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Run: 2026-07-09-01KX40B1KF1E587GWQGBWWP8T4
Run Details
Model:
GPT-5.6 Sol
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
1m 4s
Cost:
$0.096849
Provider:
OpenAI
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
83.31%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
0.00%
Name drop frequency
(details)
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
94.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
45.38%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
92.59%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
22.50%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
87.9262%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
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The glass slipped from Rory’s
hand when Eva said her name. “Laila?”
It struck the floor but
did not break. Thick-bottomed and stubborn, it bounced once behind the bar, spilling whisky across Rory’s trainers.
Only one person had ever
called her Laila, a corruption born in a Cardiff playground after six-year-old Eva declared Aurora impossible to shout during a crisis.
The crisis had involved a
missing shoe and a swan. Rory gripped the counter.
Eva stood between two occupied
tables, one hand clutching the strap of a black leather handbag.
Her copper hair, once hacked
short with kitchen scissors, fell past her shoulders in smooth, careful waves.
A cream wool coat framed
a dark green dress.
Gold flashed at her throat
and ears.
She looked polished, expensive, and
misplaced among the Nest’s scarred tables and smoke-stained maps.
Rory noticed the wedding ring
last. “Ev.”
A dozen older names crowded
behind the single syllable. Trouble. Home. Witness. Eva gave a breathless laugh. “Christ. It is you.” “Apparently.” “You look…” Rory waited.
Her fingers found the small
crescent scar on her left wrist and pressed it.
Eva’s gaze travelled over the
straight black hair, the faded Golden Empress T-shirt beneath Rory’s open jumper, and the bruised knuckles she had earned from a bicycle chain that morning. “Different.” “Good save.” “I meant well.” “You usually did.”
Silas glanced up from the
till.
His hazel eyes moved from
Rory to Eva, taking inventory without appearing to stare.
He had taught the Raven’s
Nest to keep secrets before Rory ever climbed the narrow stairs to the flat above it. “The whisky survived,” he said. “The floor may not.” “Put it on my tab.” “You don’t have a tab.” “Then the floor’s on its own.”
His neatly trimmed beard hid
whatever his mouth did.
The silver signet ring on
his right hand tapped once against the till. “Take ten minutes, Carter.” “I’m working.” “You’ve poured four drinks in an hour. London won’t collapse.” “Would be inconvenient if it did. Deliveries are murder in rubble.”
Silas took the cloth from
her hand. “Fifteen, then.” Eva watched him limp towards the spill, his left leg stiff beneath dark trousers. “You work here?” “Sometimes.” “I thought you delivered food.” “I contain multitudes.” “Still quoting other people when you don’t want to answer.” “Still asking questions you’ve already answered for yourself.” The words landed harder than Rory intended. Eva’s smile remained, but its
warmth
thinned. A man at the end of the bar raised two fingers. Silas reached for a bottle without looking. “Back table,” he said. “Less traffic.” Rory ducked under the hinged counter and led Eva past framed photographs of men whose smiles belonged to dead wars. The Nest held its darkness close. Amber lamps lit the old maps in pieces, rivers without countries, borders without names. The air carried beer, furniture polish, damp wool and the black coffee Silas drank after his knee
began to
ache.
They sat beneath a photograph
of Prague. Rory had never asked whether Silas chose the table for a reason. Eva placed her handbag beside her chair instead of on the sticky floor. “You could have answered one message.” “You sent seven.” “Fourteen.” “That helped.” “I thought Evan had killed you.” Rory looked towards the bar. Silas stood with his back to them, polishing a glass already clean. “He didn’t.” “No. I can see that.” “Can you?” Eva’s hand closed over her wedding ring. The diamond turned inward, biting her palm. “I went to the house after you vanished.” “That was stupid.” “He’d punched through the bathroom door.” “He hated that door.” “There was blood on it.” “His. Mostly.” “Mostly.” Rory
traced
a split in the table’s varnish. Beneath the polished surface, pale wood showed like bone. Eva leaned closer. “I called every hospital between Cardiff and London. I rang your parents. Your mother lied so badly I knew she had heard from you.” “Mam’s lies come with footnotes.” “She said you needed space.” “She was right.” “She also said I should wait.” “You’ve never been good at that.” “Five years, Rory.” The old name worked under her skin. At the Golden Empress she was Carter when the kitchen roared, Rory when Yu-Fei needed a favour, and Aurora only on tax forms. Evan had used Aurora as both warning and leash. Laila belonged to scraped knees, bus shelters, stolen cider and Eva’s hand clasped around hers while they ran from consequences. Five years had no right to sound so small. A young barman set two drinks down.
