Run: 2026-07-07-01KWZ4M506DF4NX9CVJVRNC4HZ

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Aion 3.0
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54.4s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The pint glass hit the bar before I saw her face. "Rory?" My hand froze around the glass. That voice. Higher than I remembered, thinner, like it had worn itself down to almost nothing over the years. I turned. Eva Llewellyn stood three feet away, clutching her coat like a shield. The girl I'd grown up next to, shared every secret with, fled Cardiff with, looked nothing like the person who'd dragged me onto that train five years ago. Her dark hair, once thick enough to hide behind, had been cropped to her jawline. The sharp angles of her face that I'd always envied now looked hollow, barely holding skin. She'd lost weight she couldn't afford to lose. The light in her brown eyes flickered, not with recognition but with something closer to fear. "Eva." "You're..." She laughed, a brittle sound. "You're here. In London. Of course you're here. I put you here, didn't I?" The bar noise pressed around us. A group near the window erupted in laughter. Someone fed coins to the ancient jukebox in the corner, and Tom Waits ground through the speakers. I stepped off my stool. "Five years, Ev." "I know." She pressed her palm flat against her chest, a gesture I remembered from childhood. She'd done it during thunderstorms, before exams, the night we'd hidden from Evan outside her flat. "I know exactly how long." "You look—" "Don't." The word came out sharp. She softened it with a tilted smile that didn't reach her eyes. "I know what I look like. You don't need to manage me." That stung. I'd never managed her. I'd never managed anyone. That was the whole problem with Evan, wasn't it? I'd refused to be managed and he'd made me pay for it. "Sit down." I gestured to the stool next to mine. "Have a drink." "I shouldn't stay long." "Sit down, Eva." She sat. I signalled Marco behind the bar. He brought a gin and tonic without being asked, the way he always did when someone looked like they needed it more than they wanted it. Eva wrapped both hands around the glass. Her knuckles were too prominent. A small diamond caught the dim light on her ring finger. I pointed at it. "Andrew Pritchard." She twisted the ring. "You remember Andrew. He worked at his father's firm in Cardiff. Conveyancing." "I remember Andrew calling you 'sweetheart' while he stared at your chest." "He's improved." She sipped her drink. "We married two years ago. His mother was furious. Said I wasn't Welsh enough." "You're from Barry." "Apparently that doesn't count." Her mouth curved. "His mother had this theory that proper Welsh girls come from the valleys. I tried explaining that Barry's technically Vale of Glamorgan, but she's not interested in technicalities. Only bloodlines and property." I studied her. The Eva I'd known would have eviscerated Andrew Pritchard's mother with a single sentence. This Eva apologised for existing in the same postcode. "How's the firm?" "Thriving. Andrew made partner last year. We bought a house in Penarth. Four bedrooms. I have a conservatory." "You hate conservatories." "I've grown to appreciate natural light." "Eva." "Rory." She met my gaze. The flicker I'd seen earlier steadied into something harder. "Don't look at me like that." "Like what?" "Like you're calculating the damage." She set her glass down. "Like you're trying to figure out which version of me is real and which one's the mask. I hated when you did that at university. I hate it more now." The words landed. I pulled my hand back from the bar. "I wasn't—" "You always were. Even before Evan. Even before everything went wrong." Her voice dropped. "You'd watch people. Weigh them. Decide whether they were worth your time. I used to think I passed some test, that first week of primary school. You looked at me for thirty seconds and decided I could stay." I had no answer for that. She wasn't wrong. "What brought you to London?" I asked instead. "Andrew's at a conference. Some legal technology thing at the ExCel. I came along because the alternative was another weekend with his mother discussing my womb." She lifted her glass again. "I saw the green sign from the taxi. Thought I'd have one drink before heading back to the hotel. Be a wild woman." "A whole one drink." "Living dangerously." Silas emerged from the back room, his limp more pronounced than usual. He caught my eye, read the situation in that way he had, and retreated without a word. I'd thank him later. Or he'd pretend nothing had happened and I'd buy him a whisky and we'd both pretend I wasn't buying him gratitude. "You never came to visit," Eva said. "You never invited me." "I didn't think I needed to." That was the Eva I knew. The one who assumed proximity meant permanence, who believed childhood bonds could survive silence and distance and the slow erosion of different lives. I'd spent five years proving her wrong, and the guilt of it burned in my throat. "I tried calling," she said. "After you settled. I tried calling three times, then I stopped because you never picked up." "I changed my number." "I know. I found out from your father." "You spoke to my father?" "He spoke to me. Rang me out of the blue about six months after you left. Asked if I knew where you'd gone. I told him London. He said he'd guessed as much. Then he asked me if you were safe." My chest tightened. Brendan Carter had never asked if I was safe. Not when Evan's control had tightened around my throat, not when I'd stopped eating, stopped sleeping, stopped being anything but a reflection in someone else's mirror. He'd asked Eva. "What did you tell him?" "The truth. I didn't know." She turned her glass. "I told him you'd been safe when I put you on that train. After that, I couldn't say." The jukebox changed. Something slower. The crowd noise shifted, ebbed. I looked at her hands, at the ring that caught too much light, at the fingers that had once braided my hair before every exam because she'd read somewhere that tight braids improved concentration. She'd been wrong about the braids. I'd worn them anyway. "Why are you really here, Ev?" "I told you. Andrew's conference—" "No." I put my hand over hers. Her skin was cold. "Why are you here? In this bar. Tonight." She stared at our hands. Her throat worked. "I looked you up. Two months ago. I was drunk, and Andrew was asleep, and I typed your name into my phone. You came up on some restaurant review site. Golden Empress. There was a photo." She pulled her hand free. "You were holding a delivery bag and smiling. Actually smiling. I didn't recognise you for a full minute." "Sorry I'm not—" "Don't you dare apologise for looking happy." Her voice cracked. She picked up her gin and drained it. "I found the bar through the review site. The Raven's Nest. Same name as the photograph's location tag. I booked the trip the next morning." "You came to London to find me." "I came to London because my husband's at a conference and I needed