Run: 2026-07-09-01KX400R6GW4DSJ6EAXMHB5GXC

Run Details

Duration:
44.4s
Cost:
$0.052740
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain needled Detective Harlow Quinn’s face hard enough to sting. The suspect ran thirty yards ahead of her, a narrow shape in a black hooded coat, boots hammering wet pavement. He cut across the mouth of an alley off Shaftesbury Avenue without looking back. Quinn followed, one hand braced against the slick brick as she took the corner too fast. “Police!” Her voice cracked through the rain. “Stop!” He did not. Of course he did not. Men carrying stolen evidence rarely did. The alley narrowed between the backs of shuttered restaurants, their extractor fans coughing steam into the night. Grease, rotting cardboard, wet stone. Quinn’s shoes slapped through standing water. Somewhere ahead, metal clanged. A bin lid skidded across the ground. She jumped it. Her lungs had begun to burn, but she kept her pace even. Eighteen years had taught her that panic belonged to the person being chased. The pursuer could hurt later. The figure burst out onto Dean Street, dodging between a black cab and a delivery van. Horns blared. Tyres hissed on rainwater. Quinn surged after him, her worn leather watch cold against her left wrist as she pumped her arms. “Move!” she shouted at a pair of umbrella-clutching tourists who had stopped in the middle of the pavement. They flattened themselves against a shopfront. Quinn passed close enough to smell cheap perfume and hear one of them swear in French. Ahead, the suspect glanced back. For one bright instant, his hood lifted in the wind. Quinn caught pale skin, a sharp cheekbone, and eyes that flashed a strange, washed-out silver in the sodium glare. Then he was gone again. Quinn’s foot slipped on a painted white line. Her knee buckled; pain snapped up her thigh. She caught herself against the bonnet of a parked car, leaving a wet palm-print on the black paint, and drove on. Silver eyes. Not contact lenses. Not under that light, not with that quick, blank gleam. Her mind supplied an old image before she could stop it: DS Morris on the floor of a disused warehouse, his face gone grey beneath the ambulance lights. No wound that explained the blood. No weapon. Only a scorched smell in the air and a line of ash across the concrete as neat as a drawn boundary. Unexplained circumstances, the report had said. Quinn had spent three years hating those words. The suspect crossed the road against the lights and disappeared down a flight of steps between a closed tattoo parlour and a boarded-up newsagent. A small plaque over the entrance read: PUBLIC CONVENIENCES. Quinn slowed at the top. The stairwell yawned below her, tiled walls yellowed by age and covered in layers of graffiti. Rainwater cascaded down the steps in thin silver streams. There was no light beyond the first landing. No sound except the rain behind her and, far below, the hollow beat of retreating footsteps. Her radio crackled at her shoulder. “Quinn?” DC Patel’s voice came through thin with static. “Where are you?” She thumbed the transmit button. “Dean Street. Heading south-east. Suspect’s gone underground.” “Underground where?” Quinn looked at the sign, then at the tiled stairwell. “Public loo, apparently.” “Don’t go in alone. I’m four minutes out.” The footsteps below stopped. Quinn held her breath. A soft scrape came from the darkness, followed by a sound so low she felt it more than heard it—a murmur, perhaps, or a voice speaking in a language that had no business being spoken beneath a London street. Her fingers tightened around the radio. “Make it three,” she said. “Quinn—” She switched it off. She descended. The first landing smelled of ammonia and damp plaster. The old public lavatories had been sealed years ago, their doors chained shut beneath a council notice that had peeled almost entirely away. Water dripped from a cracked ceiling. A fluorescent tube overhead flickered once, spat blue-white light across the tiles, and died. At the bottom of the stairs, Quinn found the source of the sound: an old iron gate set into the rear wall. It stood open. Beyond it, a service corridor ran into blackness. No council work had opened that gate. The lock hung from its chain, split cleanly in two. Not cut. Split, as if someone had struck it with a single impossible blow. Quinn took out her torch. The beam found brick walls sweating with moisture, rusted conduits, and a trail of muddy footprints. One set. Fresh. She moved through the gate. The corridor tilted downward. Her torch beam bounced with each step. The sound of the rain faded behind her, replaced by the distant metallic groan of trains and a muffled hum that seemed to rise from the walls