Run: 2026-07-09-01KX40YZJG8338F1NFAXKRB6H2

Run Details

Duration:
1m 12s
Cost:
$0.108755
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The dead man lay between a shuttered apothecary stall and the edge of the northbound platform, his right hand stretched toward the tracks as if the last train had departed without him. Detective Harlow Quinn stopped three paces short of the body. No trains had run through the station in forty-seven years. Behind her, the tunnel swallowed the white glare of the portable crime-scene lamps. Old tiles sweated beneath flaking posters, and a rusted roundel still declared CAMDEN ROAD in a typeface that belonged to another London. Yet the abandoned platform was crowded with evidence of recent occupation. Canvas awnings sagged from iron hooks. Folding counters stood locked behind brass grilles. Hand-painted signs advertised tinctures, reliquaries, dream salt, memories witnessed and unwitnessed. A bitter smell of burnt rosemary hung over everything, threaded with wet brick, hot copper and the faint animal reek of bone. Quinn glanced at the worn leather watch on her left wrist. Two seventeen in the morning. “Who found him?” The constable behind her shifted his weight. “Woman called Kowalski. Over there, ma’am.” The woman in question sat on an overturned crate beyond the scene tape. Curly red hair framed a pale, freckled face. Round glasses magnified green eyes fixed on the corpse. A worn leather satchel rested between her boots, clutched in both hands. Quinn knew the name. She knew the occupation, too. Eva Kowalski, twenty-six. Research assistant at the British Museum’s restricted archives, which was a grand institutional phrase for rooms that officially held water-damaged inventories and politically inconvenient acquisitions. Oxford degree. No criminal record. Two parking fines. Repeatedly adjacent to people Quinn had been trying to understand for six months. Not a coincidence, then. Quinn turned back to the corpse. Dr. Shah crouched beside the dead man in white coveralls, her dark braid tucked down the back. “Male, somewhere between fifty and sixty. No identification. No obvious external trauma except the eyes.” Quinn approached with military care, placing each shoe inside the marked route. The man wore a bottle-green overcoat over a cream shirt, velvet waistcoat and pinstriped trousers. The clothes looked theatrical until Quinn noticed their quality: hand stitching, horn buttons, old repairs done by an expert. His boots were dry despite the wet tunnels. Rings crowded seven fingers, though pale bands showed that someone had removed at least two more. His eyes were open. They had turned entirely black. Not bruised. Not clouded. Black from lid to lid, glossy under the lamps. Quinn had seen ruptured vessels, chemical burns and advanced decomposition. She had once attended a flat where a man had injected printer ink into his own sclera with predictable results. This resembled none of them. “Postmortem change?” she asked. Shah’s mouth tightened. “Not one I’m familiar with.” “Dye?” “I swabbed the left eye. Nothing transferred.” “Bleeding into the globe.” “Both globes, identically, with no visible trauma?” “You’re the doctor.” “And you’re the detective. We take turns being disappointed.” Quinn crouched. Her knees protested. Eighteen years of pavements, stairwells and cheap office chairs had begun submitting invoices. “Time of death?” “Body temperature suggests within three hours, but the station’s cold and we don’t know how long he was exposed before death. Rigor is inconsistent.” “Inconsistent how?” “Jaw and neck, yes. Upper limbs, no. Lower limbs…” Shah looked toward the man’s shoes. “Advanced.” “That sequence is wrong.” “Yes.” Quinn studied the outstretched right hand. The fingertips stopped twenty centimetres from a thin chalk line drawn parallel to the platform edge. The line was studded with blackened candle stubs and tiny bundles of herbs bound in red thread. None appeared disturbed. “Cause?” “Possibly cardiac. Possibly toxin. Possibly something I’ll regret promising to identify.” “Any needle marks?” “Not yet.” “Defensive injuries?” “None visible.” “Then why is his hand stretched out?” Shah followed Quinn’s gaze. “Agonal movement?” “No.” It came too sharply. Shah glanced at her, but Quinn kept looking. The dead man’s coat had bunched beneath his left shoulder. His right sleeve lay smooth against the tiles. If he had crawled, dust should have marked his palm and forearm. The palm was clean. More than clean: soft, pink, untouched by the soot griming the floor around it. Someone had arranged the arm. Quinn stood. “Who moved him?” “No one, according to the first response.” “Then someone moved him before they arrived.” From beyond the tape, Eva Kowalski said, “I don’t think anyone did.” Quinn turned. Eva tucked a curl behind her left ear. The gesture had the brisk, unconscious quality of a tell. “You found the body,” Quinn said. “Yes.” “Which gives you the privilege of answering questions, not interrupting them.” “I’m sorry.” She sounded sorry. Quinn distrusted that more than defiance. “Bag her hands,” Quinn told the constable. Eva blinked. “What?” “For trace evidence. Unless you’d prefer to explain later why your fibres are on the victim.” “I didn’t touch him.” “Excellent. Then this will confirm it.” The constable moved toward her with paper evidence sacks. Eva reluctantly released her satchel. Quinn surveyed the platform. “How did you get in?” Eva looked toward the tunnel mouth. “Through the service entrance.” “It was chained from the inside.” “There’s another entrance.” “Where?” “I can’t show you now.” “Can’t or won’t?” “Can’t.” Eva