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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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The ice bucket slipped, and forty quid's worth of cubes skittered across the floor behind the bar. "Leave it," Silas said, without looking up from the till. "The Tuesday crowd like a bit of crunch underfoot." Rory crouched anyway, scooping ice into the tray with her bare hands until her fingers went pink and stupid. Behind her, the door swung and the street noise came in with it: a taxi horn, a man laughing at something on his phone, the hum of the green neon over the entrance. She didn't turn round. Tuesdays brought in men who wanted to talk about their divorces. "Aurora Carter." She knew the voice before she knew the name attached to it. The vowels had been sanded down, London had done its work, but underneath them Cardiff still sat like damp in a wall. "Nia." "Oh my God, it is you." Nia Prosser stood with one hand on the back of a stool, the other clutching a handbag that cost more than Rory's month of rent. Camel coat. Blow-dried hair. Nails the colour of raw oysters. "Sara said she thought she saw you in Soho and I said, don't be daft, Rory's back home reading for the Bar, and here you are. Behind a bar. That's, God, that's almost funny." "Almost." Silas set a cloth down and drifted to the far end, close enough to hear, far enough to be furniture. He had a way of doing that. Old maps and dead men in black-and-white watched from the walls, and Silas made himself one of them. "What'll you have?" "What do people have here?" "Whatever we've got." "Right." Nia laughed. The laugh had changed too. It used to come from her belly and knock drinks over. Now it stopped at her teeth. "A gin, then. With something in it. Not tonic, I'm off tonic, it bloats you." Rory poured a Plymouth and cut a strip of lemon peel because Silas would notice if she didn't. Nia peeled off her gloves, one finger at a time, and there it was, a solitaire the size of a back tooth, sitting on top of a plain band. "Congratulations," Rory said. "Two years in September." Nia turned the ring a quarter turn, a gesture so practised it looked like breathing. "Rhys. He's at Hartley Vaughan with me. Property. Boring as a wet Sunday but he's kind, and honestly, Rory, at our age kind is the whole menu." "Twenty-five." "Twenty-five and pupillage." She took her first sip, and her shoulders came down an inch. "You'd have walked it, you know. Prof Adeyemi still uses your moot on the Hunter case. Uses it as an example. My daughter's your age, he says, and she never once made an argument like this." "He said that about everyone." "He never said it about me." The ice machine shuddered and settled. Rory wiped the same six inches of zinc twice. "So who's got you, then?" Nia asked. "Which chambers?" "None of them." "Sabbatical, is it? Everyone's doing that now. Thailand and a personality change." "I deliver noodles." Nia's glass hovered. "Sorry?" "Golden Empress. Kingsland Road. Part-time, lunches and evenings, and I live upstairs from here." Rory nodded at the ceiling. "The pipes sing at three in the morning. You get used to it." "Right." Nia set the glass down carefully, the way you set down something you might need to pick up as a weapon. "Your dad know?" "My dad's a barrister. He knows everything and admits nothing." "He rang me. Last Christmas. Rang me, Rory, at my mother's house, asking if I had a number for you." "Did you give him one?" "I didn't have one to give." Nia's eyes went to Rory's hands, snagged on the wrist, on the little white crescent under the strap of her watch. Twelve years old, a garden fence, a dare. Nia had been the one holding the towel while Rory's mother swore in Welsh and drove them to A&E. "You cut your hair." "It got in the way." "It suited you long." "It got in the way," Rory said again, and heard how flat it came out, how much it sounded like a door closing. Nia turned on the stool to look at the room. Maps of places that had changed their names. A photograph of a bridge that no longer stood. She took it all in with the practised sweep of a woman who had learned to price a room. "You could come back, you know. Not to Cardiff, God, no one goes back to Cardiff. But there are conversions, there are routes in. You're twenty-five, not fifty. I could put a word in with Marcus, he owes me a favour, he owes me about nine favours actually and one of them involves a photocopier." "Nia." "I'm only saying that people don't fall out of the sky for no reason." The extractor fan clicked over. Down the bar, Silas turned a page of a newspaper he wasn't reading. "Say his name, then," Rory said. "Since we're here." Nia's throat moved. She looked at her ring instead of at Rory. "He's engaged," she said. "There. That's the thing you'll hear anyway, so you may as well hear it from me. A girl from Bristol. Pharmacist, I think. Vet. Something with animals." "You went to the party." "Rhys's firm does their conveyancing." "You went to the party." "There were sixty people there, Rory, it wasn't a coronation." Nia's voice climbed and then, sharply, dropped. "What was I meant to do? Stand up between the canapés and make a speech?" "You could have not gone." "And say what? You never told me anything. You turned up at my flat at two in the morning with your lip split open and you said you'd walked into a cupboard, and I made you tea and gave you my green jumper and in the morning you'd gone and you never once, not once, said the word out loud." Her eyes were wet and furious. "You made me guess. For years, you made me guess, and then you vanished and left me holding the guess." "You knew." "I gave you his number." Nia said it very quietly. "First year. He asked me for it and I gave him yours instead, because I thought, God, Rory never lets anyone near her, and he's clever, and he laughs at her jokes. I did that. I've thought about it every single day for six years and you've never let me say sorry, because you were never bloody there." The room held it. Somewhere above them a pipe knocked twice, as if agreeing. Rory poured herself a glass of water she didn't want. "You should go home to Rhys," she said. "The kind one." Nia stood. She put her gloves on