Run: 2026-07-08-01KX1M27P8KBQ3PBVBP5R16PN8

Run Details

Duration:
1m 12s
Cost:
$0.027122
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The ancient oaks of Richmond Park thickened without warning. Their trunks bulged wider than any tree Rory had seen in the city, bark ridged like old scars, and the three of them stepped between the first pair of standing stones as if crossing a threshold drawn in ink no mortal hand could make. Lichen blanketed the weathered oak-grey surfaces in ghostly silver-white patterns. A sharp scent of crushed mint and wet stone rose underfoot the moment their boots left the public footpath. Rory brushed the crescent scar on her left wrist against the nearest stone. A low vibration climbed her arm and settled behind her ribs like a second pulse. The air inside the circle of stones tasted denser, sweet with the iron tang of old magic. Nyx flowed out of the lengthening shadows beside her, tall silhouette solid enough now to cast its own absence of light. Violet glow from their eyes painted faint arcs across the moss. "The stones drink the mountain air of both worlds. Step carefully or the Grove will step for you." Isolde moved ahead without sound or footprint, silver hair brushing the empty space where leaves should have snagged it. Pale lavender eyes caught the shaft of golden-green light that fell nowhere natural. "Roots remember what minds forget," she said. They pressed deeper past the second and third pairs of stones. Instant hush swallowed every London muffler and bird call. Wildflowers carpeted the hidden clearing in colours that made no sense for any British season—cobalt bells, flame-orange cups streaked with black veining, petals the pale blue of dawn frost yet firm as leather. Each blossom opened wider the moment Rory drew near, stamens shivering like tuning forks. When her boot crushed one by accident the plant released a single clear chime that hung in the air and faded only after three full heartbeats. Rory crouched and lifted a spent petal between thumb and forefinger. Cold dew ran down her knuckle yet the flesh of the pedicel burned warm. "Autumn was turn­ing brown outside the circle ten minutes ago." "Outside is a ledger page someone tore free," Isolde answered. She drifted between the blooms without bruising a single stem. "Here every page turns itself." Nyx's shadow-outline stretched thin as they glided over a patch of taller lilies that shone with inner moonlight even under the canopy. "I taste the gap between minutes," they whispered into the still air. "One hour inside these stones can spit a traveller out three days later or drop them back before they left." Rory stood and kept walking. Her fingers found the Fae-forged blade Isolde had pressed into her hand earlier that morning—the slender moonsilver leaf cool against her palm through the cloth wrap. She didn’t draw it. She simply let the cold of the metal ground her as the path underfoot shifted from springy moss to something softer still, almost spongy, each footfall leaving a perfect print that closed again after they passed as if the earth resealed its own skin. The light changed next. Golden-green shafts thickened into liquid ribbons that pooled in hollows where footfalls should have broken them yet left them glassy and untouched. Somewhere higher among the branches a sound like glass wind-chimes stirred without any wind. Beneath it ran a second layer of noise: faint laughter pitched too high, or weeping pitched too low. Rory cocked her head. Nyx halted, violet eyes narrowing to slits. "The veil thins here. Voices leak from the other side of the standing ward." Isolde raised one pale hand and the chime-laughter stuttered into quiet. "What the stones keep, the Grove sometimes loosens." They went on. A stream of clear water cut across the glade from nowhere, surface flat as a polished mirror yet running uphill against the gentle slope for several lengths before it remembered gravity and dropped into a mossy basin. Rory knelt at its edge. Her reflection waited—black hair, blue eyes—but the sky above her reflected head was not the overcast London grey they had left. Swirling colours like oil on water rotated: violet, gold, eel-green. In the distance of that impossible sky something winged crossed once, too quick to shape. She dipped her fingers. The water clung and then released, colder than river melt, leaving trailing sparks of soft green light on her skin that winked out one by one. "It shows somewhere else." "Elsewhere that is also here," Isolde murmured. "The Fae Courts keep no single hour." Nyx bent, incorporeal hand brushing the surface without any ripple. Their whispery voice carried an edge. "I walked such currents once. The other side of the Veil remembers names that mortals have forgotten. Some of those names still have teeth." Rory rubbed the sparks dry against her sleeve and stood. The Heartstone pendant under her jumper gave one slow pulse of warmth against her collarbone though no Hel portal opened that she could see. She ignored it for now. Ahead the wildflowers grew taller, waist high, then higher, petals cupping small beads of translucent nectar that glowed when the filtered light struck them. The trees themselves leaned without breeze, oak and ash and stranger wood whose bark looked bronze and flexed slightly like living hide. A butterfly the colour of hammered copper left one bloom and fixed itself to the back of her hand. Its wings beat once and folded. Against her skin the insect felt heavier than air and lighter than dust. It opened its mouthparts and a thin silver thread of silk unwound, tasting the cut on her knuckles from yesterday’s kitchen accident. Then it lifted away, trailing a single musical note that sounded almost like her own childhood name spoken backward. Isolde watched the creature go, footfalls still nonexistent on the moss. "Gifts unasked for often collect debts of another kind," she said. They reached a clearing ringed by seven further standing stones, each taller than Nyx and carved with spirals that turned slightly when the eye tried to hold them still. At the centre a raised mound of living turf sprouted more of those year-round flowers in thick rings of violet and bone white. The air above the mound