Run: 2026-07-09-01KX409DNRDE0SH9SCXTN98WY7

Run Details

Duration:
1m 11s
Cost:
$0.101550
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain turned Soho’s streets into strips of black glass. Detective Harlow Quinn cut through the spill from a closing theatre, shouldering past umbrellas and bare heads. Her shoes struck water hard enough to soak her trouser cuffs. Thirty metres ahead, Tomás Herrera glanced back. Warm brown eyes caught the green pulse above the Raven’s Nest. Then he ran. “Police. Stop.” Herrera shoved between two men under the awning. One lost his cigarette. The other threw an elbow, whether at Herrera or Quinn she couldn’t tell. She caught his wrist, turned beneath it and drove him against the brick without breaking stride. “Wrong woman.” She released him and crossed the road into a chorus of brakes. A cab’s bonnet clipped her coat. Its driver leaned on the horn, face bleached by dashboard light. “Use your bloody eyes!” “Police.” “Use them anyway.” Herrera vanished round the corner by Wardour Street. Quinn touched the radio clipped beneath her lapel. “Control, suspect moving north from the Raven’s Nest. Male, twenty-nine, olive skin, dark curly hair, grey jacket. Tomás Herrera. Former paramedic. I’m in pursuit.” Static crackled in her earpiece. “Received, Three-Seven. Units responding. Nature of offence?” Quinn rounded the corner and found an empty pavement, rain hammering a row of locked bicycles. “Obstruction. Suspected possession of evidence connected to three assaults.” She left out the rest. The victims had arrived at different hospitals over six months, each with blood beneath their fingernails that didn’t match any human profile. Herrera’s name appeared in two sets of admission notes despite his having lost his licence. The third victim had spoken seven words before dying. Ask Tommy what came through the wall. Quinn slowed. A service alley split two restaurants. At its mouth, a bin rocked on one wheel. She drew her baton and entered. Kitchen heat breathed through metal vents. Sour beer, wet cardboard and fryer grease thickened the narrow space. Fire escapes crosshatched the slice of bruised sky overhead. Quinn passed a delivery door, an overflowing drain and a stack of blue crates. Water tapped from every rung and pipe. A shape dropped from the fire escape. Herrera landed behind her. His arm locked across her chest. His other hand seized her wrist before she could swing. The scar along his left forearm flashed white beneath a torn cuff. “Listen to me.” Quinn stamped his instep, snapped her head back and felt cartilage give beneath her skull. Herrera grunted. His grip broke. She drove him into the bins. Metal thundered. He twisted aside before the baton reached his knee, caught the handle and shoved her arm into the wall. Pain rang from her elbow to her fingertips. “You don’t know where you’re going.” “I know exactly where you’re going. Custody.” “You followed me out of the Nest. That made you visible.” His Saint Christopher medallion had slipped from his shirt. It lay against his throat, bright with rain and blood from his nose. Quinn hooked her foot behind his ankle and swept him down. He hit the tarmac, rolled and came up with a small object pinched between two fingers. Pale. Pitted. The size of an old penny. Bone. “Drop it.” Herrera wiped blood across his mouth with the back of his hand. “You wanted answers about Morris.” The alley contracted around her. Rain ticked against the bins. Somewhere behind the wall, plates crashed and a cook swore. Quinn held the baton level. “Don’t use his name.” “He used mine.” “No. He didn’t.” “Three years ago. Whitechapel. He came to me with a wound that wouldn’t close.” DS Nathan Morris had disappeared from a locked warehouse room with one door, no windows and a blood trail that ended at a brick wall. Internal review had spent nine months reducing him to forms, timelines and a brass plaque in the corridor. Quinn still carried the key to his flat in an evidence envelope at home. Herrera backed towards the far end of the alley. Quinn advanced. “You’ve had three years to invent that.” “I had three years to keep you alive.” “You’ve got three seconds to put that token down.” His gaze shifted past her shoulder. Quinn heard the scrape behind her and turned. Nothing stood there. One of the restaurant doors hung open. Steam curled from a tiled kitchen beyond it. A chef stared at her, knife in hand. “You lot taking this outside?” “We’re already outside.” “Then take it further outside.” When Quinn looked back, Herrera had gone. The far end of the alley opened through an iron gate. It swung on its hinge. “Control, suspect northbound.” Only static answered. She ran. Herrera crossed Shaftesbury Avenue through moving traffic. He vaulted the central barrier, one hand on the slick rail. Quinn followed at the crossing, ignoring the lights. A motorbike slashed past her, tyre throwing water across her face. The rider twisted round. “Mad cow!” Quinn wiped her eyes and found Herrera beneath the sodium lamps, his grey jacket dark with rain. He limped now. Her sweep