Run: 2026-07-09-01KX41KCSAVRG7334HTHWAYNXA

Run Details

Duration:
1m 15s
Cost:
$0.115145
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under the rusted grille and stepped onto a staircase that London had sealed before she joined the police. Water clicked in the dark. One drop, then another, each sound carrying through the abandoned Tube station beneath Camden. White tiles showed through decades of soot in patches, like teeth under split lips. Someone had painted arrows along the passage in a substance that caught the torchlight and gave it back blue. DC Leon Pike waited at the foot of the stairs in a paper suit two sizes too small. His hood hung loose behind his neck. He held a clipboard against his chest and watched Quinn approach with the strained patience of a man guarding a mistake. “You took your time.” Quinn checked the worn leather watch on her left wrist. “Nine minutes from the cordon.” “Felt longer.” “That’s because you’re dressed as a microwave dinner.” Pike pinched the white sleeve away from his wrist. “They ran out of large.” “They saw you coming.” She passed him and swept her torch over the platform. A market had occupied the dead station hours ago. Strips of red cloth hung between pillars. Folding tables crowded the platform edge, their surfaces scarred by burners, knives and circular stains. Glass jars stood abandoned in wooden racks. Most had been emptied, but one held a knot of pale roots which flexed when Quinn’s light touched them. She moved the beam elsewhere. A cracked sign above the platform read MORNINGTON CRESCENT, though the station lay half a mile from it. Someone had fixed a second sign beneath it, hand-painted in gold: NO NAMES. NO DEBTS. NO IRON. Quinn tapped the last word with one gloved finger. “Bit late to tell us.” Pike lifted his evidence case. “Whole place is full of iron. Rails, brackets, bolts.” “Which means the sign isn’t for us.” At the far end of the platform, crime-scene lamps washed the tiles in hard white. A body sat propped against a pillar, legs stretched towards the track. The victim wore a charcoal suit and no shoes. His socks were clean. His head rested against the tiles, chin tucked to his chest, as if sleep had caught him during a dull wait. A ring of black candles surrounded him. None had burnt down to the same height. Quinn stopped outside the marked approach path. “Who found him?” “Uniform called Naylor. Came down after a noise complaint from the laundrette upstairs. Found the grille open, followed the lights.” “He entered alone?” “For about thirty seconds. Then common sense arrived.” “Did he touch the body?” “Says not.” “Says?” Pike’s mouth tightened. “His prints are on that pillar.” Quinn looked across. The victim leaned against it. “How?” “Naylor claimed he slipped.” “On what?” Pike pointed towards the tiles. “Blood.” A dark pool spread beneath the dead man’s jacket, glossy under the lamps. It had run between the tiles, found the platform’s shallow gradient and travelled towards the edge in branching threads. Quinn crouched without crossing the approach markers. Her sharp jaw cast a blade-shaped shadow over her collar. “Blood’s under the body.” “That’s where it tends to be.” “The constable entered from behind the pillar.” Pike followed her gaze to the taped route. “He could’ve circled.” “His boots say otherwise.” Naylor stood near the tunnel mouth with a uniformed sergeant. He had paper covers over his boots, but a crescent of pale dust marked the leather above his left heel. No blood showed on either trouser cuff. Quinn rose. “If he slipped in that pool, he’d have carried red halfway to Euston.” “Then he lied.” “People lie for reasons.” “So arrest him and ask.” “Your bedside manner needs work.” “My wife says it’s charming.” “Your wife married you for your pension.” “She has expensive taste.” Quinn stepped onto the approach path. Near the body, the air changed. It carried wet stone, burnt sugar and the copper bite of blood, but beneath those sat another smell: cold ash, the scent left when rain drowned a bonfire. The victim appeared to be in his late fifties. Silver hair, trimmed beard, manicured hands. No defensive injuries showed on the fingers. A black line circled his throat, thin and complete. Above it, his skin had flushed dark purple. “Ligature,” Pike offered. “Wire, from the look of it. Killer took it away.” Quinn angled her torch. “No.” “No?” “The mark crosses itself beneath the left ear.” “Garrotte.” “A garrotte would break the skin there.” Pike crouched beside her. His suit crackled. “Soft cord, then.” “Soft cord leaves width. This has none.” “A thin cord.” “With what tensile strength?” “Fishing line.” Quinn pointed to three tiny bruises beneath the victim’s jaw. “Then explain those.” Pike leaned closer. “Fingertips?” “Thumb, index, middle. Someone held his head upright.” “While they strangled him.” “From the front?” “Wouldn’t be my choice.” “Nothing here was anyone’s first choice.” The dead man’s jacket hung open. A brass chain crossed his waistcoat and vanished into the right-hand