Run: 2026-07-09-01KX40ACVFC5KA9X9HSEKDPSZ8

Run Details

Duration:
1m 7s
Cost:
$0.111375
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The door opened as far as the chain allowed, and Lucien Moreau looked through the gap as if Aurora had summoned him by thinking too hard about all the ways she hated him. Rain silvered the shoulders of his charcoal suit. His platinum hair, usually slicked back with insulting precision, had come loose at one temple. One hand rested on the ivory handle of his cane. The other hung empty at his side, pale knuckles streaked with blood. His amber eye fixed on her first. The black one followed a fraction later. “Rory.” She nearly shut the door in his face. His cane slid into the gap before she could. Not hard. Not threatening. Just enough ivory and polished wood to stop her. “That,” she said, “is a very good way to lose a cane.” “And this is a very poor time for a demonstration of your ingenuity.” “Come back during office hours.” “I believe I am being followed.” Behind her, Ptolemy leapt from a tower of books, dislodging three loose pages and a packet of highlighters. The tabby landed with an aggrieved thump. Downstairs, the curry house extractor fan groaned through the wall, carrying up the smell of cumin, hot oil, and charred onion. Aurora kept her hand on the door. “By whom?” “I did not stop to ask.” “You’re an information broker.” “I am also bleeding on Eva’s landing.” She looked down. A dark stain spread along his left side, nearly invisible against the charcoal cloth except where rain diluted the blood and sent it dripping from the hem of his jacket. He stood straight, but too straight. The sort of posture a person adopted when pride was the only thing holding his ribs together. “You’ve got thirty seconds,” she said. His mouth curved faintly. “Your hospitality remains—” “Twenty-five.” She closed the door enough to free the chain, then worked the three deadbolts in quick succession. By the time she pulled it open, the landing was empty. Her pulse kicked. Then Lucien stepped out of the stairwell’s blind angle, caught her around the waist, and drove them both backward into the flat. Aurora’s shoulder struck the wall. His palm covered her mouth. The cane hit the floor between them with a clatter. “Forgive me,” he breathed against her ear. Footsteps pounded up the stairs. Every muscle in her body locked. Lucien pressed close, sheltering her behind the door as he kicked it shut. She smelled rain, blood, and the dark, expensive spice of his cologne. His chest rose once against hers, sharply. Beneath her hand, which had landed against his waistcoat, his heartbeat ran fast and uneven. The footsteps stopped outside. Lucien’s gaze dropped to hers. Up close, the inhuman black of his left eye had no reflection. His amber eye held too much: pain, calculation, and the old heat she had spent six weeks grinding beneath her heel. The doorknob turned. Aurora reached past him and slid the top deadbolt home. Then the second. The third stuck, as it always did in damp weather. Lucien lifted one brow. She glared at him and shoved harder. The bolt snapped into place. A shadow darkened the thin strip beneath the door. Ptolemy padded over, whiskers thrust forward, tail upright. No, Aurora mouthed. Ptolemy sniffed the gap and gave a loud, questioning chirrup. Lucien closed his eyes briefly, as if asking patience of every infernal ancestor he possessed. A knuckle rapped against the door. “Miss Sharma?” a man called. “Police.” Aurora felt Lucien go still. The voice came again. “We need a word about a disturbance in the street.” She peeled Lucien’s hand from her mouth. His fingers were cold. She pointed toward Eva’s bedroom. He bent for his cane, and his face tightened so quickly another person might have missed it. Aurora did not. She caught his wrist before he could straighten. “Leave it.” His gaze flicked to the cane. “If you collapse carrying a concealed sword through my best friend’s flat, I’ll kill you myself.” “Eva’s flat?” “Move.” He moved, though not without retrieving the cane. Of course. Aurora waited until the bedroom door clicked shut, then scrubbed both hands over her face. Her straight black hair had fallen across her eyes. She tucked it behind one ear, checked the hallway for blood, and opened the door with the chain still fixed. A man in a navy raincoat stood on the landing. He had a policeman’s posture and no warrant card in sight. Water beaded on his shaved head. His pupils had narrowed to silver pins. “Evening,” Aurora said. “Miss Sharma?” “No.” A pause. “You live here?” “No.” His attention sharpened. “Who are you?” “The person you woke up.” “It’s