Run: 2026-07-09-01KX416P6TDFMWK1ZBKGD4GDZW

Run Details

Duration:
43.0s
Cost:
$0.054407
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn stood beneath the rusted roundel of an abandoned Tube station and listened to water drip somewhere in the dark. Camden Town had gone on above them: buses grinding through wet streets, music bleeding from pub doorways, the sour perfume of spilled lager and fried onions. Down here, behind a steel service door concealed by a shuttered chemist, London had a different pulse. Old dust. Cold iron. Stagnant air carrying a faint medicinal sweetness that did not belong underground. Her torch beam cut across tiled walls the colour of old teeth. Most of the station signage had been torn down decades ago. What remained showed only a flake of blue enamel and the tail end of a word: —DEN. Graffiti crawled over it in fluorescent loops, some of it fresh enough to shine. Police tape had been strung across the mouth of the escalator shaft. Quinn paused at it, one hand resting near the leather watch on her left wrist. Ten past one. The call had come through at twelve-thirty, flagged as an unexplained death in a sealed location. The uniform who had rung it in had sounded embarrassed, which generally meant either an important person, a grotesque mess, or something he thought would make him look foolish. This, she had decided before she reached the bottom stair, was the third kind. “You can’t come through there,” said a voice behind her. Quinn turned. A young woman stood in the service doorway, rain darkening the shoulders of her mustard-coloured coat. Curly red hair had escaped whatever attempt had been made to contain it. She wore round glasses fogged at the edges and held the strap of a worn leather satchel against her chest like a shield. Her face was freckled, pale beneath the freckles, and her green eyes had the fixed brightness of someone trying very hard not to show fear. Quinn looked at the satchel, then at the woman’s muddied boots. “And you are?” “Eva Kowalski.” The woman swallowed. “I found him.” “I know.” Quinn’s gaze stayed on her. “That does not answer why you’re still here.” “Because I told the officers this wasn’t—” Eva stopped herself. A small, automatic movement sent a curl behind her left ear. “I told them the scene might be dangerous.” “Dangerous how?” Eva’s mouth tightened. “Not in a way they believed.” Quinn had spent eighteen years in the Metropolitan Police. She had listened to witnesses insist on devils, aliens, witches, government conspiracies, and the ghosts of murdered husbands. Grief distorted memory. Guilt reassembled facts into nonsense. Fear did worse than either. Still, she did not dismiss people before she had examined the evidence. “Show me,” she said. The young woman blinked. “You mean that?” “I mean show me the body.” Quinn ducked under the tape. The escalator had been stripped of its rubber treads and most of its metal panels. It dropped away into blackness, its exposed spine a ladder of corroded steel. Portable scene lights stood at the bottom, turning the old platform hard and white. DS Grant Bell was waiting there with a notebook in one hand and a paper cup in the other. He was a broad, red-faced man in his late thirties whose tie never sat straight. He looked up as Quinn descended the temporary stairway bolted over the remains of the escalator. “Thought you’d be asleep,” Bell said. “I was,” Quinn replied. “Sorry to rob London of its safety.” “You’ve had time to establish that London was safe?” He smiled faintly, then nodded toward the platform. “Victim’s a male, name of Thomas Vale. Forty-eight. Registered dealer in antiques, though his official accounts suggest he made more from being terrible at business than competent at it.” “Cause?” “Looks like a fall. Head trauma. Possibly neck broken on impact.” Bell lowered his voice, amused despite himself. “Except he fell up.” Quinn said nothing. Bell led her through the forensic technicians. The platform was narrower than modern stations, hemmed in by brick arches blackened with age. A derelict train carriage rested in the tunnel beyond, its windows blind with grime. At the far end of the platform, beneath a dead advertising board, a man lay face-down on the tiles. He wore a charcoal overcoat, expensive shoes, and one glove. His right hand was bare, the fingers curled inward. Blood had spread beneath his head in a dark fan, but not enough for the damage she could see along the side of his skull. Above him, perhaps six metres up, the old ceiling curved into an arch of soot-stained brick. There was no balcony. No staircase. No overhead walkway. Only the ceiling. Quinn walked the perimeter without speaking. The technicians knew better than to interrupt. She took in the obvious first: the body, the blood, the scuffed tiles around the dead man’s knees, the broken nail on his bare right hand. Then the less obvious: a line of grey dust disturbed near the platform edge. A solitary boot print headed toward the body and none headed away. The location of the dead man’s umbrella, still folded, lying beneath an old bench three metres from where he had died. No signs of a struggle, at least none that announced themselves. Bell waited beside the body. “He came in through the service entrance. One of the local officers found a loose brick in the alley wall. There’s a sort of passage behind it.” “The same entrance Ms. Kowalski used?” “Apparently. She says she followed him.” Quinn glanced over her shoulder. Eva