Run: 2026-07-09-01KX41GASKK14P47MRFGPQRZ95

Run Details

Duration:
1m 13s
Cost:
$0.110375
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn descended through a wound in the tiled wall of an abandoned Tube station beneath Camden, one hand on the temporary rail and the other inside her coat. The official entrance stood behind her: padlocked grille, faded roundel, stairs furred with plaster dust. Nobody had used that route in years. The crime scene team had come through a service tunnel from the operational line, ducking under cables and stepping over rat traps. Quinn had refused. She wanted to see how the first caller had entered. The wound in the wall opened onto a platform that should not have existed. Canvas market awnings crowded beneath a vaulted ceiling blackened by old smoke. Stalls filled the platform from edge to edge, their counters cluttered with stoppered jars, tarnished cages and drawers labelled in cramped alphabets. Wax dripped from antler chandeliers. The candles had gone out, yet the air held their fatty breath. Beyond the platform, two tracks ran into a tunnel bricked shut at both ends. Detective Sergeant Ash Mercer waited beside a stall draped in blue silk. His scene suit strained across his shoulders, and his disposable overshoes wore a coat of silver dust. “About time.” Quinn checked her worn leather watch. The cracked face showed twelve minutes past three. “I arrived four minutes after you.” “Felt longer down here.” “You dislike tunnels.” “I dislike tunnels that aren’t on engineering plans.” Quinn ducked beneath the tape. A woman lay behind the stall. Black dress. Bare feet. Dark hair spread across the tiles in careful strands, as though someone had combed it after placing her there. A circle of grey powder enclosed the body. Six candles marked equal points around it. Each wick leaned towards the corpse. Mercer pointed at the silver dust clinging to his overshoes. “SOCO reckon powdered aluminium. We’ll know after the lab gets it.” “You stepped in the circle?” “The photographer did. I stayed clear.” “You didn’t.” Mercer glanced down. A thin crescent of grey marked the toe of his left shoe. “That came from outside.” “Then the circle was laid from outside.” He crouched without crossing the line. “Or someone scuffed it before we got here.” Quinn surveyed the platform. Three constables guarded the breach in the wall. Two scene examiners worked near an iron gate at the opposite end. Their lamps flashed over empty stalls and hand-painted signs. None bore prices. Some bore warnings. NO NAMES GIVEN AFTER MIDNIGHT. TEETH BOUGHT, ADULT ONLY. MEMORIES APPRAISED WHILE YOU WAIT. Mercer followed her gaze. “Film set?” “Where are the cameras?” “Packed up.” “And left the stock?” “Props.” A jar on the nearest counter held seven pale objects suspended in amber fluid. Each resembled an infant’s finger until Quinn noticed the tiny translucent fins. Mercer stopped looking at it. “The caller reported a dead woman,” he continued. “Anonymous, voice disguised. Control traced the mobile to a bin in Kentish Town. Cheap handset, wiped clean. Uniform found the break in the wall after searching the station perimeter.” “How did the caller know which station?” “Used the old name. North End Annex.” “This isn’t North End Annex.” “No, because North End Annex doesn’t exist.” Quinn’s brown eyes moved over the tiled wall. Beneath decades of soot, blue letters formed part of a station name. Only three remained visible. V E I. “Someone went to trouble.” “Someone with money.” “Money doesn’t alter the length of a tunnel.” Mercer looked towards the brickwork. “Survey team can explain that.” “Can they explain the warm rails?” He frowned. Quinn crossed to the platform edge and held her palm above the nearest steel rail. Heat pressed against her skin. Not much. Enough. “No train came through here,” Mercer muttered. “Quite.” “Electrical fault?” “Both running rails are warm. There’s no conductor rail.” She straightened. Her movement carried military precision, each step chosen before her weight shifted. Eighteen years among crime scenes had taught her that rooms spoke through displacement. A chair turned from a desk. A clean square in dust. A cup placed beyond the reach of the hand that supposedly held it. This place shouted in a language that wanted to sound like silence. She returned to the body. “What do we have?” “Female, mid-twenties to early thirties. No identification. No bag, no phone. One puncture wound below the sternum. No weapon. Pathologist’s first look puts death between midnight and two. Possible exsanguination.” “Possible?” “Not enough blood.” Quinn knelt. The dead woman’s skin had the colour of candle wax. Her lips had cracked at the centre. No bruising marked her wrists, throat or ankles. Her right hand rested open beside her hip. Her left curled against her breastbone. “How much blood?” “Less than fifty millilitres on the dress. None beneath her.” “And Dr Patel called that exsanguination?” “He called it a body with no bloody blood in it. Ambulance crew couldn’t get a sample. Patel drew from the femoral vein and got air.” Quinn looked up. “Air.” “His word.” “Bodies don’t empty themselves.” “That’s why murder felt like a safe opening bet.” Mercer nodded towards the puncture wound. The black