the bar, were manicured. "What's good here?" "Whiskey. Beer. The usual." "Whiskey, then. Neat." Silas reached for the Jameson. His signet ring caught the light as he poured — a flash of silver that Julian's eyes tracked with the same precision he'd once used to spot tails and wire signals. "You kept the ring." "Never saw a reason to get rid of it." Julian accepted the glass. He turned it in his fingers, studied the amber liquid, took a sip. His expression gave nothing away. "You've done well for yourself. The place has character." "It has damp and a mortgage." "Always the joker." Julian set the glass down. "I heard things, you know. Over the years. Word was you'd gone private. Security consulting. Then someone mentioned a bar in Soho." "Word travels." "Not as fast as it used to. Not in the circles we ran in." Julian paused, glanced around at the maps on the walls, the black-and-white photographs of cities that meant something to someone. "Is this what retirement looks like?" Silas leaned against the back counter. The movement pulled at his knee, and he shifted again, finding the angle that let the joint rest. "It looks like a bar in Soho. Which is what it is." "Come off it." Julian's voice dropped. The charm peeled back, revealing something harder underneath — the man Silas had known before the silver hair and the expensive coats. "We were partners, Si. Three years. Four ops. You don't just walk away from that without a word." "I left a word." "You left a note. One line. 'I'm out.' That's not a word. That's a surrender." The three regulars at the far end of the bar paid no attention. The couple in the corner laughed softly at something private. Rain tapped against the windows. Silas picked up another glass and began to polish it, the cloth moving in slow circles. "What do you want, Julian?" "Honestly?" "Honestly." Julian drained his whiskey. He pushed the glass across the bar for a refill. "I was in town for a conference. Some security firm I advise for — the kind of job that sounds important and pays better. I saw the sign. Green neon. Thought it was a coincidence." He met Silas' eyes. "It's not a coincidence, is it?" "The sign came with the place." "You know what I mean." Silas poured. The whiskey caught the low light, glowed like old honey in the glass. He remembered Julian before the polish — a younger man with ink-stained fingers from field reports and a habit of humming opera under his breath during stakeouts. The man in front of him now wore his past like a tailored suit: fitted, flattering, concealing the rough edges. "How's the leg?" "It's there." "I read the debrief. After. When I was cleared." Julian wrapped both hands around his glass. "It wasn't your fault. You know that, right? The intelligence was bad from the start. We were sent in blind." "We were sent in with bad intelligence because someone didn't verify the source." Silas set down the glass he'd been polishing. "And I was the one who trusted the source. So yes, it was my fault." "That's not—" "Twelve people, Julian. Three of our assets. Nine civilians. Because I said the courier was clean." Julian's jaw tightened. For a moment, the mask slipped — and Silas saw the man underneath, the one who'd carried his own share of that night out of Prague in a silence more complete than any note left on a desk. "No one blamed you." "I blamed me." "And that's why you're here. Polishing glasses in a pub." Silas said nothing. The rain picked up outside, streaking the windows with silver lines. One of the regulars fumbled for his wallet, left a few notes on the bar, and shuffled out into the night. The couple in the corner ordered another bottle of wine. Life went on around them, indifferent to the two men at the bar and the sixteen years of silence between them. "I looked for you," Julian said. "After. Not right away — I had my own mess to sort out. But later. When things settled. I looked for you." "And?" "And I found a man who didn't want to be found." Julian's mouth curved — not a smile, something more painful. "You were good at that. Disappearing. Always were." "It's a skill." "It's a waste." The word hung between them. Silas picked up the cloth, folded it, set it down. Picked it up again. His hands needed something to do. They always had — in the field, he'd smoked, a habit he'd kicked when he quit everything else. Now his hands found other small tasks. Polishing. Pouring. Arranging. "You should have called." "What would I have said?" Julian considered this. He took a slow sip of his whiskey, and when he spoke again, his voice had lost its edge. "I don't know. Something. Anything. We were partners, Si. I earned the right to be told to my face." The signet ring felt heavy on Silas' finger. He turned it — a quarter rotation, then back. A gesture Julian recognized; his eyes flickered to the ring and away. "I wasn't in a place to say anything to anyone's face. Not then." "And now?" "Now I pour drinks and mind my own business." Julian leaned back on his stool. He studied Silas with an intensity that had nothing to do with the bar, the whiskey, or the casual reunion they were pretending this was. "You look old." "Charming." "I mean it. You look like someone who stopped fighting and started waiting." Julian tilted his head. "What are you waiting for?" The question settled in the air like smoke. Silas reached for a fresh glass, began to polish it. Outside, a car horn blared and faded. The couple in the corner paid their bill and left, arm in arm, the woman's laughter trailing behind them like a ribbon. "I'm not waiting for anything." "Then why the maps?" Julian gestured at the walls. "Why the photographs? That's not decoration, Si. That's a man keeping score." Silas glanced at the nearest map — Prague, 2003, the safe house locations marked in faded red ink. He'd put it there the week he opened the bar, and he'd never taken it down. "Habit." "Bullshit." "Julian—" "You can lie to yourself. You've been doing it for sixteen years. But don't lie to me." Julian leaned forward. "I knew you before the limp, before the bar, before whatever this is you've built to keep yourself busy. I knew you when you were the best agent in the field, and you don't get to stand there and tell me it's just habit." The glass in Silas' hand trembled. He set it down before Julian could notice. The tremor was new — three months, maybe