stood well back from the lights, her satchel clutched close. She stared not at the corpse, but at the ceiling. “Why?” Quinn asked. “She won’t say much. Claims she was here to meet a source.” “A source in an abandoned station.” “Camden’s full of eccentric types.” “Eccentrics tend to meet in cafés.” Bell shrugged. “There’s more. The victim had this.” A gloved technician held out an evidence bag. Inside lay a small brass compass, not much wider than a large coin. Its casing was greened around the hinges with verdigris. Its face bore no cardinal directions. Instead, fine engraved symbols circled the glass in tight, angular bands: hooked lines, small stars, shapes that might have been letters in a language Quinn did not know. The needle shivered constantly. Even as Quinn watched, it swung a few degrees left. Paused. Then quivered toward the ceiling. “What is it?” she asked. “Some kind of antique,” Bell said. “His dealer friends will tell us. If we can get any of them to answer at this hour.” Quinn held out her hand. The technician passed her the bag. The compass needle jerked once against the glass. She felt a brief, unwelcome tightening at the base of her throat. Three years earlier, Detective Sergeant Morris had vanished during a burglary investigation in Deptford. His service weapon had been recovered in a locked warehouse. His blood had been found on the floor. There had been no body, no exit, no rational path through the facts. Quinn had built the case and rebuilt it until the paper files bent under their own weight. In the end, all she had possessed was absence. And one thing she had never written down: the strange frost covering the warehouse walls in August. “You’ve got your fall theory,” she said to Bell. He lifted his cup. “He was thrown by someone positioned above him, somehow. Or dragged, hit his head, and deposited here. The ceiling thing is dramatic, but not impossible. There could be a rigging point hidden in the brickwork. Old stations have cavities everywhere.” “Where’s the rope burn?” “Could be removed.” “Where are the marks on his coat? A harness, a sling, anything?” “Could be a clean lift.” Quinn looked down at Vale’s body. “A clean lift from six metres onto tile. In a sealed station. While he’s wearing an overcoat and carrying an umbrella.” Bell’s expression flattened. “I said it was preliminary.” “Good. Keep it that way.” She crouched beside Vale. His skin had the waxy look of the recently dead. Fine black grit dusted the collar of his coat, concentrated around the nape of his neck. His left ear was swollen and bruised. The injury had begun to colour beneath the skin, which meant it had occurred before death. Quinn leaned closer. There was a smell on him beneath blood and damp wool. Not smoke. Not petrol. Something mineral and dry, like flint struck in a crypt. She studied his bare hand. His fingernails had been professionally trimmed, except for the broken right thumbnail. In the crescent of torn nail was a thread of dark material. “Bag his hands separately,” she said. “They already are.” “Get the scrap under the nail to trace. Fibres, skin cells, whatever it is.” Bell looked down. “You think he fought someone.” “I think he touched something.” She stood and walked toward the platform wall. The dead advertising board hung crookedly above a recessed arch. Its faded poster showed a smiling woman holding a bottle of tonic wine. Her painted face had been slashed across the eyes. The floor beneath it looked wrong. The old tiles were filmed with dust, except for a clean semicircle directly below the poster. There were no shoe marks in it, no smear from a body, no track from the forensic team. Just a half-moon of untouched tile. Quinn crouched again. At first she thought the clean area was moisture. Then she saw the boundary: not wet, but faintly glittering. A residue had settled there in a narrow band, grey-black and granular. It was the same grit on Vale’s collar. Her torch beam moved slowly across the wall. There. A pale vertical seam ran through the brickwork behind the advertising board. It was no wider than a hair. It began at waist height and continued up into shadow. The mortar around it had whitened, as if ice had formed there and melted. Quinn did not touch it. “Morris,” she said under her breath. Bell heard. “What?” “Nothing.” The compass needle in the evidence bag rattled against the glass. Eva Kowalski made a sound behind them. Not a word. A startled intake of breath. Quinn turned sharply. “Ms. Kowalski.” Eva had gone very still. Her eyes had fixed on the compass. “That shouldn’t be doing that,” she said. Bell gave her a weary look. “It’s a compass.” “It isn’t.” Her gaze flicked to Quinn, then toward the wall. “It’s a Veil Compass. They’re made to find breaks. Doors.” Quinn straightened. “Breaks in what?” Eva looked as though she regretted speaking. Her fingers tightened around her satchel strap. “In the boundary,” she said quietly. “Between here and somewhere else.” Bell let out a small laugh, but it had no humour in it. “Right.” “You asked what I saw,” Eva said to Quinn, ignoring him. “I saw Mr. Vale come through the passage. He had that compass. He was terrified. He kept looking behind him, but there was nobody there.” “You followed him for what reason?” “I was supposed to meet someone here. They had information about an object stolen from the Museum archives.” Eva’s cheeks coloured. “I thought Vale was the contact. He wasn’t.” “Did you see him die?” “No.” The answer