had done some work. He turned east, cut through a passage and emerged among shuttered shops. Red buses rolled past like furnace doors. Crowds thinned with each block. The bright theatre fronts gave way to closed cafés, scaffold poles and blank office windows. Quinn kept him in sight. “Armed police are on their way, Herrera.” He glanced over his shoulder. “No, they aren’t.” Her radio hissed. “Control, confirm units.” A voice surfaced under the static. Not dispatch. Too low. Too close. “Harlow.” She tore the earpiece free. The voice had belonged to Morris. Her stride faltered. Herrera gained ten metres. Quinn crushed the earpiece in her fist until the plastic edges bit her palm. A recording. A transmitter. Silas and Herrera had staged it to shake her. The alternative had no place in a working investigation. Herrera ducked down steps beside a shuttered music shop. Quinn followed and entered a passage beneath the building. Water coursed along cracked concrete. Graffiti covered the walls in layered names, eyes and symbols. At the bottom, Herrera shouldered through an emergency exit and disappeared. The door slammed. Quinn hit the bar and burst into a yard boxed by brick. A single lamp shuddered above bags of rubble. Herrera climbed a fence at the far side, his limp dragging one leg. “Stop, or I’ll Taser you.” He looked down from the top. “You didn’t bring one.” She hated that he was right. “You knew I’d come to the Raven’s Nest.” “I knew you’d come alone.” “Why?” “Because Morris did.” He dropped out of sight. Quinn scaled the fence. Rust tore her palm. She landed beside railway arches with her coat snagged at the shoulder and her left knee sending a hot complaint up her thigh. Herrera hurried towards Camden High Street. A Night Tube train rumbled somewhere below them. The vibration passed through the soles of Quinn’s shoes, followed by a second tremor that moved against the first. She stopped for half a breath. Under the railway noise came another sound: dozens of voices bargaining in a space no station map acknowledged. Herrera had reached a boarded entrance set into the flank of an old brick building. Torn posters covered it. PLANNED ENGINEERING WORKS. KEEP CLEAR. A faded Underground roundel showed through damp paper, the station name blacked out with paint. He pressed the bone token to a rusted bolt. The boards inhaled. No mechanical movement. No hinge. The timber bowed towards darkness as if the space behind it had drawn breath, then folded into a doorway. Herrera slipped through. Quinn reached it before it closed and jammed her baton into the gap. The boards pressed against the steel. Her shoulder joined the effort. Splinters creaked by her cheek. “Tomás.” He stopped on the other side. Blue light washed his face. Behind him, tiled stairs descended under a broken sign marked TO TRAINS. People moved at the bottom, but their shadows climbed the walls in the wrong direction. “You used my partner to bring me here.” “I used his name to keep you from arresting me in that alley.” “Come back through.” “No.” “I’ll drag you through.” “You won’t get the chance. The door’s tasted you.” The pressure on her baton increased. Quinn planted one foot against the frame. “What is this place?” “The Veil Market.” The name existed in organised-crime intelligence as rumour, usually buried among references to trafficking, occult fraud and designer narcotics. It moved every full moon. Entry by invitation. No confirmed location. No reliable photographs. “You expect me to believe there’s a black market beneath Camden?” Herrera lifted the bone token. “You believe this door shouldn’t exist. Start there.” A figure crossed the foot of the stairs. It wore a tailored burgundy coat and carried a birdcage beneath one arm. Something inside the cage pressed a hand against the bars. The fingers had too many joints. Quinn’s grip tightened. “Hands where I can see them.” Herrera spread them. Empty except for the token. “Your people aren’t welcome here.” “My people?” “Police. Anyone carrying iron restraints. Anyone who thinks a warrant is armour.” Quinn pulled her handcuffs free and held them beside the baton. “Good thing I don’t think that.” The worn leather watch on her left wrist showed 00:17. Its second hand stuttered, moved backwards twice, then resumed. From below came a wash of smells that had no business sharing air: incense, hot copper, wet fur, hospital disinfectant. Traders called prices in English, Arabic, Spanish and sounds that scraped the ear. Coins chimed. Glass shattered. A woman laughed, and every electric light on the staircase dimmed at once. Herrera looked towards the market. “I need to reach someone before he sells what he took from the last victim.” “Who?” “His name won’t help you.” “Give it to me.” “Names help him.” “You’re done setting the terms.” Quinn forced another inch into the doorway. The boards flexed round her arm with the pressure of cartilage. Her radio spat static from beneath her coat. A market voice rose through it. “Detective Quinn. Admission requires a token.” Herrera’s expression hardened. “Turn that off.” Quinn