swallowed. “It’s gone.” The constable paused mid-bag. Shah looked down at the corpse with exaggerated focus. Quinn crossed to the tape. At five foot nine, she stood a head above Eva despite the crate. “Entrances don’t go.” “This one does.” “What is this place, Miss Kowalski?” The green eyes flicked toward the locked stalls. “A market.” “I gathered that. Borough licensing hasn’t.” “It isn’t that kind of market.” The labels on the stalls nudged at Quinn’s patience. Bottled Luck. Bespoke Hauntings. Teeth Bought, No Questions. Some elaborate immersive theatre, perhaps, or a clearinghouse for stolen antiquities dressed up to flatter wealthy eccentrics. Either could explain Kowalski’s presence. Neither explained the dead man’s eyes. “When did it close?” Quinn asked. “Just before one.” “Why?” “The Market closes when there’s blood.” Shah’s head came up. Quinn let the silence stretch. People rushed to fill silence when they feared it. Eva did. “There was a bell. Everyone packed. I stayed because I heard someone fall.” “You stayed in a black market after an alarm while every vendor fled.” “I was looking for something.” “Stolen museum property?” “No.” “What?” Eva glanced at the corpse. “A compass.” Quinn watched her face. “North difficult to find underground?” “A particular compass.” “Describe it.” “Small. Brass. Verdigris on the casing. Protective sigils etched into the face.” Quinn had seen it. A round bulge distorted the dead man’s waistcoat pocket. She did not look at it now. Instead, she held Eva’s gaze. “And what does this particular compass do?” “It points toward openings.” “Doors.” “Not exactly.” “Be exact.” Eva tucked her hair behind her left ear again, though the curl had not fallen loose. “It points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal.” The word supernatural passed through Quinn like a draught under a door. Three years ago, DS Morris had died in a locked cellar with no wounds, no poison in his blood and frost crystallised inside his lungs on the hottest night of July. Quinn had spent six weeks dismantling the cellar brick by brick. She had found no vent, no refrigerant, no mechanism. Only a black smear on the wall and Morris’s final note in handwriting that deteriorated into a jagged line: Don’t let it see— She shut the memory down. “Convenient,” she said. “I know how it sounds.” “Do you?” “Yes.” “Because it sounds like an educated woman attempting to obstruct a murder inquiry with nonsense.” Eva’s chin rose. “Then arrest me.” “Don’t tempt me.” Quinn returned to the body. She crouched beside the waistcoat and slipped two gloved fingers into the pocket. The compass fitted her palm. It was small and unexpectedly heavy, its brass casing crusted green at the hinge. Sigils ringed the cloudy face, etched with such precision they seemed printed rather than cut. Beneath the glass, a black needle trembled. It did not point north. It pointed at the dead man’s chest. Quinn tilted the compass. The needle swung, quivered, and returned to the same point. “Magnet,” she said. Eva remained behind the tape, both hands now enclosed in paper sacks. “Move it away from him.” Quinn rose and stepped backward. The needle continued to point at the corpse. Five paces. Eight. At ten, it wavered and snapped toward the tunnel behind her. Not north. Quinn had checked the station plans before descending. North lay over her right shoulder. She walked toward the tunnel. The needle pointed into its darkness. When she retreated, it swung again toward the body. Shah watched with a stillness that betrayed more concern than movement would have. “Some form of directional transmitter,” Quinn said. “In his chest?” Eva asked. Quinn ignored her and returned to the corpse. The evidence still refused to cohere. The mismatched rigor. The clean hand. The undisturbed chalk. The dry boots. The missing rings. She examined the tiles around the body. Dust, soot and crumbled grout formed a grey skin over the floor. First-response shoe prints approached from the western stairwell. Shah’s smaller tread circled the victim. Eva’s prints, identified by the constable near the tape, came from the tunnel and stopped two metres from the body. The dead man had left no prints at all. Quinn bent closer. Not no prints. There, beside his right boot, a shallow crescent in the dust. Another by his hip. Four faint, curved marks around him, almost lost beneath the wash of white light. She pointed. “Photograph those.” The scene examiner moved in with his camera. Quinn looked up. Directly above the body, an old enamel sign hung from the tiled wall: WAY OUT, its arrow pointing left. The sign’s chrome trim had tarnished everywhere except for four bright patches along the lower edge. Something had gripped it. She rose and approached the wall. A strand of dark green wool snagged on one bright patch. The victim’s overcoat was dark green. Quinn looked from the sign to the floor. “He didn’t walk here,” she said. Shah frowned. “He was carried?” “Not along the platform. There are no tracks. And whoever arranged his arm did it without crossing the chalk line or leaving impressions around the body.” “Someone cleaned up.” “They’d have cleaned the body-shaped gap, too.” Eva stood now, paper-sacked hands held awkwardly before her. “Detective—” “Quiet.” Quinn stepped to the sign. Beneath it, the tiles bore a black oval stain roughly the width of a doorway. At first she had taken it for decades of tunnel grime. Now she saw that its edges were too sharp. More tellingly, dust coated the tiles inside the oval but not evenly. It formed long downward streaks, as if gravity had briefly changed direction across the wall. Her pulse slowed. It