fabric around it remained stiff with a glossy residue, but the flesh beneath showed no matching tear. Quinn took a pen torch from her pocket and angled the beam. “Her dress was stabbed.” “That’s generally what a puncture through a dress means.” “Look.” Mercer lowered his head. The blade slit ran vertically through the cloth. Under it, the skin bore a round hole no wider than a knitting needle. “Two weapons?” “Or two stages.” “Someone drained her, dressed her, then stabbed the fabric to sell a knife attack.” “The dress is too large.” Mercer studied the shoulder seams. One slipped two inches past the joint. “Borrowed?” “Put on after death. No blood inside the sleeves. No transfer around the cuffs. Whoever dressed her cleaned the body first.” “Ritual display.” “Staged display.” “You’re splitting hairs.” “I’m separating evidence from theatre.” Quinn leaned over the powder circle without touching it. Six white candles stood in shallow brass cups. Five had burned down by a third. The sixth, near the woman’s left foot, remained almost whole. “All lit at the same time?” she asked. “Looks that way.” “No.” She pointed with her torch. “Five wicks have mushroomed. The sixth has been burned and trimmed. Different candle, added later.” “To complete the symmetry?” “To conceal a gap.” Quinn rose and paced around the circle. The intact candle stood beside a narrow break in the powder, no broader than a boot. Someone had repaired it, but the newer grains lay brighter than the rest. Mercer bent closer. “Exit point.” “Entry point. The woman came into the circle there.” “On foot?” Quinn studied the bare soles. Clean skin. No dust in the creases. No grime between the toes. No cuts from broken glass or grit. “No.” “Carried.” “Dragged would leave disturbance. Carried bodies sag. Her hair would catch powder when they lowered her, unless two people held her level.” “So two offenders.” “Or she arrived before the circle.” Mercer rubbed a gloved thumb against his chin. “You just told me she came into it through that gap.” “The gap has a second purpose. Someone removed an object from beside her foot, then repaired the line and planted the candle over the damage.” “You can tell all that from grey powder?” “I can tell the planted candle hides something. The rest is what you’ll establish when you stop calling this a film set.” A camera shutter snapped behind them. Quinn’s hand moved inside her coat and closed around nothing useful. The photographer stood ten yards away, lowering his camera. “Warn me before using flash.” The photographer blinked. “Sorry, ma’am.” Mercer watched her release her coat. “You all right?” “Do your job.” Her answer cut harder than intended. The flash had turned the tunnel mouth white, and for a fraction of a second she had seen Morris standing there in his torn overcoat, one arm raised to shield his face. Three years. No body worth burying. Only blood in a locked cellar and a shadow that moved against the light. Quinn returned her attention to the dead woman’s left hand. The curled fingers looked wrong. Not clenched. Arranged. She drew closer. “What’s under her nails?” Mercer raised his torch. A green deposit lined the thumb and first two fingers. “Paint?” “Metal corrosion.” “Copper?” “Brass.” Quinn glanced at the repaired break near the foot. “She held something.” “Ring? Locket?” “Larger. The stain covers the pads. She gripped it.” One of the scene examiners approached, carrying an evidence bag. Her cheeks showed pale grooves where her mask had pressed. “Detective. We found this behind the stall.” Inside the bag lay a small brass compass. Verdigris filmed its casing. Protective sigils crowded the face instead of degrees, each cut packed with black wax. The needle shivered without settling. “Where behind the stall?” Quinn asked. “Under the rear drape, near the dead woman’s feet.” “On the floor?” “In a groove between tiles.” “Photographed in situ?” “Three angles.” Mercer held the bag towards the light. “That would explain the green on her fingers.” “No.” Quinn took the bag by its sealed edge. The casing bore a patina, but the thumb catch gleamed where repeated use had stripped it clean. “No prints visible,” Mercer noted. “The corpse gripped it. Why are there no smears in the patina?” “Gloves?” “Her fingers are stained.” He gave the compass another look. “Cleaned after she touched it.” “Then planted.” The needle swung hard towards Quinn. She shifted the bag left. The needle followed. Mercer noticed. His jaw tightened. “Magnet in your coat?” “No.” “Phone?” “Left it with the log officer.” The needle quivered towards her chest. Quinn felt the weight of the old warrant card in her inner pocket, the steel pen beside it, the coin Morris had carried on every case until the night he vanished. A tarnished shilling, bent almost double. She handed the evidence bag to Mercer. The needle turned with it for a moment, then crept back towards her. Nobody spoke. The examiner broke the silence. “Could be defective.” “All compasses are defective when they don’t point north?” Quinn asked. “This isn’t marked for north.” “No. It isn’t.” A faint scrape came from the wall behind the stall. Mercer turned. “Mouse?” “Too heavy.” Quinn pulled aside the blue silk. A low cabinet stood against the tiled wall, its drawers