Run: 2026-07-09-01KX40G7BVC7YZNZC1QAGEY5Q5

Run Details

Duration:
44.7s
Cost:
$0.054797
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The dead man had been arranged beneath the old station clock as if someone expected a train. Detective Harlow Quinn stood at the lip of the platform and looked down through the yellow spill of the forensic lamps. Camden’s abandoned station had been sealed for thirty years, according to the files; its tiled walls had sweated grime for all of them. Yet beyond the iron gate at the foot of the service stairs, a market had flowered in the dark. Not a market anyone would put on a licensing form. Canvas awnings sagged between rusted pillars. Stalls made from packing crates and old luggage trolleys lined the disused tracks. Glass bottles caught the light: liquids green as pond scum, red as arterial blood, black enough to swallow the reflections around them. Someone had abandoned a rack of silver rings that seemed to twitch whenever Quinn looked away. The smell was worse than any ordinary underground: incense, wet stone, burnt sugar, copper. At the center of it all lay the body. “Name?” Quinn asked. DS Anil Patel consulted his notebook. “Elias Venn. Forty-eight. No fixed address on paper, though apparently he had a stall here. Information broker. Sold directions, names, passwords. That sort of thing.” “That sort of thing.” Patel’s mouth tightened. He had been with Major Crimes for four months and still tried to hide how little he liked it when she used his words against him. “That’s what the witnesses say.” “Witnesses say a lot when they think nobody can check.” “The ones we’ve got are frightened.” “They should be.” Quinn descended the steps. Her shoes clicked on tile, then sank into the gritty old platform surface. She felt the eyes from the market’s edges. The uniformed officers had pushed the crowd back, but their cordon looked thin and ceremonial against this place. Most of the traders had vanished when the police arrived. The few remaining watched from behind shuttered stalls and shadowed arches, their faces turned away whenever Quinn met their gaze. Venn lay on his back beneath the clock, though the clock had no hands. He wore a long charcoal coat, expensive once, patched at both elbows now. His throat had been cut with a single deep stroke. Blood had spread around his head, dark and glossy, but not nearly as much as there ought to have been. Quinn crouched beside him, careful of the marked evidence tents. Her left wrist creaked as she bent it, the worn leather strap of her watch pressing into her skin. “Weapon?” she asked. “Not located.” “Blood trail?” “Nothing useful. There’s a smear under the east stairwell, but it stops after two feet.” Patel pointed with his pen. “Could have been cleaned.” “Could have.” Dr. Lorna Bell, the pathologist, knelt near Venn’s boots. She had tied her grey hair beneath a disposable cap and wore the resigned expression of a woman who had long ago accepted that the dead never had the decency to arrange themselves sensibly. “Time?” Quinn asked. “Roughly between midnight and two, pending temperature correction. He’s colder than he should be.” Bell glanced toward the platform’s far tunnel. “The ambient temperature down here is peculiar.” “Peculiar how?” “Four degrees colder inside the market boundary than in the entrance passage. Your scene officers tested it twice.” “Draft?” “Possibly.” Quinn looked to the tunnel. Its mouth was black behind a row of stalls. Somewhere deep inside, water dripped at a slow, patient interval. “What happened to his hands?” she asked. Venn’s fingers were curled hard against his palms. The nails had split; thin crescents of blood showed beneath them. There were no defensive cuts, no bruising on his forearms. Bell had drawn back the sleeves of his coat. His skin was stippled with tiny grey spots, like ash had settled beneath it. “Those,” Bell said, “are what I was going to ask you about.” Quinn leaned closer. The marks ran up both wrists and disappeared under the cuffs. Not punctures. Not burns precisely. They had the soft-edged, sunken look of frostbite, except the skin around them was not blanched but bruised purple-black. “Chemical?” Quinn said. “Perhaps. But if it is, I don’t know which one. There’s no corresponding damage to his clothing.” Patel moved around the body, stepping where the forensic tape directed him. “A knife fight gone wrong makes the most sense. Venn had enemies. Every witness agrees on that much. He was selling information about people who preferred not to be known.” “Who found him?” “Woman called Sable.” “Full name?” Patel gave her a look. Quinn waited. “She says she doesn’t use one.” “Then find one.” “She’s gone.” “Of course she is.” “She left before we arrived. Uniforms have a description, though it’s not much. Tall. Dark coat. Silver eyes.” Quinn looked up slowly. Patel cleared his throat. “Their words, not mine.” “Silver eyes.” “Could be contacts.” “Could be.” He had begun to sound irritated. Good. Irritation made people pay attention. Quinn stood and studied the station clock. Its face had once been white enamel. Now it was yellowed, crazed with hairline fractures, and blank save for the black hub at its center. No hands. No numbers. A rusted chain hung from its housing, though no mechanism sat behind it. Venn’s shoes pointed directly toward the tracks. Not the stairs. Not the market entrance. The tracks. “Who moved him?” she asked. “No one,” Patel said. “Scene officers photographed him as found.” “Then