Run: 2026-07-09-01KX415ETK1M43DMSF5B9XCHBR

Run Details

Duration:
1m 5s
Cost:
$0.097890
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain made mirrors of Soho. Detective Harlow Quinn ran through them, boots striking fractured green light from the sign above the Raven’s Nest. The suspect was already half a block ahead, a dark coat whipping around his knees as he shoved between two men under a pub awning. “Tomás Herrera!” Quinn shouted. “Stop!” Herrera glanced back. That cost him speed. Not much, but enough for Quinn to see his face under the flare of a passing cab: olive skin gone pale, short curls pasted to his forehead, warm brown eyes wide with something that looked less like guilt than fear. Then he ran harder. Quinn dropped off the kerb, slapped one hand against the bonnet of a taxi, and vaulted the corner before the driver could finish swearing. A bus roared past close enough to tug at her coat. Rain needled her eyes. Her lungs burned with the cold. Herrera cut right into an alley. Quinn followed, shoulder clipping wet brick. Bins narrowed the passage. Grease and rainwater swirled around her boots, carrying cigarette ends into a blocked drain. Herrera kicked a stack of empty beer crates behind him. Plastic clattered across the alley. She hurdled the first and stamped through the rest. Military precision, Morris used to call it. As if discipline were an inherited defect. He had said it the night before he vanished, smiling across two paper cups of station coffee. Three years, and she could still hear him. Herrera hit the far street and nearly went under a delivery van. Its horn bellowed. He twisted aside, one hand at his throat, and Quinn caught a flash of silver: the Saint Christopher medallion she had seen in surveillance photographs. She had seen other things too. Herrera entering the Raven’s Nest after closing with a medical bag. Herrera leaving at four in the morning without it. Blood on the service door, scrubbed but not scrubbed well enough. A dead informant in Fitzrovia with no wounds and lungs full of black water, though he had died six floors above ground. The informant’s final text had contained two words. ASK HERRERA. Quinn surged across the road. Her worn leather watch slid against her left wrist. 12:17. The arrest team was meant to be outside the bar at midnight. No one had arrived. Radio interference, control had said, though she had been standing beneath clear sky before the rain began and could hear every taxi dispatcher in London bleeding through the channel. Herrera reached Charing Cross Road and veered north. He knew where he was going. Quinn keyed her radio. “Quinn to control. Suspect proceeding north on Charing Cross Road, approaching Cambridge Circus. Request immediate assistance.” Static answered. “Harlow Quinn, detective sergeant, shoulder number—” A voice whispered beneath the hiss. Not her name. Not words she could make out. A soft, wet murmur like someone speaking from the bottom of a bath. She ripped the earpiece free. Herrera slipped through the late-night crowd at the crossing. Quinn saw the strategy in it. He moved where she could not safely draw her weapon, using bodies as cover. Theatre patrons huddled under umbrellas. Clubbers spilled laughing from a doorway. A cyclist shot between them with a curse. Quinn shouldered through, holding her warrant card high. “Police. Move.” People moved too slowly. London always did. Suspicion first, recognition second, compliance a distant third. Herrera gained twenty metres. He glanced back again and mouthed something. Go. Or no. A black cab passed between them. When it cleared, Herrera had vanished. Quinn stopped beneath the awning of a shuttered bookshop, pulse battering her throat. Rain drummed on canvas. Ahead lay three possible routes: the main road north, a narrow turning toward Shaftesbury Avenue, and the mouth of an alley between a betting shop and a darkened chemist. A drop of blood marked the alley wall. Quinn touched it. Fresh. Rain diluted it pink against her fingertip. She entered the alley. Herrera had cut his left hand, probably on the crates or a fence. Drops led past service doors and overflowing rubbish bags, then through an iron gate standing ajar at the far end. Beyond it, concrete steps descended to a sunken courtyard. No public entrance. No street sign. Just boarded windows, ivy black with rain, and another stairwell sinking below ground behind a chain-link barrier. Herrera crouched at the padlock. Quinn drew her baton. “Don’t.” He froze. The courtyard boxed them in, brick walls rising on all sides. Rainwater poured down the steps and gathered around Herrera’s shoes. He kept one hand near the lock, the other clamped over his bleeding palm. “Stand up,” Quinn said. “Turn around slowly.” He obeyed. He looked exhausted. Terrified too, but not of her. His gaze kept sliding toward the dark stairwell behind the barrier. “You should leave,” he said. His Spanish accent thickened under strain. Quinn had heard it on recordings, usually smoothed almost flat by years in London. Now Seville surfaced in every vowel. “Hands where I can see them.” Herrera raised his hands. Blood ran along his left forearm, tracing the raised seam of an old knife scar before dripping from his