vibrated with heat that smelled of crushed elderflower and distant thunder. Rory stopped at the outer ring and felt gooseflesh rise along both arms. The moonsilver blade remained cold in her grip. She looked sideways at Newx. "Does this Grove have an owner or does it own whoever walks in?" Nyx’s form lengthened, darkness licking out between the standing stones. "Both. Neither. The half-fae who keeps it learns the difference only after the lesson scars." Isolde had already stepped onto the mound, her long silver hair lifting as if underwater. The ground under her feet remained unmarked. She turned, pale lavender eyes catching every they carried. "Ask only the question that already burns your tongue, child of Cardiff. The Grove answers with weather of its own choosing." Rory stepped between two stones. The moment both boots planted past the end-line a low chord rang through the soles of her feet, felt more than heard, and the wildflowers all around shuddered once in perfect unison. Petals fell like slow snow, each one chime-ringing against the moss before melting into pure light. Nyx drifted after her, their outline becoming sharper against the glowing spill. "That chord was a greeting. Or a warning. Shades know both tastes when the air thins this far." Further back the entrance stones they had first passed already looked soft-edged, half a mile of clearing compressed into less than twenty strides. Time really did hold no ledger: the light overhead had taken on a late-afternoon amber that had no business existing under cloudy Richmond sky. Rory checked the cheap digital watch she still wore out of habit. The numbers rolled too fast then froze, then ran backward for three seconds before locking again on a total that made no sense. She lowered her wrist. A pair of translucent moths the size of her remaining palm spiralled past her shoulder, wings painted with tiny perfect maps of rivers that never ran through London. When one brushed her ear she heard a single word spoken in a language older than Welsh, then the sound dissolved into the same glass-chime layer they had heard earlier. Nyx’s violet eyes tracked the moths until they vanished among higher leaves. "Those maps lead to courts no living human has charted. Keep counting your steps. Keep naming the objects you still own." Isolde lifted both arms. Tiny lights—no larger than sparks off a grinder—swirled up from the turf mound and settled in the air around her like loyal fireflies. They formed brief patterns, rings, then knives, then open eyes looking in every direction at once before dropping back into the grass and vanishing. Her voice rode the soft wind that had just begun. "Eyes open. Tongues silent. Feet listen." Rory tightened her hold on the moonsilver blade, feeling its permanent chill burn a clean line of sense up her forearm. The Heartstone pendant warmed again against her sternum, pulse matching nothing she could name. Around them the Grove turned over another invisible page. Trees bent a few degrees farther. The stream they had crossed earlier reappeared twenty strides to their left, running this time in a perfect figure-eight. Fresh wildflowers thrust up between Rory’s bootsoles openly, orange leaved, cupping light the colour of fresh blood. She took the next step deeper. Nyx’s shadow lengthened across the luminous turf. "The ring thickens. Choose which world you mean to keep before both choose you." Isolde walked further into the radiant mound, silver hair now fully airborne, and the seven tall stones began to hum in staggered notes like struck church bells underwater. The vibration travelled through soil into bone. Rory’s boots sank half an inch into moss that suddenly felt like living fur. She exhaled once and kept walking.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.238
leniency0.476
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
84.89% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1654
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count2
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"slightly"
2"really"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
60.70% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1654
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"pulse"
count3
1
word"footfall"
count1
2
word"perfect"
count4
3
word"warmth"
count1
4
word"silk"
count1
5
word"vibrated"
count1
6
word"chill"
count1
7
word"radiant"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"footfall"
2"perfect"
3"warmth"
4"silk"
5"vibrated"
6"chill"
7"radiant"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences95
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences95
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences111
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1648
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
99.89% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions46
wordCount1397
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park1
Rory14
London3
British1
Fae-forged1
Isolde9
Nyx9
Heartstone2
Hel1
Newx1
Welsh1
Grove1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Isolde"
2"Nyx"
3"Grove"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Newx"
globalScore0.999
windowScore1
86.71% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences79
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if crossing a threshold drawn in ink no mortal hand could make"
1"felt like living fur"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1648
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences111
matches
0"opened that she"
98.63% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs33
mean49.94
std24.73
cv0.495
sampleLengths
082
145
250
339
493
535
625
754
879
962
1021
1119
1291
1334
1414
1540
1685
1779
1822
1968
2039
2125
2252
2353
2430
2582
2662
2733
2867
2986
306
3121
3255
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences95
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs229
matches(empty)
39.90% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences111
ratio0.036
matches
0"Wildflowers carpeted the hidden clearing in colours that made no sense for any British season—cobalt bells, flame-orange cups streaked with black veining, petals the pale blue of dawn frost yet firm as leather."
