Run: 2026-07-09-01KX406PAPMV5HRMVZ6XMK31B9

Run Details

Duration:
43.7s
Cost:
$0.056927
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn stopped at the mouth of the disused passage and listened. The old station breathed around her. Water ticked somewhere beyond the tiled archway, slow and deliberate. Air moved through the abandoned tunnels with a cold, mineral smell, carrying coal dust, rust, and something sweeter beneath it—like burnt oranges left too long on a radiator. A white forensic tent had been erected on the platform below. It looked absurd beneath the soot-blackened sign that still read CAMDEN TOWN in flaking enamel, one corner hanging loose from its bolts. Portable lamps threw hard circles of light across the tracks. The rest of the station retreated into dark: shuttered ticket windows, cracked advertisements for cigarettes no longer sold, walls furred with old damp. Quinn checked the time on the leather watch strapped to her left wrist. 02:17. Six minutes late, according to the control-room log. Nine, according to the constable who had met her at the street-level service entrance and led her down three flights of concrete stairs, through a locked maintenance door, then along a corridor that was not on any current Underground plan. She disliked both figures. The constable had remained behind at the final gate, pale and grateful for the excuse. Quinn adjusted the collar of her coat and descended to the platform. “Detective.” DS Colin Mercer emerged from beside the tent, ducking under its plastic flap. He was young enough to still look surprised when a body turned up ugly, though he had learned not to show it in front of uniforms. His hair was plastered flat by rain. A smear of gray grit marked one cheek. “Mercer.” Quinn gave the scene a quick sweep before she looked at him properly. “Who called it in?” “British Transport Police received an anonymous tip at one forty-three. Caller said there was a dead woman under the old Camden platform. Didn’t give a name. We got here first because BTP couldn’t work out how the caller had got in.” “And how did we get in?” “Building inspectors use a service route from the high street.” Mercer gestured back toward the passage. “Officially, anyway.” “Unofficially?” His mouth tightened. “There’s another route. We found it after we arrived.” Of course there was. Quinn looked past him. Beneath the nearest lamp, a uniformed scene-of-crime officer photographed a circle drawn on the platform in what appeared to be ash. The circle had been partly scuffed by someone’s shoe. At its center lay a woman in a dark coat, face turned toward the tracks, one arm tucked beneath her body. “There’s a body,” Quinn said. “That usually means I begin there.” “Yes, ma’am.” He lifted the tent flap for her. The dead woman was perhaps thirty. Long black hair had spread across the gritty platform in a neat fan, too neat for the violence visible at the back of her skull. Her coat was expensive wool, charcoal gray. One shoe was missing. Her bare foot, blue with cold, showed no cuts or dirt. That was the first thing wrong. The platform was filthy. The woman’s exposed sole was clean. Quinn crouched, careful not to cross the taped boundary. Her knees protested. At forty-one, she had begun to notice damage accumulated over eighteen years of stairs, foot chases, and standing too long in morgues. She ignored it. “Name?” “Lydia Vale,” Mercer said. “Thirty-two. No known address, though she had a flat in Islington registered under her name. Art dealer, supposedly. Her wallet’s in her coat. Cards, cash, driver’s licence. Nothing looks taken.” “Cause?” “Blunt force trauma, likely. Doctor estimates she’s been dead since around midnight. There’s blood beneath her head, but not much. Could be a fall. There’s damage to the occipital bone.” Quinn studied the body’s position. Vale lay facedown, head angled left, shoulders square to the platform edge. One hand was clenched. The other lay palm-up, fingers slightly curled. A fall could put a person in any number of positions. It did not explain the rest. “Show me the blood.” Mercer pointed. A dark, almost black patch had soaked into the pale dust behind Vale’s head. It was smaller than it ought to have been. Quinn leaned closer without touching anything. The blood had dried matte at the edges. No spatter reached the tiles. No smear marked the platform between the body and the nearest wall. The skull injury had bled, certainly, but the stain looked as though it had formed after the body was placed there. “There’s no impact point,” she said. Mercer glanced down. “The platform’s uneven. She could have struck her head on that rail edging.” He indicated the raised metal strip along the platform’s lip. Quinn looked from the strip to the body. Nearly four metres separated them. “She fell backward from there and landed with her feet clean?” “She may have been carried.” “Then it isn’t a fall.” “No.” Mercer exhaled through his nose. “No, it isn’t.” Quinn nodded toward the missing shoe. “Found it?” “Not yet.” “Search the tracks?” “Done twice. Nothing.” “Her other shoe?” “On her foot.” Quinn looked at it. A black leather ankle boot, polished despite the grime of the setting. Its sole was clean too. Mercer saw where she was looking. “We thought she might have been brought in by someone.” “Not through the route we used.” Quinn turned her gaze across the platform. The dust was thick enough to hold a good impression. It lay undisturbed in broad, gray swathes beyond the forensic markers. “How many entrances?” “One service stairway from the street. A maintenance tunnel toward Chalk Farm, collapsed halfway through. And the