Run: 2026-07-07-01KWZ52H0MTRV2Y6EPGAZ5P38J

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Model:
Aion 3.0
Duration:
57.3s
Cost:
$0.021349
Provider:
AionLabs

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The standing stones rose from the earth like broken teeth. Rory counted seven of them as she stepped through the frost-killed grass of Richmond Park, her breath misting in the December air. The oaks formed a rough circle, their trunks twisted with age, bark furrowed and grey as old skin. She'd walked this section of the park dozens of times on her delivery routes and never once noticed them. Never once felt the pull she felt now — a low, insistent tug behind her sternum, like a hook set deep in bone. "You feel it," Nyx said. Not a question. Their voice came as it always did: a whisper that bypassed her ears entirely and settled somewhere behind her thoughts. Rory nodded. Her hand went to her chest, fingers brushing the Heartstone pendant beneath her jumper. It pulsed against her skin — slow, warm, deliberate. Like a second heartbeat. Nyx moved beside her, their form wavering between solid and smoke. In daylight, they were barely a suggestion — a darkness that had no source, a shape the eye refused to hold. Here, as the sun dipped below the treeline and shadows pooled between the stones, they seemed more present. More real. Their violet eyes caught the failing light and held it. "The boundary is thin here," Nyx said. "Thinner than I've felt in centuries." They extended one hand toward the nearest stone, and their fingers passed through the air where the bark should have been. "There's something beneath the surface. A place that folds in on itself." "That's reassuring," Rory muttered. She pulled the pendant free and held it in her palm. The deep crimson gemstone glowed faintly from within, its warmth spreading across her hand. "Is this thing going to get louder?" "It is a stone that hungers." Nyx's whisper carried a note that might have been amusement. "It will not quiet itself now that it has found a threshold." Rory looked at the stones again. The space between them shimmered — a distortion she might have dismissed as heat haze if it hadn't been December, if the air hadn't been sharp enough to sting her cheeks. She stepped closer. The shimmer intensified. The pendant's pulse quickened against her palm. She thought of Evan. Of the flat in Cardiff. Of Eva's voice on the phone, firm and frightened: Come to London. Come now. She thought of Silas and his bar, of Yu-Fei's knowing smile when he handed her deliveries bound for addresses that didn't appear on any map. Of every small strangeness that had led her here, to a circle of stones in a London park at dusk, standing beside a being made of shadow. "Right then," she said, and stepped between the stones. The world tilted. It was not a violent sensation. No rushing wind, no sensation of falling. One moment she stood in Richmond Park with the smell of wet grass and exhaust fumes. The next, she was elsewhere — and the elsewhere was impossibly, quietly alive. Wildflowers carpeted the ground in every direction. Not the sparse, windburned blooms of an English winter, but thick clusters of colour that had no business existing in December. Cornflowers the size of her palm. Foxgloves that swayed though there was no wind. Small white blossoms she couldn't name, growing in spirals that seemed too deliberate to be natural. Their scent was sweet but not cloying — green and cool, like springwater over stone. The sky above was wrong. It wasn't the pale grey of a London evening but a deep, bruised violet, streaked with veins of gold that pulsed slowly, like the breathing of some vast and distant creature. There was no sun that she could find, yet light came from everywhere at once — soft, diffuse, sourceless. It cast no shadows. That wasn't quite right. It cast one shadow. Nyx stood beside her, their form solid now in a way she had never seen it. They were tall — fully six foot two — and their edges were clean. Defined. The living darkness of their body moved and shifted like ink in water, but it held its shape. Their violet eyes burned brighter here, casting faint light across the flowers at their feet. "This is a pocket," Nyx said, and for the first time, their whisper carried something like wonder. "A fold between the realms. I have read of them. I have never stood in one." They turned slowly, taking in the clearing. "It feels like the Fae. The old Fae. Before the courts, before the exile." "You mean before Isolde's exile?" Nyx's expression was impossible to read, but something shifted in their eyes. "I mean before exile was a concept the Fae needed." Rory looked down. The pendant blazed against her palm now, its crimson light throwing her fingers into sharp relief. The warmth had climbed from pleasant to insistent, and she could feel it spreading up her wrist, into her forearm, as though the stone was reaching for something. Or something was reaching for it. She tucked it back beneath her