elbow. Quinn moved closer. “You’re under arrest on suspicion of obstructing an investigation and conspiracy to supply controlled substances.” “Controlled substances.” His laugh came breathless and bitter. “Yes. That will be simpler for the paperwork.” “What was in the case you carried into the Raven’s Nest?” “Medicine.” “For whom?” His eyes flicked to the stairwell. Quinn saw the movement. “Who are you meeting?” “No one, if we are lucky.” “Where’s the case?” “Gone.” “Morris asked you questions three years ago.” That landed harder than the threat of arrest. Herrera’s face emptied. Quinn stepped down another stair. “Detective Sergeant Andrew Morris. He visited your flat twice. He spoke to you outside St Thomas’ four days before he disappeared.” “I remember him.” “Then you remember what he wanted.” “He wanted an explanation he could survive.” Quinn tightened her grip on the baton. “Choose your next words carefully.” “There are no careful words for this.” The darkness behind Herrera shifted. Quinn looked past him. The chain-link barrier sealed a disused service entrance, its warning signs bleached almost white. Beyond it, tiled steps descended beneath an arch bearing the remains of an Underground roundel. CAM— survived in peeling blue letters. Camden was miles north. This entrance could not possibly be here. She blinked rain from her eyes. The roundel remained. Herrera turned sharply. “They moved it.” A dull metallic chime sounded below. Another answered farther away, followed by a swell of voices. Not echoes. A crowd. Warm amber light bloomed at the foot of the stairs. The padlock hung open. Quinn had watched Herrera crouch beside it, but she had not seen a key. His raised hands were empty. “What did you do?” she said. “Nothing.” The gate creaked inward by itself. Smells climbed the stairwell: coal smoke, orange peel, hot iron, damp wool. Beneath them lay something medicinal and sweet, like ether poured over rotting flowers. Herrera reached under his shirt. Quinn snapped the baton up. “Hand out. Now.” Slowly, he drew out the Saint Christopher medallion. A second object hung behind it on a black cord: a small disc the colour of old ivory. Bone, Quinn thought. The disc had been carved with a symbol resembling an eye crossed by a railway line. Herrera pulled the cord over his head. “You cannot come through without this.” “Through to what?” He looked almost sorry for her. “The Market.” A cry rose from below—high, animal, cut abruptly short. The crowd did not quiet. Quinn’s skin tightened across her shoulders. Herrera backed toward the gate. “Detective, listen to me. I did not kill your informant.” “I didn’t say he was dead.” “No. But he is.” “Where’s Morris?” Rain hissed in the courtyard. Herrera stopped moving. Quinn descended until only the gate separated them. She could smell sweat on him, sharp with adrenaline. “Tell me where he is.” “I don’t know.” “You’re lying.” “I know where he went.” Herrera’s voice dropped. “That is not the same thing.” The whisper from her radio returned, though the earpiece dangled against her collar. This time she heard it clearly. Harlow. Morris’s voice. Her baton struck the gate as her hand jerked. Herrera recoiled. “What?” She grabbed the radio and tore it from her coat. Static crackled from the speaker. Harlow, don’t— The transmission dissolved into a low chuckle. Quinn flung the radio onto the steps. It bounced once, then went silent. Herrera stared at it. “They know you.” “Cheap trick.” “They know what you bring with you. Grief. Guilt. Names.” He stepped through the gate. “Especially names.” Quinn caught his coat and slammed him against the chain link. The bone token swung between them. “Who are they?” Metal stalls crowded the abandoned platform below, their lamps burning blue, green, and feverish gold. Figures moved between them. Some looked ordinary: a woman in a fur coat, a boy carrying a wicker cage, an old man pushing a barrow of stoppered bottles. Others refused comprehension. A vendor bent over a brass scale with antlers rising through his hood. Something tall crossed behind him on too many jointed legs. Quinn’s grip loosened. Herrera twisted free, but he did not run. “This is why I told him to stop.” “Morris came here?” “He followed someone through, as you followed me.” “And you let him?” “I tried to turn him back.” Quinn saw again Morris’s flat after the disappearance: one plate in the sink, reading glasses folded beside a newspaper, his coat missing from the hook. No blood. No struggle. A service pistol recovered weeks later from a locked evidence room he had never entered. The official inquiry had suggested exhaustion, stress, voluntary disappearance. Quinn had responded by putting a chair through a plasterboard wall. “You said you knew where he went.” Herrera looked down the steps. “Not here. Not then. The Market moves every full moon.” Quinn glanced up. Through the rain, above the cramped slice of courtyard sky, the moon showed as a white blur behind racing cloud. “Where are we?” “An abandoned station beneath Camden.” “We’re in Soho.” “Not beyond the gate.” The impossible station waited below, its curved tiled ceiling furred with soot. The old tracks had been boarded over and turned into a second aisle. Signs hung