Run: 2026-07-09-01KX4195KAQ7NK52NNQBDBWSFK

Run Details

Duration:
1m 6s
Cost:
$0.107990
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The taxi left Aurora at the edge of Richmond Park with its red tail-lights smeared across the wet road. She watched until the bend swallowed them. The driver had refused to take her farther. “Gates’ll be shut by now.” “They weren’t shut last Tuesday.” “They are tonight.” He had pointed at the black iron bars ahead. A chain hung through them, secured with a padlock furred orange by rust. Rory remembered the same entrance standing open beneath a cloudless afternoon sky three days ago. She also remembered the message folded inside the delivery receipt when she returned to the Golden Empress. Bring the Heartstone to the Grove. Come alone. Midnight. No name. No explanation. Just directions drawn in green ink and a sprig of heather pressed into the crease. The heather had bloomed on the kitchen counter after Yu-Fei dropped it into the bin. Rory checked her phone. 11:42 p.m. No signal. “Of course.” Her voice fell flat against the gates. Nothing answered. She climbed. Cold iron bit through her gloves. Halfway over, the pendant beneath her coat shifted against her breastbone, warm as skin. Its silver chain snagged her collar, and the deep crimson stone slid free when she dropped to the other side. A dull light moved in its centre. Not a reflection. More like an ember taking a breath. Rory tucked it away. “Not yet.” The mapped route followed a paved path for half a mile before cutting across open grass towards a copse. She knew the park well enough by daylight: deer herds, cyclists, children feeding ducks things ducks had no business eating. At night the land had shed every familiar proportion. The sky pressed low and colourless. Trees stood in dense ranks, their branches locked together overhead, while mist pooled in the hollows and turned the grass silver. Her torch carved out a narrow strip of path. Behind her, the locked gate gave a small metallic click. Rory stopped. The chain hung as before. The padlock had not moved. A second click sounded, farther inside the park. Then another. The noise travelled away through the dark, each repetition softer than the last, like a lock passing from hand to hand. Rory pulled the paper from her pocket. The inked directions had blurred despite the dry lining. One instruction remained clear. At the split oak, turn left. Do not follow the bells. She folded it and kept walking. For several minutes she heard nothing but the drag of her boots through wet grass. Her breath smoked beneath the torch beam. The city still existed beyond the park walls—traffic, sirens, aircraft slipping towards Heathrow—but none of it reached her. Silence did not cover this place. It occupied it. The first bell rang somewhere to her right. One bright note. Small enough to hang from a cat’s collar. Rory turned her head before she could stop herself. The torch swept across bracken, a fallen trunk and two white points close to the ground. Eyes. They vanished. A fox, she decided. The park was full of them. The bell rang again, to her left this time. Something crossed behind a hawthorn twenty yards ahead. Not the low red shape of a fox. Upright. Pale. Rory held the light on the trunk. Rain glistened along its bark. A branch stirred after the rest of the hedge had gone still. “Whoever sent the note, this is your chance to be less irritating.” No reply came. She advanced, keeping the torch steady. Beneath the hawthorn lay a scatter of white mushrooms. A narrow impression ran through them, though none had broken. The caps leaned inward along the track, pointing towards the woods. Rory stepped over it. The pendant warmed. Not enough to burn. Enough to make her aware of every inch of chain around her neck. At 11:53, she reached the split oak. Lightning had opened the tree from crown to root, leaving a black seam broad enough for a person to stand inside. The map told her to go left. The paved path bent right, where a row of lamps glowed through the mist. Rory frowned. There were no lamps marked on the park map. These stood close together, each flame housed in a glass box atop a slender post. Amber pools overlapped along a path that looked dry, level and inviting. A bell chimed between them. The nearest flame bent towards Rory. All the others followed. She went left. The route narrowed through gorse and tangled fern. Thorns scraped her coat. Mud clung to her boots, and roots buckled beneath the surface like knuckles. Twice she looked back. Each time the split oak appeared closer than it should have, its hollow seam turned towards her. On the third glance, someone stood inside it. A woman, judging by the long dress. Her head drooped. Hair hung across her face in ropes. Rory’s torch beam struck the hollow. Empty. She did not look back again. The woodland closed over her. Bare branches divided the sky into fragments. Water ticked from leaf to leaf, though no rain fell, and somewhere beyond the beam an animal padded through the undergrowth. Step. Pause. Step. When Rory walked, it walked. She stopped. It stopped. She crouched and picked up a stone, then threw it hard into the dark ahead. It hit a trunk. The footsteps continued behind her. Step. Pause. Step. Rory spun. Her torch swept across brambles and grey stems. Nothing moved. “Enough.” Her own voice came back from deeper in the trees. Enough. Then again, close to her ear. Enough. She backed away. The beam trembled over a birch trunk scored with shallow cuts. At first they resembled the scratches deer left when rubbing antlers against bark. Rory shifted the light. Letters emerged. RORY CARTER Below them, cut smaller: ARRIVED 11:58 Her phone read 11:57. She stared until the figures changed. 