themselves. The air changed. It grew warmer, close with the smell of dust, hot wiring, incense, and something sweetly rotten. Her phone lost signal within twenty paces. No bars. No GPS. Quinn stopped, checked her radio out of habit, and heard only dead static. The smart thing was to turn around. She had no backup. No map. No warrant for whatever lay ahead. There were protocols for pursuing a suspect into restricted infrastructure, and she had just broken most of them. But he had been carrying the evidence pouch. She had seen it under his coat when he cleared the alley gate: a brown Metropolitan Police evidence bag, its tamper seal torn open. Inside had been a small object recovered that afternoon from the flat of a missing antiques dealer in Bloomsbury. A carved bone disc, no larger than a pound coin, marked on both sides with a ring of tiny black symbols. The property officer had called it rubbish. Quinn had not believed him. The moment the disc had been logged, three different people had tried to steal it. The first was a frightened clerk who claimed he had only been told to retrieve it. The second had been an armed man in a motorbike helmet. The third was the silver-eyed runner now somewhere ahead of her. None of it belonged in a normal case. That had stopped being an excuse a long time ago. She advanced. The service corridor opened abruptly onto a disused Underground platform. Quinn stood at the top of a short flight of tiled steps and stared. The station should have been empty. Instead, it breathed. The old roundel on the far wall had been painted over so many times its name was unreadable. Dust lay thick along the tracks. There were no trains, no timetables, no advertisements that anyone living would recognise. Yet the platform glowed with light. Lanterns hung from cables strung between pillars. Not electric lanterns. Their flames burned blue, violet, and a green so deep it looked almost black. Stalls crowded the platform edge and spilled into the old ticket hall beyond. Sheets of red velvet, oilcloth, patched canvas. Glass jars full of teeth. Rows of stoppered bottles that caught the coloured fire and glimmered like trapped eyes. People moved among them. At least, Quinn thought, people was the safest word for them. A woman in a fur-collared coat stood behind a table stacked with small animal skulls, her lips sewn shut with gold thread. A broad man with wet, hairless skin haggled over a tray of tarnished rings. Near a shuttered kiosk, two children in old-fashioned school uniforms held hands while a tall figure with antlers bent to speak to them. No one looked surprised to see a police detective standing at the station entrance with rainwater dripping from her coat. Several looked amused. Quinn’s pulse tapped hard in her throat. The suspect had vanished into the crowd. She started down the steps. At once, a hand closed around her right wrist. Quinn reacted before thought. She twisted, trapped the hand against her body, and drove her elbow backward. The man behind her grunted but did not release her. He was younger than she had expected, maybe thirty, with short curly dark hair darkened by moisture and warm brown eyes that did not quite hide his alarm. His olive skin looked sallow under the market lights. A Saint Christopher medallion flashed at his throat as he caught Quinn’s elbow before it could find his ribs. “Easy,” he said. His accent was faint, Spanish beneath London. “Please. You don’t want to do that here.” Quinn wrenched free and took a step back. “Who are you?” His gaze flicked to her badge, then past her shoulder toward the stairwell. “Someone trying to stop you getting killed.” “Name.” “Tomás Herrera.” “Are you involved with the man I’m pursuing?” “No.” “Then get out of my way.” Tomás’s expression tightened. “You followed him through the gate?” “Yes.” “That was a mistake.” “I’ll add it to the paperwork.” A tremor of disbelief crossed his face. “Detective, this is the Veil Market.” Quinn looked past him at the stalls. At the blue lamps. At the things in jars. “The what?” “The Veil Market.” He lowered his voice. “It moves every full moon. Tonight it’s here, beneath Camden. You need a bone token to enter.” Quinn glanced back toward the corridor. “There was no token.” “That means someone wanted you to come.” The thought landed cleanly and coldly. She looked again at Tomás. His left sleeve was pushed up enough to reveal a pale, jagged scar running along his forearm. Not a surgical scar. A knife wound, perhaps. He stood like someone used to holding pressure on bleeding bodies: balanced, ready, not looking for a fight but prepared for one. “You know this place,” Quinn said. “I know enough.” “Then you know the man in the black coat.” Tomás hesitated. That was