pocket. Quinn followed it with her torch. “Has that been bagged?” “Not yet. Photographer finished five minutes ago.” “Get Patel.” The crime-scene manager approached, face compressed behind a mask. Quinn indicated the chain. Patel photographed it in place, then drew a small object from the pocket with plastic forceps. A compass swung at the end. Its brass casing carried a green patina around the hinge. Protective sigils covered the lid, packed so close that they resembled scratches until the light caught their pattern. Patel opened it. The needle shivered, spun twice and fixed on the tiled wall behind the corpse. Pike snorted. “Broken.” Quinn shifted two steps to her right. The needle moved with her, keeping its point on the same section of wall. “Not broken.” “Magnet behind the tiles.” “Then why carry it?” “Man sold rubbish to idiots?” A voice came from behind the cordon. “He didn’t sell rubbish.” Quinn turned. A young woman stood between two uniforms, clutching a worn leather satchel against her green coat. Curly red hair had escaped its pins and crowded around her round glasses. Freckles covered a face drained of colour. One constable kept a hand near her elbow without touching her. Pike looked at his clipboard. “Eva Kowalski. British Museum. Claims she’s a consultant.” “I said researcher.” Eva tucked a curl behind her left ear. “Consultants get paid.” Quinn’s gaze moved from the satchel to Eva’s shoes. Brown leather, low heel. Fine grey powder coated the toes. A blue speck gleamed near the stitching. “You’ve been here before.” Eva adjusted her grip. “No.” “The arrows shed pigment. You stepped on one, then walked through lime dust near the old service door. That combination doesn’t exist upstairs.” Eva looked down at her shoes. Pike gave Quinn a flat stare. “Consultant?” “Researcher,” Eva repeated. Quinn approached the tape. At five foot nine, she looked down over the frame of Eva’s glasses. “How did you enter?” “I followed the police.” “The police came through the grille. No lime there.” Eva’s fingers found the strap of her satchel and squeezed. Quinn held out her palm. “Token.” “I don’t know what you mean.” “Then I’ll search the bag.” “You’ll need grounds.” “You lied at a murder scene.” “That’s suspicion, not grounds.” Pike glanced between them. “She’s got you there.” Quinn kept her hand extended. Eva stared at it, then opened the satchel. Books pressed against bundles of notes, loose pencils and a wrapped object the size of an apple. She reached into an inner pocket and placed a small disc on Quinn’s palm. Bone, polished smooth. A hole pierced its centre. One side bore the same sigils as the compass; the other carried a crescent split by a vertical line. Pike’s face changed. “That human?” “Not unless the owner had antlers,” Eva replied. “Comforting.” Quinn turned the token between finger and thumb. Its edge showed a dark smear. “Blood?” “Wax.” “Black wax.” Eva looked towards the candles surrounding the victim. “That doesn’t make it his.” “No. Your decision to hide it does.” “I hid it because your officers would catalogue it as occult paraphernalia and dump it in a box beside Ouija boards and plastic vampire teeth.” Pike pointed at the body. “Man’s sitting in a candle circle with a magic compass. We might stretch to a separate box.” Eva’s eyes fixed on the open compass in Patel’s forceps. “Don’t let her move it.” Patel froze. Quinn watched Eva rather than the needle. “Why?” “That’s a Veil Compass.” “A compass for what?” Eva’s tongue pressed against the inside of her cheek. Quinn folded the bone token into an evidence bag. “You can answer here or at Kentish Town. The chairs here have less urine on them.” “It points towards breaches.” Pike looked at the tiled wall. “Breaches of what?” “Places that shouldn’t touch, but do.” “You mean doors.” “I mean rifts.” The word settled into the dripping station without echo. Pike rubbed a hand over his face. “Right. Ritual killing. Underground cult market. Victim crossed a witch, got strangled, compass points to the secret exit. I’ll write it up before breakfast.” “No ritual,” Eva murmured. “You recognise the victim?” Her gaze dropped to his bare feet. Quinn caught it. “Name.” “Silas Venn.” “Occupation?” “Broker.” “Drugs?” “Information. Objects. Introductions.” “For this market?” Eva glanced at the hanging cloth, the empty tables and jars. “The Veil Market moves every full moon. It should have remained here until dawn.” Pike checked his phone. “Full moon was last night.” “Yes.” “So everyone packed up and left.” “They left stock behind.” “Police tend to spoil trade.” “They left before the police arrived.” Quinn turned back to the body. Silas Venn’s trouser knees showed no dust. His socks remained pale, without grit or damp. The platform floor, by contrast, wore a skin of grime thick enough to preserve each footprint. Around the candle ring lay a mess of overlapping tracks: boots, narrow shoes, one broad bare foot with six toes. Inside the ring, nothing marked the dust except the blood. Quinn crouched again. “How