an excuse to sit in the same room as you for ten minutes and see if you'd recognise me." "I recognised you." "You recognised the ghost of me." She stood. The coat fell around her like armour. "The one you remember. The one who fought back. Who dragged you out of that flat with blood on your wrist and put you on a train." I looked at my left wrist. At the small crescent scar that Eva had once told me looked like a moon. She'd been twelve. I'd been eleven. We'd believed in moons then. "What happened to you, Eva?" "I grew up." She pulled a note from her pocket and tucked it under her empty glass. "I grew up and I learned that fighting costs more than it's worth. I married a man who doesn't hit me and doesn't love me and I live in a house with a conservatory I hate. And every night I wonder if I should have stayed in Cardiff. If I should have—" She stopped. Her hand went to her chest again. "If you should have what?" "If I should have let Evan find me. The night I took you. He came to my flat. Did you know that? Three hours after the train left. He came and he banged on my door and he told me he'd kill me if I didn't tell him where you'd gone." My stomach dropped. "I didn't tell him." "Eva—" "I didn't tell him." Her eyes glistened. "But I thought about it. I thought about it for a full thirty seconds. Because he was so certain, Rory. So certain he loved you. So certain he'd done nothing wrong. And for those thirty seconds, I almost believed him." She turned toward the door. "Ev." She stopped. Her shoulders rose. "He's here," she said. "In London. He moved here eight months ago. I saw his name on a guest list for Andrew's conference reception tonight." The room contracted. Tom Waits ground through the final bars of his song. The bar noise, the laughter, the clink of glasses, all of it drained away until I could hear my own pulse in my ears. "He saw me," she said. "Across the room. He smiled." She walked out.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"I asked instead [instead]"
dialogueSentences80
tagDensity0.288
leniency0.575
rawRatio0.043
effectiveRatio0.025
96.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1589
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
77.97% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1589
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count1
2
word"flicker"
count1
3
word"calculating"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"flickered"
2"flicker"
3"calculating"
4"silence"
5"stomach"
6"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences97
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences97
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences154
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen52
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1589
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions22
wordCount767
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.04
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Llewellyn1
Cardiff1
Tom2
Waits2
Evan3
Marco1
Eva8
Andrew1
Pritchard1
Silas1
Carter1
persons
0"Llewellyn"
1"Tom"
2"Waits"
3"Evan"
4"Marco"
5"Eva"
6"Andrew"
7"Pritchard"
8"Silas"
9"Carter"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore0.978
windowScore0.833
41.30% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences46
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like they needed it more than they"
1"looked like a moon"
74.13% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.259
wordCount1589
matches
0"not with recognition but with something closer to fear"
1"not when I'd stopped eating, stopped sleeping, stopped being anything but a reflection in someone else's mirror"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences154
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs83
mean19.14
std19.97
cv1.043
sampleLengths
011
11
225
32
495
51
620
736
83
937
102
1130
1231
1313
144
153
162
1755
184
1918
2012
2120
223
2339
2426
253
2618
273
286
291
3020
312
3240
3311
342
3552
369
378
3854
394
402
4154
427
434
446
4545
4621
474
488
495
94.41% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences97
matches
0"been cropped"
1"being asked"
2"been eleven"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs156
matches
0"wasn't buying"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences154
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount767
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.03650586701434159
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.001303780964797914
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences154
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences154
mean10.32
std10.07
cv0.976
sampleLengths
011
11
26
32
417
52
612
728
815
916
108
1116
121
136
1414
156
168
1717
185
193
2016
2116
225
232
246
2512
2612
272
284
294
309
3112
3210
333
344
353
362
376
3826
397
405
4111
424
436
4412
4512
466
4714
483
497
41.56% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.2792207792207792
totalSentences154
uniqueOpeners43
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount55
totalSentences85
matches
0"My hand froze around the"
1"Her dark hair, once thick"
2"She'd lost weight she couldn't"
3"She laughed, a brittle sound"
4"I stepped off my stool."
5"She pressed her palm flat"
6"She'd done it during thunderstorms,"
7"She softened it with a"
8"I'd never managed her."
9"I'd never managed anyone."
10"I'd refused to be managed"
11"I gestured to the stool"
12"I signalled Marco behind the"
13"He brought a gin and"
14"Her knuckles were too prominent."
15"I pointed at it."
16"She twisted the ring"
17"She sipped her drink"
18"Her mouth curved"
19"I studied her."
ratio0.647
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount81
totalSentences85
matches
0"The pint glass hit the"
1"My hand froze around the"
2"Eva Llewellyn stood three feet"
3"The girl I'd grown up"
4"Her dark hair, once thick"
5"The sharp angles of her"
6"She'd lost weight she couldn't"
7"The light in her brown"
8"She laughed, a brittle sound"
9"The bar noise pressed around"
10"A group near the window"
11"Someone fed coins to the"
12"I stepped off my stool."
13"She pressed her palm flat"
14"She'd done it during thunderstorms,"
15"The word came out sharp"
16"She softened it with a"
17"I'd never managed her."
18"I'd never managed anyone."
19"That was the whole problem"
ratio0.953
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
ratio0
83.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences24
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The one who assumed proximity meant permanence, who believed childhood bonds could survive silence and distance and the slow erosion of different lives."
1"I looked at her hands, at the ring that caught too much light, at the fingers that had once braided my hair before every exam because she'd read somewhere that …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"She laughed (laugh)"
1"She pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences80
tagDensity0.088
leniency0.175
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.05
79.7634%