answer enough. Quinn stepped closer. “I’m pursuing a suspect in connection with assault, theft of police evidence, and the disappearance of at least one civilian. He came in here carrying an evidence bag. Where did he go?” Tomás’s eyes hardened with reluctant calculation. “If he has the bag, he’ll be heading for the broker.” “Who is that?” “You should leave.” “Not an answer.” “You have no idea what you’re walking into.” “I have some idea.” “No.” He glanced toward the market. “You have the kind of idea people have just before they make a very bad decision.” Behind them, something shrieked. The sound tore across the platform, too high to be human. Market-goers shifted aside as a small cage rattled violently on one of the tables. Inside, a shape made of black feathers battered itself against the wire. Its wings had too many joints. Its beak scraped sparks from the bars. Quinn did not flinch. She made herself watch until the thing settled. Then she looked back at Tomás. “My partner died on a case three years ago,” she said. The words came out quieter than intended. “Everyone told me it was an accident because nobody could explain it. I’ve been watching people use that word to cover up things they don’t understand ever since.” Tomás stared at her. Quinn pointed toward the market. “That man took evidence from a crime scene. If this place has anything to do with why people are disappearing, I’m not turning around because the decor is unsettling.” The far end of the platform rippled with movement. Quinn saw the black hood. The suspect was forcing his way through a cluster of shoppers toward an archway leading into the ticket hall. The police evidence bag was visible now, clutched against his side. “There,” she said. Tomás swore under his breath. Quinn ran. The market swallowed sound strangely. Her boots struck the platform, but the footsteps came back muffled, as though the air wrapped around them. Traders shouted in languages she did not know. A woman snapped a string of charms out of Quinn’s path. One brushed the detective’s shoulder and burned cold through her wet shirt. “Don’t touch anything!” Tomás shouted behind her. Quinn vaulted a crate of cloudy jars. Something pale floated inside them, turning slowly in yellow fluid. She cut between two stalls, shoulder-checking past a man in a grey suit whose face was smooth from brow to throat. The hooded suspect reached the archway. “Stop!” Quinn called. He turned. Up close, his silver eyes caught the lantern light and held it. His mouth curved, not in fear but recognition. “Detective Quinn,” he said. His voice slid under her skin. Quinn drew her baton. “Put the bag down.” The suspect lifted it slightly. “You should have stayed in the rain.” “What’s in the bag?” “An invitation.” He threw something at her. Quinn instinctively ducked. A small glass vial shattered against a pillar behind her. Thick white smoke bloomed outward, fast and low. It smelled of cloves, hot metal, and a hospital corridor after a fire. Tomás caught her by the sleeve and dragged her sideways. “Don’t breathe it!” Too late. Quinn had taken half a breath. The platform lurched. For a second, the blue lanterns became ambulance lights. The market vanished. She saw Morris again, sprawled on concrete, one hand reaching toward her. His fingers were blackened to the knuckles. His eyes were open. Harlow, he said. Then Tomás slapped her hard across the face. The vision broke. Quinn staggered into a stall, knocking over a display of narrow silver knives. They clattered across the boards. Tomás had a cloth over his nose and mouth. He pressed another against Quinn’s face. “Breathe through this.” She did. The cloth smelled sharply of alcohol and crushed herbs. Her head cleared by degrees. The smoke thinned. The suspect was gone. Quinn pushed away from Tomás, rage cutting through the nausea. “Which way?” “The ticket hall.” He pointed through the arch. “But he’s not running from you now.” “He’d better be.” “You don’t understand.” Tomás grabbed her arm again, less gently this time. “The broker is in there. The people who sell to him don’t appreciate police. The things he keeps as security appreciate them even less.” Quinn looked through the archway. Beyond it, the old ticket hall lay under a vaulted ceiling black with soot. The market became denser there, more secretive. Curtains screened off private rooms. Figures in expensive coats stood in close conversation beneath the dead departure boards. At the centre of the hall, beneath a shattered clock, a man in the black hood moved toward a bookshelf built against the far wall. It made no sense. A bookshelf in an abandoned Tube station, shelves crowded with leather-bound volumes and cracked ledgers. The suspect reached