unclipped the radio. Its display showed no channel, only a narrow green eye. “Who’s transmitting?” “Nobody you want noticing you.” The voice returned. “One token. One guest. One debt.” Herrera closed his fist around the bone disc. “She’s not my guest.” “Tomás Herrera. Licensed physician, licence revoked. Three market censures. One blood sanction outstanding.” “Paramedic, not physician.” His jaw tightened. “And the sanction was settled.” “One guest. One debt.” Quinn reached through, caught his jacket and hauled him towards the gap. Herrera struck her wrist. The baton shifted. The boards snapped closer, crushing the sleeve of her coat. He gripped her forearm with both hands before the wood caught flesh. “Let go of me and pull back.” “You first.” “If the door shuts on your arm, you lose it.” “Then open it.” “You need the token.” “Use yours.” His medallion slid across his collar as he strained. Saint Christopher’s face had turned black. The market below fell quiet. Not silent. Quiet had texture here: held breath, cloth settling, claws withdrawing from tile. Faces turned towards the stairs. Some looked human until they blinked. A child in a yellow raincoat pointed at Quinn. Its mother—or the tall shape holding its hand—covered its eyes. Herrera looked down. “Damn it.” A man climbed from the market. He wore a charcoal suit with no shirt beneath the jacket. Fine writing covered his chest and throat, each line shifting as muscles moved underneath. He carried a ledger bound in grey hide. “Detective Harlow Quinn.” Quinn kept one fist twisted in Herrera’s jacket. “Identify yourself.” The man smiled. His teeth bore tiny engraved numbers. “You arrived without tender.” “I’m pursuing a suspect.” “In the Market, pursuit counted as intent to trade.” “I’m not buying anything.” “You brought grief. We accepted grief.” Herrera pulled against her grip. “Don’t answer him.” Quinn ignored him. “What do you sell?” The man opened the ledger. Pages riffled without wind. “Goods. Remedies. Recollections. Doors. Deaths, when stock permitted.” Quinn’s gaze fixed on the shifting ink. “Information?” “Our oldest rot.” “Did Nathan Morris enter this market three years ago?” Herrera went still. The numbered teeth vanished behind the man’s lips. “That enquiry carried a price.” Quinn glanced at the staircase, the crowd, the signs hanging from chains over stalls buried beyond the bend. BANNED DISTILLATES. DOMESTIC HEXES. NAMES WHILE YOU WAIT. Beneath the station clock, a woman spooned silver fluid into stoppered bottles. Beside her, a butcher arranged red objects on ice; each one beat at a different rhythm. No warrant covered this. No backup knew the entrance. Her radio had become an invitation in someone else’s voice. The suspect stood within reach, but every instinct built over eighteen years warned her that stepping across would turn a pursuit into something without procedure, jurisdiction or an exit she could command. Herrera studied her face. “You wanted to know what happened to him.” “I want facts.” “Then you have to come down.” “Or I take you upstairs and get them in interview.” “You can arrest me. You can charge me. You can sit across a steel table and ask until your voice cracks.” He nodded towards the market. “Morris is still down there.” Quinn pulled him close enough for their faces to share the narrow gap. “You told me he came to you wounded.” “He did.” “You told me you were keeping me alive.” “I was.” “Now you’re telling me he’s here.” “I told you Morris was down there. I didn’t tell you what was left of him.” The boards squeezed. Pain stabbed through Quinn’s trapped sleeve as a splinter found skin. The ledger keeper extended one pale hand. “One token admitted one guest.” Herrera opened his fist. The bone disc lay in his palm, wet with rain. Quinn looked back over her shoulder. The yard beyond the doorway sat empty beneath the shuddering lamp. Rain silvered the fence. A siren passed on the main road without slowing. London remained ten feet away, measurable and wet, full of cameras, call logs, custody suites and lies with human mouths. Below, the abandoned station clock showed thirteen minutes past a number that wasn’t there. Quinn released Herrera’s jacket. He rubbed his throat. “Go back, Detective.” She folded her cuffs, pushed them into her coat pocket and tugged her sleeve free of the boards. Blood striped her forearm. Herrera offered the token. She didn’t take it. “After you.” He held her gaze, then turned and placed the bone disc against the tiled wall. A second doorway opened beside the stairs, its darkness threaded with blue light. Quinn stepped through the first gap and onto the landing. The boards slammed shut behind her.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences104
tagDensity0.019
leniency0.038
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2461
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
89.84% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2461
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"thundered"
count1
2
word"mechanical"
count1
3
word"shattered"
count1
4
