Run: 2026-07-09-01KX40CB4B8KBNFPJWC23F8W9M

Run Details

Duration:
1m 8s
Cost:
$0.101700
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain polished Soho black and silver, slicking the paving stones and turning every shopfront into a smear of light. Detective Harlow Quinn stood beneath the green neon raven and watched Tomás Herrera lie to her through the window. He sat alone at the end of the bar, shoulders hunched beneath a dark coat, one hand cupped around a glass he had not touched. Twenty-nine, Spanish, former NHS paramedic. Lost his licence for what the tribunal called repeated acts of gross clinical misconduct. Herrera called them necessary treatments. Quinn called them the reason three people declared dead had later been seen walking around London. The Raven’s Nest was dim behind the rain-streaked glass. Old maps covered its walls, their faded coastlines interrupted by black-and-white photographs. Soldiers, actors, politicians, men in flat caps outside demolished pubs. The sort of decoration meant to suggest history without offering any. Herrera glanced toward the window. His gaze met hers. For one clean second neither moved. Then his glass tipped over. Quinn hit the door as he left the stool. Warm air, stale beer and low conversation closed around her. Herrera vaulted the bar with surprising grace. The barman ducked aside without protest. “Tomás Herrera,” Quinn shouted. “Police. Stop.” Every face turned toward her. No one looked at Herrera. He disappeared through a narrow archway at the rear. Quinn drove between tables. A man in a velvet jacket leaned into her path, accidentally on purpose. She caught his shoulder, spun him against a pillar and kept moving. “Harlow Quinn,” someone murmured behind her. She did not turn. The corridor beyond the arch smelled of bleach and wet brick. Herrera shoved through a fire door twenty metres ahead. Quinn’s worn leather watch snagged the wall as she rounded the corner. She tore free without slowing. The fire door burst open onto an alley. Cold rain struck her face. Herrera was already running, coat flaring behind him, short dark curls shining beneath a streetlamp. He hurdled a stack of rubbish bags and cut left. Quinn followed. Her shoes slapped through oily water. The alley spat them onto Wardour Street amid umbrellas, taxis and startled shouts. Herrera shoulder-checked a pedestrian, caught him before he fell, muttered an apology, then threaded between two idling cabs. Still considerate while fleeing arrest. That was new. Quinn flashed her warrant card at a driver who leaned on his horn. “Police!” “Then use the bloody road!” Herrera glanced back. Even at distance she saw the warm brown of his eyes, wide with something beyond fear of arrest. Urgency. He plunged across the street against the lights. A bus bore down on Quinn, its wet red flank filling her vision. She checked her stride by inches. The bus roared past, spraying her from knee to hip. Across the road, Herrera vanished into a knot of late-night drinkers. Quinn counted the gap, crossed behind the bus and accelerated. Eighteen years in the Metropolitan Police had taught her how people fled. The guilty looked over their shoulders too often. The frightened ran toward crowds. The desperate chose routes before they knew who was chasing them. Herrera ran as if following a line only he could see. He cut north. Quinn had spent six weeks building the line that led to him. A body removed from a locked flat before uniform arrived. Hospital-grade blood bags bought under false names. A storage unit containing surgical instruments, restraints and twelve jars of black fluid that had shattered when the evidence team tried to move them. Then the security footage: Herrera entering the unit twice, once with a woman who had been cremated nine days earlier. He could explain all of it, he had said when Quinn approached him outside his flat. Then he had smiled, shut the door in her face and disappeared. Until tonight. Herrera ducked beneath scaffolding. Quinn followed, rain drumming on corrugated metal overhead. He swept a bicycle aside and squeezed through the gap between a delivery van and a shuttered café. She took the longer line around the bonnet, keeping him in sight. “Stop running,” she called. “You’re making this worse.” “I know,” he shouted back. His accent sharpened under strain. Seville softened by years in London. “Then stop.” “Can’t.” A white van surged from a side street. Herrera skidded across its path. The driver braked, tyres shrieking. Quinn slapped both hands against the bonnet and vaulted the corner, ignoring the jolt through her wrists. Herrera’s lead narrowed. Thirty metres. Twenty-five. He ran well, but unevenly. Protecting his left side. Quinn had read the medical file: knife wound along the left forearm, tendon damage, incomplete rehabilitation. As he climbed a low barrier, his sleeve pulled back and the pale scar flashed under the streetlights. He landed badly. Quinn gained another three metres. Then he reached into his coat. Her hand dropped to her baton. Herrera pulled out something small and white. Not a weapon. He clutched it in his fist and ran on. They passed Tottenham Court Road, then Euston Road. The crowds thinned as the hour deepened. Rainwater poured along the gutters, carrying cigarette ends and torn receipts