half past nine.” “I start early.” His nostrils flared. Something moved beneath the skin of his jaw, too large and too deliberate to be a muscle. Aurora folded her arms, making certain the crescent scar on her left wrist stayed hidden beneath her sleeve. She had learned enough since coming to London to know that some things recognised old blood, old wounds, old names. “We’re looking for a man,” he said. “Blond. Dark suit.” “This is Brick Lane. You’ve just described three estate agents and a Swedish DJ.” “He may be injured.” “Then try A and E.” His silver pupils contracted further. “May I come in?” “No.” The thing beneath his jaw shifted again. Aurora smiled. Not warmly. “Do you have a warrant?” “No.” “Then you may stand there until the curry house closes and they hose you into the gutter.” For a moment, she thought he would force the door. Her hand tightened around its edge. The chain was decorative, the deadbolts useless while it stood open, and Lucien was in no condition to fight. She had a ceramic lamp within reach and a brass letter opener beneath the pile of takeaway menus. The man inhaled deeply. His eyes slid past her into the flat. Ptolemy chose that moment to thread between her ankles and hiss with every tooth he owned. The man recoiled. It was small, barely more than a twitch, but Aurora saw it. She bent and scooped up the cat. Ptolemy objected, digging claws into her jumper. “Sorry,” she said. “He doesn’t like police.” The tabby stared over her arm with flat green malice. The man backed away. “If you see anyone suspicious—” “I’ll avoid eye contact.” His lips peeled from his teeth. Too many of them, packed narrow and close. Then he turned and descended the stairs. Aurora waited until the outer door slammed below. She shut Eva’s door, dropped the chain, and locked all three deadbolts. Ptolemy sprang from her arms and stalked away, dignity wounded beyond repair. “Estate agents?” Lucien asked from behind her. She turned. He stood in the bedroom doorway, one shoulder braced against the frame. His jacket was open now, revealing a crimson-soaked shirt beneath his waistcoat. The loosened strand of hair hung over his brow. He looked less like London’s most polished fixer and more like a man who had been dragged backward through hell. Given his father’s origins, that might have been literal. “You’ve looked better,” she said. “So have your lies.” “He left.” “He will return.” “Then you can explain why he’s chasing you while I stitch up whatever part of you is leaking.” “I had forgotten your bedside manner.” “No, you hadn’t.” The words landed between them. His expression changed by degrees. The faint mockery went first, then the practiced composure behind it. What remained was the look he had worn the last time she saw him, in a rain-black alley in Soho, when he told her leaving was the only kindness he had left to offer. He had walked away before she could decide whether to slap him or kiss him. She still had not decided. Aurora crossed to the kitchen table and swept a stack of annotated scrolls onto the least cluttered chair. “Sit.” “I would prefer—” “Sit, Lucien.” He lowered himself with care. The cane remained beneath his palm, blade hidden, threat implied. Aurora fetched Eva’s first-aid tin from above the fridge, a bottle of vodka from behind three grimoires, and the cleanest tea towel she could find. When she came back, Lucien had removed his jacket. His waistcoat followed. His shirt clung wetly to his left side. “You’ll need to take that off.” One corner of his mouth lifted. “You might at least buy me dinner.” “I delivered dinner for six hours. I’m not buying it too.” She set the tin down harder than necessary. He worked the buttons one-handed. His fingers faltered at the fourth. Aurora slapped his hand away and finished for him. She refused to notice the familiar breadth of his chest beneath the blood, the pale scars crossing his ribs, or the way his breath caught when her knuckles brushed his skin. Once, in a room with velvet curtains and no clocks, she had traced one of those scars with her mouth. Once, he had said her name as if it meant sanctuary. Then he had disappeared before dawn. She peeled the shirt away from his side. The wound was narrow and black around the edges, as if something hot had punctured him just below the ribs. Veins of darkness feathered outward through his skin. “That isn’t a knife wound.” “No.” “What was it?” “A sanctified bolt.” She stared at him. “Someone shot a half-demon with a blessed crossbow?” “When you phrase it that way, it does sound theatrical.” “It sounds effective.” “It was.” She soaked the tea towel with vodka and pressed it to