the same way she'd taken them off, finger by finger, and she was steady again, terribly steady, the way people are when the crying's been rescheduled. "He asks about you," she said. "Every time. Very casual, like he's asking about the weather. Where's Rory these days. How's Rory getting on. And I say I don't know, because I didn't." At the door she stopped. "I don't want to know now either. Don't tell me anything else." The neon put a green stripe across her coat, and then she was gone into the noise. Rory stood with the cloth in her hand for a long moment. Then she cleared Nia's glass, half full, the lipstick a perfect crescent on the rim, and tipped it down the sink. Her phone buzzed in her back pocket. Unknown number. A photograph. The green neon sign of The Raven's Nest, shot from across the street, the lit doorway, and in the doorway a woman in a camel coat pulling on her gloves. Then a second buzz. Six words. *You cut your hair. I noticed.* Silas folded his newspaper. He was already moving, that slight drag in the left leg, one hand going to the bolt on the door. "Aurora," he said. "Get away from the window."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Rory said again [again]"
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.302
leniency0.603
rawRatio0.053
effectiveRatio0.032
85.14% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1346
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"carefully"
1"sharply"
2"very"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found
0"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
96.29% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1346
totalAiIsms1
found
0
word"perfect"
count1
highlights
0"perfect"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences69
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences69
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences112
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen66
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords6
totalWords1346
ratio0.004
matches
0"You cut your hair. I noticed."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions43
wordCount711
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity2.11
worstName"Nia"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Nia"
discoveredNames
Rory13
London1
Cardiff1
Prosser1
Camel1
Silas6
Plymouth1
Nia15
Twelve1
Welsh1
Raven1
Nest1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Prosser"
2"Silas"
3"Nia"
4"Raven"
5"Nest"
places
0"London"
1"Cardiff"
2"Camel"
3"Welsh"
globalScore0.445
windowScore0.167
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences42
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like breathing"
1"sounded like a door closing"
2"as if agreeing"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1346
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences112
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs64
mean21.03
std20.98
cv0.998
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267
32
434
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71
845
93
105
113
1240
1347
143
1546
161
1751
185
196
2015
219
223
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243
254
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2725
2810
2920
305
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325
334
3423
3546
3655
371
3814
3918
409
4112
4231
435
445
455
4632
475
4886
492
90.01% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences69
matches
0"been sanded"
1"been rescheduled"
2"was gone"
86.04% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs117
matches
0"wasn't reading"
1"was already moving"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences112
ratio0
matches(empty)
99.46% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount714
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount29
adverbRatio0.04061624649859944
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.0070028011204481795
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences112
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences112
mean12.02
std11.92
cv0.992
sampleLengths
017
110
29
319
433
54
611
72
812
922
101
1131
122
132
146
1534
161
1720
187
1918
203
215
223
233
245
2511
266
2715
2818
2929
303
3119
3227
331
3415
3536
365
376
386
399
407
412
423
4312
443
453
461
4719
4813
4922
73.51% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.4732142857142857
totalSentences112
uniqueOpeners53
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences54
matches
0"Somewhere above them a pipe"
1"Then she cleared Nia's glass,"
2"Then a second buzz."
ratio0.056
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount12
totalSentences54
matches
0"She didn't turn round."
1"She knew the voice before"
2"He had a way of"
3"It used to come from"
4"She took her first sip,"
5"She took it all in"
6"She looked at her ring"
7"Her eyes were wet and"
8"She put her gloves on"
9"Her phone buzzed in her"
10"*You cut your hair."
11"He was already moving, that"
ratio0.222
52.59% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount44
totalSentences54
matches
0"The ice bucket slipped, and"
1"Silas said, without looking up"
2"Rory crouched anyway, scooping ice"
3"She didn't turn round."
4"Tuesdays brought in men who"
5"She knew the voice before"
6"The vowels had been sanded"
7"Nia Prosser stood with one"
8"Silas set a cloth down"
9"He had a way of"
10"The laugh had changed too."
11"It used to come from"
12"Rory poured a Plymouth and"
13"Nia peeled off her gloves,"
14"Nia turned the ring a"
15"She took her first sip,"
16"The ice machine shuddered and"
17"Rory wiped the same six"
18"Nia's glass hovered."
19"Rory nodded at the ceiling"
ratio0.815
92.59% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences54
matches
0"Now it stopped at her"
ratio0.019
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences23
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
72.37% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Silas said, without looking up from the till"
1"Nia turned, a gesture so practised it looked like breathing"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Nia laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.175
leniency0.349
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.032
88.1556%