1"Her fingers found the Fae-forged blade Isolde had pressed into her hand earlier that morning—the slender moonsilver leaf cool against her palm through the cloth wrap."
2"Her reflection waited—black hair, blue eyes—but the sky above her reflected head was not the overcast London grey they had left."
3"Tiny lights—no larger than sparks off a grinder—swirled up from the turf mound and settled in the air around her like loyal fireflies."
82.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1420
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"weathered oak-grey surfaces"
1"ghostly silver-white patterns."
2"existing under cloudy Richmond"
adverbCount54
adverbRatio0.038028169014084505
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.007042253521126761
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences111
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences111
mean14.85
std8.61
cv0.58
sampleLengths
09
144
210
319
413
515
617
721
811
918
1019
1113
127
1311
149
1533
1614
1726
1811
1914
2010
2110
2210
235
2422
2512
2620
275
2826
294
3044
314
3222
3314
3418
354
367
3714
3811
398
403
4137
425
4321
4410
4515
464
4726
484
497
74.17% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.45045045045045046
totalSentences111
uniqueOpeners50
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences91
matches
0"Somewhere higher among the branches"
1"Then it lifted away, trailing"
2"Further back the entrance stones"
ratio0.033
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences91
matches
0"Their trunks bulged wider than"
1"They pressed deeper past the"
2"She drifted between the blooms"
3"they whispered into the still"
4"Her fingers found the Fae-forged"
5"She didn’t draw it."
6"She simply let the cold"
7"They went on."
8"Her reflection waited—black hair, blue"
9"She dipped her fingers."
10"Their whispery voice carried an"
11"She ignored it for now."
12"Its wings beat once and"
13"It opened its mouthparts and"
14"They reached a clearing ringed"
15"She looked sideways at Newx."
16"She turned, pale lavender eyes"
17"She lowered her wrist."
18"They formed brief patterns, rings,"
19"Her voice rode the soft"
ratio0.242
58.90% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount73
totalSentences91
matches
0"The ancient oaks of Richmond"
1"Their trunks bulged wider than"
2"Lichen blanketed the weathered oak-grey"
3"A sharp scent of crushed"
4"Rory brushed the crescent scar"
5"A low vibration climbed her"
6"The air inside the circle"
7"Nyx flowed out of the"
8"Violet glow from their eyes"
9"Isolde moved ahead without sound"
10"They pressed deeper past the"
11"Instant hush swallowed every London"
12"Wildflowers carpeted the hidden clearing"
13"Each blossom opened wider the"
14"Rory crouched and lifted a"
15"She drifted between the blooms"
16"Nyx's shadow-outline stretched thin as"
17"they whispered into the still"
18"Rory stood and kept walking."
19"Her fingers found the Fae-forged"
ratio0.802
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
ratio0
8.93% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences64
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"Their trunks bulged wider than any tree Rory had seen in the city, bark ridged like old scars, and the three of them stepped between the first pair of standing …"
1"Pale lavender eyes caught the shaft of golden-green light that fell nowhere natural."
2"When her boot crushed one by accident the plant released a single clear chime that hung in the air and faded only after three full heartbeats."
3"Nyx's shadow-outline stretched thin as they glided over a patch of taller lilies that shone with inner moonlight even under the canopy."
4"She simply let the cold of the metal ground her as the path underfoot shifted from springy moss to something softer still, almost spongy, each footfall leaving …"
5"Golden-green shafts thickened into liquid ribbons that pooled in hollows where footfalls should have broken them yet left them glassy and untouched."
6"The water clung and then released, colder than river melt, leaving trailing sparks of soft green light on her skin that winked out one by one."
7"Ahead the wildflowers grew taller, waist high, then higher, petals cupping small beads of translucent nectar that glowed when the filtered light struck them."
8"Then it lifted away, trailing a single musical note that sounded almost like her own childhood name spoken backward."
9"The air above the mound vibrated with heat that smelled of crushed elderflower and distant thunder."
10"Isolde had already stepped onto the mound, her long silver hair lifting as if underwater."
11"Time really did hold no ledger: the light overhead had taken on a late-afternoon amber that had no business existing under cloudy Richmond sky."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
54.76% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"they whispered (whisper)"
1"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.238
leniency0.476
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.19
84.9826%