Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCQWFDRJ88859K5JS21XG74

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The pendant went warm somewhere past Pen Ponds, and I stopped walking. Warm was the wrong word for it. Warm suggested a mug of tea, a radiator, something that wanted you close. This was the heat of a coin left on a windowsill in August, dry and patient, sitting against my sternum like it had been waiting all week for me to catch up. I pulled it out from under my collar. The crimson stone had a light in it now, deep down, the way a house looks when someone's left a lamp on three rooms back. "Right," I said. "That's the direction, then." Nobody answered, which was fine. That was the point of Richmond Park at half eleven on a Tuesday in November. I'd gone over the wall by Ham Gate with a delivery bag still smelling of Yu-Fei's black bean sauce, because Eva's brother wasn't at the flat, hadn't been for six days, and the last text on his phone had been a photo of standing stones with no caption. Bracken dragged at my jeans. The frost had come down hard and every stem cracked under me, so loud I kept stopping to listen to myself, which is the sort of habit that gets you killed. Then I noticed what I wasn't hearing. No aeroplanes. Heathrow sits ten miles from that grass and the sky over Richmond is a motorway of blinking lights, all night, every night. I stood with my head tipped back until my neck ached. Stars, thick as spilled salt, and not one of them moving. No deer either. Six hundred of the things live in that park. You can't walk two hundred yards in the dark without a red deer coughing at you like an angry old man clearing his throat. The silence had a shape to it. It sat over the bracken like a hand held above a candle, not quite touching. I kept going, because Danny was nineteen and stupid and Eva had made me promise. The oaks came up out of the dark before I understood they were there. Three of them, then five, then a ring of them, black and squat and much too regular, spaced like teeth. Standing stones, Danny's photo had suggested, and he'd got that half right. Someone had planted these when the Romans were still deciding whether Britain was worth the paperwork, and they'd grown into something that wasn't tree and wasn't stone, bark gone hard and grey and grained like slate. I put my palm on the nearest one. It thrummed. Once. Like a struck wire two rooms away. Past the gap between the trunks, the grass was green. Not frost-green. Not the sick khaki of English winter. Green like the second week of May, and studded all through with wildflowers, cowslips and ragged robin and something small and blue I had no name for, all of them open, all of them turned up towards a moon that wasn't in the sky I'd just been looking at. The air coming through the gap smelled of cut hay and warm honey. My breath stopped fogging. I have a rule about doorways that smell nicer than the room you're in. I broke it. Danny's trainers were sitting in the middle of that clearing, side by side, laces tied. "Danny?" The grove took my voice and gave it back a beat too late, from slightly the wrong place, off to my left where the ground fell away into more flowers. I'd expected an echo. I hadn't expected the echo to sound patient. I crouched by the trainers. Size elevens, Adidas, one heel worn through the way he always wore them through. No socks. No footprints in the grass leading anywhere, and grass that soft holds a print like wet clay. The pendant lay against my chest, pulsing now, slow, the rhythm of something sleeping. Behind me, a twig snapped. I turned. Nothing but the ring of trunks and the black beyond them, and my own breath, which had come back and come back loud. "I'm not here to bother anyone," I said to the trees. "I'm here for the boy. He's nineteen. He doesn't know anything worth taking." Wind moved through the branches. There was no wind on my face. I want to be clear that I'm not a screamer. I've had a knife held to my throat outside a chip shop in Cardiff and I talked the man into putting it away and then into a taxi. Fear, for me, arrives as a kind of administrative calm, a clipboard being taken out. So I stood in the middle of that impossible May garden and I made a list. One. The gap I'd come through was still there. I could see the frost on the other side, silver and dead. Good. Two. Something had taken his shoes off and tied the laces. That was worse than blood would have been. Blood is an accident. Laces are a decision. Three. There was a sound underneath the silence, and it had been there since I crossed the boundary, and I'd been filing it as my own pulse. It wasn't my pulse. It was slower than my pulse. Breathing. Large, unhurried, coming from everywhere, the way a room's warmth comes from everywhere. I put my hand flat on the grass and felt it lift, the smallest amount, and settle. "Oh, that's not on," I whispered. Something crossed the edge of my vision. Not a shape. A gap in the flowers, a stripe where the blooms bent aside and then straightened, moving right to left, thirty feet away, at the pace of a woman walking her dog. I tracked it and it stopped. I looked away and it started again, closer now, and the sweet honey air went thin and mineral, like the inside of a well. The pendant flared. Actual pain, a brand pressed under my collarbone. I grabbed it through my jumper and my fingers cooked and I did not let go. "Aurora." My mother's voice. My mother is in Cardiff with her marking and her bad knee and she has never once, in twenty-five years, said my full name without love folded into it, and this had the love in it too, the exact weight of it, which is how I knew. It came from behind the sixth tree. "Aurora, love, you're standing on it." I looked down. The flowers between my boots had opened wider. Under them, through them, pale and just below the green, something turned over slowly, and it had the shine of a fingernail. "Nice try," I said, and my voice came out steady, and I was so proud of that. "My mother calls me Rory." The grove went quiet. Properly quiet. Even the breathing stopped, and the stopping was worse, the way a dentist's drill stopping is worse. Then every wildflower in that clearing closed at once, a sound like a hundred hands catching a hundred moths. I ran for the gap. It was four strides away, then nine, then a mile of green, the trunks sliding sideways past each other like cards being shuffled, and behind me, unhurried, came the wet snapping of laces being untied.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.69% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1203