always did when the shape of a case began to emerge. Not understanding. Shape. She returned to the corpse and considered the hand again. Clean palm. Extended fingers. Not arranged to suggest crawling. Reaching. She sighted along the arm. It did not point toward the tracks. Not precisely. The fingers aligned with a gap between two extinguished candles in the chalk boundary. At the gap lay a tiny object the same grey-white colour as the grout. “Light.” The constable aimed a torch. A small disc rested against the chalk, carved from bone. A hole pierced its centre. One edge was stained red. Quinn indicated it. “Bag it separately.” Eva’s breath caught. Quinn turned. “You recognise that.” “It’s an entry token.” “To this market.” “Yes.” “Yours?” “No. Mine’s in my satchel.” The constable opened the leather satchel under Quinn’s direction. Books crowded its interior, their spines cracked and bristling with paper slips. Beneath a notebook he found a bone disc in a small drawstring pouch. Quinn compared it to the one near the corpse. Same diameter. Same central hole. Eva’s was carved with a spiral; the dead man’s showed a symbol like a closed eye. “One token per person?” Quinn asked. “Yes.” “Then he entered somehow.” “Yes.” “But he didn’t come down the stairs. He didn’t walk along the platform, and you say the other entrance disappeared.” Eva stared at the black oval on the wall. “I said my entrance disappeared.” Quinn followed her gaze. The compass needle had settled once more. It pointed not at the corpse now, but through him—toward the stained tiles beneath the WAY OUT sign. The dead man’s chest rose. Shah recoiled so violently she struck an evidence marker. The constable swore. Quinn’s hand went to the baton at her belt before training overruled instinct. She dropped beside the body and pressed two fingers to his neck. Nothing. No pulse. No breath. Yet the waistcoat lifted again. Once. Twice. Not with the expansion of lungs. Something beneath the cream shirt moved independently, crawling under the cloth from the sternum toward the throat. Shah reached for her shears. “We need to open his shirt.” “Wait.” Quinn caught her wrist. A sharp ticking came from the compass. The black needle spun in frantic circles. Under the dead man’s shirt, the moving bulge stopped. His black eyes turned toward Quinn. Only the eyes moved. The head remained fixed, jaw locked with rigor, lips slightly parted. The pupils could not be distinguished from the rest, but Quinn felt the focus land on her with cold, deliberate weight. Eva whispered, “It isn’t him.” The corpse’s right hand snapped shut. Bone clicked against tile. The entry token vanished inside his fist. Every lamp on the platform went out. Darkness struck whole and absolute. Someone shouted. Metal clattered. Quinn heard Shah breathing beside her, too fast. From the wall came a noise like paper tearing underwater. Quinn drew her torch and thumbed it on. The beam found the body. The green overcoat lay flat on the tiles. Shirt, waistcoat and trousers had collapsed beneath it, empty except for a scattering of rings. The compass remained where Quinn had dropped it. Its needle pointed at the black oval beneath the sign. The oval was no longer a stain. Beyond it stretched another platform under gas-blue flames, crowded with silent figures in masks. At their feet, the dead man stood barefoot, his black eyes fixed on Quinn. His closed fist pressed to his chest. Then the opening narrowed. Quinn lunged, but Eva seized the back of her coat. “Don’t.” The black doorway pinched to a vertical seam and disappeared. Solid tile met Quinn’s outstretched glove. For several seconds no one spoke. Quinn pressed her palm to the cold wall. No joints. No mechanism. No residual warmth. Above her, the enamel sign creaked gently on its hooks. WAY OUT. The arrow now pointed toward the wall. Quinn looked down at the empty clothes, at the sootless crescents where a body had arrived without crossing the floor, and at the compass whose needle had finally gone still. Three years ago, Morris had died in a locked room. No, Quinn thought. Not locked. The room had possessed a door. She simply had not known where to look.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences113
tagDensity0.124
leniency0.248
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.08% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2520
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
2
adverb"precisely"
count1
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
4
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"reluctantly"
2"precisely"
3"slightly"
4"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
66.27% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2520
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"weight"
count2
1
word"velvet"
count1
2
word"predictable"
count1
3
word"familiar"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"silence"
count2
6
word"etched"
count2
7
word"trembled"
count1
8
word"quivered"
count1
9
word"wavered"
count1
10
word"pulse"
count2
11
word"aligned"
count1
12
word"warmth"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"velvet"
2"predictable"
3"familiar"
4"flicked"
5"silence"
6"etched"
7"trembled"
8"quivered"
9"wavered"
10"pulse"
11"aligned"
12"warmth"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences264
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences264
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"see"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences363
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2519
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Teeth Bought, No Questions."