he died facing the tunnel.” “Or was placed that way.” “Why?” “Ritual?” Patel said, too quickly. Quinn turned toward him. He shrugged. “We are in an underground market where they sell jars labelled Grave-Salt and bottled dreams. I thought I’d meet the atmosphere halfway.” “A ritual requires a pattern.” “There’s blood, a body, and a dead clock.” “There is also a half-eaten sandwich three stalls over. We don’t call that a ritual because it’s near a corpse.” A small sound came from behind the evidence cordon: a sharp, strangled laugh, immediately smothered. Quinn saw the red-haired woman before Patel did. She stood beside a shuttered stall with both hands wrapped around the strap of a worn leather satchel. Her round glasses flashed in the forensic light. Freckles stood out across her pale face. Her curls had been dragged behind her left ear so many times that a few had escaped and sprung loose again. Eva Kowalski looked as though she would prefer to be anywhere else on earth. Quinn had seen her name in the peripheral files on the Aurora investigation often enough. Childhood friend. Museum researcher. Occult specialist, if one believed in such titles. The last time Quinn had spoken to Kowalski, the woman had insisted that a missing persons pattern in Hackney was “topographically impossible.” Quinn had told her impossible things did not hold up in court. Now Eva stepped beneath the tape without waiting for permission. “Miss Kowalski,” Quinn said. Eva stopped. “Detective.” “You have a habit of appearing near things I’d like explained.” “That is not remotely fair.” “It wasn’t intended as praise.” Eva’s green eyes went to the body. Whatever answer she had prepared vanished. Her fingers climbed to her hair again, tucked it behind her left ear, then gripped the satchel strap. “Elias is dead.” “So it seems.” “He wasn’t supposed to be here tonight.” “Where was he supposed to be?” “I don’t know. Somewhere aboveground, ideally.” She swallowed. “This market only opens at a place like this for a few hours at a time. It moves after the full moon. People come to buy things they can’t buy elsewhere, then they leave before dawn.” “A mobile illicit market,” Patel said. “Helpful.” Eva glanced at him. “It isn’t mobile in the conventional sense.” “Everything is conventional until it isn’t,” Quinn said. “What did Venn sell?” “Information.” “So I hear.” “Not ordinary information. He knew routes. Safe places. Who owed whom. He knew where the thin spots were.” Quinn felt an old stiffness settle at the back of her neck. “Thin spots.” Eva’s gaze lifted to the tunnel. “Places where the boundary is weak.” “Boundary between what and what?” Eva hesitated. “Say it,” Quinn said. “Here and somewhere else.” Patel gave a quiet exhale through his nose. Quinn did not look at him. Three years ago, DS Morris had stood in a warehouse in Wapping and called her name over the radio. His voice had been thin with static, then suddenly distant, though she had been ten feet from him. By the time she reached the loading bay, the warehouse had been empty except for Morris’s torch, his service weapon, and a wet black stain that no laboratory had managed to identify. No one had said somewhere else. No one had said anything that could not be typed into an incident report. Quinn looked at Venn’s hands. “You think this killed him?” “I think he touched something he shouldn’t have.” Eva stepped nearer, stopping just short of the taped perimeter. “Those marks are rift-burn.” Bell looked up from the corpse. “They look like no burn I’ve encountered.” “They wouldn’t.” “Convenient,” Quinn said. Eva flinched, but she did not retreat. “You asked what I thought.” “I asked what you knew.” “I know that this market has rules. You don’t bring police through the gate. You don’t steal from a Shade. You don’t follow a door if it opens where a wall should be.” Her eyes moved again to the body. “And you do not use a Veil Compass near an active tear.” Patel looked toward the evidence table. “That brass thing?” Quinn followed his gaze. Among Venn’s personal effects—wallet, a key ring, two old mobile phones, a small bag of pale tablets—sat a compass no bigger than a biscuit. Its brass casing was blotched green with verdigris. Fine sigils had been etched around the face, their lines so dense they seemed to crawl under the light. The needle did not point north. It spun. Not quickly. Deliberately. It revolved, paused toward the black tunnel, then turned again. Quinn crossed to the table. The evidence officer began to protest, saw her face, and stopped. “Was this on him?” she asked. “In his inside coat pocket,” Patel said. “The woman at the stall said it’s a Veil Compass. She says it points to… supernatural disturbances.” “Rifts,” Eva said quietly. “A compass is a compass,” Patel said. “Could be magnetised. There’s iron in the walls, old electrical lines everywhere.” Quinn picked up a clear evidence bag containing the object. It was cold enough to ache against her fingertips through the plastic. The needle swung toward the tunnel and held. Then the station clock above Venn’s body ticked. Everyone heard it. Bell froze with one gloved hand hovering over her kit. Patel’s pen fell from his fingers and struck the platform. A second tick followed. Quinn looked up. The clock’s central hub turned. A black minute hand eased out of it, lengthening across the cracked face as though drawn by an invisible hand. Then an hour hand emerged beneath it. Both stopped at 1:17. Morris had disappeared at 1:17 in the