north. Herrera never hesitated. Camden’s dark bulk rose ahead, terraces and shop signs glistening under the rain. Quinn’s lungs burned. She fixed her breathing into rhythm, the same four-count Morris had once taught her on a freezing pursuit through Walthamstow. In for two. Out for two. Don’t chase the man, Quinn. Chase where he’s going. Morris had laughed when he said it. Three weeks later, Quinn found his torch in a basement in Whitechapel, switched on and lying beside a circle scorched into concrete. No blood. No body. Nothing to explain the cold that had frosted the room in August. She had chased where he was going ever since. Herrera crossed Camden High Street and slipped through a gap in a metal fence. Quinn reached it seconds later. Beyond lay a weed-choked service yard behind a row of closed shops. A crumbling brick building crouched at the far end, its windows boarded. Herrera forced a door and disappeared inside. She paused long enough to call it in. “Quinn to Control. Foot pursuit, suspect Tomás Herrera. Entering derelict premises off Kentish Town Road, Camden. Possible access to old Underground infrastructure.” Static cracked in her earpiece. “Received, Detective. Units are nine minutes out.” “Nine?” “Multiple incidents in the area. Do not enter alone.” Quinn stared at the dark doorway. “Understood.” She entered alone. The building smelled of mould, rust and stagnant water. Her torch beam found broken tiles and a ticket window bricked up decades ago. An abandoned Tube station. London had dozens of them, dead platforms buried beneath offices and roads. Some had become bunkers. Some storage. Some simply remained sealed, accumulating dust and rumours. Wet footprints crossed the floor. Quinn followed them through a bent gate and down a tiled stairwell. Old posters peeled from the walls in sodden strips. The station name had been hacked away, leaving pale rectangles in the grime. “Herrera.” Her voice travelled down and came back changed. At the foot of the stairs, he stood beside a rusted iron gate. Behind it, the passage descended into darkness. His chest heaved. Rain shone on his olive skin. One hand gripped the bars; the other held the little white object. A knucklebone, drilled through its centre and etched with red lines. “Step away from the gate,” Quinn said. Herrera looked past her, toward the stairs. “Did anyone follow you?” “You mean aside from the police officer pursuing you?” “I mean anyone else.” She approached with her baton lowered but ready. “Hands where I can see them.” “You can see my hands.” “Open them.” He lifted the fist containing the bone. His shirt collar had come loose. A Saint Christopher medallion rested against his throat, trembling with his pulse. Quinn stopped six paces away. “Put it down.” “I can’t.” “Tomás.” At the use of his first name, something tightened in his face. “If I don’t go through,” he said, “a woman dies.” “Who?” “I don’t know her name.” “That’s convenient.” “I know what she is.” Quinn’s fingers firmed around her baton. “And what is she?” Herrera studied her. Rainwater dripped from his curls onto his brow. “You wouldn’t believe me.” “I’ve read your tribunal records. I know what you believe.” “No. You know what they wrote.” “Unauthorized transfusions. Experimental compounds. Patients hidden from safeguarding officers.” “People who could not walk into an A and E without causing a panic.” “A dead woman entered your storage unit.” Herrera flinched. Quinn saw it and stepped closer. “Who was she?” “You need to leave.” “Who was she?” “Detective—” A sound moved through the passage beyond the gate. Not footsteps. Something softer. A murmur gathering under the earth. Warm light seeped around the bend below. Quinn’s torch flickered. She struck it with her palm. The beam steadied, then dimmed again. Herrera pressed the bone token into a slot in the gate’s central lock. The red markings brightened. Quinn raised the baton. “Don’t.” “I’m sorry.” The gate opened without a sound. Noise flooded the station. Voices, music, the clink of glass. The air changed too, carrying incense, frying meat, wet fur and a sharp medicinal tang. The corridor that should have ended against a collapsed tunnel stretched downward, lit by strings of amber bulbs. Figures moved at the bottom. Dozens of them. Quinn’s mind reached for explanations and found none that held. Squatters. Illegal market. Elaborate lighting. Drugs in the air. A hidden passage missed by surveyors and maintenance crews for half a century. A tall woman passed beneath the bulbs wearing a fox skull over her face. Beside her, a child-shaped figure led a greyhound with six jointed legs. Quinn’s mouth went dry. Herrera glanced down the passage. “The Veil Market. It moves every full moon.” Quinn almost laughed, but the sound would not come. “You expect me to believe there’s a market under Camden that no one knows about?” “Plenty know. Most don’t survive telling the wrong people.” He eased through the gate. Quinn caught his coat and wrenched him back. Herrera reacted on instinct. His scarred left forearm swept across hers, breaking her grip, and his right hand caught her wrist before she could swing the baton. He was fast and far stronger than his file suggested. They locked in place. “Let go,” Quinn said. “I don’t want to hurt you.” “Then you’ve chosen a poor way to show