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
62.59% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1203
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"echo"
count2
2
word"pulse"
count3
3
word"warmth"
count1
4
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"echo"
2"pulse"
3"warmth"
4"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences96
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences96
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences102
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen49
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1203
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions25
wordCount1160
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity0.26
worstName"Danny"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Richmond"
discoveredNames
Pen1
Ponds1
August1
Richmond2
Park1
Tuesday1
November1
Ham1
Gate1
Yu-Fei1
Eva2
Danny3
Romans1
Britain1
English1
May2
Adidas1
Wind1
Cardiff2
persons
0"Yu-Fei"
1"Eva"
2"Danny"
3"Wind"
places
0"August"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
3"November"
4"May"
5"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences63
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"not quite touching"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1203
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences102
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean27.98
std23.39
cv0.836
sampleLengths
012
185
27
368
436
57
646
758
815
990
1010
1110
1258
1317
1432
151
1642
1752
185
1925
2024
2112
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2322
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261
2730
286
297
3064
3127
321
3350
347
356
363
3730
3822
3923
4019
415
4235
97.95% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences96
matches
0"being taken"
1"being shuffled"
2"being untied"
98.99% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs198
matches
0"wasn't hearing"
1"were still deciding"
2"were sitting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences102
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1163
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount46
adverbRatio0.03955288048151333
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.0025795356835769563
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences102
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences102
mean11.79
std10.56
cv0.896
sampleLengths
012
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213
332
48
525
63
74
85
915
1048
115
1231
137
142
1522
1611
1711
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199
2024
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2215
2315
2414
2520
2612
2736
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292
301
317
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332
347
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3613
374
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393
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4230
434
448
455
4614
472
4817
4914
66.67% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.47058823529411764
totalSentences102
uniqueOpeners48
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences82
matches
0"Then I noticed what I"
1"Even the breathing stopped, and"
2"Then every wildflower in that"
ratio0.037
73.66% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences82
matches
0"I pulled it out from"
1"I'd gone over the wall"
2"I stood with my head"
3"You can't walk two hundred"
4"It sat over the bracken"
5"I kept going, because Danny"
6"I put my palm on"
7"My breath stopped fogging."
8"I have a rule about"
9"I broke it."
10"I'd expected an echo."
11"I hadn't expected the echo"
12"I crouched by the trainers."
13"I said to the trees"
14"I want to be clear"
15"I've had a knife held"
16"I could see the frost"
17"It wasn't my pulse."
18"It was slower than my"
19"I put my hand flat"
ratio0.366
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount58
totalSentences82
matches
0"The pendant went warm somewhere"
1"This was the heat of"
2"I pulled it out from"
3"The crimson stone had a"
4"Nobody answered, which was fine."
5"That was the point of"
6"I'd gone over the wall"
7"The frost had come down"
8"Heathrow sits ten miles from"
9"I stood with my head"
10"Stars, thick as spilled salt,"
11"You can't walk two hundred"
12"The silence had a shape"
13"It sat over the bracken"
14"I kept going, because Danny"
15"The oaks came up out"
16"Someone had planted these when"
17"I put my palm on"
18"The air coming through the"
19"My breath stopped fogging."
ratio0.707
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
ratio0
77.92% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences44
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The frost had come down hard and every stem cracked under me, so loud I kept stopping to listen to myself, which is the sort of habit that gets you killed."
1"Green like the second week of May, and studded all through with wildflowers, cowslips and ragged robin and something small and blue I had no name for, all of th…"
2"Nothing but the ring of trunks and the black beyond them, and my own breath, which had come back and come back loud."
3"My mother is in Cardiff with her marking and her bad knee and she has never once, in twenty-five years, said my full name without love folded into it, and this …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
50.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"I whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.2
90.6490%