Run: 2026-07-07-01KWZ4FFSCKCHF30KM7VY36N2G

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Aion 3.0
Duration:
58.3s
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$0.028184
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AionLabs

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The chain caught halfway. Of course it did. Rory yanked the door open and there he stood, filling the frame like he owned the building, the street, the whole damned postcode. Lucien Moreau. In the flesh. In her hallway. "Rory." Her name in his mouth still sounded like Marseille and smoke. Three months since she'd last heard it and her pulse still kicked like a startled horse. "No." "I haven't asked anything yet." "And the answer's still no." She gripped the door's edge. "Whatever you're selling, I'm not buying." His cane, ivory-handled, caught the dim light from the single bulb overhead. He didn't lean on it. Never did. The blade inside was probably singing to him. It always did when he was anxious, though she doubted he'd admit to something as human as anxiety. "You should see the state of your hands." She looked down. Knuckles white on the doorframe. A smear of sweet-and-sour sauce on her wrist, just above the crescent scar. Twelve hours of deliveries would do that. Golden Empress didn't stop for rain, holidays, or acts of god. "Long shift." "Indeed." The word hung between them. He used to say it differently. Warmer. Before Cardiff. Before Evan. Before she'd walked out of his office without looking back and told herself the ache in her chest would fade. It hadn't. "What do you want, Lucien?" "I need to come inside." "No." "Rory." "You don't get to do that." She stepped forward, small satisfaction when he didn't retreat. "You don't get to show up at my flat at, what, eleven at night, say my name like it means something, and expect me to roll out the welcome mat. We're done. We were done three months ago." "Were we?" The question landed like a stone in still water. His mismatched gaze held hers, one amber, one black. The black one always unnerved her. The amber one always undid her. "Someone's following me." The words fell out of him like coins from a torn pocket. Rory blinked. "What?" "Two weeks now. Started in Whitechapel. Moved with me to the City. Lost them twice, but they found me again." He glanced over his shoulder. The stairwell behind him stood empty. "I need somewhere they won't look. Somewhere connected to someone they have no reason to watch." "And that's me? The delivery girl?" "The delivery girl who walked through the Avaros breach and came back with her soul intact." The ghost of a smile. "You're more than you think, Aurora." Aurora. Not Rory. He only used Aurora when he meant it. "The breach was an accident." "Most extraordinary things are." Her flat above Silas' bar smelled of old wood and spilled beer. The bass from downstairs thumped through the floorboards. She'd grown used to it, the way the whole place thrummed like a sleeping animal. Lucien had never been inside. She'd made sure of that. "Five minutes." He tilted his head. "Generous." "Don't push it." She stepped aside. He entered the way he did everything, with an economy of movement that spoke of darker things than human grace. The charcoal suit looked expensive. Impossibly expensive for a man who dealt in secrets and shadows. But that was Lucien. Contradictions wrapped in wool and silk. The flat was small. She didn't apologise for it. He'd seen worse. Probably caused worse. Her courier bag hit the coat hook. The jacket followed. Underneath, a plain black t-shirt that had seen better days and jeans that had seen worse ones. She caught him looking and didn't flinch. "Tea?" "Please." The kettle filled. The gas clicked on. Routine actions, mundane and safe. Her hands shook. She didn't let him see. "Tell me about the followers." "Professionals. Human, or close enough. They know what I am." "Half-demon fixer with expensive taste and a sword hidden in his walking stick. Hard to miss." "The sword's new." "You replaced the old one?" "Lost it in Cardiff." His gaze found hers across the narrow kitchen. "With you." The kettle screamed. She let it. Cardiff. Three months ago. A job gone sideways. His hand in hers as they ran through alleyways older than the city itself. The safe house. The single bed. The way his fingers traced the crescent scar on her wrist before she pulled away and told him she couldn't do this. Couldn't be the human who fell for the monster. Couldn't be another woman in a long line of women who forgot that some things couldn't be tamed. Couldn't watch him leave one day when the demon blood won and the man disappeared. Evan had been human. Evan had broken her in ways no monster could. But monsters, she'd learned, came in many forms. "The tea's ready." She poured. Two cups. She knew how he took his. Black, no sugar. The memory annoyed her. "They want something I have." "Information?" "An object." He accepted the cup but didn't drink. His fingers wrapped around the ceramic, knuckles taut. "Something that was never meant for this realm." "And you just happened to acquire it." "Acquired is a generous term. Liberated might be closer." "You stole it." "I relocated dangerous materials to a safer location." "You stole it." The amber eye gleamed. "Semantics." A thump from the bar below. Glass breaking. Someone laughed, too loud. The sounds of ordinary London, ordinary life. She hadn't been part of ordinary in months. Not since him. "How dangerous?" "Apocalyptic, if the wrong hands find it." "And your hands are the right ones?" "My hands are the only ones between it and them." He set the cup down. "I'm not asking you to fight, Rory. I'm asking you to let me stay until I can move it again. Tonight. A few hours at most." Her chest ached. The old wound, the one she'd thought had scabbed over, split open. "You could have gone to anyone. Silas. The supernatural community. Half of London owes you favours." "Silas' bar is watched. The community talks. And the favours I'm owed come with strings I'd rather not pull tonight." "So you came to the one person who told you to stay away." "I came to the one person who meant it when she said she'd never speak to me again." He paused. "Yet here you are. Speaking to me." Bastard. She should throw him out. Lock the door. Go back to her deliveries and her quiet life above the bar and pretend the supernatural world didn't exist. Pretend