it.” Behind him, the amber lights pulsed. A man appeared halfway up the corridor. At least, Quinn thought it was a man. He wore a long plum coat and carried an ivory cane. His face remained hidden beneath a broad-brimmed hat, but his shadow climbed the wall behind him, impossibly long, moving before he did. Herrera released Quinn at once. “Token,” the man said. His voice scraped like a knife dragged across slate. Herrera pointed to the lock. The man tilted his head. Beneath the brim, three small reflections blinked. Quinn’s hand froze near her warrant card. The figure’s attention settled on her. “One token. Two guests.” “She’s not with me,” Herrera said. “That is unfortunate.” The gate began to close. Herrera slipped through and caught it with both hands. Metal groaned against his grip. “Quinn, go.” She stared at the thing in the plum coat. Three eyes, she thought. A trick of the light. Jewels on spectacles. Anything but three eyes. The thing smiled. Its teeth were small and crowded and far too numerous. Memory struck without warning: a Whitechapel basement, frost crawling over concrete, Morris’s torch burning beside the black ring. On the wall above it, three wet points had gleamed in the dark. She had dismissed them as reflected light. For three years she had dismissed everything that would not fit inside a report. “Did you know DS Morris?” she asked. Herrera’s face changed. Not confusion. Recognition. The gate pressed harder against him. His boots slid on the wet tiles. “Where did you hear that name?” he said. Quinn stepped forward. “Don’t,” Herrera snapped. “You can’t enter without a token.” “Did you know him?” “No. But I know what took him.” The words cut through the underground noise. Quinn’s heart stumbled once, then resumed with brutal force. “Tell me.” “Not here.” The plum-coated figure climbed another step. Its long shadow reached the gate before it did, thin fingers spilling over the bars. Herrera’s jaw clenched. “If you follow me, they’ll know you can see them. Once they know, you don’t get to unknow it.” Quinn heard Control in her earpiece, thin and distant. “Detective Quinn, units are four minutes out. Confirm your position.” Four minutes. Backup. Procedure. The known world waiting at the top of the stairs with radios, body armour and forms in triplicate. Below, Herrera was slipping. The gate narrowed the gap to the width of his shoulders. Quinn touched the worn leather watch on her left wrist. Morris had given it to her after she made detective. It had stopped the night he vanished, then started again at dawn. She had never taken it to a repair shop. The shadow curled around Herrera’s ankle. He kicked free and swore in Spanish. Quinn raised her baton and jammed it between the gate and the frame. The steel bowed. Herrera stared at her. “Get through,” she said. “You don’t have a token.” “I’m arresting you. That makes me staff, not a guest.” “This is not the time to be clever.” “It rarely is.” She turned sideways and squeezed into the gap. Cold swept over her as she crossed the threshold, deep enough to ache in her teeth. The gate slammed behind her, snapping the baton and trapping half of it on the station side. Her earpiece hissed. “Detective Quinn? Confirm your—” The signal died. Herrera stared at her with open disbelief. Up close, fear had hollowed his face. “That,” he said, “was a terrible decision.” Quinn drew the remaining half of her baton and looked down at the Veil Market. Stalls crowded an old platform that should not have existed. Glass jars held luminous organs that beat against their lids. Bundles of herbs twisted as if breathing. A vendor with antlers weighed silver powder on a brass scale while a veiled customer paid with a bottle of blue smoke. Farther down, beneath an arch of train bones, something enormous shifted behind red silk curtains. Every conversation had stopped. Hundreds of faces turned toward her. Human faces. Animal faces. Faces without eyes. Herrera tucked the Saint Christopher medallion beneath his shirt. “Do exactly what I do,” he murmured. Quinn met the three-eyed gatekeeper’s smile and felt the old, impossible cold settle into her bones. “No,” she said. “You do exactly what I tell you.” Then she took Herrera by the arm and led him into the market.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"he shouted back [back]"
dialogueSentences75
tagDensity0.213
leniency0.427
rawRatio0.063
effectiveRatio0.027
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2472
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
77.75% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2472
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"velvet"
count1
1
word"shattered"
count1
2
word"glistening"
count1
3
word"etched"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count1
5
word"footsteps"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"pulsed"
count1
8
word"long shadow"
count1
9
word"jaw clenched"
count1
10
word"silk"
count1
highlights
0"velvet"
1"shattered"
2"glistening"
3"etched"
4"pulse"
5"footsteps"
6"flickered"
7"pulsed"
8"long shadow"
9"jaw clenched"
10"silk"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences269
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences269
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences328
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen25