11:58. The screen went black. A breath passed over the back of her neck. Rory drove her elbow behind her and struck only air. She wheeled, torch raised like a club. No one stood there. The branches had stopped dripping. She pressed the phone’s power button. Nothing. The torch remained lit, but its beam had weakened to a brownish circle. Within it, the birch bore no marks beyond strips of peeling bark. “Walk,” she whispered. “Think later.” The path ended at a wall of yew. According to the directions, the entrance lay between two trunks grown together at the roots. She found four pairs, then six. The yews repeated along the slope, identical down to the crooked branch at shoulder height. Rory chose the nearest gap and squeezed through. She emerged where she had started. The same birch leaned ahead. RORY CARTER ARRIVED 11:58 One more line sat beneath the others. LEFT 11:59 Her dead phone showed no time. Rory’s fingers closed around the Heartstone through her coat. Heat pulsed against her palm. A slow beat, followed by two quick ones. She pulled out the pendant. Crimson light leaked between her fingers. The chain shivered without wind, drawing towards the yews. Not the gaps she had used. Towards the trunk itself. The stone’s rhythm strengthened as she approached. The bark looked solid, ancient and thick, but her torchlight did not rest on it. The beam sank into the surface as though the trunk contained deep water. Rory reached out. Her fingertips passed through cold darkness. The sensation climbed her hand, not wet or solid but crowded. Dozens of tiny pressures moved over her skin, testing each finger. She snatched her arm back. Behind her, a woman inhaled. A soft, relieved sound. “There you are.” Rory did not turn. The voice resembled her mother’s. Not as Jennifer Carter sounded now, but as she had during Rory’s childhood: warmer, younger, carrying the Welsh cadence that sharpened whenever she called from the foot of the stairs. “Rory, love. Come here.” Rory raised the pendant. Its glow bled across the false trunk and revealed an opening shaped like a narrow door. “You’ve got the wrong daughter.” The thing behind her took one step closer. Wet grass sighed beneath its foot. “I waited.” Another step. “You left me waiting.” Rory pushed through the dark. Cold folded around her head and shoulders. For one instant she felt fingers close along her coat, not gripping from behind but reaching out from within the passage. Then she stumbled into open air. The Grove lay under a different sky. Stars crowded it from horizon to horizon, too large and too sharp, each one ringed by a pale halo. Ancient oak standing stones encircled the clearing, their roots buried in banks of flowers. Foxglove, bluebell, poppy and snowdrop bloomed together despite the season. Their colours looked bruised beneath the starlight. Rory turned. The yew doorway had vanished. Behind her stood two oak monoliths joined by a web of bare branches. Between them hung only darkness, shallow and sealed. Something pressed against the other side. The branches bowed towards her. A handprint formed in the dark, long-fingered and white, then faded as the barrier straightened. Rory stepped away. The Grove smelled of turned soil and summer roses. Neither scent belonged in the November cold. Heat from the Heartstone seeped into her fist, its pulse now constant. She checked her phone. The screen lit at once. 12:00. No signal. Battery full. At the centre of the clearing sat a low stone table. A wooden bowl rested on it, filled to the rim with black water. Nothing else suggested that anyone had summoned her. No footprints marked the flowers. No lantern burned. No figure waited among the standing stones. “You asked me here.” Her words travelled around the boundary, returning one at a time. Asked. Me. Here. The flowers nearest the table turned their heads towards her. Rory moved along the inner edge of the stones. Each oak pillar had once been a living tree. Bark covered their surfaces; severed limbs protruded like worn handles. No two looked alike, yet she could not count them. Twelve became thirteen when she glanced away. Thirteen returned to eleven. A rustle followed beyond the ring. She lifted her torch. The beam passed between two stones and found more flowers, more mist, more trees. At the edge of the light stood a deer. A red hind. Thin, motionless, ears raised. Rory lowered the beam from its eyes. Its shadow fell forwards. Towards the torch. The hind opened its mouth. The bell chimed from inside its throat. Rory’s grip tightened. The animal turned and walked behind an oak stone. Its head appeared on the far side first. Then its forelegs. Its body never crossed the gap. It vanished into the mist. A second bell answered from the opposite edge of the Grove. A third sounded behind the stone table. Then dozens rang beneath the flowers, muffled by soil. The pendant flared. Crimson light painted Rory’s fingers to the bone. Across the clearing, the black water in the bowl rippled. Once. Twice. A face rose beneath its surface. Rory approached by three measured steps and stopped outside arm’s reach. The bowl could not have been more than a few inches deep, but the face