Run: 2026-07-09-01KX40RG0XQAFJH6EF9TKWYHZ9

Run Details

Duration:
1m 19s
Cost:
$0.115490
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain varnished Dean Street and turned the green neon raven above the door into a trembling stain. Aurora watched it through the front window while she stacked clean tumblers beneath the bar. Each flash of the sign caught in the glass, a pulse trapped under her hands. Silas sat at the far end with the day’s accounts spread before him. His silver signet ring clicked against the calculator. He had removed his jacket and rolled his shirtsleeves to his elbows, though the October draught worried the old maps on the walls. “You’ve counted those twice,” Aurora told him. “Three times. The till remains thirty-eight pounds short.” “Then count the staff.” “I did. You’re worth twelve pounds and a packet of crisps.” “That much?” “Inflation.” The door opened, dragging wet traffic noise into the Raven’s Nest. Four people came through in a knot of umbrellas, perfume and office laughter. Aurora reached for pint glasses before they had shed their coats. “Table or bar?” A woman near the back stopped. Her companions pressed around her. One complained about water in his shoe; another pointed towards the snug beneath a framed map of Vienna. The woman stood among them with a folded navy umbrella held against her coat. Aurora knew the tilt of her head. Eva Morgan had once cut her own fringe with nail scissors in the girls’ toilets at school, then blamed the result on a ceiling fan. She had worn chipped green varnish, charity-shop dresses and boots held together with electrical tape. At nineteen, she had dyed one side of her hair pink and arrived at Aurora’s father’s birthday dinner with a bottle of tequila in her handbag. The woman by the door wore a camel coat belted at the waist. Her dark hair ended in a smooth line beneath her jaw. A gold band sat on her left hand, narrow and clean. Time had pared her down to controlled edges. Her face had not changed enough. “Rory?” The name crossed the bar and found the part of Aurora that still expected Cardiff rain against a bedroom window. One of Eva’s companions glanced between them. “You know each other?” Eva kept her eyes on Aurora. “We used to.” Silas closed the accounts book. The soft clap of leather cut through the clatter. “Rory, take ten minutes.” “I’m working.” “You’re frightening the glassware.” Aurora looked down. Her fingers had locked around a tumbler. Eva’s companions claimed the snug. Coats landed on chairs. Someone called for two bottles of red and asked whether the kitchen still served chips. Silas rose, favouring his left leg. He took the tumbler from Aurora and replaced it with a tea towel. “I’ll endure the hardship.” “You’ll pour the merlot into Burgundy glasses out of spite.” “They won’t know the difference.” “I will.” “That’s why I’ll enjoy it.” Eva gave a faint breath of laughter. It vanished when Aurora came around the bar. For a moment neither of them moved. A hug would have required an agreement about who they had been to one another. A handshake would have made it worse. Eva lifted the umbrella. “Sorry. I’m dripping on your floor.” “It’s Silas’s floor.” “Then I’m dripping on Silas’s floor.” “He charges.” “Of course he does.” Aurora led her to the small table beside the dead fireplace. On the wall above it hung a photograph of Berlin in winter, the streets split by long bars of shadow. Eva unfastened her coat but did not take it off. Silas arrived with two glasses. “Red,” he announced. “For the shock.” “I don’t drink wine,” Aurora told him. “You do tonight.” His gaze touched Eva, measured without appearing to linger, then returned to Aurora. “Ten minutes.” Eva watched him limp back towards the bar. “Your boss?” “My landlord.” “You live here?” “Upstairs.” “Above a pub.” “Bar. He gets particular.” “You used to complain when my neighbours played music after nine.” “Your neighbours played drum and bass through a wall made of damp Weetabix.” Eva rubbed her thumb across the gold band. “I didn’t know you were in London.” Aurora looked at her. Eva’s hand stopped. “I mean, I knew you came here. At first. Then you disappeared.” “I kept the same number.” “I rang it.” “Not after October.” The noise from the snug rose as Silas opened the wine. A cork cracked free. One of Eva’s colleagues cheered as if released from a long captivity. Eva lowered herself into the chair. “You remember the month.” “You left a message on the third.” “Rory—” “You asked if I’d gone back to him. You called me an idiot before I’d answered.” “I thought you had.” “I had.” Eva’s mouth tightened. She glanced towards the rain-threaded window. “You told me you were done.” “I was done most Tuesdays.” “That isn’t funny.” “No.” Aurora sat opposite. The crescent scar on her left wrist showed where her sleeve had ridden back. She pulled the cuff down, but Eva had seen it. Eva had seen the scar years before, had traced it during double maths while inventing a story about a shark attack in Barry Island. Now her gaze snagged there as if the old mark had acquired a new meaning. “I came to get you,” Eva murmured. “You