jumper and forced herself to look around. The clearing was larger than it should have been. The standing stones were gone — or rather, they formed the boundary now, visible only as dark shapes at the edge of her vision, circling the grove like sentinels. In the centre of the clearing stood a single tree. It was an oak, but not like any oak she had seen. Its trunk was white as bone, its branches spreading in shapes that reminded her of hands reaching for something just out of grasp. Its leaves were silver. They chimed when they moved — a high, clear sound like crystal struck with a fingernail. As she walked toward it, the wildflowers pressed against her ankles. They didn't bend. They moved. Parting before her footsteps and closing behind, as though the ground itself was breathing her in and out. "Nyx," she said quietly. "How long have we been here?" "Minutes," they said. "Perhaps. Time in such places is not faithful. It wanders." "Wanders where?" "That is the question." She reached the tree. Up close, the bark was smooth and cool under her fingers. The silver leaves overhead caught the golden veins in the sky and scattered the light into fragments that danced across the flowers. Somewhere — she couldn't tell if it was near or far — water was running. A stream. A river. She couldn't see it, but she could hear its voice beneath the chiming of the leaves. The pendant pulsed. Hard. She gasped. "It's found something," she said. Nyx appeared at her shoulder, their presence cold against her skin. They looked at the tree, then at the ground beneath it, then at Rory. "The stone was forged in Hel. In Dymas, if I am not mistaken. It will always seek what it recognises." They paused. "There is a rift here. A point where the Veil wears thin. Your pendant feels it." Rory's hand went to the Fae blade strapped to her hip. Isolde's gift. The moonsilver was cold through the leather sheath, and even that contact sent a shiver through her arm. She drew it. The blade caught the strange light and glowed — a faint, silvery luminescence that made the wildflowers nearest to her recoil. "Easy," said a voice from nowhere. Rory spun. The blade came up, her stance wide, every instinct firing at once. A woman stood beside the white oak who had not been there a moment before. She was small — no taller than Rory — with silver hair that fell past her waist like water. Her eyes were pale lavender, and they held Rory's gaze with a stillness that felt ancient. She wore a simple dress the colour of moonlight, and her feet were bare on the living flowers. Where she stood, the wildflowers did not bend. They grew upward, reaching for her, and left no impression in the earth beneath her feet. "You brought a Fae blade into my grove," the woman said. "And a Shade. And a stone that burns with the hunger of Dymas." She tilted her head, and something flickered in those lavender eyes. Amusement. Curiosity. Something older. "You are either very brave, Aurora Carter, or very foolish. The two are more alike than most would admit." "You know my name," Rory said. The blade didn't lower. "I know many names. It is both my gift and my curse." The woman smiled. It was a strange expression — warm and distant at once, like sunlight through stained glass. "I am Isolde. And you have been walking toward this grove for longer than you know." Nyx shifted beside her, their shadow form rippling. "The Seer," they whispered. "The one who was exiled." Isolde's gaze moved to Nyx, and for a moment, something passed between them — a recognition that had nothing to do with names or faces. Two beings who had been cast out of different worlds and found themselves standing in the same small space. "Exile is a word mortals use," Isolde said. "I prefer 'redirected.' The courts did not want what I am. So I became something else." She looked at the blade in Rory's hand. "That was given freely?" "Yes," Rory said. "By you. Or — by someone who looked like you. In a dream." Isolde's smile deepened. "Dreams are not always dreams, Aurora. Sometimes they are doors." She stepped closer. The wildflowers turned to follow her, petals lifting as though toward sun. "You came because the stone led you. But the stone is not your guide. It is your warning. There is a tear in the Veil, and it grows wider. What comes through it is not something I can see clearly — and that, more than anything, should frighten you." Rory's grip tightened on the blade. The moonsilver hummed against her palm, cold and certain. "Then what do I do?" Isolde reached out and touched the pendant beneath Rory's jumper. The Heartstone blazed — a flare of crimson light that lit the grove and sent shadows scattering. For one heartbeat, Rory saw the clearing as it truly was: the white oak with roots that plunged not into earth but into darkness. The sky not a sky but a ceiling of woven light, fraying at its edges. The flowers not growing but rememberingechoes of a spring that had never ended because it had never truly begun. Then the light faded, and the grove was just