the wound. Lucien hissed, his hand closing over her wrist. His grip landed directly over the crescent scar. Heat flared under his palm—not pain, but awareness so acute it felt like one. His gaze dropped to where he held her. Slowly, he loosened his fingers. “I’m sorry,” he said. “For grabbing me?” “For many things.” Aurora pulled her wrist free. “Convenient time to mention it.” “I did not come here expecting forgiveness.” “You didn’t come here expecting me at all.” “No.” The answer should not have hurt. She reached for gauze. “Eva’s in Prague.” “I know.” Her hands stopped. Lucien watched her with that mismatched gaze, one eye warm as brandy, the other an abyss. He had always been difficult to read. She had once mistaken difficulty for depth, then depth for honesty. “You knew,” she said. “Yes.” “So you came to find me.” “Yes.” Outside, tyres whispered over wet pavement. The extractor fan below rattled into silence, leaving the flat abruptly intimate. Even Ptolemy had disappeared among the books. Aurora wound gauze around Lucien’s torso, pulling it tight enough to make him wince. “Why?” “The creature at the door works for a broker named Cassian Vale. Vale has obtained something he believes belongs to him.” “And does it?” “No.” “What is it?” Lucien looked at her left wrist. Cold slipped through her. She drew her sleeve down. “Try again.” “He has a ledger of bloodlines connected to the old crossings between Earth and Avaros. Human families who carried keys without knowing it. The Carters are listed.” For one absurd second, she thought of her father in Cardiff, polishing his courtroom shoes while the radio muttered about rain. Her mother marking exercise books at the kitchen table. Ordinary things. Safe things. “What does that have to do with you leaving?” “Everything.” “No.” She tied off the bandage. “You don’t get to compress six weeks of silence into one dramatic word.” “Rory—” “You knew someone was after my family?” “I knew someone might be. I did not know who.” “So you vanished.” “I drew them away.” “You could have told me.” “And you would have done what? Stayed hidden?” “I might have.” He gave her a look. “All right, no. But that was my choice to make.” “Yes.” His voice had gone quiet. “It was.” That stopped her more effectively than an argument. Lucien looked down at his bloodied shirt, turning one mother-of-pearl button between his fingers. “I have rehearsed a dozen explanations. In all of them, I am clever enough to protect you without frightening you, honest enough to deserve your trust, and selfless enough not to mind if you hate me afterward.” A humorless smile touched his mouth. “Unfortunately, I remain myself.” “And what is that?” “A man who knew that if I saw you again, I would not be able to leave.” Aurora forgot the gauze in her hands. He raised his head. There it was again—that unbearable directness he rationed so carefully. It stripped the polish from him. No fixer, no broker, no elegant half-demon who could bargain in four languages and kill with the blade in his cane. Just Lucien, pale from blood loss, sitting shirtless at Eva’s crowded kitchen table and looking at Aurora as though she were the wound. She set the gauze down. “You already left.” “I know.” “You made me think I’d imagined it.” “What?” “Us.” His breath stalled. She hated the tremor in her voice, so she sharpened it. “You kissed me. You slept beside me. You told me things I know you’ve never told anyone, and then you vanished with a note that said, ‘This is necessary.’ Necessary. As if I were a meeting you had to cancel.” “I wrote seven pages before that.” “And?” “I burned them.” “Of course you did.” “They were not safe.” “Neither are you. Yet here you are.” A sudden impact shook the front door. Both of them turned. The top deadbolt groaned in its bracket. Lucien reached for his cane. Aurora caught it first. “You can barely sit upright.” “I can kill him sitting down.” “Charming.” Another blow rattled the frame. Books toppled from a shelf. Ptolemy shot from beneath the sofa and vanished into the bedroom. Aurora drew the concealed blade from the cane. It came free with a whisper, thin and bright, engraved along its length with symbols that hurt to look at directly. Lucien stared at her hand around the ivory grip. “You continue to surprise me.” “I’ve always wanted to do that.” “Rory.” The door shuddered again. Wood splintered around the middle bolt. She looked at him. “If it comes through,” he said, “the throat will not stop it. Aim beneath the jaw and drive upward.” “Noted.” “And if we survive—” “When.” His expression softened. “When we survive, I will tell you everything.” Aurora stepped closer and