Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCQZR2V369GEK7MK1TQQSE4

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The bags of food cut white lines into Aurora's fingers, and she was two steps into the Raven's Nest, shouting an order at Silas' back, when a voice behind her used a name nobody in London had ever used. "Rory Carter. Bloody hell. You still walk like you're late for something." She turned slowly. That was the trick she'd learned. Turn slowly, look at the hands first, then the face. The hands were the wrong hands. Manicured, pale pink, a signet on the little finger and something colder on the third. The face took longer to arrive, as though it had to swim up through years of smoke and bad lighting and a shared bathroom on Cathays Terrace. "Ffion." "There she is." Ffion Bevan sat at the near end of the bar with her back straight and her ankles crossed, and Aurora's first thought was that somebody had ironed her. The bass player who once threw a pint over a lecturer, who dyed her hair with beetroot juice because she liked the way it bled in the rain, now wore camel wool and a blouse buttoned to the collarbone. Her hair was long and honey-coloured and lay flat, obedient. In front of her, a soda water. Lime wheel. No glass ring on the wood. She'd been using a coaster. "You're wearing a coat that costs more than my rent," Aurora said. "And you're wearing a takeaway jacket." "It's got a dragon on the back." "I noticed the dragon, love." Silas came down the bar with a cloth over his shoulder and set a glass of ice in front of Aurora without being asked. He didn't look at Ffion. He looked at the window, then at the door, then at the two inches of pavement visible under the green glow of the sign outside. "Your friend arrived at half seven," he said. "Asked for you by name." "Which one?" "Both." Aurora put the bags down on the stool beside her. Copper and five-spice and prawn crackers, warm through the plastic. She sat. "How did you find me?" "That's a lovely welcome." "It's the only question I've got." Ffion turned the lime wheel with the tip of her straw. "Your mam still sends a Christmas card to my mam. Your mam mentions a bar in Soho, and a girl upstairs, and how she's saving up. My mam repeats everything she's ever heard. It isn't MI5, Rory." Behind the bar, Silas' cloth stopped moving for exactly one beat, then carried on. "Sit down properly then," Aurora said. "You look like you're waiting for a train." "I've got a taxi at ten." "Of course you have." Aurora poured tonic over her ice from the bottle Silas nudged towards her and drank it like it was something stronger. Three years. She catalogued the changes the way she'd been taught to read a room. Nails. Shoes with a heel she couldn't have run in. A watch that faced inward, the way people wore them when they didn't want to be seen checking. No nicotine stain on the index finger. No plectrum on a chain. "You've stopped smoking." "Eighteen months." "And drinking." "Fourteen." Ffion smiled, and there it was, the old crooked thing, the smile that had got them both thrown out of the Union bar in second year. It surfaced and drowned again. "Don't look at me like I've died." "I'm not." "You are. You've got your father's face on. All courtroom and no comment." "That's the only thing he gave me that fits." The bar filled behind them, quietly, the way it always did around nine. Two men in suits took the corner under the map of pre-war Berlin. A woman argued with a phone by the fruit machine. On the wall above Ffion's shoulder, a black-and-white photograph showed a street market in a city that no longer had that name, and Aurora had never once asked Silas about it, and Silas had never once offered. "You dropped out," Aurora said. "Second year. You said law was for people who liked being told what words mean." "I did say that." "And now?" "Now I'm a paralegal at a firm in Newport, and I'm doing my exams part time, and I'm rather good at it." Ffion's chin lifted. "Go on. Say it." "I'm not going to say anything." "You're doing the thing with your jaw." "I've got a jaw. It moves." "Rory." Aurora looked at the ice in her glass. "I did three years of pre-law so my father would talk to me at dinner. You did eighteen months and left because you couldn't stand the smell of the library. Now you've got a training contract and I deliver crispy duck to men who don't tip." She lifted the glass. "It's funny. I'm allowed to find it funny." "It isn't funny." "No." They let that sit. Somebody put money in the jukebox. Ffion pressed her thumb against the coaster, aligning it with the grain of the bar, and Aurora watched her do it and knew that whatever she had actually come to say was still folded up in her coat pocket. "Say the thing, Ffion." "What thing?" "You've been rearranging a beer mat for four minutes. You came from Wales on a Tuesday. You've got a taxi at ten." Aurora set her glass down. "Say the thing." Ffion's hand went still. Then, deliberately, she moved it into the light so the ring showed. Small stone. Old setting. Someone's grandmother's, probably. Aurora had learned a lot about breathing in three years. She used all of it. "Congratulations." "You don't know who it is." "I know exactly who it is." The room did not change. The jukebox carried on. Ffion's eyes were wet and furious and she held them open, refusing to blink, exactly the way she had at nineteen when she lost an argument. "He's not the same," she said. "He did the course. Twelve weeks, in a church hall in Roath, sat in a circle with men who'd done worse. He's teetotal, Rory. He goes to his mother's every Sunday. He talks about you." "Does he." "He says he was sick." "He was accurate," Aurora said. "That's different from sick. Sick men break their own things." Under the bar, her left thumb found the crescent scar on