He looked to Rory for
confirmation. “Club soda for me,” Eva said. “Whisky for Rory,” he said. Eva’s eyebrows rose. Rory nudged the whisky towards her. “I’m working.” “You used to hate whisky.” “I developed better enemies.” The barman left. Eva lifted the glass, smelled it, then put it down untouched. “I’m pregnant.” Rory’s hand stopped on her club soda. “That explains the hostage negotiation with the drink.” “Twelve weeks.” “Congratulations.” “You said that like a solicitor reading a will.” “I quit Pre-Law. My condolences should sound less professional.” “You quit?” “I was failing with commitment.” “Your father must have loved that.” “He used language the Bar Council might question.” Eva’s laugh came out sharp, then softened despite herself. For a moment Rory saw the girl with copper hair stained purple at the ends, laughing in a school toilet while a fire alarm screamed.
Then Eva smoothed her dress
over her
stomach
, and the girl disappeared beneath the gesture. “Tom and I married two years ago.” “Tom Davies?” “Pritchard.” “Don’t know him.” “He’s a consultant.” “Medicine or invented problems?” “Management.” “Invented problems.” Eva smiled into the whisky she could not drink. “He’s kind.” The word sat between them, polished by repetition. Rory watched her thumb rub the edge of her wedding ring. “That’s useful.” “He doesn’t shout.” “Higher praise than it ought to be.” “He wants children. A house. Sunday lunch with both sets of parents. He labels leftovers.” “Monster.” “You’d like him.” “You said kind, not interesting.” The smile vanished. “This is what you do now?” “What?” “Cut everything before it reaches you.” Rory leaned back. A spring creaked beneath the cracked red leather seat. “You found me in a bar and announced a pregnancy. I’m adapting.” “I found you because I walked through the wrong door.” “That’s how most people find this place.” “I had dinner across the street. Tom’s firm hosted clients. I saw the green sign and remembered you once said ravens kept grudges.” “They do. Faces too.” “Then you came out from behind the bar.” “Disappointing evening all round.” Eva pushed the whisky away. “You look like her.” “Who?” “The woman I thought you’d become when we were fifteen.” Rory’s mouth twitched. “We thought I’d become a human-rights barrister with a motorbike.” “You have the jacket.” “Second-hand. No motorbike. No oppressed masses queuing at chambers.” “You got out.” Rory looked at the old maps. The countries had changed names, but the rivers kept their courses. “Is that what you call it?” “You left him.” “I left everyone.” “You left me.” There it was. Not an accusation sharpened for battle. Something older. A child standing outside a locked house. Rory drank from the club soda. The bubbles stung her tongue. “You told me to go to London.” “I told you to stay with me in London. I had a room. I had money saved. You disappeared before my train arrived.” “You came back to collect me?” “I came back to drag you out.” “He knew where you lived.” “So?” “So he followed me to your place twice. He waited outside your office. He sent me photographs of your front door.” Eva’s fingers slipped from the ring. “You never told me.” “He said he’d burn your flat while you slept.” “He said lots of things.” “He did enough of them.” Rory placed both hands flat on the table.
Her left wrist showed beneath
her sleeve, the pale crescent bright against her skin. “I took cash from Dad’s study, boarded the first coach, changed my number and slept in Victoria for three nights. Then Silas found me lifting bread from a delivery crate behind the pub.” Eva glanced towards the bar. “He took you in?” “He
charged
rent.” Silas raised one
eyebrow
without turning. “Reduced rent,” Rory called. “Late rent,” he replied. Eva looked between them. “You have family here.” The word tightened something in Rory’s throat. “I have a landlord with surveillance issues.” “Your mother said you were safe.” “She knew what I needed her to know.” “And what did I need to know?” Rory held Eva’s gaze.