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2472
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
47.77% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions120
wordCount2103
uniqueNames29
maxNameDensity2.04
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Harlow1
Quinn43
Tomás1
Herrera38
Spanish2
London3
Raven1
Nest1
Wardour1
Street2
Metropolitan1
Police1
Tottenham1
Court1
Road2
Euston1
Morris4
Walthamstow1
Whitechapel2
August1
Camden2
High1
Tube1
Saint2
Christopher2
Control1
Veil1
Market1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
4"Raven"
5"Police"
6"Morris"
7"Saint"
8"Christopher"
places
0"Soho"
1"Spanish"
2"London"
3"Wardour"
4"Street"
5"Metropolitan"
6"Tottenham"
7"Court"
8"Road"
9"Euston"
10"Walthamstow"
11"August"
12"Camden"
13"High"
14"Veil"
15"Market"
globalScore0.478
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences159
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if following a line only he could see"
1"as if breathing"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2472
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences328
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs192
mean12.88
std13.31
cv1.034
sampleLengths
038
149
216
342
45
54
66
75
832
96
1010
119
1229
136
144
1537
168
1730
182
1937
208
2113
221
235
2421
251
268
2740
2810
2936
3011
313
3273
3316
3412
352
3642
378
385
3911
402
411
4235
433
443
4543
468
476
486
4919
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences269
matches
0"been seen"
1"been cremated"
2"been hacked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs383
matches
0"was already running"
1"was chasing"
2"was going"
3"was slipping"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences328
ratio0.003
matches
0"One hand gripped the bars; the other held the little white object."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2117
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"old, impossible cold settle"
adverbCount55
adverbRatio0.025980160604629193
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.0033065658951346244
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences328
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences328
mean7.54
std4.92
cv0.653
sampleLengths
019
119
225
35
414
55
616
79
812
910
1011
115
124
136
145
159
1610
177
186
194
202
215
225
239
244
2513
2612
276
284
2911
309
3112
325
338
345
3515
3610
372
386
3913
4018
415
423
4313
441
455
463
4718
481
498
55.28% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.3445121951219512
totalSentences328
uniqueOpeners113
99.29% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount7
totalSentences235
matches
0"Then his glass tipped over."
1"Still considerate while fleeing arrest."
2"Then the security footage: Herrera"
3"Then he had smiled, shut"
4"Then he reached into his"
5"At least, Quinn thought it"
6"Then she took Herrera by"
ratio0.03
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount49
totalSentences235
matches
0"He sat alone at the"
1"His gaze met hers."
2"He disappeared through a narrow"
3"She caught his shoulder, spun"
4"She did not turn."
5"She tore free without slowing."
6"He hurdled a stack of"
7"Her shoes slapped through oily"
8"He plunged across the street"
9"She checked her stride by"
10"He cut north."
11"He could explain all of"
12"He swept a bicycle aside"
13"She took the longer line"
14"he shouted back"
15"His accent sharpened under strain."
16"He ran well, but unevenly."
17"He landed badly."
18"Her hand dropped to her"
19"He clutched it in his"
ratio0.209
57.87% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount189
totalSentences235
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn stood beneath"
1"He sat alone at the"
2"Herrera called them necessary treatments."
3"Quinn called them the reason"
4"The Raven’s Nest was dim"
5"Soldiers, actors, politicians, men in"
6"The sort of decoration meant"
7"Herrera glanced toward the window."
8"His gaze met hers."
9"Quinn hit the door as"
10"Herrera vaulted the bar with"
11"The barman ducked aside without"
12"Every face turned toward her."
13"He disappeared through a narrow"
14"Quinn drove between tables."
15"A man in a velvet"
16"She caught his shoulder, spun"
17"someone murmured behind her"
18"She did not turn."
19"The corridor beyond the arch"
ratio0.804
21.28% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences235
matches
0"Even at distance she saw"
ratio0.004
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences86
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Quinn flashed her warrant card at a driver who leaned on his horn."
1"A storage unit containing surgical instruments, restraints and twelve jars of black fluid that had shattered when the evidence team tried to move them."
2"Memory struck without warning: a Whitechapel basement, frost crawling over concrete, Morris’s torch burning beside the black ring."
3"Glass jars held luminous organs that beat against their lids."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
83.33% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Quinn shouted (shout)"
1"someone murmured (murmur)"
2"he shouted back (shout)"
3"Herrera snapped (snap)"
4"he murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences75
tagDensity0.213
leniency0.427
rawRatio0.313
effectiveRatio0.133
91.2191%