came too fast, then she shook her head. “Not exactly. The lights went out. All of them. I heard him shouting. Then I heard something like—” She stopped. “Like what?” Eva’s eyes went back to the seam in the wall. “Like fabric tearing. But very far away.” Bell crossed his arms. “And you didn’t call for help?” “I did. My phone died.” She fumbled in her coat pocket and produced it. The screen was cracked but black. “It had seventy per cent battery when I came down.” “Convenient.” “It’s true.” Quinn held out her hand. Eva passed over the phone. Cold. Not London-night cold. It bit through Quinn’s glove. She looked at the platform lights. Their generators hummed evenly. Her watch ticked against her wrist. Ten minutes past one had become thirteen minutes past one. She gave the phone back. “Who else knew you were coming here?” Eva hesitated. “No one.” “That wasn’t my question.” The redhead’s face closed. “Someone in the Market sent the message.” “The Market.” Eva glanced at Bell, then at the uniforms, the technicians, the open notebooks and evidence bags. A wall of ordinary procedure between her and whatever she feared. “The Veil Market,” she said. “It moves around. This month it’s beneath Camden. You need a bone token to enter. People sell things there that aren’t legal, or sensible, or—” She took a breath. “Things that aren’t meant to be in the world.” Bell rubbed a hand over his face. “Detective, this woman needs a statement taken somewhere warm.” “She needs one taken here,” Quinn said. Eva looked at her sharply. Quinn walked back to Vale’s body. She put the facts in order as she had been trained to do. Vale entered through a hidden passage. He carried an object made to locate something supernatural, if Eva’s account was true. He had an injury to the ear before he died, black residue at his collar, and no plausible means of falling from a ceiling. The wall bore a seam that was not part of the station’s original architecture. The compass pointed toward it. The evidence did not add up because everyone had begun with the body. They had assumed the station was the scene. It was not. It was the threshold. Quinn crouched at the platform edge, studying the disturbed dust again. One boot print. Large, deep at the heel. Vale’s shoe size, perhaps. It headed from the tunnel toward the body. But its direction was wrong. The toe pointed toward Vale, not away from him. He had not walked from the entrance to the place where he died. He had arrived from the tunnel. Or from somewhere beyond it. She shone her torch down the tracks. The beam caught the derelict carriage twenty yards away. Its doors were welded shut. A strip of darkness lay beneath it, too dark even for the tunnel. Then something moved inside the carriage. Not a person. Not quite. A shape passed behind the filthy glass, tall and thin and warped by the grime. For one heartbeat Quinn saw a pale oval where a face ought to be. Her hand found the grip of her service weapon. The shape vanished. “Clear the platform,” she said. Bell blinked. “What?” “Now.” “Quinn—” “Get every civilian and every officer above ground. Leave the scene lights. No one touches the body. No one goes near that carriage.” Her tone cut through him. Bell set his coffee down without argument and began barking instructions. Eva did not move. Quinn looked at her. “You too.” “I can help.” “You can give your statement upstairs.” “The compass is pointing at the rift.” Quinn’s gaze dropped to the evidence bag in the technician’s hand. The needle had spun fully around. It now pressed against the glass, aimed not at the cracked wall but toward the dead train. A low sound came from the tunnel. The station lights flickered. Every hair rose along Quinn’s arms. She had heard that sound once before, in a locked warehouse in Deptford. A soft, dragging exhalation, as though the darkness itself had lungs. “Morris,” she said, not quietly this time. Bell looked back from the escalator. “What did you say?” Quinn unholstered her weapon and kept it low at her side. “Get them out,” she said. The seam behind the advertising board opened with a sound like ice splitting on a river. A blade of blackness appeared in the brick wall. It widened by an inch. Cold rolled across the platform, carrying that dry mineral smell, and the dead man’s umbrella lifted from beneath the bench. Not blown. Lifted. It rose into the air, turning slowly above the tiles. Eva grabbed Quinn’s sleeve. Her hand shook hard enough for Quinn to feel it through her coat. “Detective,” she whispered. “Don’t let it see you looking.” Quinn kept her eyes on the tunnel anyway. Because from inside the derelict carriage, a man’s voice called her name. “Harlow.” It was DS Morris’s voice.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags27
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she said quietly [quietly]"
1"The answer came too [too]"
dialogueSentences99
tagDensity0.273
leniency0.545
rawRatio0.074
effectiveRatio0.04
87.04% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2701
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"very"
count3
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"sharply"
count2
highlights
0"very"
1"slowly"
2"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
88.89% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2701
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"solitary"
count1
2
word"quivered"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"solitary"
2"quivered"
3"weight"
4"flicked"