came with bin bags.” “You wouldn’t pack.” “You threw half my clothes into them.” “You had ten minutes before he got back.” “Nine. You spent one arguing about my kettle.” “It was your grandmother’s.” “It leaked.” “It was still your grandmother’s.” Aurora lifted the wine and smelled blackcurrant, oak and the ghost of Silas’s expensive disapproval. She set it down without drinking. Eva looked around the room. Old maps. Dead men in black-and-white photographs. Brass lamps casting small amber pools. The bookshelf at the back stood flush against the wall, its concealed hinges buried in shadow. “This place suits you.” “You’ve been here four minutes.” “It still does.” “What does that mean?” “You look—” Eva stopped. She had always filled silence before it formed, pouring words into every gap until no one could fall through. Now she inspected each sentence like a contract. Aurora leaned back. “Go on.” “Different.” “There it is.” “I didn’t mean your hair.” “My hair was always black.” “It used to reach your waist.” “Evan liked it long.” Eva flinched. Her fingers closed over the lapel of her coat. Aurora regretted the sentence as soon as it landed, not because it was false but because she had shaped it to cut. Silas placed bottles and glasses in the snug. He kept his back turned. The silver ring flashed as he poured. Eva took a drink. “You cut it.” “With kitchen scissors.” “Still hate hairdressers?” “I hate strangers standing behind me with blades.” Eva stared into her glass. “Right.” “Don’t do that.” “Do what?” “Turn me into a room where something awful happened.” “I’m not.” “You’ve barely looked at me since you saw the scar.” “You had that scar when we were eight.” “Then look at my face.” Eva did. Aurora held her gaze. She had spent years learning how not to shrink beneath another person’s attention. Chin level. Shoulders loose. Hands visible. Breathe through the nose. Watch the eyes, then the hands, then the nearest exit. Silas had given those habits names, but the body had learnt them first. Eva saw some of it. Her expression altered, the mouth parting before she pressed it shut. “You don’t blink any more,” she said. “I blink.” “Not when you’re angry.” “You used to tell me I looked like a furious owl.” “You did. Big eyes. Terrible fringe.” “You cut that fringe.” “And saved you from looking trustworthy.” A smile tugged at Aurora before she could prevent it. Eva caught it, and for half a second the years folded: two girls under a bus shelter in Llandaff, rain blowing sideways, sharing chips from paper while Eva lied about why they had missed curfew. Then Eva’s phone lit on the table. TOM: Are you coming back? We’re ordering. She turned it face down. “Tom?” Aurora asked. “My husband.” Aurora glanced at the ring. “Of course.” “What does that mean?” “Nothing.” “You always say ‘of course’ when you mean something cruel.” “You always hear cruelty when someone notices your plans worked.” Eva removed her coat at last. Beneath it she wore a cream blouse and tailored trousers. A faint swell pressed against the fabric at her waist, too slight for a stranger to name, but Aurora had never been a stranger in the ordinary sense. Eva saw her notice. “Seventeen weeks.” The words sat between the untouched glasses. Aurora searched for the proper response. Congratulations belonged to colleagues beside photocopiers, to aunts over Sunday lunch. Once, she and Eva had promised each other children born six months apart, houses on the same road, husbands permitted to visit if they behaved. They had been fourteen and drunk on stolen cider. “You look well,” Aurora managed. Eva’s laugh had no pleasure in it. “That’s what women say when they can’t say congratulations.” “Congratulations, then.” “Don’t strain yourself.” “What do you want from me?” “I don’t know. Something that doesn’t sound purchased on a card.” Aurora’s chair scraped as she shifted. “You walked into my bar after four years.” “Your landlord’s bar.” “You remembered.” “I remember everything. That’s the problem.” At the snug, someone called Eva’s name. She raised a finger without turning. Wait. Aurora watched the gesture. Even that had changed. The old Eva would have shouted across the room, thrown a beer mat, made the interruption into theatre. This woman silenced people with one raised hand. “You’re a solicitor now?” Aurora asked. “Civil service.” “You hated Whitehall.” “I hated lots of things before they paid my mortgage.” “Still drawing?” Eva looked towards the photograph above them. “No.” “You were good.” “I wasn’t.” “You were.” “I designed three Christmas cards for Mum’s church and painted a mural on your bedroom wall.” “The dragon was excellent.” “The dragon looked like a constipated horse.” “It had emotional depth.” Eva smiled into her wine. Fine lines appeared at the corners of her eyes, new and delicate as pencil marks. “I painted over it,” Aurora said. “When?” “The week before university.” “You never told me.” “You went to Bristol.” “You could have phoned.” “You could have stayed.” Eva’s smile went. There it was, stripped of Evan, London and unanswered messages. The first leaving. Eva with three boxes in the