labelled with strips of yellowing vellum. The scrape came again. Not from the cabinet. From inside the wall. One of the constables reached for his radio. “Keep everyone where they are,” Quinn ordered. Mercer peered behind the cabinet. “No gap.” “There was one.” She pointed to the grime on the tiles. A clean vertical stripe ran from floor to shoulder height, followed by another three feet away. Between them, soot formed shallow arcs. “Hinges,” Mercer murmured. “Something opened here.” “Into solid earth?” Quinn crouched by the cabinet. Its feet had left four clear impressions in the dust, but each impression extended sideways into a track. “This moved after the wall closed.” They took opposite ends and slid the cabinet aside. It shifted with little resistance, revealing a brass plate fixed between the tiles. At its centre sat a narrow slot. Mercer touched nothing. “Keyhole?” “Wrong shape.” Quinn looked towards the entrance breach, where the constables stood beneath loose brick and broken plaster. The rubble lay on both sides of the hole, scattered without pattern. Then she saw what had bothered her since arriving. No boot prints crossed the dust between the wall breach and the market. The officers had laid stepping boards after entering, but the first constable’s route showed in the grey floor: deep prints beginning three yards inside the platform. Not at the breach. She walked back to the tape. “Who found the body?” A young constable raised a hand. “I did, ma’am. PC Malik.” “Show me your route.” Malik pointed through the hole. “In there, down the steps, across the platform.” “There are no steps.” “Sorry?” “On the other side of that hole there’s a six-foot drop onto the old maintenance floor. You came through in uniform boots, yet there’s no plaster on your soles in the photographs.” Malik looked at his shoes. “I wiped them.” “Where?” His mouth opened. Closed. Mercer moved to Quinn’s side. “Constable?” Malik’s eyes flicked towards the stalls. “I don’t remember.” “That’s not an answer.” “I came through the wall. I must have.” Quinn studied him. Sweat beaded along his hairline despite the cold. His pupils had widened until his irises became thin brown rims. “What do you remember before you saw the body?” “The gate.” “What gate?” “The iron one at the end.” “You entered from that side?” “No.” Malik pressed both hands to his temples. “I was at the wall, then I was by the gate. There was a woman—” “The victim?” “Red hair. Glasses. She told me not to touch the compass.” Mercer glanced at the evidence bag. “Where did she go?” “I don’t know.” “Was she carrying anything?” “A leather satchel. Books in it, I think. Heavy. The strap had been repaired with green thread.” Malik tucked his chin, fighting for the memory. “She gave me something at the wall.” “What?” “Bone.” The word slipped out thin and dry. Quinn’s gaze dropped to his hands. One glove had torn across the palm. A white sliver protruded from the cuff. “Don’t move.” She caught his wrist and eased the fragment free with forceps from a scene kit. It was no sliver. A small oval token lay against his skin, polished smooth and carved with the same hooked sigil that appeared at the top of the compass face. Mercer leaned close. “That your entry key?” Malik stared at it. “Never seen it.” “You just said she gave it to you.” “I said bone. Not that.” Quinn sealed the token in a fresh bag. The moment the plastic closed around it, the lights across the platform dimmed. Every candle relit. Flame passed from wick to wick without a match, six small mouths opening around the dead woman. The officers drew back. Someone swore. The photographer’s camera struck the tiles. Quinn did not move. Her focus stayed on the circle. The five shortened candles burned straight. The planted sixth bent towards the repaired break, its flame stretched sideways by a current no one could feel. Powder lifted from the floor in a thin stream. Not towards the tunnel. Towards the dead woman’s open right hand. “There,” Quinn called. “Photograph that.” The examiner fumbled up her camera. Mercer watched the grains collect against the corpse’s palm. “Static?” “Static doesn’t choose one hand.” A shape emerged beneath the powder: a mark pressed into the skin, too faint to see before the grey settled into it. Circular casing. Hinged lid. A small protruding catch. The exact outline of the brass compass. Quinn held out her hand for the evidence bag but stopped before touching it. “The compass lay in her right palm after death. Someone removed it through the break, cleaned it, and pushed it beneath the stall.” “Why leave it at all?” “They didn’t.” Mercer frowned. “We have it.” “We have a compass. Not hers.” She indicated the green corrosion on the victim’s left fingertips. “She gripped the original with her left hand while alive. Its verdigris transferred under pressure. After death, someone placed another compass in her right palm long enough to leave an impression, then discarded it.” “A substitution?” “A message.” “For whom?” Quinn’s attention shifted to the brass plate exposed behind the cabinet. Its slot matched the dimensions of the bone token. “Someone who knew how to enter this place.” She crossed the platform. Mercer followed, evidence bag held away from his body. The compass needle jittered between Quinn and the hidden plate. “What have others missed?” he asked. “The body isn’t the crime scene.” Quinn stopped before the sealed wall. “The body is the lock.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences172