other route.” “The unofficial one.” “Yes.” “Show me.” He hesitated. That was the second thing wrong, or perhaps merely the first confirmation of it. “What is it, Mercer?” “Better if you see it.” They left the tent and walked along the platform. The lamps did not reach far. Their shadows ran ahead of them, long and sharp over the tiles. At the far end, beyond an old wooden bench warped by damp, a section of advertisement hoarding had been moved aside. The poster showed a smiling woman in a cloche hat holding a bottle of tonic wine. Her face had been split by age and moisture. Behind it yawned a narrow opening in the wall. Two officers stood outside it. One watched the passage. The other looked determinedly at the floor. Quinn noted that neither man met her eye. “What’s beyond?” she asked. “A corridor,” Mercer said. “Then stairs.” “Where do they lead?” He swallowed. “Not where they ought to.” Quinn gave him a flat look. “Come on,” she said. The corridor was barely wide enough for two people abreast. Its tiled walls had once been cream, but grime had turned them the color of old teeth. A line of dead bulbs ran along the ceiling. Someone had hung temporary work lights at intervals, their cables snaking down the passage in black loops. The smell changed as they moved deeper. The railway stink fell away. In its place came incense, hot metal, damp wool, and an undercurrent of spices so dense it caught in the throat. Voices murmured ahead. Not police voices. Quinn’s hand went, by habit, toward the holster beneath her coat. “Why is there a market under a Tube station?” Mercer looked at her. “You know about it?” “I asked a question.” “We found… stalls. People packing up. Most of them were gone by the time BTP got a team down here. The ones we stopped don’t have identification anyone can verify. They call the place the Veil Market.” The name meant nothing to her, which she disliked more than any answer he could have given. The stairs turned twice and opened onto a cavernous former ticket hall, though no Underground map Quinn had ever seen could have placed it here. Brick vaults curved high overhead. Lanterns hung from iron hooks, their flames burning green, blue, and an ordinary yellow that seemed less trustworthy for its normality. Rows of makeshift stalls stood empty or half-stripped. A tray of blackened teeth sat unattended beneath a hand-painted sign. Glass jars filled with pale insects clicked softly against one another. Rolls of faded velvet leaned beside boxes of old bones. At one stall, a woman in a silver veil argued in a low voice with a uniformed officer while a man in a butcher’s apron swept something glittering into a dustpan. Quinn stopped at the bottom of the stairs. For a moment, no one spoke. Mercer cleared his throat. “We secured what we could.” “What, exactly, do you think this is?” “An illegal market. Drugs, antiquities, animal parts. The usual, with some theatrical dressing.” He said it too quickly. “Vale may have come here for a private sale. Someone killed her, moved her body up to the platform, then fled through the crowd.” Quinn looked at the stalls. A boy of about sixteen—if he was a boy—watched her from behind a counter covered in small stoppered bottles. His eyes reflected green in the lantern-light. When he saw her notice, he dropped his gaze. “The usual,” Quinn repeated. Mercer’s cheeks reddened. “I’m not saying it’s usual.” “No. You’re saying it’s comprehensible.” She began to walk between the stalls. “Those are different things.” The floor was uneven flagstone, slick with old moisture. Chalk symbols marked some of the thresholds. Not graffiti, not quite. They were too deliberate: interlocking loops, sharp little hooks, circles bisected by lines. Quinn had seen cult markings at crime scenes before. Usually they had been painted by men eager to make their crimes seem larger than themselves. These symbols did not feel eager. They felt old. At the far side of the hall, a cordon enclosed a stall draped in dark red cloth. A rectangular placard had been nailed above it, its lettering painted in a narrow, elegant hand. NO QUESTIONS. NO REFUNDS. “Victim’s stall?” Quinn asked. “No. We found this there.” Mercer led her around the tape. A forensic officer stood over a folding table, photographing a small object inside an evidence tray. She looked up as Quinn approached. “Detective. We haven’t touched it beyond securing the scene.” Quinn bent over the tray. It was a compass no larger than the palm of her hand. Brass, once polished but now mottled with green verdigris. Protective-looking sigils had been etched around its face, fine as scratches. The glass was unbroken. Beneath it, the needle spun slowly, then jerked hard toward the left. Not north. Quinn looked left. A brick wall stood there, uninterrupted except for a thin black crack running from floor to ceiling. “Who owns the stall?” she asked. “No one will say,” Mercer told her. “A few people called it the Shade’s place.” “The Shade?” “Apparently he makes things.” “Out of brass compasses?” The forensic officer shifted. “It was found in the victim’s hand, ma’am. Her fist was closed around it. We had to photograph it before opening her fingers.” Quinn turned back toward the platform in her mind. Vale’s open hand had been palm-up. “You moved it.” The officer blinked. “We—” “Not you.” Quinn’s eyes went to Mercer. “You said this was found in her hand. At the body, her right hand was open.” Mercer’s expression became carefully neutral. “The scene was disturbed before we arrived. Market patrons. We can’t establish her exact position from—” “Her fingers weren’t stiff.” “She had been dead less