boot of her mother’s car, pink hair fading at the roots, shouting promises through the open window. Aurora on the pavement with law textbooks she had not chosen, waving until the car turned the corner. “You told me to go,” Eva replied. “You’d already accepted.” “You applied to Bristol too.” “My father tore up the form.” “I didn’t know that.” “You didn’t ask.” “I was nineteen.” “So was I.” Eva’s palm flattened on the table. Her wedding ring caught the brass light. “I thought you wanted Cardiff. Your parents. Law. That whole polished Carter family performance.” “My mother cried in the kitchen for a week after you left.” “Why?” “Because I did.” Eva drew back as if the table had shifted. Aurora picked up her wine and drank. It tasted dry and dark, the oak leaving a bitter seam along her tongue. “I was angry,” Eva said. “You were free.” “I was lonely.” “You had six hundred photos that suggested otherwise.” “You saw those?” “You posted them.” “You never liked anything.” “I wasn’t required to applaud.” “I kept looking for your name.” “And I kept looking at your life.” Rain ticked against the window. Behind the bar, Silas polished a glass that had been clean ten minutes ago. He met Aurora’s eyes once, then turned it in the cloth. Eva’s voice dropped. “When you rang me from Paddington, I thought that fixed it.” Aurora traced the rim of her glass. “You sounded pleased.” “I was terrified.” “You laughed.” “I laugh when I’m terrified. You knew that.” “I used to know that.” “I came straight from work. I left a disciplinary meeting halfway through and told my manager my sister was in hospital.” “You don’t have a sister.” “I had you.” Aurora’s hand stopped. Eva looked down at the table, and her blunt, perfect hair fell forwards, hiding one eye. Beneath the cream cuff, a faded blue mark stained the side of her hand. Ink. The sight of it hurt more than the gold ring or the pressed blouse. Eva still held pens in the same crooked grip. She still marked herself while writing. “I put you in my spare room,” Eva continued. “I bought a lock for the door because you checked it six times that first night. I learnt his number so I could hang up before he spoke. Then you left while I was at work.” “He said my father had collapsed.” “You knew he lied.” “He sent a photograph from the hospital.” “From two years before.” “I didn’t know that until I got there.” “You could have called me.” “He broke my phone.” “You could have come back.” Aurora looked towards the green neon bleeding over the wet pavement. “I thought you’d shut the door.” “I would have taken it off the hinges.” “You sounded finished with me.” “I was furious with you.” “They felt the same from where I stood.” Eva covered her mouth. Her eyes shone, but she refused the tears the way she once refused sleep on long coach journeys, jaw fixed against surrender. “I waited outside your flat,” she said. “In Cardiff. Three nights.” Aurora faced her. “When?” “After the October message. I took leave. Your neighbour told me you’d moved.” “I was in A&E.” Eva’s fingers fell from her lips. “Which one?” “He drove me to Newport.” The bar seemed to contract around the sentence. Cutlery knocked against a plate in the snug. A bus passed outside, its tyres hissing through standing water. Eva’s chair gave a small creak beneath her grip. “Was that when—” “No. The wrist was a swing set when I was seven. You know that.” “I know. I just don’t know what I know any more.” Aurora pushed her cuff back. The pale crescent sat unchanged against the blue veins. “This one stayed innocent.” Eva reached across the table, then stopped before touching her. Aurora looked at the suspended hand. Short nails now, no green varnish. A thin white line crossed Eva’s knuckle, unfamiliar. “Where did you get that?” Eva curled her fingers. “Broken mug. Tom left it by the sink, I knocked it off, caught it before it hit the floor. Stupid.” “You always catch falling things.” “Not always.” Neither moved. From the snug came another call. “Eva, chips!” Eva closed her eyes for a beat. Aurora turned her wrist and placed her hand beneath Eva’s, palm to palm. No squeeze. No absolution. Just the old measurement: Eva’s fingers a fraction shorter, both their hands colder than they should have been. “You could sit down,” Aurora said. “Properly, this time.” Eva opened her eyes. “My colleagues—” “Have wine. Silas will bring enough chips to sedate them.” From behind the bar, Silas lifted one brow. “I heard that.” “You were meant to.” Eva’s thumb shifted against the heel of Aurora’s hand. “I’ve got twenty minutes.” “You always did underestimate how long things took.” “Twenty-five, then.” Aurora drew the second chair closer to the table with her foot. Eva glanced towards the snug, picked up her phone and typed with one hand while keeping the other where it rested. “I told them to start without me.” “They already did.” “I know.” Eva set the phone aside. Her coat slipped from the back of the chair and pooled on the floor, but neither of them bent to retrieve it.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Eva Morgan had once [once]"
dialogueSentences203
tagDensity0.074
leniency0.148