morning. Her breath caught before she could stop it. The compass needle trembled against the bag, tugging not toward the tunnel now but toward the body. Quinn crouched beside Venn again. The blood around his skull had dried at the edges, but one narrow line remained wet. It ran beneath his right shoulder, too straight to be a natural flow. She traced it with her eyes. It led to the inside pocket of his coat. “Patel,” she said. “His personal effects were bagged in place?” “Yes.” “Every pocket emptied?” “Yes.” “Show me the property log.” Patel flipped open his notebook, then frowned. “Wallet. phones. keys. tablets. compass. A folded receipt. That’s all.” Quinn looked at the coat’s inner lining. The pocket had been turned out, but its stitched edge had torn near the bottom. A thread of something pale caught in the rip. Not paper. Bone. She took forceps from Bell’s open kit and pinched it free. It was a small carved disc, yellow-white and polished by handling. A hole pierced its center. On one side, a tiny symbol had been scratched: a doorway split down the middle by a vertical line. Eva went still. “That’s a bone token,” she said. “The entry token,” Quinn said. Eva nodded. “But it was in his pocket.” “Yes.” “He used it to get in.” “Yes.” “Then why would the killer leave it?” Eva’s face had lost what little colour it possessed. “They wouldn’t.” Patel came closer. “Maybe he dropped it.” “No.” Quinn held the token beneath the light. A dark grain marked its edge. Not blood. Soot, perhaps. “This wasn’t dropped. It was sewn into the lining.” She turned Venn’s coat slightly. The rip had been made from inside the pocket outward. The stitching near the token had been cut with a clean, narrow blade. Someone had hidden the token after Venn died—or had tried to retrieve it and failed. “The gate,” Quinn said. “Where is it?” Eva pointed toward the eastern stairwell, where the platform passage narrowed into a tiled corridor. “There was a door there when I came in.” “There was?” “It doesn’t stay if it doesn’t want to.” Quinn rose. She walked to the stairwell. The smear Patel had mentioned stained the tiles beneath it: a shallow crescent of blood, interrupted by prints. One set belonged to Venn’s expensive shoes. The other was barefoot. The barefoot prints were small, narrow, and ended at the wall. No return marks. No drag marks. No sign that their owner had turned around. At the wall, someone had painted over the old Underground roundel in thick grey primer. The paint had peeled in a vertical seam. Quinn leaned close. Cold air breathed through the crack. Not a draft. A breath: damp and sweet, carrying the faint smell of river water and roses left too long in a vase. Behind her, the compass gave a metallic click inside its bag. The needle had stopped spinning. It pointed at the wall. Quinn stared at the narrow seam in the paint, at the blood on the tiles, at Venn’s body under the clock fixed forever at 1:17. The evidence did not add up because it had been collected as though the crime began and ended on one side of a door. It hadn’t. Venn had come to the market with a token sewn into his coat. Someone had opened a passage. He had tried to use the compass—perhaps to find it, perhaps to close it. Then something had come through, or someone had gone across and come back changed. The throat wound was the simple part. The human part. It had been meant to make the rest look ordinary. Quinn touched the leather watch at her wrist, feeling the steady beat of its second hand beneath her thumb. “Seal the stairwell,” she said. Patel stared at her. “There’s no door.” “Then seal the wall.” “Harlow—” “Now.” He moved. Eva remained where she was, clutching her satchel. “Detective,” she said softly, “if that door opens again, you cannot go through it.” Quinn looked at the bloodless seam in the tiles. Three years ago, Morris had vanished through nothing anyone else could see. She had spent every day since pretending that was not the shape of the truth. “Get me every scrap of information Venn kept,” she said. “Names, routes, debts. Especially anything connected to Wapping, three years ago.” Eva’s eyes widened behind her glasses. “And Miss Kowalski?” “Yes?” “This time,” Quinn said, “you’re going to explain every impossible word before you use it.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags34
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Her eyes moved again [again]"
1"Eva said quietly [quietly]"
2"she said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences124
tagDensity0.274
leniency0.548
rawRatio0.088
effectiveRatio0.048
84.64% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2604
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"precisely"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count2
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
4
adverb"deliberately"
count1
5
adverb"slightly"
count1
6
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"precisely"
1"slowly"
2"quickly"
3"suddenly"
4"deliberately"
5"slightly"
6"softly"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
92.32% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2604
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"grave"
count1
1
word"etched"
count1
2
word"trembled"
count1
3
word"traced"
count1
highlights
0"grave"
1"etched"
2"trembled"
3"traced"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences217
matches(empty)
77.02% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount7
narrationSentences217