word"electric"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"thundered"
2"mechanical"
3"shattered"
4"electric"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences236
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences236
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences338
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2459
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
49.31% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions101
wordCount1887
uniqueNames25
maxNameDensity2.01
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Harlow1
Quinn38
Tomás1
Herrera34
Raven1
Nest1
Wardour1
Street2
Tommy1
Saint2
Christopher2
Nathan1
Morris2
Shaftesbury1
Avenue1
Camden1
High1
Night1
Tube1
Underground1
English1
Arabic1
Spanish1
Rain3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
4"Raven"
5"Tommy"
6"Saint"
7"Christopher"
8"Nathan"
9"Morris"
10"Rain"
places
0"Soho"
1"Wardour"
2"Street"
3"Shaftesbury"
4"Avenue"
5"Camden"
6"High"
7"English"
globalScore0.493
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences145
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2459
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences338
matches
0"hated that he"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs224
mean10.98
std11.89
cv1.083
sampleLengths
09
135
211
33
42
541
62
729
84
91
103
118
128
1324
145
157
1616
179
1851
197
202
2115
226
2347
247
254
2628
273
2815
295
3035
316
327
3311
3422
3527
368
371
382
3912
405
415
4215
435
444
453
463
4714
4857
499
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences236
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs356
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences338
ratio0.006
matches
0"Its mother—or the tall shape holding its hand—covered its eyes."
1"Beside her, a butcher arranged red objects on ice; each one beat at a different rhythm."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1890
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.01164021164021164
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.0015873015873015873
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences338
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences338
mean7.28
std4.96
cv0.681
sampleLengths
09
117
211
37
411
53
62
78
84
913
1016
112
1212
136
1411
154
161
173
188
198
2024
215
227
2316
249
255
2622
2715
289
297
302
316
329
336
346
3511
369
3714
387
397
404
416
4210
4312
443
4515
462
473
486
492
56.31% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.3520710059171598
totalSentences338
uniqueOpeners119
46.30% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences216
matches
0"Then he ran."
1"Somewhere behind the wall, plates"
2"Only static answered."
ratio0.014
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount50
totalSentences216
matches
0"Her shoes struck water hard"
1"She caught his wrist, turned"
2"She released him and crossed"
3"Its driver leaned on the"
4"She left out the rest."
5"She drew her baton and"
6"His arm locked across her"
7"His other hand seized her"
8"His grip broke."
9"She drove him into the"
10"He twisted aside before the"
11"His Saint Christopher medallion had"
12"It lay against his throat,"
13"He hit the tarmac, rolled"
14"His gaze shifted past her"
15"It swung on its hinge."
16"He vaulted the central barrier,"
17"He limped now."
18"Her sweep had done some"
19"He turned east, cut through"
ratio0.231
36.39% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount183
totalSentences216
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn cut through"
1"Her shoes struck water hard"
2"Herrera shoved between two men"
3"The other threw an elbow,"
4"She caught his wrist, turned"
5"She released him and crossed"
6"A cab’s bonnet clipped her"
7"Its driver leaned on the"
8"Herrera vanished round the corner"
9"Quinn touched the radio clipped"
10"Static crackled in her earpiece."
11"Quinn rounded the corner and"
12"She left out the rest."
13"The victims had arrived at"
14"Herrera’s name appeared in two"
15"The third victim had spoken"
16"A service alley split two"
17"She drew her baton and"
18"Kitchen heat breathed through metal"
19"Quinn passed a delivery door,"
ratio0.847
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences216
matches(empty)
ratio0
95.86% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences76
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The victims had arrived at different hospitals over six months, each with blood beneath their fingernails that didn’t match any human profile."
1"DS Nathan Morris had disappeared from a locked warehouse room with one door, no windows and a blood trail that ended at a brick wall."
2"From below came a wash of smells that had no business sharing air: incense, hot copper, wet fur, hospital disinfectant."
3"The suspect stood within reach, but every instinct built over eighteen years warned her that stepping across would turn a pursuit into something without procedu…"
4"Below, the abandoned station clock showed thirteen minutes past a number that wasn’t there."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
89.1338%