Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCR6Y4VT54K40RAS5261XDQ

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1m 21s
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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Frost cracked under Aurora's boots all the way up from the Sheen gate, and for the first mile she was certain they were lost. Richmond Park in December had a way of erasing itself. The bracken was the colour of old pennies, the oaks stood black and dripping, and the fog sat waist-high in the hollows so that the deer moving through it seemed to be wading. A stag lifted its head as they passed — a great grey ruin of a thing, antlers furred with moss — and watched them with an attention that Aurora didn't like. Deer were supposed to run. This one just turned its head to follow them, the way a doorman follows a guest he doesn't remember admitting. "He's clocked us," Eva muttered, hands jammed into her armpits. Her nose had gone red. "Rory, I swear to God, if this is another one of your shortcuts—" "It's not a shortcut." "It's seven in the morning and I can't feel my feet." "You didn't have to come." "Yes I did," Eva said, "because the last time you went somewhere on your own you came back with a hole in your coat and no explanation, so." Ahead of them, Nyx paused where the fog thickened, and the fog went through them. Aurora still hadn't got used to that. In the flat, in Silas' bar, in the sodium wash of a London street, Nyx could pass for a very tall man in a very dark coat if you didn't look too long. Out here in the flat white light, with nothing to lean on, they were only what they were: a silhouette cut from the world, a person-shaped absence, edges going soft as smoke where they met the air. Two points of violet in the place where a face should be. "Here," Nyx said. Their voice arrived the way a draught arrives, from no particular direction. "Twelve paces. Then the stones." "I don't see any—" Eva began, and stopped. Aurora saw them at the same moment, and the seeing was not like noticing something. It was like remembering it. Nine trunks of oak, thick as barrels, standing in a rough ring on the crown of the slope — not trees, because they had no branches and no bark, only grain like grey silk, worn smooth and hard as stone by a wind that hadn't blown here in centuries. Two had fallen. Seven still stood. Between them the fog moved wrongly, curling up instead of down, and the air had a shimmer to it, faint, like the wobble over hot tarmac, except the day was three degrees and getting colder. Aurora put her hand flat against her sternum, over her coat, over her jumper, over the pendant. Cold. Utterly cold. In the tunnels under Bank station last month the Heartstone had got so warm against her skin she'd thought it would blister her, and she'd known, absolutely, what was on the other side of that wall. Here it lay dead as a button. Whatever this place opened onto, it wasn't Hel. That should have been a comfort. "Rules," Nyx said. "Say them." "Don't eat," Aurora said. "Don't drink. Don't accept a gift unless I've thought about it for the length of three breaths. Don't say thank you. Don't dance." "Don't dance?" said Eva. "And don't give my name," Aurora finished. "Not my full one. Not to anything that asks nicely." "Good." Nyx's shadow-hand rose, hesitated at the shimmer, and something in the shape of them tightened, the way a person's shoulders tighten before cold water. "The Veil is thin here every year, but it is thinnest now. Solstice. It will hold open perhaps an hour. Perhaps." "Perhaps," Eva repeated. "Time," said Nyx, "is the one thing in there that will lie to you." They stepped through. Sound went first. Aurora had one foot in Richmond Park, with a plane grinding somewhere overhead towards Heathrow and a dog barking a field away, and then her other foot came down and all of it was gone — not muffled, not faded, gone, snipped off clean as a thread. The silence had a pressure to it. She swallowed and heard the click of her own throat like a stone dropped down a well. Then the warmth. Then the smell. It was green. That was the only word she had for it and it was hopeless: green the way the first hot day of the year smells, cut grass and turned earth and blossom and rain, all of it at once, so thick she felt it settle on her tongue. She breathed in and something behind her ribs came loose that she hadn't known was clenched. She opened her eyes properly and stopped walking, and behind her she heard Eva say, "Oh," very softly, like a woman in a church. The clearing ran downhill into a bowl maybe a hundred yards across, and it was full of flowers. Not a meadow — a riot. Bluebells rubbing shoulders with foxgloves that had no business in the same month, poppies, cow parsley, wild roses, snowdrops pushing up through them all as if nobody had told them what order to come in. Some of them Aurora had no name for at all: a spray of pale bells that turned, very slowly, to follow them along the slope. The grass was ankle-deep and warm. Above, there was no sun. There was light — golden, generous, coming from everywhere and nothing, the light of six o'clock on a July evening — but the sky was a soft depthless white, and when she looked up too long she had the sudden vertiginous sense that she was looking down. She looked away fast. "There's no shadows," Eva said. She was right. Aurora crouched and passed her hand back and forth over a clump of clover and nothing darkened beneath it. Her own body cast nothing on the grass. She turned. Nyx stood at the boundary with their arms wrapped around themself, and they were flickering. Thinning at the wrists, at the crown, guttering like a candle in a hallway. "Nyx—" "I am not welcome." The whisper came out ragged, and for the first time since she'd met them, Aurora heard something underneath it: a man's voice, four hundred years old and frightened. "There is nowhere here to stand. I will wait at the stones. Rory." The violet eyes fixed on her. "One hour. Whatever it tells you. Whatever it feels like. One hour, and then you come back up this slope, and if I have to I will come in after you and it will cost me something I cannot pay." Then they folded up like a sheet and were nothing, and the boundary shimmered, and Aurora and Eva were alone in the warm. They went down. There was a stream at the bottom that made no noise. Aurora watched it for a long moment before she understood what was wrong: it ran perfectly clear over white pebbles, fast enough to braid around the stones, and it was silent. She