Bright blue met grey-green across
the ruined table. “That he couldn’t reach you through me.” “You don’t get to make that noble.” “I didn’t.” “You don’t get to turn abandoning me into a rescue.” “I know.” The answer halted Eva. Her shoulders dropped a fraction. At the bar, somebody fed coins into the old jukebox. A low bass line stirred through the room, too soft to cover the clink of bottles. Eva touched her
stomach
again. “I waited six months before I stopped keeping my phone beside me in the bath.” Rory’s jaw tightened. “I wrote letters.” “Did you send them?” “No.” “Then you wrote to yourself.” “I suppose.” “You suppose.” “They were bad letters.” “I’d have taken bad.” “I put your postcode on one. Then I pictured him opening it.” “Evan never knew where I moved.” “You left Cardiff?” “Three months after you. New job, new number. Tom’s flat in Richmond. I got sensible.” The phrase carried contempt, though Rory could not tell whom Eva aimed it at. “You always hated sensible.” “People change.” “Yes.” Eva’s gaze dropped to Rory’s bruised knuckles. “What happened?” “Bike chain.” “You hit it?” “It hit me first.” “And the bar?” “Part-time.” “The deliveries?” “Part-time.” “Your degree?” “Dead.” “Your plans?” “Less demanding.” “That isn’t an answer.” “It’s the only one in stock.” Eva rose so fast that the table rocked. Whisky slopped over the rim and spread across the wood. Several heads turned, then turned away. The Nest had trained its patrons in selective blindness. “I came in here and saw you alive.” Rory remained seated. “I noticed.” “I spent years inventing your corpse, canals, woods, the sea. Every unknown number made me sick. Every woman with black hair became you from behind. Now you’re serving drinks beneath photographs and making jokes about it.” “What would you prefer?” “A scar. A tremor. Something I can point to.” “I have scars.” “Not where anyone can see.” Rory stood. The club soda tipped and rolled, shedding clear water across the table.
She caught the glass before
it fell. “You don’t know where to look.” Eva’s chin lifted, but tears silvered the lower rims of her eyes. “You could come to dinner.” “No.” “You don’t know when.” “The answer travels well.” “Meet Tom.” “Why?” “Because he matters to me.” “So did I.” Eva flinched. Rory wished the words back before they had finished crossing the table, but regret had no reverse gear. Silas stopped polishing the glass. Eva took her handbag from the chair. “Evan came to my wedding.” Every sound in the Nest
seemed to
separate. Ice shifted in a tumbler. Leather groaned. The jukebox needle scratched through a breath between songs. Rory moved around the table. “What?” “He stood across the road. I saw him when we left the church.” “Did he speak to you?” “No.” “Did Tom know who he was?” “I said he was an old university friend.” “You lied.” “Funny, that. Turns out I can.” Rory caught Eva’s wrist before she reached the aisle. “Has he contacted you?” Eva looked at Rory’s hand until she released her. “Three weeks ago, a card arrived. No stamp. He put it through our door.” “What did it say?” “Congratulations.” Rory’s gaze dropped to Eva’s
stomach
. “Did he know?” “We hadn’t announced it.” Silas crossed the room.
His limp gave his stride
an uneven beat, but nothing else about him hurried.
He set the polished glass
on a nearby table. “Do you have the card?” Eva stared at him. “Who are you?” “Silas Blackwood.” “The landlord.” “Among other disappointments.”
His silver signet ring caught
the amber light as he held out his hand. Eva hesitated, then opened her handbag.
She removed a cream envelope
from an inner pocket. No address marked the front. She passed it to Silas. He did not open it.
He rubbed a thumb over
the flap, smelled the paper, then tilted it towards the lamp. “Why carry it?” “I planned to show the police after dinner.” “The police won’t see a threat.” “They’ll see harassment.” “They’ll see one word on a card.” Rory took the envelope. The paper felt thick and costly. Inside lay a small white card with a single word written in black ink. Congratulations. The handwriting leaned left. Evan’s had leaned right. “This isn’t his writing.” Eva’s face tightened. “I know his writing.” “So do I.” Rory turned the card over. A faint grey mark stained one corner, shaped like a bird’s claw or a cracked crown. Silas plucked it from her fingers. “You both need to come with me.” Eva stepped back. “No. I need the police.” “You need to decide that after you understand what you’re carrying.” “What is it?” Silas glanced towards the bookshelf at the rear of the bar. “Not here.”
He crossed to it, pressed
a finger against the spine of a battered atlas, and pulled. The shelves swung inward without a sound. A narrow passage opened behind them, lit by a strip of cold white light. Eva stared. “What sort of bar has a secret room?” “The sort where old mistakes order drinks.” Rory caught Silas’s sleeve before he entered. “You recognise the mark.” His gaze settled on her. “Prague.” The word carried no explanation, only a door slammed somewhere far below. Eva’s phone rang inside her handbag. All three of them froze. She drew it out. Unknown number. “Don’t answer,” Rory said. Eva did. No voice came through. A faint
mechanical
click sounded from the speaker, followed by the hollow rush of traffic. Then a man laughed. Rory
knew that laugh
. Five years collapsed into the width of a breath. “You still run when she tells you, Ev?” Across the bar, the front door opened beneath the green neon sign. Evan stepped inside.