floated far below, pale and distorted by a depth that had no place inside the stone. Straight black hair drifted around it. Bright blue eyes opened. Rory looked at herself. The reflection raised one hand. Its left wrist pressed against the underside of the water, displaying the small crescent scar. Rory kept both hands at her sides. The thing in the bowl smiled. Its lips moved, but the voice came from the dark beyond the standing stones. “Put it in the water.” Rory glanced towards the sound. Mist coiled between the oaks, thickening into vertical shapes that broke apart when she looked at them. “Who are you?” The face beneath the water mouthed the reply half a heartbeat before the hidden speaker gave it breath. “You know.” “No. I know what I look like.” The reflection’s smile tightened. “Put the Heartstone in the water, Aurora.” The use of her full name settled cold behind her ribs. She wrapped the chain once around her fist. “You sent the message?” “I brought you where you needed to be.” “That wasn’t the question.” The flowers around the table folded closed. A ripple spread out from the bowl, crossing stone and earth as if the whole clearing lay beneath a thin skin of water. Every bloom it touched bowed. The face sank from sight. Silence returned, but not cleanly. Something whispered under it, a layered murmur too dense to separate into words. Rory leaned towards the bowl without meaning to. The black surface reflected the sky. One star went out. Then another. The darkness travelled across the reflection in the shape of a person approaching from behind her. Rory watched it grow larger. She did not turn. “You came alone,” the voice murmured at her shoulder. “That was the instruction.” “Were you followed?” “Not by anyone I invited.” A scent of damp wool filled the air. Something stood close enough for its cold to touch her back. The water showed no face now. Only Rory, the stars and the tall shape behind her, its head bent beside hers. The pendant burned in her palm. The shape lifted one arm. Rory pivoted, swinging the torch. The beam crossed empty Grove. No one stood within the ring. Beyond the oak stones, pale figures shifted between the trees. They moved only when darkness covered them, each appearing a fraction closer whenever the torch passed elsewhere. Rory backed towards the table. The bells beneath the soil stopped together. A line appeared in the black water, traced from below by a colourless fingertip. NOT ALONE Rory stared at the words. The Heartstone gave one violent pulse. Pain shot through her hand, and the silver chain pulled taut towards the ground. A tiny bell rang beneath her right boot. She shifted her foot. The earth there rose by the width of a breath. Not a root. Not soil settling. Something underneath had pressed its palm against the grass. Rory stepped away. Another patch lifted near the table. Then one beside the nearest standing stone. Small mounds formed across the clearing, fingers and knuckles shaping themselves beneath the flowered turf without breaking through. The doorway between the joined oaks remained dark. Rory snatched the wooden bowl from the table. The black water stayed level even as she tipped it. The cold rushed into her skin, numbing her fingers around the rim. “What opens the way back?” Her reflection stared up from the impossible depth. “Put it in the water.” The ground swelled beneath her left heel. She kicked free. A bell gave one angry jangle below the soil. “No.” “Then stay.” The shapes beyond the standing stones halted. Every pale head turned towards the pendant. Rory set the bowl down, hard enough to crack wood against stone. The water did not spill. She slipped the silver chain over her head and held the Heartstone above the surface. The figures leaned forward. The earth beneath the flowers became still. Rory lowered the crimson gem until its faint glow touched the water. The surface rose towards it in a thin black peak. “Open the doorway first.” The face beneath the bowl returned. This time it wore no smile. “You bargain in the wrong place.” “And you asked the wrong woman to bring your jewellery.” A sound moved through the Grove. Not laughter. The creak of many branches bearing weight. The Heartstone pulsed between Rory’s fingers. In answer, something far beneath the bowl struck upward. The wooden vessel jumped. Black water slapped over the rim and landed on the stone table. It spread against the slope, crawled uphill, then gathered into letters. LOOK BEHIND YOU Rory watched the dark surface of the spill. A second reflection stood beside hers. Shoulder-length black hair. Blue eyes. Her coat. Her face. The other Rory held no pendant. Its crescent scar marked the right wrist. Rory raised her gaze. Across the table, her double stood among the closed flowers. Water streamed from its hair and sleeves without touching the ground. Its smile exposed no teeth, only a black curve extending too far into each cheek. It held out one empty hand. “Give it back.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.057
leniency0.114
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2720
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
77.94% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2720
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"footsteps"
count1
3
word"trembled"
count1
4
word"pulsed"
count2
5
word"pulse"
count2
6
word"measured"
count1
7
word"traced"
count1
8
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"silence"