up, pressed a hand against the spine of a book, and the entire shelf swung inward. A hidden room waited beyond, lit by a thin line of amber light. Quinn saw the evidence bag disappear through the opening. The bookshelf began to close. Tomás let go of her arm. For one beat, Quinn stood at the threshold of the unknown. She could turn back. She could climb into the rain, call Patel, call every unit she could justify, and try to explain an illegal market under Camden without sounding like a woman who had finally broken under the weight of an old partner’s death. Or she could go after the man who had known her name, who had stolen the bone disc, who had thrown a substance at her that pulled Morris out of the grave and put him in front of her eyes. The bookshelf clicked nearly shut. Quinn holstered her baton, drew her service weapon, and checked the chamber by feel. Tomás’s voice came from behind her, low and grim. “If you go in there, do not make promises. Do not accept a drink. And whatever they offer you—” Quinn looked back. “What?” His Saint Christopher medal glinted as he swallowed. “Don’t tell them what you’re afraid of.” The shelf was inches from closing. Quinn slipped through the gap. Behind her, the hidden door shut with the sound of a book closing.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences64
tagDensity0.234
leniency0.469
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.76% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2644
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"sweetly"
count1
1
adverb"coldly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"slightly"
count1
5
adverb"sharply"
count1
6
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"sweetly"
1"coldly"
2"very"
3"slowly"
4"slightly"
5"sharply"
6"gently"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
73.52% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2644
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"footsteps"
count3
1
word"flickered"
count1
2
word"unreadable"
count1
3
word"electric"
count1
4
word"velvet"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count1
6
word"flicked"
count1
7
word"shattered"
count2
8
word"lurched"
count1
9
word"weight"
count1
10
word"grave"
count1
highlights
0"footsteps"
1"flickered"
2"unreadable"
3"electric"
4"velvet"
5"pulse"
6"flicked"
7"shattered"
8"lurched"
9"weight"
10"grave"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells3
narrationSentences248
matches
0"looked surprised"
1"A tremor of disbelief"
2"t in fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences248
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"notice"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"began to"
3"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences297
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2643
ratio0
matches(empty)
97.22% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions2
matches
0"Instead, it breathed."
1"Harlow, he said."
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions85
wordCount2257
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.95
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Detective1
Harlow2
Quinn44
Shaftesbury1
Avenue1
Dean1
Street1
French1
Morris3
Patel2
London2
Metropolitan1
Police1
Bloomsbury1
Underground1
Saint2
Christopher2
Spanish1
Tomás15
Tube1
Camden1
persons
0"Detective"
1"Harlow"
2"Quinn"
3"Morris"
4"Patel"
5"Saint"
6"Christopher"
7"Tomás"
places
0"Shaftesbury"
1"Avenue"
2"Dean"
3"Street"
4"French"
5"London"
6"Bloomsbury"
globalScore0.525
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences156
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"hum that seemed to rise from the walls themselves"
1"not quite hide his alarm"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.757
wordCount2643
matches
0"not looking for a fight but prepared for one"
1"not in fear but recognition"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences297
matches
0"opened that gate"
1"recovered that afternoon"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs179
mean14.77
std15.89
cv1.076
sampleLengths
010
150
28
33
411
539
63
730
840
918
1022
115
1229
135
1437
152
1613
1757
186
198
2033
215
2249
236
2412
2512
262
2710
283
298
304
314
3239
336
345
351
364
372
3852
3922
403
418
4231
4321
442
451
465
4758
487
494
91.11% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount10
totalSentences248
matches
0"being chased"
1"was gone"
2"being spoken"
3"been sealed"
4"been logged"
5"been told"
6"been painted"
7"was pushed"
8"were blackened"
9"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs381
matches
0"was forcing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences297
ratio0.007
matches
0"Her knee buckled; pain snapped up her thigh."