a grove again. Beautiful. Impossible. A pocket of stolen time wrapped in standing stones. "You do what the stone cannot," Isolde said. "You choose. The blade will cut through what hides. The Shade will walk where you cannot. And I —" She turned toward the white oak, her silver hair catching the golden light. "I will tell you what I see. Even when what I see makes no sense. Especially then." She began to walk. Her bare feet left no prints in the earth. The flowers parted and closed, parted and closed, and the silver leaves above chimed their high, clear song. Rory looked at Nyx. Nyx looked at Rory. "Still want to go home?" Nyx whispered. Rory sheathed the blade and followed the Seer into the deepening grove. Behind her, the standing stones faded into the London dark, and the Veil between worlds shivered — thin, patient, and waiting.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"They turned slowly [slowly]"
1"she said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.523
leniency1
rawRatio0.087
effectiveRatio0.087
84.03% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1878
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count2
2
adverb"truly"
count2
highlights
0"slowly"
1"very"
2"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
49.41% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1878
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"furrowed"
count1
1
word"whisper"
count3
2
word"pulsed"
count3
3
word"wavering"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count2
5
word"shimmered"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count1
7
word"quickened"
count1
8
word"could feel"
count1
9
word"sentinels"
count1
10
word"crystal"
count1
11
word"footsteps"
count1
12
word"flickered"
count1
13
word"echoes"
count1
highlights
0"furrowed"
1"whisper"
2"pulsed"
3"wavering"
4"warmth"
5"shimmered"
6"pulse"
7"quickened"
8"could feel"
9"sentinels"
10"crystal"
11"footsteps"
12"flickered"
13"echoes"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"sent a shiver through"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences145
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences145
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences165
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1901
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions63
wordCount1490
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.28
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
December3
Heartstone2
Rory19
Evan1
Cardiff1
Eva1
Come2
London4
Silas1
Yu-Fei1
English1
Nyx13
Fae1
Amusement1
Isolde6
Seer1
Veil1
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Rory"
2"Evan"
3"Eva"
4"Silas"
5"Yu-Fei"
6"Nyx"
7"Isolde"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"December"
3"Cardiff"
4"London"
5"Fae"
globalScore0.862
windowScore0.333
94.44% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences90
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"seemed more present"
1"something like wonder"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.104
wordCount1901
matches
0"Not the sparse, windburned blooms of an English winter, but thick clusters of colour"
1"not into earth but into darkness"
2"not a sky but a ceiling of woven light, fraying at its edges"
3"not growing but remembering"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences165
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean37.27
std27.4
cv0.735
sampleLengths
010
182
228
329
462
546
636
728
850
975
109
113
1242
1373
1459
1572
1654
175
1822
1953
2013
21103
2234
2310
2413
252
264
2772
286
295
3063
3155
326
3314
3492
3558
3610
3747
3817
3944
4036
4116
4277
4320
4487
4523
4657
4731
488
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences145
matches
0"being made"
1"were gone "
95.01% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs254
matches
0"was reaching"
1"was reaching"
2"was breathing"
3"was running"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount21
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences18
totalSentences165
ratio0.109
matches
0"Never once felt the pull she felt now — a low, insistent tug behind her sternum, like a hook set deep in bone."
1"It pulsed against her skin — slow, warm, deliberate."
2"In daylight, they were barely a suggestion — a darkness that had no source, a shape the eye refused to hold."
3"The space between them shimmered — a distortion she might have dismissed as heat haze if it hadn't been December, if the air hadn't been sharp enough to sting her cheeks."
4"The next, she was elsewhere — and the elsewhere was impossibly, quietly alive."
5"Their scent was sweet but not cloying — green and cool, like springwater over stone."
6"There was no sun that she could find, yet light came from everywhere at once — soft, diffuse, sourceless."
7"They were tall — fully six foot two — and their edges were clean."
8"The standing stones were gone — or rather, they formed the boundary now, visible only as dark shapes at the edge of her vision, circling the grove like sentinels."