put the blade against his chest, flat beneath his collarbone. “If that is another beautifully phrased lie, I’ll test this on you.” “It is not.” “You don’t get to leave without a word.” “I won’t.” “You don’t get to decide what risks I take.” “No.” “You don’t get to kiss me just because you’re bleeding and emotionally compromised.” His amber eye warmed. “A devastating restriction.” The black veins around his wound had begun to recede, but his face remained too pale. He was hurt, hunted, and infuriating. He had brought danger to Eva’s door. He had also come because her family’s name sat in some infernal ledger and because, despite every clever instinct he possessed, he could not stay away. The doorframe cracked. Aurora caught his jaw with her free hand and kissed him. For half a heartbeat, Lucien did not move. Then his fingers slid into her hair, and the kiss deepened with a hunger that made six weeks collapse. Hurt went through it. Anger. Relief. His mouth tasted of rain and vodka, and when she leaned into him, he made a low sound that tightened something beneath her ribs. She broke away before the next blow landed. “That,” he said, breathing hard, “appears inconsistent with your restriction.” “I said you didn’t get to.” His thumb brushed her cheek. “And you?” “I’m still deciding.” The third deadbolt tore loose. Aurora turned toward the door, Lucien’s blade steady in her hand. Behind her, he rose with a quiet curse and took his place at her shoulder. Not in front of her. At her shoulder. The ruined door bowed inward. Silver eyes gleamed through the widening crack. Lucien’s fingers found her scarred wrist, not restraining this time, only touching. “When this is over,” he murmured, “the seven pages.” “You remember them?” “Every word.” Aurora tightened her grip on the ivory handle. “Good,” she said. “You can start with why it took a crossbow bolt to make you honest.” Then the door burst open.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences144
tagDensity0.125
leniency0.25
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.23% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2740
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
3
adverb"warmly"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
5
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"sharply"
2"quickly"
3"warmly"
4"slowly"
5"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
79.93% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2740
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"footsteps"
count2
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"familiar"
count1
4
word"velvet"
count1
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"sanctuary"
count1
7
word"silence"
count2
8
word"whisper"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"footsteps"
2"flicked"
3"familiar"
4"velvet"
5"traced"
6"sanctuary"
7"silence"
8"whisper"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences225
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences225
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences351
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2738
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"No, Aurora mouthed."
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions67
wordCount1967
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.32
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Lucien22
Moreau1
Aurora26
Ptolemy8
Footsteps1
Eva5
London2
Soho1
Cardiff1
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Moreau"
2"Aurora"
3"Ptolemy"
4"Footsteps"
5"Eva"
places
0"London"
1"Soho"
2"Cardiff"
globalScore0.839
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences139
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if asking patience of every infernal ancestor he possessed"
1"felt like one"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.365
wordCount2738
matches
0"not pain, but awareness so acute it felt like one"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences351
matches
0"know that some"
1"chose that moment"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs232
mean11.8
std13.57
cv1.15
sampleLengths
033
145
214
31
48
522
612
713
85
96
1046
119
126
134
147
1556
166
177
181
1928
203
2122
2220
237
245
2553
264
2738
283
2923
304
3112
3217
333
3410
3515
366
376
385
3914
4033
413
4210
436
4416
452
461
4710
4844
4934
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences225
matches
0"been dragged"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs363
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences351
ratio0.006
matches
0"Heat flared under his palm—not pain, but awareness so acute it felt like one."