knelt and held her palm an inch above the surface and felt the cold coming off it and wanted, with a want that arrived from somewhere else entirely and sat down inside her like a guest, to drink. "Rory." Eva's hand closed on her collar and hauled. "I know." Her voice came out shaky. "I know. Thank—" She bit the word in half so hard her teeth clicked. They followed the water upstream, because the water was going uphill, and after a while it stopped seeming strange. That was the thing about this place, Aurora thought. It didn't argue with you. It just quietly rearranged what you were prepared to accept. Small discoveries, then, one after another, like beads on a string. A hawthorn hung with hundreds of ribbons, silk and wool and one strip of yellow polyester that had certainly come off a hi-vis vest, all of them faded, all of them knotted the same way. A ring of mushrooms the colour of raw meat that Eva pointed at without speaking and they both walked around, wide. Bees the size of thumbnails with wings like flecks of glass, so that the air over the roses glittered and chimed faintly, and Aurora realised the chiming was the only sound in the whole valley besides their breathing. Then the bones. They lay in a hollow between two roots: something the size of a fox, arranged. Not fallen — arranged, the ribs opened out flat in a fan, the small skull set upright in the centre facing uphill, every vertebra spaced an even finger-width from the next. Wildflowers grew up through the gaps. They had grown up through the gaps for a long time. "Is that an offering," Eva said, "or a warning?" "Yes," Aurora said. Eva laughed, a cracked little sound, and pulled out her phone to photograph it, and then went very still. "What?" "It's Thursday," Eva said. "It's Tuesday." "It's Thursday the twenty-third, at four in the afternoon, and I've got eleven missed calls." She turned the screen. It was 06:52 and the date said Tuesday, and then it blinked, and said Thursday, and then it said something with too many numbers in it, and then the screen went black and stayed black. Eva's hands weren't quite steady. "Rory, we've been in here twenty minutes." Somewhere above them, on the slope they had already walked down, a woman's voice said Aurora's name. Her mother's voice. Jennifer Carter, calling up the stairs of a house in Cardiff, that exact fond exasperated lilt on the second syllable — *Aurora* — and Aurora's whole body turned towards it before her mind caught up and slammed the door. Her mother was two hundred miles away and had not called her that since she was nine years old and had never once, in her life, stood on a hillside in a place like this. She did not answer. She dug her nails into her own palm until the crescent scar on her wrist went white and she did not answer, and after a moment the voice tried again, further off, less certain, the way a fisherman recasts. "Don't," she said to Eva, without looking at her. "Whatever you hear. Don't." "Wasn't going to," Eva whispered. The stream turned, and the roses gave way, and ahead of them the flowers had been pressed flat into a path — a clear, curving path of bent grass leading up between two more oaks, and the grass was rising slowly behind whoever had made it, blade by blade, standing itself back up as though nothing had passed. At the top of the path a woman was waiting who cast no shadow either, though hers was the honest kind of shadowlessness, and her hair was silver to the waist, and she had, Aurora saw as they came closer, left no footprints at all. "Three came to the stones," the woman said, in a voice like water over glass, "and two came down the hill, and one of you has already been counted twice." She smiled, and her eyes were the pale lavender of the bells that turned to watch. "You are late, delivery girl. Or early. I have never been able to tell with you."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.561
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
73.33% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1875
totalAiIsmAdverbs10
found
0
adverb"very"
count5
1
adverb"utterly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count2
4
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"utterly"
2"softly"
3"slowly"
4"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
73.33% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1875
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"silk"
count2
1
word"absolutely"
count1
2
word"dance"
count2
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"shimmered"
count1
7
word"lilt"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"absolutely"
2"dance"
3"silence"
4"warmth"
5"whisper"
6"shimmered"
7"lilt"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences104
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences104
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences120
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen57
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords1886
ratio0.001
matches
0"Aurora"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions58
wordCount1558
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.28
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora20
Sheen1
Park2
December1
Ahead1
Nyx6
Bank1
Heartstone1
Hel1
Eva16
Richmond2
Heathrow1
July1
Tuesday1
Thursday1
Carter1
Cardiff1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Nyx"
2"Heartstone"
3"Eva"
4"Carter"
places
0"Sheen"
1"Park"
2"Richmond"
3"Heathrow"
4"Cardiff"
globalScore0.858
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences65
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1886
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences120
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs59
mean31.97
std33.11
cv1.036
sampleLengths
024
199
228
34
411
55
628
715
889
920
108
11110
1217
1354
146
155
1627
174
1817
1946
203
2114
223
2374
246
2566
2624
27142
284
295
3032
3129
321
3391
3423
353
3681
379
3821
3943
4011
4194
423
4363
449
453
4619
471
484
492
85.02% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences104
matches
0"were supposed"
1"got used"
2"was gone "
3"was clenched"
4"were prepared"
5"been pressed"
43.14% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs255
matches
0"was like remembering"
1"was looking"
2"were flickering"
3"was going"
4"was rising"
5"was waiting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences120
ratio0.067
matches
0"A stag lifted its head as they passed — a great grey ruin of a thing, antlers furred with moss — and watched them with an attention that Aurora didn't like."