she hadn't walked through a breach into a demon realm and back. Pretend she hadn't kissed a half-demon in a Cardiff safe house and felt more alive than she had in years. Pretend she didn't want to do it again right now. "Fine. A few hours. But you stay in the kitchen." "Your hospitality overwhelms." "And you tell me what you stole." "The Thorn of Avaros." The name hit her like cold water. Even she knew that one. A relic from the demon realm, one of the few objects that could open a permanent breach between worlds. The thing that had almost killed her in Cardiff. "Lucien." "I know." "That thing, it nearly, I almost didn't, we both almost didn't, come back." "I know." His voice cracked. Just slightly. Just enough. The mask slipped and she saw it. The fear. The exhaustion. The man beneath the monster. The door downstairs splintered. They both turned. The sound rose again, wood giving way, boots on stairs. Many boots. "Rory." His hand found the cane's handle. The blade whispered free. "I'm sorry." "How many?" "Six. Maybe eight." "And you thought you could hide here?" "I thought I could keep them away from you." His mismatched eyes met hers. "I led them here. I hoped, I prayed, you'd turn me away. You didn't." The first shadow crossed the window. Then another. The bass from the bar below kept thumping. Nobody down there knew. Nobody down there would believe what was coming through the door. Rory grabbed the fire poker from beside the stove. "What are you doing?" "Improvising." She positioned herself beside the door. "You take the ones with weapons. I'll handle the rest." "Aurora, you can't, you're human, they'll, you'll" "Shut up, Lucien." The door at the bottom of the stairs burst open.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences77
tagDensity0.13
leniency0.26
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.37% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1377
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
89.11% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1377
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"silk"
count1
2
word"traced"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"silk"
2"traced"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences131
matches
0"was anxious"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences131
filterMatches
0"see"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences197
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1377
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount870
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.46
worstName"Cardiff"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Couldn"
discoveredNames
Moreau1
Marseille1
Empress1
Cardiff4
Evan3
Aurora2
Rory4
Lucien3
London1
Bastard1
Couldn3
Pretend3
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Empress"
2"Evan"
3"Rory"
4"Lucien"
places
0"Marseille"
1"Cardiff"
2"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"sounded like Marseille and smoke"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1377
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences197
matches
0"forgot that some"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs98
mean14.05
std14.6
cv1.039
sampleLengths
031
18
21
327
41
55
616
745
88
939
102
111
1236
132
145
155
161
171
1853
192
2030
213
2214
231
2447
256
2627
2711
285
294
3045
312
325
333
3449
3515
3634
371
381
3920
405
4110
4216
433
445
4514
466
4750
4842
4921
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences131
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs147
matches
0"was probably singing"
1"was coming"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences197
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.30% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount516
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.046511627906976744
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.009689922480620155
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences197
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences197
mean6.99
std5.9
cv0.845
sampleLengths
04
14
223
32
43
53
61
711
816
91
105
1110
126
1312
145
152
168
1718
188
193
205
2113
227
2311
242
251
265
276
281
292
302
3120
322
335
345
351
361
3715
3838
392
409
419
426
436
443
4512
462
471
4825
496
57.02% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats21
diversityRatio0.40609137055837563
totalSentences197
uniqueOpeners80
90.91% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences110
matches
0"Of course it did."
1"Impossibly expensive for a man"
2"Probably caused worse."
ratio0.027
81.82% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences110
matches
0"Her name in his mouth"
1"She gripped the door's edge"
2"His cane, ivory-handled, caught the"
3"He didn't lean on it."
4"It always did when he"
5"She looked down."
6"He used to say it"
7"She stepped forward, small satisfaction"
8"His mismatched gaze held hers,"
9"He glanced over his shoulder"
10"He only used Aurora when"
11"Her flat above"
12"She'd grown used to it,"
13"She'd made sure of that."
14"He tilted his head."
15"She stepped aside."
16"He entered the way he"
17"She didn't apologise for it."
18"He'd seen worse."
19"Her courier bag hit the"
ratio0.345
73.64% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount85
totalSentences110
matches
0"The chain caught halfway."
1"Rory yanked the door open"
2"Her name in his mouth"
3"She gripped the door's edge"
4"His cane, ivory-handled, caught the"
5"He didn't lean on it."
6"The blade inside was probably"
7"It always did when he"
8"She looked down."
9"Knuckles white on the doorframe."
10"A smear of sweet-and-sour sauce"
11"The word hung between them."
12"He used to say it"
13"She stepped forward, small satisfaction"
14"The question landed like a"
15"His mismatched gaze held hers,"
16"The black one always unnerved"
17"The amber one always undid"
18"The words fell out of"
19"He glanced over his shoulder"
ratio0.773
90.91% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences110
matches
0"Before she'd walked out of"
1"Even she knew that one."
ratio0.018
87.91% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"He entered the way he did everything, with an economy of movement that spoke of darker things than human grace."
1"Underneath, a plain black t-shirt that had seen better days and jeans that had seen worse ones."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
95.3995%