four. He hadn't asked a doctor about it. He didn't plan to. "What do you want me to say?" "I want you to say you're sorry. For leaving. For the note. For sixteen years of nothing." Julian's voice cracked on the last word — a fracture so brief it might have been imagined. He recovered in an instant, his expression smoothing back into the practiced calm of a man who'd spent decades in rooms where showing emotion was a liability. "I want you to say it meant something. What we did. What we were." The bar had emptied. It was just the two of them now, and the rain, and the green light from the sign outside painting everything in shades of memory. Silas looked at his old partner — at the silver hair, the manicured hands, the tan from distant places — and he saw the years that stretched between them. All the things they'd done and all the things they'd failed to do, piled up like sediment at the bottom of a river, invisible but heavy. "It meant everything." Julian blinked. "What we were. What we did. The ops. The bad days and the worse nights. All of it." Silas met his eyes. "I didn't leave because it didn't matter. I left because it mattered too much." The rain tapped against the glass. Julian's hand found his whiskey, lifted it, set it down again without drinking. "You could have told me that." "Would it have changed anything?" Julian didn't answer. He stared at his drink, and Silas watched the reflection of the green neon sign dance across the surface of the amber liquid — a small, wavering light in the dark. "No. Probably not." Julian picked up his glass. His grip tightened. "But I'd have known. I'd have had something to carry instead of all that nothing." He drank. Silas watched the muscles in his throat work, watched him swallow the whiskey and whatever else he was swallowing with it. Sixteen years of silence. Sixteen years of looking for a man who hadn't wanted to be found. "Another?" Julian set the empty glass on the bar. His fingers lingered on the rim. "Si—" The door opened. A young woman stepped in, shaking rain from dark hair that fell straight to her shoulders. She wore a delivery courier's jacket, the logo of a Chinese restaurant stitched on the back, and she moved through the bar with the ease of someone who belonged there. She passed Julian without a glance, nodded at Silas, and headed for the stairs at the back. "Evening, Rory." "Evening." She paused on the bottom step, glanced back at the two men at the bar. Her bright blue eyes lingered on Julian for a moment — curious, assessing — before she disappeared up the stairs. Julian watched her go. "Who's that?" "Tenant. She lives upstairs." "Nice arrangement." "It pays the bills." Julian turned back to the bar. He studied Silas with new eyes — taking in the worn shirt, the silver ring, the slight stoop that the limp forced into his posture. The man behind this bar was not the man Julian had known. That man had moved like a predator, quick and certain. This one moved like someone who'd learned to live with his own weight. "You're not coming back. Are you?" "Back where?" "To anything. To whatever we were." Silas reached for the Jameson. He poured another measure into Julian's glass, then drew one for himself — a rare thing, drinking on the job. The whiskey burned the back of his throat, settled in his chest like a small, warm wound. "No." Julian nodded. He picked up his glass and raised it — not a toast, not a salute, something in between. Something that acknowledged the space between them and all the things that had filled it. "To bad intelligence." Silas raised his own glass. "To bad intelligence." They drank. The rain fell. The green neon sign buzzed. And the two old friends sat together in the quiet they'd made, carrying the weight of everything they'd been and everything they'd failed to become.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences89
tagDensity0.191
leniency0.382
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
97.68% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2159
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
65.26% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2159
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"silence"
count4
1
word"weight"
count3
2
word"scanned"
count1
3
word"charm"
count1
4
word"flickered"
count1
5
word"intensity"
count1
6
word"trembled"
count1
7
word"dance"
count1
8
word"wavering"
count1
9
word"predator"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"weight"
2"scanned"
3"charm"
4"flickered"
5"intensity"
6"trembled"
7"dance"
8"wavering"
9"predator"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences129
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences129
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences202
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2184
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
40.73% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions69
wordCount1510
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity2.19
worstName"Julian"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Julian"
discoveredNames
November1
Soho1
Raven1
Nest1
Tuesday1
Silas23
Ashworth1
Prague3
Berlin1
Julian33
Jameson2
Chinese1
persons
0"Silas"
1"Ashworth"
2"Julian"
3"Jameson"
places
0"Soho"
1"Raven"
2"Prague"
3"Berlin"
globalScore0.407
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences86
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2184
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences202
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs108
mean20.22
std20.76
cv1.027
sampleLengths
053
143
272
324
41
519
61
734
827
91
1076
113
124
133
1436
154
169
1722
189
196
2030
212
2240
2324
2412
2546
264
2715
2844
295
301
311
3259
336
345
3562
363
372
3836
3936
402
4116
4241
434
443
4510
4666
4728
481
4929
97.10% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences129
matches
0"was distinguished"
1"were manicured"
2"been imagined"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs252
matches
0"were pretending"
1"was swallowing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount23
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences21
totalSentences202
ratio0.104
matches
0"Silas polished a glass behind the bar, his left leg shifted to a position that had become second nature over fifteen years — weight on the right, the left angled just so."