did he get there?” Pike joined her. “Walked.” “In clean socks?” “Shoes removed after death.” “By whom?” “The killer.” “Then where are their prints inside the circle?” Pike studied the floor. “They brushed them away.” “With what? The dust hasn’t streaked.” “Placed him before they poured the ring.” Quinn pointed at the blood. “And lit the candles afterwards?” “Works for me.” “It shouldn’t.” She leaned over the nearest candle. Black wax had gathered at its base, fixing it to the tile. The wick carried a bead of soot, but the wax showed no warm runnels down its side. Each candle had been cut to a different length before anyone lit it. She shifted her torch towards the blood. “The pool crosses the wax.” Pike squinted. One thin tongue of blood had spread over a candle’s black base. “Body first,” he conceded. “Candles second.” “No footprints.” “Someone reached.” “From outside a circle six feet across?” “A tool.” “What kind?” “The sort of tool murderers bring to haunted markets.” Quinn lowered her face close to the tiles. The blood reflected her torch, but a patch beneath Venn’s left calf stayed dull. “Patel. I need the body lifted three inches. No more.” Patel called over a technician. They supported Venn’s shoulders and hips, raising him with careful hands. Under his calf lay a rectangular patch of clean white tile. Its edges formed hard lines through the surrounding dust. At the centre, a single brass screw rested in blood. Pike bent towards it. “Something was under him.” Quinn looked at the pillar. Four feet above the floor, fresh scratches cut through the soot. Two ran parallel, spaced to match the clean rectangle below. “A stretcher?” “Too small.” “A trolley.” “No wheel tracks.” Eva had moved close to the tape again. “A stall table.” Quinn measured the marks with her fingers. “Folding table leaned against the pillar. Venn fell or was placed on it. Someone removed the table after blood began to pool.” Pike pointed to the corpse’s position. “Then he’d have dropped.” “Not if the table went somewhere else while he stayed.” “That sentence needs surgery.” Quinn ignored him. She studied Venn’s jacket, the clean socks, the untouched dust. Three grey fibres clung to his shoulder, all running in the same direction. Beneath his left cuff, the skin had a pale band where a watch had sat. She checked both wrists. No watch. “Look at the blood flow.” Pike’s eyes narrowed. “Down the platform.” “London Underground built the gradient towards the drain. That part makes sense. This doesn’t.” She pointed at the victim’s right sleeve. A dry line of blood ran from the cuff towards the elbow, opposite the slope beneath him. “He bled while his arm pointed upwards,” Pike said. “On the table.” “Then they lowered him.” “Without touching the dust.” Eva’s breathing shortened. She pressed two fingers to the bridge of her glasses. Quinn turned to the compass. The needle still aimed through Venn’s chest towards the wall. “Patel, move it one metre towards the track.” Eva stepped forwards. A constable caught her elbow. “Don’t.” Patel carried the open compass to the platform edge. The needle swung, passed the wall and pointed back at the corpse. Nobody spoke. Quinn walked left. “Again. Take it beyond the body.” Patel moved past the pillar. The needle turned in its casing and followed Venn. Pike stared at the dead broker. “So the rift’s in him?” Eva pulled against the constable’s grip. “Put the compass down.” Quinn’s attention settled on Venn’s waistcoat pocket. The chain had come from there, but the pocket sagged on one side, as though it had held something heavier than the compass. Along the seam, black residue formed a narrow crust. “Not in him.” She glanced at Eva’s token, now sealed in plastic, then at the black wax around the candles. “Under him.” Patel and the technician raised Venn higher. Quinn aimed her torch at the back of his waistcoat. A slit ran through the cloth between his shoulder blades. It had no matching wound beneath it. Someone had stitched the opening shut with coarse black thread, each knot daubed in wax. Pike’s voice lost its humour. “That isn’t in the scene log.” “No one turned him over.” Quinn drew closer. A blue gleam winked between two stitches, the same colour as the arrows on Eva’s shoes. She looked past the body to the false Mornington Crescent sign, then down the tunnel where no rails shone beyond the first bend. The dust around the corpse held no arrival tracks because Venn had not crossed the platform. The table had not carried him. It had stood beneath him when the station touched somewhere else, and whoever closed that opening had removed the support from the other side. Quinn pointed to the stitched slit. “Photograph every knot. Then cut the thread. Nothing else.” Eva stopped fighting the constable. “You don’t understand what they sealed.” Quinn’s brown eyes stayed on the blue light leaking through Venn’s waistcoat. “No. But I understand what they wanted us to think.” Pike glanced at the candles. “A ritual murder.” “A murder on this platform.” Quinn indicated the clean socks, the reversed blood trail and the untouched floor. “Silas Venn died somewhere without dust, without gravity in the direction we know, and without a floor beneath his feet. Someone sent his body here dressed as an answer.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences172