2"footsteps"
3"trembled"
4"pulsed"
5"pulse"
6"measured"
7"traced"
8"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences346
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences346
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences379
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2718
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
60.58% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions80
wordCount2572
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.79
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Aurora1
Richmond1
Park1
Golden1
Empress1
Heartstone6
Grove6
Yu-Fei1
Heathrow1
Rory46
One4
Jennifer1
Carter1
Welsh1
November1
Enough3
Step4
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Yu-Fei"
2"Rory"
3"One"
4"Jennifer"
5"Carter"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Golden"
3"Heathrow"
4"November"
globalScore0.606
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences210
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"appeared closer than it should have, its hollow seam turned towards her"
89.62% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.104
wordCount2718
matches
0"not wet or solid but crowded"
1"Not as Jennifer Carter sounded now, but as she had during Rory’s childhood: warmer, younger, carryin"
2"not gripping from behind but reaching out from within the passage"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences379
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs246
mean11.05
std12.18
cv1.103
sampleLengths
026
18
25
35
43
554
69
734
86
92
102
119
122
1357
144
152
1675
179
1810
192
2010
218
222
2321
2420
2511
266
2749
288
2911
3025
311
322
3310
349
3518
3624
3712
383
3936
404
413
4217
437
4442
452
4636
475
486
494
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences346
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs443
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences379
ratio0.005
matches
0"The city still existed beyond the park walls—traffic, sirens, aircraft slipping towards Heathrow—but none of it reached her."
1"Bark covered their surfaces; severed limbs protruded like worn handles."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2578
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount69
adverbRatio0.026764934057408846
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.0031031807602792862
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences379
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences379
mean7.17
std4.87
cv0.679
sampleLengths
019
17
28
35
45
53
69
713
815
917
106
112
121
132
142
1515
1615
174
182
192
202
217
222
232
246
2514
2620
277
283
297
304
312
3219
3320
349
356
3621
379
3810
392
405
415
428
432
4421
457
469
474
486
495
45.23% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats18
diversityRatio0.2864721485411141
totalSentences377
uniqueOpeners108
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount10
totalSentences297
matches
0"Just directions drawn in green"
1"More like an ember taking"
2"Twice she looked back."
3"Then again, close to her"
4"Then she stumbled into open"
5"Then its forelegs."
6"Then dozens rang beneath the"
7"Bright blue eyes opened."
8"Only Rory, the stars and"
9"Then one beside the nearest"
ratio0.034
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount51
totalSentences297
matches
0"She watched until the bend"
1"He had pointed at the"
2"She also remembered the message"
3"Her voice fell flat against"
4"Its silver chain snagged her"
5"She knew the park well"
6"Her torch carved out a"
7"She folded it and kept"
8"Her breath smoked beneath the"
9"It occupied it."
10"She advanced, keeping the torch"
11"She went left."
12"Her head drooped."
13"She did not look back"
14"She crouched and picked up"
15"It hit a trunk."
16"Her torch swept across brambles"
17"Her own voice came back"
18"She backed away."
19"Her phone read 11:57."
ratio0.172
79.53% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount226
totalSentences297
matches
0"The taxi left Aurora at"
1"She watched until the bend"
2"The driver had refused to"
3"He had pointed at the"
4"A chain hung through them,"
5"Rory remembered the same entrance"
6"She also remembered the message"
7"The heather had bloomed on"
8"Rory checked her phone."
9"Her voice fell flat against"
10"Halfway over, the pendant beneath"
11"Its silver chain snagged her"
12"A dull light moved in"
13"Rory tucked it away."
14"The mapped route followed a"
15"She knew the park well"
16"The sky pressed low and"
17"Trees stood in dense ranks,"
18"Her torch carved out a"
19"The chain hung as before."
ratio0.761
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences297
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences88
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Not as Jennifer Carter sounded now, but as she had during Rory’s childhood: warmer, younger, carrying the Welsh cadence that sharpened whenever she called from …"
1"The bowl could not have been more than a few inches deep, but the face floated far below, pale and distorted by a depth that had no place inside the stone."
2"A ripple spread out from the bowl, crossing stone and earth as if the whole clearing lay beneath a thin skin of water."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
92.86% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"the voice murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.057
leniency0.114
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.114
91.5251%