9"They chimed when they moved — a high, clear sound like crystal struck with a fingernail."
10"Somewhere — she couldn't tell if it was near or far — water was running."
11"The blade caught the strange light and glowed — a faint, silvery luminescence that made the wildflowers nearest to her recoil."
12"She was small — no taller than Rory — with silver hair that fell past her waist like water."
13"It was a strange expression — warm and distant at once, like sunlight through stained glass."
14"Isolde's gaze moved to Nyx, and for a moment, something passed between them — a recognition that had nothing to do with names or faces."
15"The Heartstone blazed — a flare of crimson light that lit the grove and sent shadows scattering."
16"The flowers not growing but remembering — echoes of a spring that had never ended because it had never truly begun."
17"Behind her, the standing stones faded into the London dark, and the Veil between worlds shivered — thin, patient, and waiting."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1416
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.03036723163841808
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.009180790960451978
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences165
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences165
mean11.52
std8.12
cv0.705
sampleLengths
010
122
218
319
423
55
63
720
82
914
109
114
1211
1321
1418
152
1610
177
1827
1912
204
2111
2214
237
2416
2512
266
2731
283
293
307
314
325
3312
342
3525
3627
379
383
396
407
4116
4213
437
4421
456
468
4716
4815
495
54.34% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.3696969696969697
totalSentences165
uniqueOpeners61
56.98% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences117
matches
0"Somewhere — she couldn't tell"
1"Then the light faded, and"
ratio0.017
83.25% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences117
matches
0"She'd walked this section of"
1"Their voice came as it"
2"Her hand went to her"
3"It pulsed against her skin"
4"Their violet eyes caught the"
5"They extended one hand toward"
6"She pulled the pendant free"
7"She stepped closer."
8"She thought of Evan."
9"She thought of Silas and"
10"she said, and stepped between"
11"It was not a violent"
12"Their scent was sweet but"
13"It wasn't the pale grey"
14"It cast no shadows."
15"It cast one shadow."
16"They were tall — fully"
17"Their violet eyes burned brighter"
18"They turned slowly, taking in"
19"She tucked it back beneath"
ratio0.342
62.56% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount93
totalSentences117
matches
0"The standing stones rose from"
1"Rory counted seven of them"
2"The oaks formed a rough"
3"She'd walked this section of"
4"Their voice came as it"
5"Her hand went to her"
6"It pulsed against her skin"
7"Nyx moved beside her, their"
8"Here, as the sun dipped"
9"Their violet eyes caught the"
10"They extended one hand toward"
11"She pulled the pendant free"
12"The deep crimson gemstone glowed"
13"Nyx's whisper carried a note"
14"Rory looked at the stones"
15"The space between them shimmered"
16"She stepped closer."
17"The shimmer intensified."
18"The pendant's pulse quickened against"
19"She thought of Evan."
ratio0.795
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences117
matches(empty)
ratio0
36.25% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences67
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"She thought of Silas and his bar, of Yu-Fei's knowing smile when he handed her deliveries bound for addresses that didn't appear on any map."
1"Of every small strangeness that had led her here, to a circle of stones in a London park at dusk, standing beside a being made of shadow."
2"Not the sparse, windburned blooms of an English winter, but thick clusters of colour that had no business existing in December."
3"Small white blossoms she couldn't name, growing in spirals that seemed too deliberate to be natural."
4"The warmth had climbed from pleasant to insistent, and she could feel it spreading up her wrist, into her forearm, as though the stone was reaching for somethin…"
5"Its trunk was white as bone, its branches spreading in shapes that reminded her of hands reaching for something just out of grasp."
6"Parting before her footsteps and closing behind, as though the ground itself was breathing her in and out."
7"The blade caught the strange light and glowed — a faint, silvery luminescence that made the wildflowers nearest to her recoil."
8"Her eyes were pale lavender, and they held Rory's gaze with a stillness that felt ancient."
9"Two beings who had been cast out of different worlds and found themselves standing in the same small space."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
81.82% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Rory muttered (mutter)"
1"they whispered (whisper)"
2"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.341
leniency0.682
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.136
77.7144%