tagDensity0.047
leniency0.093
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2567
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
94.16% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2567
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"comforting"
count1
1
word"echo"
count1
2
word"measured"
count1
highlights
0"comforting"
1"echo"
2"measured"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences197
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences197
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"appeared to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences361
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen29
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2567
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions120
wordCount1700
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity2.41
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity6
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn41
London1
Tube1
Camden1
Leon1
Pike28
Eva22
Patel8
Venn10
Mornington1
Crescent1
One4
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Leon"
3"Pike"
4"Eva"
5"Patel"
6"Venn"
7"One"
places
0"London"
1"Mornington"
2"Crescent"
globalScore0.294
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences134
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2567
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences361
matches
0"closed that opening"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs242
mean10.61
std11.62
cv1.095
sampleLengths
022
152
246
34
415
52
68
714
84
910
109
1148
125
1329
146
159
1619
177
1861
1915
207
213
2220
233
248
255
262
271
289
298
301
314
322
336
3432
3517
364
376
387
3911
404
4137
422
4313
443
454
465
475
485
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences197
matches
0"been emptied"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs279
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences361
ratio0.003
matches
0"One side bore the same sigils as the compass; the other carried a crescent split by a vertical line."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1705
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.012316715542521995
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0005865102639296188
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences361
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences361
mean7.11
std5.3
cv0.745
sampleLengths
022
15
214
314
419
518
67
721
84
910
105
112
128
139
145
154
1610
179
187
1915
207
2119
225
2318
2411
252
262
272
289
2910
309
317
3215
3312
349
354
3621
377
388
397
403
4120
423
438
445
452
461
473
486
493
55.59% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.3518005540166205
totalSentences361
uniqueOpeners127
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences181
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences181
matches
0"His hood hung loose behind"
1"He held a clipboard against"
2"She passed him and swept"
3"She moved the beam elsewhere."
4"His socks were clean."
5"His head rested against the"
6"It had run between the"
7"Her sharp jaw cast a"
8"He had paper covers over"
9"It carried wet stone, burnt"
10"His suit crackled."
11"Its brass casing carried a"
12"She reached into an inner"
13"Its edge showed a dark"
14"Her gaze dropped to his"
15"His socks remained pale, without"
16"She leaned over the nearest"
17"She shifted her torch towards"
18"They supported Venn’s shoulders and"
19"Its edges formed hard lines"
ratio0.155
40.11% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount152
totalSentences181
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under"
1"Water clicked in the dark."
2"Someone had painted arrows along"
3"DC Leon Pike waited at"
4"His hood hung loose behind"
5"He held a clipboard against"
6"Quinn checked the worn leather"
7"Pike pinched the white sleeve"
8"She passed him and swept"
9"A market had occupied the"
10"Glass jars stood abandoned in"
11"She moved the beam elsewhere."
12"A cracked sign above the"
13"Someone had fixed a second"
14"Quinn tapped the last word"
15"Pike lifted his evidence case"
16"A body sat propped against"
17"The victim wore a charcoal"
18"His socks were clean."
19"His head rested against the"
ratio0.84
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences181
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences70
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"His head rested against the tiles, chin tucked to his chest, as if sleep had caught him during a dull wait."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Eva repeated (repeat)"
1"Eva murmured (murmur)"
2"he conceded (concede)"
dialogueSentences172
tagDensity0.029
leniency0.058
rawRatio0.6
effectiveRatio0.035
85.6618%