from hooks: letters that rearranged when Quinn tried to read them. A woman lifted a jar containing a human shadow that beat against the glass. Coins clicked. Someone screamed a price. Someone else screamed without words. Herrera started down. “Stop,” Quinn said. He did, but did not turn. “You’re still under arrest.” “If you arrest me here, neither of us leaves.” “Convenient.” “I am a medic, Detective Quinn.” “You lost your licence.” “For treating patients the NHS does not believe exist.” He looked back over his shoulder. “There is a child down there who has been poisoned. I have perhaps twenty minutes to buy what she needs. You delayed me for eleven.” “You expect me to believe that?” “No. I expect you to decide whether disbelief is worth her life.” He descended. Quinn raised one foot to follow, then held. Every instinct she trusted objected. No backup. No communications. Unknown numbers, unknown exits, unknown rules. She had spent eighteen years learning that the first step into hostile territory should never be blind. The amber light flickered. For an instant Morris stood on the platform. Grey suit. Loosened tie. Rain darkening his shoulders, though no rain reached below. He faced away from her beside a stall draped in red silk. “Morris!” The figure turned. Its face was smooth skin from hairline to jaw. The market lights went out. Quinn heard running footsteps retreat along the platform. “Herrera!” A blue flame flared in his hand. He stood ten steps below, the bone token clenched between his fingers. “It wants you to follow.” “What does?” “The place. The people in it. Perhaps something else.” His face hovered above the flame, all hard planes and black hollows. “Once you enter, do not eat. Do not give anyone your full name. If you hear someone you love calling from the tunnels, you did not hear them.” “You seem to know the rules.” “I learned them by surviving.” Behind Quinn, the gate began to swing shut. She caught it with her boot. The chain-link frame shuddered. Beyond the courtyard, sirens wailed on the wet streets, faint but approaching. Backup, perhaps. Ordinary London. Procedure. Arrest reports. Fluorescent interview rooms where men lied in predictable ways. Below, Herrera’s flame illuminated a strip of wet platform. A trail of blood marked his path. The same dark red had stained the cuff of Morris’s missing coat in a photograph sent anonymously six months after he vanished. Quinn had studied every pixel until she could see it with her eyes closed. In one corner of that image, almost lost beneath the evidence marker, lay a carved disc of yellowed bone. The gate pressed harder against her boot. She could stay. Call in the entrance. Bring armed officers, forensic teams, lights, cameras. By then the full moon might pass. The Market would move, leaving only a bricked tunnel and another report her superiors would bury. Or she could follow a suspect into a place that knew her name. Her watch ticked against her pulse. Quinn collapsed her baton, holstered it, and drew her pistol. She checked the magazine by touch. Fifteen rounds. A fact. Steel, brass, cordite. Things that obeyed rules. She stepped through. The gate slammed behind her. At once the courtyard vanished. A tiled wall sealed the top of the stairs, damp and seamless, with no gate, no rain, no route back. Herrera let out a slow breath. “You should not have done that.” “Story of my career.” The market lights surged awake. Every conversation on the platform stopped. Faces turned toward Quinn. Human faces. Masked faces. Faces with pupils like silver pins. At the nearest stall, the antlered vendor lifted its hooded head and inhaled deeply. Then it smiled. Herrera closed his fist around the bone token. “Stay close.” Quinn aimed her pistol at the floor and descended beside him. Somewhere beyond the platform, in the black throat of the tunnel, Morris called her name again.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences81
tagDensity0.123
leniency0.247
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
89.50% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2381
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count3
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"carefully"
2"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
74.80% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2381
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"fractured"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"tracing"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count1
4
word"echoes"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"racing"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"silk"
count1
9
word"footsteps"
count1
10
word"predictable"
count1
highlights
0"fractured"
1"pulse"
2"tracing"
3"flicked"
4"echoes"
5"whisper"
6"racing"
7"flickered"
8"silk"
9"footsteps"
10"predictable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences250
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences250
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences321
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2380
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Somewhere beyond the platform, in the black throat of the tunnel, Morris called her name again."