her wrist and rubbed it, the way she did when she was cold, the way she'd done since she was eight and a dog and a garden fence, and it had nothing at all to do with Evan, and Ffion looked at it anyway and looked away fast, and neither of them mentioned it, and that was the whole conversation, right there, unspoken between two glasses of nothing. "I wanted you to hear it from me," Ffion said. "Not from a card." "You wanted me to say it was fine." "I wanted my friend at my wedding." "You had a friend," Aurora said. "You had her on the floor of a bathroom in Adamsdown for four hours, and you told her it was a phase, and you went to his birthday drinks that Saturday." Silas moved. It wasn't much. He shifted his weight off the bad knee, set down the glass he was polishing, and put both hands flat on the bar, which was the most violent thing Aurora had ever seen him do. "Ten o'clock," he said. Headlights swung across the window. A private hire car, hazard lights on, parked badly on the double yellows. The green neon poured over the roof and turned it the colour of pond water. Ffion didn't turn round. She looked at her hands. "He drove me up," she said. The door opened.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.242
leniency0.484
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.28% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1280
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"deliberately"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"deliberately"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
92.19% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1280
totalAiIsms2
found
0
word"unspoken"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"unspoken"
1"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences73
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences73
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences121
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen79
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1280
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
47.83% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions42
wordCount783
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity2.04
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora16
Raven1
Nest1
Cathays1
Terrace1
Bevan1
Silas5
Ffion12
Union1
Berlin1
Evan1
Headlights1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Nest"
2"Bevan"
3"Silas"
4"Ffion"
5"Evan"
6"Headlights"
places
0"Raven"
1"Cathays"
2"Terrace"
3"Union"
4"Berlin"
globalScore0.478
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences36
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1280
matches(empty)
56.47% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount4
totalSentences121
matches
0"was that somebody"
1"had that name"
2"let that sit"
3"knew that whatever"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs69
mean18.55
std21.99
cv1.185
sampleLengths
039
112
219
348
41
53
697
712
86
97
105
1154
1213
132
141
1522
165
174
186
1948
2014
2114
226
234
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253
262
272
2839
292
3013
319
3273
3320
344
352
3629
376
387
396
401
4166
423
431
4449
454
462
4730
4823
4915
95.65% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences73
matches
0"being asked"
1"been taught"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs133
matches
0"was polishing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences121
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount375
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount9
adverbRatio0.024
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.013333333333333334
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences121
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences121
mean10.58
std11.92
cv1.127
sampleLengths
039
112
23
36
410
56
615
727
81
93
1028
1139
1210
137
142
156
165
1712
186
197
205
2124
225
2325
248
255
262
271
2810
2910
302
315
324
336
3411
3537
3614
376
388
396
404
4121
422
4313
441
459
4618
477
485
493
68.60% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.4462809917355372
totalSentences121
uniqueOpeners54
59.52% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences56
matches
0"Then, deliberately, she moved it"
ratio0.018
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount13
totalSentences56
matches
0"She turned slowly."
1"Her hair was long and"
2"She'd been using a coaster."
3"He didn't look at Ffion."
4"He looked at the window,"
5"She catalogued the changes the"
6"It surfaced and drowned again."
7"She lifted the glass"
8"They let that sit."
9"She used all of it."
10"It wasn't much."
11"He shifted his weight off"
12"She looked at her hands."
ratio0.232
58.21% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount45
totalSentences56
matches
0"The bags of food cut"
1"She turned slowly."
2"That was the trick she'd"
3"The hands were the wrong"
4"The face took longer to"
5"Ffion Bevan sat at the"
6"The bass player who once"
7"Her hair was long and"
8"She'd been using a coaster."
9"Silas came down the bar"
10"He didn't look at Ffion."
11"He looked at the window,"
12"Aurora put the bags down"
13"Copper and five-spice and prawn"
14"Ffion turned the lime wheel"
15"Aurora poured tonic over her"
16"She catalogued the changes the"
17"Shoes with a heel she"
18"A watch that faced inward,"
19"Ffion smiled, and there it"
ratio0.804
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"He shifted his weight off the bad knee, set down the glass he was polishing, and put both hands flat on the bar, which was the most violent thing Aurora had eve…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"the Raven's Nest shouting (the raven nest shouting)"
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.177
leniency0.355
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.032
88.8918%