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
7
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
212
tagDensity
0.033
leniency
0.066
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
100.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2397
totalAiIsmAdverbs
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
83.31%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2397
totalAiIsms
8
found
0
word
"warmth"
count
1
1
word
"traced"
count
1
2
word
"stomach"
count
3
3
word
"charged"
count
1
4
word
"eyebrow"
count
1
5
word
"mechanical"
count
1
highlights
0
"warmth"
1
"traced"
2
"stomach"
3
"charged"
4
"eyebrow"
5
"mechanical"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
163
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
163
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"began to"
1
"seemed to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
368
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
repeatedSegmentCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
36
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
2397
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
33
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
0.00%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
119
wordCount
1316
uniqueNames
14
maxNameDensity
3.19
worstName
"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity
5.5
worstWindowName
"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory
42
Eva
42
Laila
2
Cardiff
1
Aurora
3
Nest
5
Golden
2
Empress
2
Raven
1
Silas
13
Prague
1
Carter
1
Yu-Fei
1
Evan
3
persons
0
"Rory"
1
"Eva"
2
"Laila"
3
"Nest"
4
"Raven"
5
"Silas"
6
"Carter"
7
"Yu-Fei"
8
"Evan"
places
0
"Cardiff"
1
"Golden"
2
"Prague"
globalScore
0
windowScore
0
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
103
glossingSentenceCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
2397
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
368
matches
0
"knew that laugh"
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
303
mean
7.91
std
9.04
cv
1.143
sampleLengths
0
11
1
1
2
22
3
36
4
4
5
63
6
6
7
1
8
12
9
5
10
4
11
1
12
2
13
16
14
30
15
1
16
2
17
3
18
3
19
41
20
9
21
5
22
5
23
6
24
22
25
4
26
2
27
10
28
11
29
7
30
2
31
14
32
3
33
1
34
5
35
3
36
10
37
8
38
14
39
18
40
6
41
60
42
19
43
13
44
6
45
3
46
1
47
2
48
6
49
17
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
163
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
241
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
368
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
94.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1322
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"stiff beneath dark trousers."
adverbCount
38
adverbRatio
0.028744326777609682
lyAdverbCount
5
lyAdverbRatio
0.0037821482602118004
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
368
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
368
mean
6.51
std
5.26
cv
0.807
sampleLengths
0
11
1
1
2
8
3
14
4
26
5
10
6
4
7
16
8
17
9
9
10
7
11
14
12
6
13
1
14
9
15
1
16
1
17
1
18
5
19
4
20
1
21
2
22
2
23
14
24
30
25
1
26
2
27
3
28
3
29
6
30
14
31
21
32
5
33
4
34
5
35
5
36
6
37
9
38
13
39
4
40
2
41
10
42
11
43
7
44
2
45
14
46
3
47
1
48
5
49
3
45.38%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
17
diversityRatio
0.266304347826087
totalSentences
368
uniqueOpeners
98
92.59%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
4
totalSentences
144
matches
0
"Only one person had ever"
1
"Then Eva smoothed her dress"
2
"Bright blue met grey-green across"
3
"Then a man laughed."
ratio
0.028
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
22
totalSentences
144
matches
0
"It struck the floor but"
1
"Her copper hair, once hacked"
2
"She looked polished, expensive, and"
3
"Her fingers found the small"
4
"His hazel eyes moved from"
5
"He had taught the Raven’s"
6
"His neatly trimmed beard hid"
7
"They sat beneath a photograph"
8
"He looked to Rory for"
9
"Her left wrist showed beneath"
10
"Her shoulders dropped a fraction."
11
"She caught the glass before"
12
"His limp gave his stride"
13
"He set the polished glass"
14
"His silver signet ring caught"
15
"She removed a cream envelope"
16
"She passed it to Silas."
17
"He did not open it."
18
"He rubbed a thumb over"
19
"He crossed to it, pressed"
ratio
0.153
22.50%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
126
totalSentences
144
matches
0
"The glass slipped from Rory’s"
1
"It struck the floor but"
2
"The crisis had involved a"
3
"Rory gripped the counter."
4
"Eva stood between two occupied"
5
"Her copper hair, once hacked"
6
"A cream wool coat framed"
7
"Gold flashed at her throat"
8
"She looked polished, expensive, and"
9
"Rory noticed the wedding ring"
10
"A dozen older names crowded"
11
"Eva gave a breathless laugh."
12
"Her fingers found the small"
13
"Eva’s gaze travelled over the"
14
"Silas glanced up from the"
15
"His hazel eyes moved from"
16
"He had taught the Raven’s"
17
"His neatly trimmed beard hid"
18
"The silver signet ring on"
19
"Silas took the cloth from"
ratio
0.875
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
144
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
46
technicalSentenceCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
7
uselessAdditionCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
7
fancyCount
0
fancyTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
212
tagDensity
0.033
leniency
0.066
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
87.9262%