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions109
wordCount1936
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity2.07
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Harlow3
Quinn40
Raven2
Nest2
Herrera31
Morris6
Saint2
Christopher2
Fitzrovia1
London4
Charing1
Cross1
Road1
Shaftesbury1
Avenue1
Spanish1
Seville1
Underground1
Market1
Rain6
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Herrera"
4"Morris"
5"Saint"
6"Christopher"
7"Market"
8"Rain"
places
0"Soho"
1"Fitzrovia"
2"London"
3"Charing"
4"Cross"
5"Road"
6"Shaftesbury"
7"Avenue"
8"Seville"
globalScore0.467
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences144
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.42
wordCount2380
matches
0"Not much, but enough for Quinn to see his face under the flare of a passin"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences321
matches
0"learning that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs186
mean12.8
std14.16
cv1.106
sampleLengths
05
143
25
33
444
54
645
76
839
99
1031
118
1240
136
1461
152
165
1755
188
196
2020
212
226
236
2422
255
2648
278
282
2915
304
317
321
332
3412
3546
368
3711
384
3942
4023
415
425
432
4435
457
462
4720
485
4926
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences250
matches
0"was meant"
1"been carved"
2"been boarded"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs359
matches
0"was going"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences321
ratio0.009
matches
0"CAM— survived in peeling blue letters."
1"A cry rose from below—high, animal, cut abruptly short."
2"Harlow, don’t—"
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1941
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"below—high, animal, cut"
adverbCount54
adverbRatio0.027820710973724884
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.0072127769191138585
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences321
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences321
mean7.41
std5.82
cv0.785
sampleLengths
05
118
225
34
41
53
64
740
84
924
1011
114
126
136
146
154
1614
1710
185
199
207
217
2217
238
2412
253
2625
276
2811
299
3011
3122
328
332
345
359
361
3712
384
3929
408
416
424
4316
442
456
466
473
486
4913
58.65% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.36875
totalSentences320
uniqueOpeners118
77.52% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences215
matches
0"Then he ran harder."
1"Just boarded windows, ivy black"
2"Slowly, he drew out the"
3"Then it smiled."
4"Somewhere beyond the platform, in"
ratio0.023
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences215
matches
0"Her lungs burned with the"
1"She hurdled the first and"
2"He had said it the"
3"Its horn bellowed."
4"He twisted aside, one hand"
5"She had seen other things"
6"Her worn leather watch slid"
7"He knew where he was"
8"She ripped the earpiece free."
9"He moved where she could"
10"He glanced back again and"
11"She entered the alley."
12"He kept one hand near"
13"He looked exhausted."
14"His gaze kept sliding toward"
15"His Spanish accent thickened under"
16"His laugh came breathless and"
17"His eyes flicked to the"
18"She blinked rain from her"
19"His raised hands were empty."
ratio0.177
46.05% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount178
totalSentences215
matches
0"Rain made mirrors of Soho."
1"Detective Harlow Quinn ran through"
2"The suspect was already half"
3"Herrera glanced back."
4"That cost him speed."
5"Quinn dropped off the kerb,"
6"A bus roared past close"
7"Rain needled her eyes."
8"Her lungs burned with the"
9"Herrera cut right into an"
10"Quinn followed, shoulder clipping wet"
11"Bins narrowed the passage."
12"Grease and rainwater swirled around"
13"Herrera kicked a stack of"
14"Plastic clattered across the alley."
15"She hurdled the first and"
16"Military precision, Morris used to"
17"He had said it the"
18"Herrera hit the far street"
19"Its horn bellowed."
ratio0.828
46.51% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences215
matches
0"As if discipline were an"
1"Now Seville surfaced in every"
ratio0.009
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences68
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Not much, but enough for Quinn to see his face under the flare of a passing cab: olive skin gone pale, short curls pasted to his forehead, warm brown eyes wide …"
1"Quinn saw again Morris’s flat after the disappearance: one plate in the sink, reading glasses folded beside a newspaper, his coat missing from the hook."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Quinn shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences81
tagDensity0.062
leniency0.123
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.025
90.6786%