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"managed to"
3"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences307
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2600
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions35
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions110
wordCount1848
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity2.16
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn40
Anil1
Patel19
Major1
Crimes1
Dr1
Bell7
Venn13
Kowalski2
Aurora1
Hackney1
Eva16
Morris4
Wapping1
Underground1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Anil"
3"Patel"
4"Major"
5"Dr"
6"Bell"
7"Venn"
8"Kowalski"
9"Eva"
10"Morris"
places
0"Hackney"
1"Wapping"
globalScore0.418
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences129
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.385
wordCount2600
matches
0"not toward the tunnel now but toward the body"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences307
matches
0"accepted that the"
1"insisted that a"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs185
mean14.05
std15.49
cv1.102
sampleLengths
017
163
210
371
49
53
631
74
834
910
106
117
1269
1357
1429
153
162
172
1824
192
2043
213
2228
232
2418
251
261
2724
287
2952
3012
3138
323
3317
3442
353
363
372
385
392
406
413
422
434
4418
454
468
472
483
492
84.24% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount13
totalSentences217
matches
0"been arranged"
1"been sealed"
2"were curled"
3"was stippled"
4"been dragged"
5"been ten"
6"was blotched"
7"been etched"
8"been turned"
9"been scratched"
10"been made"
11"been collected"
12"been meant"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs332
matches
0"was, clutching"
96.32% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences307
ratio0.016
matches
0"Camden’s abandoned station had been sealed for thirty years, according to the files; its tiled walls had sweated grime for all of them."
1"The nails had split; thin crescents of blood showed beneath them."
2"Among Venn’s personal effects—wallet, a key ring, two old mobile phones, a small bag of pale tablets—sat a compass no bigger than a biscuit."
3"Someone had hidden the token after Venn died—or had tried to retrieve it and failed."
4"He had tried to use the compass—perhaps to find it, perhaps to close it."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1856
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount57
adverbRatio0.030711206896551723
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.007004310344827586
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences307
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences307
mean8.47
std6.75
cv0.797
sampleLengths
017
121
223
319
410
56
613
722
816
914
109
113
126
1325
144
153
1626
175
1810
196
207
2113
228
2318
2410
2520
2614
2713
2810
2920
3010
3119
323
332
342
3520
364
372
381
398
4034
413
4221
437
442
4518
461
471
485
499
55.37% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.36156351791530944
totalSentences307
uniqueOpeners111
78.43% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences170
matches
0"Somewhere deep inside, water dripped"
1"Then the station clock above"
2"Then an hour hand emerged"
3"Then something had come through,"
ratio0.024
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences170
matches
0"He had been with Major"
1"Her shoes clicked on tile,"
2"She felt the eyes from"
3"He wore a long charcoal"
4"His throat had been cut"
5"Her left wrist creaked as"
6"She had tied her grey"
7"Its mouth was black behind"
8"His skin was stippled with"
9"They had the soft-edged, sunken"
10"He had begun to sound"
11"Its face had once been"
12"She stood beside a shuttered"
13"Her round glasses flashed in"
14"Her curls had been dragged"
15"Her fingers climbed to her"
16"His voice had been thin"
17"Her eyes moved again to"
18"Its brass casing was blotched"
19"It revolved, paused toward the"
ratio0.2
48.24% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount140
totalSentences170
matches
0"The dead man had been"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn stood at"
2"Camden’s abandoned station had been"
3"Canvas awnings sagged between rusted"
4"Stalls made from packing crates"
5"Glass bottles caught the light:"
6"Someone had abandoned a rack"
7"The smell was worse than"
8"DS Anil Patel consulted his"
9"Patel’s mouth tightened."
10"He had been with Major"
11"Quinn descended the steps"
12"Her shoes clicked on tile,"
13"She felt the eyes from"
14"The uniformed officers had pushed"
15"The few remaining watched from"
16"Venn lay on his back"
17"He wore a long charcoal"
18"His throat had been cut"
19"Blood had spread around his"
ratio0.824
88.24% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences170
matches
0"Now it was yellowed, crazed"
1"Now Eva stepped beneath the"
2"By the time she reached"
ratio0.018
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences77
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"She had tied her grey hair beneath a disposable cap and wore the resigned expression of a woman who had long ago accepted that the dead never had the decency to…"
1"A black minute hand eased out of it, lengthening across the cracked face as though drawn by an invisible hand."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags34
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags27
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"The last time Quinn had (have)"
dialogueSentences124
tagDensity0.218
leniency0.435
rawRatio0.037
effectiveRatio0.016
90.6053%