1"There it was again—that unbearable directness he rationed so carefully."
98.25% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1976
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount83
adverbRatio0.04200404858299595
lyAdverbCount20
lyAdverbRatio0.010121457489878543
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences351
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences351
mean7.8
std6.48
cv0.83
sampleLengths
033
18
215
310
412
57
67
71
88
99
102
112
129
1312
1413
155
166
1718
187
1921
207
212
226
234
247
253
2630
276
2817
296
304
313
321
3317
3411
353
3622
375
385
3910
407
415
426
4313
4412
457
4615
474
485
4912
47.44% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.2564102564102564
totalSentences351
uniqueOpeners90
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount12
totalSentences203
matches
0"Just enough ivory and polished"
1"Then Lucien stepped out of"
2"Then the second."
3"Too many of them, packed"
4"Then he turned and descended"
5"Once, in a room with"
6"Once, he had said her"
7"Then he had disappeared before"
8"Slowly, he loosened his fingers."
9"Just Lucien, pale from blood"
10"Then his fingers slid into"
11"Then the door burst open."
ratio0.059
62.36% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount80
totalSentences203
matches
0"His platinum hair, usually slicked"
1"His amber eye fixed on"
2"She nearly shut the door"
3"His cane slid into the"
4"She looked down."
5"He stood straight, but too"
6"His mouth curved faintly."
7"She closed the door enough"
8"Her pulse kicked."
9"His palm covered her mouth."
10"he breathed against her ear"
11"She smelled rain, blood, and"
12"His chest rose once against"
13"His amber eye held too"
14"She glared at him and"
15"She peeled Lucien’s hand from"
16"His fingers were cold."
17"She pointed toward Eva’s bedroom."
18"He bent for his cane,"
19"She caught his wrist before"
ratio0.394
46.21% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount168
totalSentences203
matches
0"The door opened as far"
1"Rain silvered the shoulders of"
2"His platinum hair, usually slicked"
3"The other hung empty at"
4"His amber eye fixed on"
5"The black one followed a"
6"She nearly shut the door"
7"His cane slid into the"
8"The tabby landed with an"
9"Downstairs, the curry house extractor"
10"Aurora kept her hand on"
11"She looked down."
12"A dark stain spread along"
13"He stood straight, but too"
14"The sort of posture a"
15"His mouth curved faintly."
16"She closed the door enough"
17"Her pulse kicked."
18"Aurora’s shoulder struck the wall."
19"His palm covered her mouth."
ratio0.828
49.26% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences203
matches
0"By the time she pulled"
1"Even Ptolemy had disappeared among"
ratio0.01
84.15% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences73
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Beneath her hand, which had landed against his waistcoat, his heartbeat ran fast and uneven."
1"Once, he had said her name as if it meant sanctuary."
2"The wound was narrow and black around the edges, as if something hot had punctured him just below the ribs."
3"No fixer, no broker, no elegant half-demon who could bargain in four languages and kill with the blade in his cane."
4"Just Lucien, pale from blood loss, sitting shirtless at Eva’s crowded kitchen table and looking at Aurora as though she were the wound."
5"His mouth tasted of rain and vodka, and when she leaned into him, he made a low sound that tightened something beneath her ribs."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he breathed (breathe)"
1"he murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences144
tagDensity0.104
leniency0.208
rawRatio0.133
effectiveRatio0.028
90.7161%