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.01
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2625
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
88.57% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2625
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"measured"
count1
2
word"traced"
count2
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"perfect"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"measured"
2"traced"
3"silence"
4"perfect"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences184
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences184
filterMatches
0"notice"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences373
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2625
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions35
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions131
wordCount1590
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity3.65
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity6
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Dean1
Street1
October1
Raven1
Nest1
Vienna1
Morgan1
Aurora42
Cardiff1
Eva58
Berlin1
Silas10
Barry1
Island1
Llandaff1
Are1
Sunday1
Evan1
London1
Rain2
One3
persons
0"Morgan"
1"Aurora"
2"Eva"
3"Silas"
4"Are"
5"Evan"
6"London"
7"Rain"
8"One"
places
0"Dean"
1"Street"
2"Raven"
3"Vienna"
4"Cardiff"
5"Berlin"
6"Barry"
7"Island"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences118
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2625
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences373
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs285
mean9.21
std11.42
cv1.239
sampleLengths
047
144
27
38
44
511
62
71
835
93
106
1137
127
1366
1443
156
161
1720
187
194
206
213
2214
234
242
254
2610
2724
2819
294
3010
315
322
335
3415
3529
364
376
383
396
402
414
4241
435
446
457
463
4713
482
498
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences184
matches
0"been fourteen"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs282
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences373
ratio0.003
matches
0"One complained about water in his shoe; another pointed towards the snug beneath a framed map of Vienna."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1090
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.02018348623853211
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0009174311926605505
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences373
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences373
mean7.04
std5.49
cv0.78
sampleLengths
017
115
215
313
48
523
67
78
84
911
102
111
1211
1313
1411
153
166
175
1818
1914
207
2125
2215
2326
2413
2511
2611
278
286
291
3020
317
324
336
343
355
369
374
382
394
403
417
425
434
4415
456
4613
474
4810
495
41.96% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats30
diversityRatio0.2520107238605898
totalSentences373
uniqueOpeners94
83.86% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences159
matches
0"Then Eva’s phone lit on"
1"Once, she and Eva had"
2"Even that had changed."
3"Just the old measurement: Eva’s"
ratio0.025
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences159
matches
0"His silver signet ring clicked"
1"He had removed his jacket"
2"Her companions pressed around her."
3"She had worn chipped green"
4"Her dark hair ended in"
5"Her face had not changed"
6"Her fingers had locked around"
7"He took the tumbler from"
8"It vanished when Aurora came"
9"His gaze touched Eva, measured"
10"She glanced towards the rain-threaded"
11"She pulled the cuff down,"
12"She set it down without"
13"She had always filled silence"
14"Her fingers closed over the"
15"He kept his back turned."
16"She had spent years learning"
17"Her expression altered, the mouth"
18"She turned it face down."
19"They had been fourteen and"
ratio0.17
44.91% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount132
totalSentences159
matches
0"Rain varnished Dean Street and"
1"Aurora watched it through the"
2"Each flash of the sign"
3"Silas sat at the far"
4"His silver signet ring clicked"
5"He had removed his jacket"
6"Aurora told him"
7"The door opened, dragging wet"
8"Aurora reached for pint glasses"
9"A woman near the back"
10"Her companions pressed around her."
11"The woman stood among them"
12"Aurora knew the tilt of"
13"Eva Morgan had once cut"
14"She had worn chipped green"
15"The woman by the door"
16"Her dark hair ended in"
17"A gold band sat on"
18"Time had pared her down"
19"Her face had not changed"
ratio0.83
62.89% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences159
matches
0"Now her gaze snagged there"
1"Now she inspected each sentence"
ratio0.013
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences63
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"One of Eva’s colleagues cheered as if released from a long captivity."
1"A bus passed outside, its tyres hissing through standing water."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"he announced (announce)"
1"Eva murmured (murmur)"
2"Eva continued (continue)"
dialogueSentences203
tagDensity0.064
leniency0.128
rawRatio0.231
effectiveRatio0.03
90.7395%