1"Nine trunks of oak, thick as barrels, standing in a rough ring on the crown of the slope — not trees, because they had no branches and no bark, only grain like grey silk, worn smooth and hard as stone by a wind that hadn't blown here in centuries."
2"Aurora had one foot in Richmond Park, with a plane grinding somewhere overhead towards Heathrow and a dog barking a field away, and then her other foot came down and all of it was gone — not muffled, not faded, gone, snipped off clean as a thread."
3"Not a meadow — a riot."
4"There was light — golden, generous, coming from everywhere and nothing, the light of six o'clock on a July evening — but the sky was a soft depthless white, and when she looked up too long she had the sudden vertiginous sense that she was looking down."
5"Not fallen — arranged, the ribs opened out flat in a fan, the small skull set upright in the centre facing uphill, every vertebra spaced an even finger-width from the next."
6"Jennifer Carter, calling up the stairs of a house in Cardiff, that exact fond exasperated lilt on the second syllable — *Aurora* — and Aurora's whole body turned towards it before her mind caught up and slammed the door."
7"The stream turned, and the roses gave way, and ahead of them the flowers had been pressed flat into a path — a clear, curving path of bent grass leading up between two more oaks, and the grass was rising slowly behind whoever had made it, blade by blade, standing itself back up as though nothing had passed."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount336
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount8
adverbRatio0.023809523809523808
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.002976190476190476
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences120
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences120
mean15.72
std13.76
cv0.875
sampleLengths
024
110
233
331
45
520
610
75
813
94
1011
115
1228
1315
147
1533
1637
1712
183
1912
205
218
2215
235
2449
253
263
2735
2817
291
302
3136
327
338
346
353
362
374
3823
394
407
4110
4225
4321
443
4514
463
473
4847
497
70.56% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.48333333333333334
totalSentences120
uniqueOpeners58
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences88
matches
0"Then the warmth."
1"Then the smell."
2"Then they folded up like"
3"Then the bones."
4"Somewhere above them, on the"
ratio0.057
97.27% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences88
matches
0"Her nose had gone red."
1"Their voice arrived the way"
2"It was like remembering it."
3"They stepped through."
4"She swallowed and heard the"
5"It was green."
6"She breathed in and something"
7"She opened her eyes properly"
8"She looked away fast."
9"She was right."
10"Her own body cast nothing"
11"They went down."
12"She knelt and held her"
13"Her voice came out shaky"
14"She bit the word in"
15"They followed the water upstream,"
16"It didn't argue with you."
17"It just quietly rearranged what"
18"They lay in a hollow"
19"They had grown up through"
ratio0.307
90.68% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount65
totalSentences88
matches
0"Richmond Park in December had"
1"The bracken was the colour"
2"A stag lifted its head"
3"Deer were supposed to run."
4"This one just turned its"
5"Eva muttered, hands jammed into"
6"Her nose had gone red."
7"Aurora still hadn't got used"
8"Their voice arrived the way"
9"Eva began, and stopped"
10"Aurora saw them at the"
11"It was like remembering it."
12"Aurora put her hand flat"
13"Here it lay dead as"
14"Whatever this place opened onto,"
15"That should have been a"
16"Nyx's shadow-hand rose, hesitated at"
17"They stepped through."
18"Sound went first."
19"Aurora had one foot in"
ratio0.739
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
ratio0
65.22% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences46
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Nine trunks of oak, thick as barrels, standing in a rough ring on the crown of the slope — not trees, because they had no branches and no bark, only grain like …"
1"Bluebells rubbing shoulders with foxgloves that had no business in the same month, poppies, cow parsley, wild roses, snowdrops pushing up through them all as if…"
2"She knelt and held her palm an inch above the surface and felt the cold coming off it and wanted, with a want that arrived from somewhere else entirely and sat …"
3"A hawthorn hung with hundreds of ribbons, silk and wool and one strip of yellow polyester that had certainly come off a hi-vis vest, all of them faded, all of t…"
4"The stream turned, and the roses gave way, and ahead of them the flowers had been pressed flat into a path — a clear, curving path of bent grass leading up betw…"
81.52% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Eva muttered, hands jammed into her armpits"
1"she said, without looking at her"
76.83% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Eva muttered (mutter)"
1"Eva repeated (repeat)"
2"Eva whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.317
leniency0.634
rawRatio0.231
effectiveRatio0.146
84.6745%