1"He scanned the room with practiced eyes — a habit Silas recognized because he'd once had it himself."
2"Julian Ashworth — because that was the name he'd worn in Prague, in Berlin, in the three ops they'd run together before the fourth one went sideways — smiled."
3"Julian laughed — a short, sharp sound that died in the space between them."
4"His signet ring caught the light as he poured — a flash of silver that Julian's eyes tracked with the same precision he'd once used to spot tails and wire signals."
5"The charm peeled back, revealing something harder underneath — the man Silas had known before the silver hair and the expensive coats."
6"He remembered Julian before the polish — a younger man with ink-stained fingers from field reports and a habit of humming opera under his breath during stakeouts."
7"For a moment, the mask slipped — and Silas saw the man underneath, the one who'd carried his own share of that night out of Prague in a silence more complete than any note left on a desk."
8"\"And I found a man who didn't want to be found.\" Julian's mouth curved — not a smile, something more painful."
9"They always had — in the field, he'd smoked, a habit he'd kicked when he quit everything else."
10"He turned it — a quarter rotation, then back."
11"A gesture Julian recognized; his eyes flickered to the ring and away."
12"Silas glanced at the nearest map — Prague, 2003, the safe house locations marked in faded red ink."
13"The tremor was new — three months, maybe four."
14"\"I want you to say you're sorry. For leaving. For the note. For sixteen years of nothing.\" Julian's voice cracked on the last word — a fracture so brief it might have been imagined."
15"Silas looked at his old partner — at the silver hair, the manicured hands, the tan from distant places — and he saw the years that stretched between them."
16"He stared at his drink, and Silas watched the reflection of the green neon sign dance across the surface of the amber liquid — a small, wavering light in the dark."
17"Her bright blue eyes lingered on Julian for a moment — curious, assessing — before she disappeared up the stairs."
18"He studied Silas with new eyes — taking in the worn shirt, the silver ring, the slight stoop that the limp forced into his posture."
19"He poured another measure into Julian's glass, then drew one for himself — a rare thing, drinking on the job."
20"He picked up his glass and raised it — not a toast, not a salute, something in between."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount709
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.02679830747531735
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.004231311706629055
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences202
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences202
mean10.81
std9
cv0.833
sampleLengths
019
134
232
34
47
519
612
723
818
97
102
1115
121
137
1412
151
1629
175
1820
197
201
2114
2213
2312
248
2517
2612
273
284
293
305
3131
324
339
344
3513
365
379
386
398
4022
412
4234
436
446
4518
4612
476
4822
4918
46.04% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.3118811881188119
totalSentences202
uniqueOpeners63
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences118
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences118
matches
0"It always ached when the"
1"He scanned the room with"
2"His hand froze mid-shake, water"
3"He set it down on"
4"It didn't reach his eyes."
5"He stepped closer, his shoes"
6"He slid onto a barstool"
7"His hands, when he placed"
8"His signet ring caught the"
9"He turned it in his"
10"His expression gave nothing away."
11"He pushed the glass across"
12"He remembered Julian before the"
13"His hands needed something to"
14"They always had — in"
15"He took a slow sip"
16"He turned it — a"
17"He studied Silas with an"
18"He'd put it there the"
19"He set it down before"
ratio0.288
6.61% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount107
totalSentences118
matches
0"The green neon sign buzzed"
1"Silas polished a glass behind"
2"The knee ached tonight."
3"It always ached when the"
4"The door swung open, bringing"
5"A man stood in the"
6"He scanned the room with"
7"The man's gaze landed on"
8"His hand froze mid-shake, water"
9"The glass in"
10"He set it down on"
11"Julian Ashworth — because that"
12"It didn't reach his eyes."
13"He stepped closer, his shoes"
14"Julian laughed — a short,"
15"He slid onto a barstool"
16"The silver hair was distinguished"
17"The lines around his eyes"
18"His hands, when he placed"
19"Silas reached for the Jameson."
ratio0.907
42.37% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences118
matches
0"Now his hands found other"
ratio0.008
60.89% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences61
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Inside The Raven's Nest, the Tuesday crowd had thinned to three regulars nursing their drinks in silence and a couple in the corner who spoke in hushed tones ov…"
1"Tall, silver-haired, with the kind of tan that came from holidays in places where the sun never set rather than any honest work."
2"He studied Silas with an intensity that had nothing to do with the bar, the whiskey, or the casual reunion they were pretending this was."
3"He recovered in an instant, his expression smoothing back into the practiced calm of a man who'd spent decades in rooms where showing emotion was a liability."
4"Silas looked at his old partner — at the silver hair, the manicured hands, the tan from distant places — and he saw the years that stretched between them."
5"A young woman stepped in, shaking rain from dark hair that fell straight to her shoulders."
6"She wore a delivery courier's jacket, the logo of a Chinese restaurant stitched on the back, and she moved through the bar with the ease of someone who belonged…"
95.59% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He stepped, his shoes clicking against the worn wood floor"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences89
tagDensity0.011
leniency0.022
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
81.7426%