than two hours.” “Her palm was clean.” Quinn straightened. “If she had held that compass, there would be verdigris or dirt in the creases. There wasn’t. Her left hand was clenched. Did you check it?” “Yes. Nothing in it.” “Did you bag the residue?” “There was no residue.” “There is always residue.” The forensic officer looked between them. “There was a black powder under the left fingernails. Very fine. We collected scrapings.” “Where?” “Lab van.” “Get them tested. Not just for soil, paint, or carbon. Everything.” Mercer folded his arms. “You think she clawed at someone?” “I think someone wanted us looking at the object in her right hand.” Quinn stared at the compass. Its needle had stopped spinning. It trembled, fixed upon the crack in the wall. “And I think the object wants something else.” A sound came from behind the brickwork. A knock. Soft. Distinct. Three taps. The officers in the hall went still. Quinn did not move. She had spent eighteen years training herself to recognize the moment fear became useful. Fear sharpened attention. Fear made people honest, if only with themselves. The knock came again. Three taps. Mercer’s face had gone pale beneath the station grime. “Probably pipes.” “There are no pipes in that wall.” “Could be settling.” “It tapped back.” The crack widened by a fraction. Cold air leaked through it, carrying a scent Quinn knew too well: wet stone, smoke, and the copper tang of old blood. For one instant she was not in the market. She was kneeling in a rain-slick alley three years ago, rain filling the hollows of DS Morris’s ruined face. She was hearing the paramedics say there was no weapon. No footprints. No answer for why every streetlight on the block had burst at the same moment. Her left wrist throbbed beneath the worn leather strap of her watch. Quinn set her jaw. “Everybody back,” she said. Mercer stepped closer instead. “Quinn—” “Back.” The command struck through the hall. Uniforms obeyed because they knew her voice. The forensic officer lifted the evidence tray with both hands and retreated. The strange boy behind the bottle stall had already vanished. Only Mercer stayed near her. “Whatever you think you heard,” he said quietly, “we need to treat this as a scene. We seal the area. We call structural engineers. We don’t start making assumptions about—” “About what?” His eyes flicked to the wall. He did not answer. Quinn crouched beside the crack. In the mortar at its base lay a smear of dark material, almost invisible against the soot. She pulled on a fresh glove, took a penlight from her pocket, and angled the beam. The substance was not soot. It glittered faintly, like ground glass. A drag mark led from the wall toward the red-draped stall, then disappeared beneath the table where the compass had been found. “Vale wasn’t killed on the platform,” Quinn said. Mercer crouched beside her despite himself. “We already established she was moved.” “No. She wasn’t moved from one part of this station to another.” Quinn traced the mark with her light, without touching it. “Her shoes were clean because she didn’t walk through the platform dust. There are no carrying prints because whoever brought her there didn’t use the access routes. The blood was deposited after death. The compass was planted. And that wall”—she looked at the black fissure—“isn’t a wall in the way you mean it.” Mercer’s breath fogged in the sudden cold. The brass compass began to hum inside its evidence tray. Every lantern in the hall bent its flame toward the crack. Then the wall gave a slow, grinding shudder. A thin line of darkness opened between the bricks, deeper than shadow, deep enough that Quinn could not find the back of it with her eyes. Something moved on the other side. Not a body. Not an animal. A suggestion of height and limbs, wavering as if seen through black water. Mercer reached for his radio. It spat a burst of static, then died. Quinn stood. Her heart beat hard but evenly. Three years ago, Morris had died in a place where the evidence had lied to her. She had accepted the report because there had been nothing else to do. No weapon. No suspect. No mechanism for what had happened. She had told herself that unanswered did not mean impossible. Now, beneath Camden, something on the far side of a broken wall tapped patiently against the world. Quinn looked at the body on the platform in her mind: Lydia Vale’s clean feet, her broken skull, the black powder beneath her nails. “She fought it,” Quinn said. Mercer looked at her. “What?” “Not her killer. Something that took her through.” She pointed toward the crack. “That powder under her nails came from this side of the wall, or the other. Get the victim’s nails compared to the residue here. Check the compass for her prints, and everyone else’s. Find out who saw her enter the market. Find out who sells passage through that.” “You think someone opened it?” “I think someone opened it for her.” Quinn’s gaze settled on the empty stall and its sign: NO QUESTIONS. NO REFUNDS. “And when she came back, she was dead.” From within the darkness came a final sound. Not a knock this time. A woman’s voice, faint and distorted, saying, “Detective.” Quinn went cold. It was Morris’s voice.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags27
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Mercer gestured back [back]"
1"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences109
tagDensity0.248
leniency0.495
rawRatio0.074
effectiveRatio0.037
89.30% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2805
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"carefully"
count1
5