tagDensity0.07
leniency0.14
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2656
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
81.17% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2656
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"silk"
count2
1
word"traced"
count1
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"silence"
count2
4
word"quivered"
count1
5
word"flicked"
count1
6
word"could feel"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"traced"
2"weight"
3"silence"
4"quivered"
5"flicked"
6"could feel"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences216
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences216
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences376
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2656
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
43.49% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions81
wordCount1690
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity2.13
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn36
Tube1
Camden1
Sergeant1
Ash1
Mercer28
Morris2
One4
Malik6
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Sergeant"
3"Mercer"
4"Morris"
5"One"
6"Malik"
places(empty)
globalScore0.435
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences129
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2656
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences376
matches
0"used that route"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs262
mean10.14
std10.96
cv1.082
sampleLengths
030
157
214
351
414
529
62
714
86
94
103
118
125
1350
1410
1511
165
176
182
1915
204
217
2214
234
2435
255
264
275
284
292
304
312
324
331
3426
355
3637
377
387
395
407
4124
423
434
443
458
4610
476
482
4923
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences216
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs288
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences376
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1691
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount23
adverbRatio0.013601419278533412
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.0029568302779420462
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences376
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences376
mean7.06
std5.98
cv0.846
sampleLengths
030
115
27
322
43
510
614
712
822
95
1012
1114
1212
1317
142
156
168
176
184
193
208
215
226
232
242
2519
268
277
286
2910
3011
315
326
332
343
3512
364
377
386
398
404
418
4212
439
443
453
465
474
485
494
58.60% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.3723404255319149
totalSentences376
uniqueOpeners140
53.48% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences187
matches
0"Only three remained visible."
1"Only blood in a locked"
2"Then she saw what had"
ratio0.016
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences187
matches
0"She wanted to see how"
1"His scene suit strained across"
2"He crouched without crossing the"
3"Their lamps flashed over empty"
4"Her movement carried military precision,"
5"She returned to the body."
6"Her lips had cracked at"
7"Her right hand rested open"
8"Her left curled against her"
9"She pointed with her torch."
10"Her answer cut harder than"
11"She drew closer."
12"Her cheeks showed pale grooves"
13"He gave the compass another"
14"She shifted the bag left."
15"His jaw tightened."
16"She handed the evidence bag"
17"She pointed to the grime"
18"Its feet had left four"
19"They took opposite ends and"
ratio0.16
50.91% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount153
totalSentences187
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn descended through"
1"The official entrance stood behind"
2"Nobody had used that route"
3"The crime scene team had"
4"Quinn had refused."
5"She wanted to see how"
6"The wound in the wall"
7"Canvas market awnings crowded beneath"
8"Stalls filled the platform from"
9"Wax dripped from antler chandeliers."
10"The candles had gone out,"
11"Detective Sergeant Ash Mercer waited"
12"His scene suit strained across"
13"Quinn checked her worn leather"
14"The cracked face showed twelve"
15"Quinn ducked beneath the tape."
16"A woman lay behind the"
17"A circle of grey powder"
18"Each wick leaned towards the"
19"Mercer pointed at the silver"
ratio0.818
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences187
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences62
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Dark hair spread across the tiles in careful strands, as though someone had combed it after placing her there."
1"A small oval token lay against his skin, polished smooth and carved with the same hooked sigil that appeared at the top of the compass face."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"he continued (continue)"
1"Mercer muttered (mutter)"
2"Mercer noted (note)"
3"Quinn ordered (order)"
4"Mercer murmured (murmur)"
5"Malik pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences172
tagDensity0.064
leniency0.128
rawRatio0.545
effectiveRatio0.07
88.9217%