Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCPRTZAPYRR4HEDWJ5Q9T8F

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The bike chain snapped four hundred yards from the standing stones, and Rory decided that was fine. She'd walk. She'd walked worse. She left the bike in the bracken beside the path, wheel still ticking over, and pulled the delivery bag off her shoulder because carrying it felt absurd now. Cold noodles for a man who lived in Richmond Park. That was the job. Someone had rung the Golden Empress at half nine and Yu-Fei had written the address on the docket in her small tight hand and said nothing at all about it, which was the first thing that should have stopped her. The second thing was the address itself. No house number. No street. Just: *the oaks past the Isabella Plantation. He will be waiting.* Rory had made worse decisions this month. The park at night was not the park. In daylight it was joggers and pushchairs and deer photographed a hundred times an hour. Now the grass went on without ending, silvered, and the bracken made a dry sound like paper being crushed in a fist somewhere behind her. She kept the torch on her phone off. Habit. Light made you a target and ruined your night vision, and Eva had drilled that into her over three separate bottles of wine. Ahead, the oaks. They stood in a rough ring, seven of them that she could count, and they were wrong in a way she couldn't put her finger on until she was close enough to touch. They didn't lean. Every other tree in this park leaned, bent by two hundred years of wind off the Thames valley. These stood straight as pillars, spaced too evenly, bark cracked into vertical seams that looked less like growth and more like carving. Between them, the grass changed. Cropped short. And flowers. In November. Rory crouched at the boundary and held her hand a few inches above the line where the wild grass ended and the short grass began. Warmth came off it. Not much. The warmth of a body under a blanket, an hour after they'd left the bed. Under her jumper, the pendant shifted against her sternum. She'd worn it for three weeks without knowing why she kept putting it on. It had arrived in a padded envelope with no return address, a crimson stone the size of a thumbnail on a silver chain, and her father would have said *bin it* and her mother would have said *how lovely* and Rory had put it on because it had felt like it wanted to be worn. Now it was warm too. Warmer than the grass. "Hello?" Her voice went nowhere. That was the third thing. In open parkland, a shout carried, thinned, came back off the tree line. Hers stopped about six feet from her mouth as if it had walked into a wall of felt. She stepped over the line. Sound came back all at once, but the wrong sound. Insects. A high summer drone of crickets, thick and layered, the sort you got in Andalusia in August. She stood in a field of blooming wildflowers, in London, in November, listening to crickets, and she noted with a certain detached professionalism that her hands had gone cold and steady rather than shaky, which was how they always went when things turned bad. "I've got your food," she said. Louder. "Beef ho fun and two spring rolls. Fourteen sixty. Card or cash." Nothing answered. The clearing was maybe forty feet across. She could see all of it. Grass, flowers, seven trees, and at the centre a low flat stone with a hollow worn into it the way church steps wear hollow, and nothing else. No man. No house. No path in or out except the way she'd come. Rory looked back. The gap she'd walked through was still there, and beyond it the park lay grey and ordinary, bracken and dark and the ridiculous distant orange smudge of Kingston. Fine. Good. She catalogued it the way she'd catalogued exits from every room since Cardiff. One way out. Behind me. Twelve steps. She counted the steps as she crossed to the stone. It took her nineteen. That was when she stopped enjoying herself. She turned. The gap was still twelve steps away, exactly where she'd left it, and she had walked nineteen steps in a clearing forty feet wide. She stood very still and did the arithmetic twice and both times it came out the same and both times it was stupid. The crickets stopped. All of them. Not a fade. A switch. The silence that came after had a shape to it, a listening quality, the way a house goes quiet when someone at the top of the stairs stops breathing. "Right," Rory said. She set the delivery bag on the flat stone because she wanted both hands, and while she was bent over she saw the hollow properly. It wasn't worn by feet. It was a bowl. Something had been poured into it for a long time, over and over, and the stone at the bottom had gone dark and glassy and there were fine pale lines radiating out from it like the tracks of dried salt. The pendant was hot now. Not pleasant. The sting of a mug you shouldn't have picked up. Something moved at the left edge of her vision. She didn't snap round. That was the trick, that was the thing Eva had never learned, you never snapped round because whatever it was would already be gone and you'd have given away that you'd seen. Rory kept her head down over the stone and slid her eyes. Between the third and fourth oak, at the height of a tall man's head, the darkness had a texture. Vertical. Narrow. Like a fold in a curtain where the fabric doubles. She counted to five. The fold stayed. She counted to ten. It shifted eight inches to the right and stopped. "You could just come and get your dinner," she said, to the stone. The reply came from behind her right shoulder, close enough that it disturbed the hair at the back of her neck, and it was not words. It was the sound of a mouth arranging itself into the shape of a word and then failing. A wet click. A soft intake. The noise a person makes in the moment before they lie to you. Rory's whole spine went cold from the base up. She straightened. Slowly. Hands loose. Turned on the ball of her left foot, the way you turn when you want the whole clearing and not just one slice of it. Empty. Grass, flowers, seven oaks. The gap in the ring, twelve steps away, showing the ordinary park. Except there were eight oaks now. She counted them again with her finger, out loud, and her voice had gone thin and she didn't care. "One. Two. Three. Four. Five. Six. Seven. Eight." The eighth stood between the gap and her. It had bark cracked into vertical seams like the others and it stood straight like the others and it had not been there when she walked in, and the grass around its base was flattened outward in a ring, the way grass flattens when something heavy has been set down on it very recently. Rory took one step towards the gap. Every flower in the clearing turned its head. Not towards the moon. Not towards her. All of them, all at once, ten thousand small pale faces on ten thousand stems, swivelling with a rustle like a crowd putting down its newspapers, and they aimed themselves at the eighth tree. The pendant burned. She grabbed it through her jumper and the heat went straight into her palm and she held it anyway because letting go felt like a worse idea. "Okay," she whispered. "Okay. You're a tree. You're just a tree." Somewhere above her, in the branches of the tree that was just a tree, something drew breath and got it right this time. "*Aurora*," it said, in her mother's voice.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences9
tagDensity0.556
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.88% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1349
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
88.88% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1349
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"warmth"
count2
1
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences122
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences122
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences126
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen55
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords15
totalWords1349
ratio0.011
matches
0"the oaks past the Isabella Plantation. He will be waiting."