5"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences241
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences241
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences312
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2701
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions29
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions102
wordCount2054
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.85
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn38
Tube1
Town1
London2
Eva16
Metropolitan1
Police2
Grant1
Bell19
Detective2
Sergeant1
Morris2
Deptford2
August1
Vale7
Kowalski1
London-night1
Cold3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Eva"
3"Grant"
4"Bell"
5"Sergeant"
6"Morris"
7"Kowalski"
8"Cold"
places
0"Town"
1"London"
2"Metropolitan"
3"Deptford"
4"August"
5"Vale"
6"London-night"
globalScore0.575
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences146
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
88.93% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.111
wordCount2701
matches
0"not at the corpse, but at the ceiling"
1"not wet, but faintly glittering"
2"not at the cracked wall but toward the dead train"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences312
matches
0"heard that sound"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs172
mean15.7
std17.01
cv1.083
sampleLengths
022
159
254
312
463
514
610
72
877
911
103
118
1215
1329
142
159
1640
1712
184
197
206
215
2242
2350
246
254
267
279
2837
291
3022
313
3255
3344
3416
359
363
3786
3811
3932
406
416
4226
433
4412
456
465
476
488
498
89.25% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount11
totalSentences241
matches
0"been torn"
1"been made"
2"was freckled"
3"been stripped"
4"was greened"
5"been recovered"
6"been found"
7"been slashed"
8"were filmed"
9"been trained"
10"were welded"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs321
matches
0"was waiting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences312
ratio0.003
matches
0"What remained showed only a flake of blue enamel and the tail end of a word: —DEN."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2062
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"broad, red-faced man"
adverbCount61
adverbRatio0.029582929194956354
lyAdverbCount19
lyAdverbRatio0.00921435499515034
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences312
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences312
mean8.66
std6.21
cv0.718
sampleLengths
022
126
217
32
42
512
612
711
817
914
1012
1115
123
1316
1429
1514
1610
172
1816
1913
2023
2125
2211
233
245
253
267
278
2810
2911
308
312
323
336
349
3518
363
375
385
3912
404
414
423
436
445
4515
4613
4714
4819
4915
44.34% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats20
diversityRatio0.30448717948717946
totalSentences312
uniqueOpeners95
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount7
totalSentences210
matches
0"Only the ceiling."
1"Then the less obvious: a"
2"Instead, fine engraved symbols circled"
3"Then quivered toward the ceiling."
4"Just a half-moon of untouched"
5"Then she saw the boundary:"
6"Then something moved inside the"
ratio0.033
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount63
totalSentences210
matches
0"Her torch beam cut across"
1"She wore round glasses fogged"
2"Her face was freckled, pale"
3"She had listened to witnesses"
4"It dropped away into blackness,"
5"He was a broad, red-faced"
6"He looked up as Quinn"
7"He smiled faintly, then nodded"
8"He wore a charcoal overcoat,"
9"His right hand was bare,"
10"She took in the obvious"
11"She stared not at the"
12"Its casing was greened around"
13"Its face bore no cardinal"
14"She felt a brief, unwelcome"
15"His service weapon had been"
16"His blood had been found"
17"she said to Bell"
18"He lifted his cup."
19"She crouched beside Vale."
ratio0.3
60.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount168
totalSentences210
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn stood beneath"
1"Camden Town had gone on"
2"Her torch beam cut across"
3"Graffiti crawled over it in"
4"Police tape had been strung"
5"Quinn paused at it, one"
6"The call had come through"
7"The uniform who had rung"
8"This, she had decided before"
9"A young woman stood in"
10"She wore round glasses fogged"
11"Her face was freckled, pale"
12"Quinn looked at the satchel,"
13"The woman swallowed"
14"Quinn’s gaze stayed on her"
15"Eva stopped herself"
16"A small, automatic movement sent"
17"Eva’s mouth tightened."
18"Quinn had spent eighteen years"
19"She had listened to witnesses"
ratio0.8
47.62% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences210
matches
0"Even as Quinn watched, it"
1"Because from inside the derelict"
ratio0.01
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences92
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Stagnant air carrying a faint medicinal sweetness that did not belong underground."
1"The uniform who had rung it in had sounded embarrassed, which generally meant either an important person, a grotesque mess, or something he thought would make h…"
2"A soft, dragging exhalation, as though the darkness itself had lungs."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags27
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, not quietly this time"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags18
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences99
tagDensity0.182
leniency0.364
rawRatio0.056
effectiveRatio0.02
90.5579%