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions106
wordCount1999
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity2.75
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity6
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn55
London1
Kowalski3
British1
Museum1
Shah13
Eva22
Luck1
Hauntings1
Bought1
Questions1
Morris3
July1
Don1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Kowalski"
3"Museum"
4"Shah"
5"Eva"
6"Morris"
places
0"London"
1"British"
globalScore0.124
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences146
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"seemed printed rather than cut"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.397
wordCount2519
matches
0"not at the corpse now, but through him"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences363
matches
0"showed that someone"
1"saw that its"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs219
mean11.5
std13.51
cv1.174
sampleLengths
032
110
210
392
416
53
613
742
84
954
104
116
1232
1312
1458
154
165
1713
1835
194
208
211
227
234
247
253
269
2718
283
2924
302
3116
324
331
3442
351
3611
373
382
392
402
417
426
431
4412
4548
465
475
487
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences264
matches
0"was studded"
1"was carved"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs328
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences363
ratio0.008
matches
0"Only a black smear on the wall and Morris’s final note in handwriting that deteriorated into a jagged line: Don’t let it see—"
1"Eva’s was carved with a spiral; the dead man’s showed a symbol like a closed eye."
2"It pointed not at the corpse now, but through him—toward the stained tiles beneath the WAY OUT sign."
82.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2011
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"North lay over her"
1"same grey-white colour"
2"under gas-blue flames,"
adverbCount62
adverbRatio0.030830432620586774
lyAdverbCount24
lyAdverbRatio0.011934361014420686
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences363
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences363
mean6.94
std5.4
cv0.778
sampleLengths
032
110
210
313
422
511
66
77
811
922
1011
115
123
137
146
1513
168
179
1812
194
205
213
2225
232
243
253
2613
274
286
291
3016
3115
3212
3315
3419
358
3616
374
385
392
402
419
4210
4320
445
454
463
475
481
497
58.22% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats17
diversityRatio0.3774104683195592
totalSentences363
uniqueOpeners137
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount8
totalSentences218
matches
0"Repeatedly adjacent to people Quinn"
1"More than clean: soft, pink,"
2"Instead, she held Eva’s gaze."
3"Only a black smear on"
4"Directly above the body, an"
5"More tellingly, dust coated the"
6"Only the eyes moved."
7"Then the opening narrowed."
ratio0.037
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences218
matches
0"She knew the occupation, too."
1"His boots were dry despite"
2"His eyes were open."
3"They had turned entirely black."
4"She had once attended a"
5"Her knees protested."
6"It came too sharply."
7"His right sleeve lay smooth"
8"She sounded sorry."
9"She did not look at"
10"She had found no vent,"
11"She shut the memory down."
12"She crouched beside the waistcoat"
13"It was small and unexpectedly"
14"It did not point north."
15"It pointed at the dead"
16"She walked toward the tunnel."
17"She examined the tiles around"
18"She rose and approached the"
19"It formed long downward streaks,"
ratio0.142
86.15% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount163
totalSentences218
matches
0"The dead man lay between"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn stopped three"
2"Canvas awnings sagged from iron"
3"A bitter smell of burnt"
4"Quinn glanced at the worn"
5"The constable behind her shifted"
6"The woman in question sat"
7"A worn leather satchel rested"
8"Quinn knew the name."
9"She knew the occupation, too."
10"Eva Kowalski, twenty-six."
11"Quinn turned back to the"
12"Shah crouched beside the dead"
13"Quinn approached with military care,"
14"The man wore a bottle-green"
15"The clothes looked theatrical until"
16"His boots were dry despite"
17"Rings crowded seven fingers, though"
18"His eyes were open."
19"They had turned entirely black."
ratio0.748
68.81% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences218
matches
0"If he had crawled, dust"
1"Either could explain Kowalski’s presence."
2"Now she saw that its"
ratio0.014
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences77
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The dead man lay between a shuttered apothecary stall and the edge of the northbound platform, his right hand stretched toward the tracks as if the last train h…"
1"Research assistant at the British Museum’s restricted archives, which was a grand institutional phrase for rooms that officially held water-damaged inventories …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Eva whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences113
tagDensity0.106
leniency0.212
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.018
91.7174%