1"A soft scrape came from the darkness, followed by a sound so low she felt it more than heard it—a murmur, perhaps, or a voice speaking in a language that had no business being spoken beneath a London street."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2269
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"short curly dark hair"
adverbCount72
adverbRatio0.031732040546496254
lyAdverbCount20
lyAdverbRatio0.00881445570736007
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences297
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences297
mean8.9
std6.89
cv0.774
sampleLengths
010
120
214
316
47
51
63
75
86
917
105
116
124
137
143
1512
1613
175
1816
192
204
2118
2218
236
2416
255
2610
2719
285
298
308
3121
322
333
3410
3528
366
372
3821
396
408
4124
429
435
4416
459
468
4716
486
499
43.60% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats19
diversityRatio0.2996632996632997
totalSentences297
uniqueOpeners89
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount8
totalSentences225
matches
0"Of course he did not."
1"Somewhere ahead, metal clanged."
2"Then he was gone again."
3"Only a scorched smell in"
4"Instead, it breathed."
5"At least, Quinn thought, people"
6"Then she looked back at"
7"Then Tomás slapped her hard"
ratio0.036
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount53
totalSentences225
matches
0"He cut across the mouth"
1"Her voice cracked through the"
2"He did not."
3"She jumped it."
4"Her lungs had begun to"
5"she shouted at a pair"
6"They flattened themselves against a"
7"Her knee buckled; pain snapped"
8"She caught herself against the"
9"Her mind supplied an old"
10"Her radio crackled at her"
11"She thumbed the transmit button."
12"Her fingers tightened around the"
13"She switched it off."
14"It stood open."
15"She moved through the gate."
16"Her torch beam bounced with"
17"It grew warmer, close with"
18"Her phone lost signal within"
19"She had no backup."
ratio0.236
62.22% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount179
totalSentences225
matches
0"Rain needled Detective Harlow Quinn’s"
1"The suspect ran thirty yards"
2"He cut across the mouth"
3"Quinn followed, one hand braced"
4"Her voice cracked through the"
5"He did not."
6"Men carrying stolen evidence rarely"
7"The alley narrowed between the"
8"Grease, rotting cardboard, wet stone."
9"Quinn’s shoes slapped through standing"
10"A bin lid skidded across"
11"She jumped it."
12"Her lungs had begun to"
13"The pursuer could hurt later."
14"The figure burst out onto"
15"Tyres hissed on rainwater."
16"Quinn surged after him, her"
17"she shouted at a pair"
18"They flattened themselves against a"
19"Quinn passed close enough to"
ratio0.796
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences225
matches(empty)
ratio0
93.02% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences86
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"A soft scrape came from the darkness, followed by a sound so low she felt it more than heard it—a murmur, perhaps, or a voice speaking in a language that had no…"
1"The old public lavatories had been sealed years ago, their doors chained shut beneath a council notice that had peeled almost entirely away."
2"The sound of the rain faded behind her, replaced by the distant metallic groan of trains and a muffled hum that seemed to rise from the walls themselves."
3"Rows of stoppered bottles that caught the coloured fire and glimmered like trapped eyes."
4"He was younger than she had expected, maybe thirty, with short curly dark hair darkened by moisture and warm brown eyes that did not quite hide his alarm."
5"She could climb into the rain, call Patel, call every unit she could justify, and try to explain an illegal market under Camden without sounding like a woman wh…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she shouted (shout)"
1"Tomás shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences64
tagDensity0.141
leniency0.281
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.063
89.0491%