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"softly"
2"quickly"
3"slowly"
4"carefully"
5"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
87.52% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2805
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"velvet"
count1
1
word"etched"
count1
2
word"trembled"
count1
3
word"throbbed"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"wavering"
count1
highlights
0"velvet"
1"etched"
2"trembled"
3"throbbed"
4"flicked"
5"traced"
6"wavering"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences230
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences230
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"notice"
hedgeMatches
0"appeared to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences311
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen53
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2803
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions83
wordCount1979
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity2.07
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn41
Underground2
Colin1
Mercer23
Vale4
Morris3
Camden1
Lydia1
One3
Three3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Colin"
3"Mercer"
4"Vale"
5"Morris"
6"Lydia"
7"One"
places(empty)
globalScore0.464
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences142
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2803
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences311
matches
0"noted that neither"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs179
mean15.66
std16.88
cv1.078
sampleLengths
013
16
238
366
414
548
64
715
812
91
1054
1118
1241
136
1418
151
1612
174
1855
1911
202
217
2253
236
2410
2537
261
2734
281
2930
3028
3117
324
3331
3446
356
3616
3710
3813
3911
405
415
429
438
442
453
463
473
483
4921
91.53% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences230
matches
0"been erected"
1"was plastered"
2"was clenched"
3"was placed"
4"been moved"
5"been painted"
6"been nailed"
7"been etched"
8"been found"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs327
matches
0"was looking"
1"was kneeling"
2"was hearing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences311
ratio0.006
matches
0"Air moved through the abandoned tunnels with a cold, mineral smell, carrying coal dust, rust, and something sweeter beneath it—like burnt oranges left too long on a radiator."
1"A boy of about sixteen—if he was a boy—watched her from behind a counter covered in small stoppered bottles."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1995
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount65
adverbRatio0.03258145363408521
lyAdverbCount20
lyAdverbRatio0.010025062656641603
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences311
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences311
mean9.01
std7.8
cv0.866
sampleLengths
013
16
210
328
411
522
610
723
813
91
108
1140
124
1315
1412
151
1613
1726
187
198
2014
214
2241
236
2416
252
261
273
289
294
304
3121
329
3321
345
356
362
377
386
3925
407
414
4211
436
444
456
469
473
4822
493
48.60% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats16
diversityRatio0.3225806451612903
totalSentences310
uniqueOpeners100
83.33% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences200
matches
0"Of course there was."
1"Nearly four metres separated them."
2"Usually they had been painted"
3"Only Mercer stayed near her."
4"Then the wall gave a"
ratio0.025
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount43
totalSentences200
matches
0"It looked absurd beneath the"
1"She disliked both figures."
2"He was young enough to"
3"His hair was plastered flat"
4"His mouth tightened."
5"He lifted the tent flap"
6"Her coat was expensive wool,"
7"Her bare foot, blue with"
8"Her knees protested."
9"She ignored it."
10"It did not explain the"
11"It was smaller than it"
12"He indicated the raised metal"
13"Its sole was clean too."
14"It lay undisturbed in broad,"
15"They left the tent and"
16"Their shadows ran ahead of"
17"Her face had been split"
18"Its tiled walls had once"
19"He said it too quickly"
ratio0.215
60.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount160
totalSentences200
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn stopped at"
1"The old station breathed around"
2"Water ticked somewhere beyond the"
3"Air moved through the abandoned"
4"A white forensic tent had"
5"It looked absurd beneath the"
6"The rest of the station"
7"Quinn checked the time on"
8"She disliked both figures."
9"The constable had remained behind"
10"Quinn adjusted the collar of"
11"DS Colin Mercer emerged from"
12"He was young enough to"
13"His hair was plastered flat"
14"A smear of gray grit"
15"Quinn gave the scene a"
16"Mercer gestured back toward the"
17"His mouth tightened."
18"Quinn looked past him."
19"The circle had been partly"
ratio0.8
25.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences200
matches
0"Now, beneath Camden, something on"
ratio0.005
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences73
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Nine, according to the constable who had met her at the street-level service entrance and led her down three flights of concrete stairs, through a locked mainte…"
1"She had told herself that unanswered did not mean impossible."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags27
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Quinn traced, without touching it"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Quinn repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences109
tagDensity0.138
leniency0.275
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.018
90.0654%