1"bin it"
2"how lovely"
3"Aurora"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount1305
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity0.69
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory9
Richmond1
Park1
Golden1
Empress1
Yu-Fei1
Isabella1
Plantation1
Eva2
Thames1
November2
Andalusia1
August1
London1
Louder1
Kingston1
Cardiff1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Yu-Fei"
2"Eva"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Isabella"
3"Plantation"
4"Thames"
5"November"
6"Andalusia"
7"August"
8"London"
9"Kingston"
10"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
68.03% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences61
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like it wanted to be worn"
1"felt like a worse idea"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1349
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences126
matches
0"away that you'd"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean26.98
std24.53
cv0.909
sampleLengths
022
182
223
37
480
53
676
711
846
99
1069
119
121
1340
145
1572
1619
172
1854
193
2050
2114
227
2349
243
2537
263
2774
2817
299
3048
3131
327
3313
3413
3563
369
3730
381
3916
406
4127
4262
437
448
4541
4630
4711
4823
497
93.76% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences122
matches
0"being crushed"
1"was bent"
2"been poured"
3"was flattened"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs203
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences126
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1306
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"ridiculous distant orange smudge"
adverbCount33
adverbRatio0.02526799387442573
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.005359877488514548
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences126
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences126
mean10.71
std11.25
cv1.05
sampleLengths
017
12
23
328
410
54
640
77
83
92
107
114
127
138
1415
1525
168
171
1823
193
2033
213
2218
2322
245
252
262
272
2825
294
302
3115
329
3314
3455
355
364
371
384
395
4013
4118
425
4310
441
4517
4644
476
481
4912
66.14% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.4444444444444444
totalSentences126
uniqueOpeners56
35.46% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences94
matches
0"Somewhere above her, in the"
ratio0.011
92.34% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences94
matches
0"She'd walked worse."
1"She left the bike in"
2"He will be waiting.*"
3"She kept the torch on"
4"They stood in a rough"
5"They didn't lean."
6"She'd worn it for three"
7"It had arrived in a"
8"Her voice went nowhere."
9"Hers stopped about six feet"
10"She stepped over the line."
11"She stood in a field"
12"She could see all of"
13"She catalogued it the way"
14"She counted the steps as"
15"It took her nineteen."
16"She stood very still and"
17"She set the delivery bag"
18"It wasn't worn by feet."
19"It was a bowl."
ratio0.319
82.34% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences94
matches
0"The bike chain snapped four"
1"She'd walked worse."
2"She left the bike in"
3"That was the job."
4"Someone had rung the Golden"
5"The second thing was the"
6"He will be waiting.*"
7"Rory had made worse decisions"
8"The park at night was"
9"She kept the torch on"
10"Light made you a target"
11"They stood in a rough"
12"They didn't lean."
13"Every other tree in this"
14"These stood straight as pillars,"
15"Rory crouched at the boundary"
16"Warmth came off it."
17"The warmth of a body"
18"She'd worn it for three"
19"It had arrived in a"
ratio0.755
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences94
matches
0"Now the grass went on"
1"Now it was warm too."
ratio0.021
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences44
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Someone had rung the Golden Empress at half nine and Yu-Fei had written the address on the docket in her small tight hand and said nothing at all about it, whic…"
1"The silence that came after had a shape to it, a listening quality, the way a house goes quiet when someone at the top of the stairs stops breathing."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
50.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences9
tagDensity0.556
leniency1
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.2
91.9944%