Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCRB57574G4QFEPZY9NTWNQ

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Three rules, Silas said, and he'd said them twice, which for Silas was practically a bedtime story. Don't eat. Don't thank anyone. Don't give your name, and if something offers you yours back, don't take it. I'd repeated them all the way up the A316 with a cold bag of untouched crispy duck strapped to the back of the bike, because it turns out you can't reschedule a delivery to a Fae grove. The oaks came up out of the bracken like teeth in a gum, eight of them, leaning inwards. I went between the two tallest and the noise of London stopped. Not faded. Stopped. That was the first wrong thing. Richmond Park at night still hums. Planes stacking up for Heathrow, the far grind of the South Circular, deer coughing in the dark like old men in a pub. I stood inside the stones with my hand still on the bark and heard my own blood instead. The grove opened out ahead of me, maybe thirty feet across, and it was full of flowers. Foxgloves in February. Bluebells and campion and something with white bells that had no business existing at all, all of it standing upright and open as though the sun were on it. No frost. The grass under my boots was warm the way a car seat is warm after somebody's just got out of it. The pendant sat against my sternum, quiet. "Isolde?" Nothing. I hadn't expected an answer straight off, but I'd expected something. A rustle. A bird. In an actual wood, at night, you can hear the wood living. Here the silence had a shape to it, and the shape was listening. I got out my phone. Twelve minutes past eleven. Fine. I'd been told moonrise, and there was a moon up there somewhere behind the branches, thin as a nail clipping. I looked down and my footprints were already in the grass. Not the ones I'd just made. Those were behind me, a neat line from the stones, bent stems and a scuff where my heel had caught. These others went from the stones to the middle of the clearing and back again, twice, three times, a little path worn pale by somebody walking it over and over. Same tread. My tread. The nick in the left sole where I'd run over a nail on Old Compton Street was there in the flattened grass, a small hook of nothing, repeated. I put my boot beside one of them and it fit. Right, I thought. Time moves differently here. That's the whole selling point. Maybe I'd been in and out already and hadn't got round to it yet. That was the sort of sentence that made sense in the grove and would get me sectioned in Hammersmith. The pendant twitched. Not a pulse. A twitch, like a muscle under an eyelid, and then warmth spread from it across my chest, mild and pleasant, the exact temperature of somebody else's breath. "Not now," I said out loud, because talking to jewellery is a coping mechanism and I've had worse. That's when the bell rang. A bicycle bell. Two flicks of the thumb, that cheap tinny double ring, the sound I made forty times a night getting round tourists on Wardour Street. It came from the far side of the clearing, in among the trees where the light gave up. My bike was behind me. Chained to a fence post nine hundred metres back, outside the stones, where I'd left it because the bracken was too thick. The bell rang again. Closer. Then the whirr of a freewheel, that lazy ticking as it coasted, and I could hear the flap of the delivery bag's velcro strap that I never fastened properly. I did not turn round. I'd like credit for that. "You're going to have to do better," I said. "That's a Halfords bell. It came in a multipack." The ticking stopped. For a while, and I couldn't tell you how long a while was in there, nothing moved. Then the flowers on my left shivered, one after another, in a line, as though something low were walking through them. The heads bowed and rose. Bowed and rose. Whatever bent them had weight, and there was nothing to see, and it went past me at four feet's distance and out into the middle of the clearing and stopped over my own repeated footprints. The white bell-flowers all closed. All at once, in silence, like fists. The warmth on my chest turned to a slow thump. Not near a portal, Silas had said, and then, more carefully: it goes warm when there's a door. A Hel door. He'd put his cloth down on the bar when he said it, which he never did. There wasn't a door in the grove. There was a grove. Something laughed. It came from behind the oaks on the north side, small and bright and delighted, and I knew it the way you know your own handwriting on an envelope. It was my laugh. The one Eva calls my drunk laugh, the one that goes up at the end. I'd last used it three nights ago in the bar, over something stupid about a customer who tipped in Monopoly money. "That's cheap," I said. My voice came out level. My hands weren't. "That's cheap," the trees agreed, in my voice, in my accent, the Cardiff still hiding under the London. Then, gently, coaxing, the way you'd call a cat in off a wall: "Rory." The rule stood up in my head with its arms out. Don't take it. "Wrong number," I said. "Rory." Closer. Not from the trees now. From the middle of the clearing, from the worn path of my own feet, and I could hear the grass giving under something. "Rory, love. You're late." Mam's voice. Exactly. The little catch she gets on love, the schoolteacher patience. I made myself breathe out. "My mother's in Cardiff. She's asleep. She sleeps with the radio on." "You're late," it said, and it was neither of them now, not Mam, not me, just a flatness wearing a mouth, "and we have been walking here a long time waiting." I turned to go. The stones had closed. Eight oaks, and no gap between the two tallest, no bracken beyond, no slope down towards the car park. Bark, unbroken, wet-looking, and the trunks pressed against each other like fingers laced in prayer. My own footprints ran up to them and stopped at solid wood. Behind me, the flowers all opened again with a sound like a held breath let go. The pendant went from warm to scalding. It seared through my shirt and I got a hand up to lift it off my skin, and in the crimson light spilling out between my fingers I saw the grass in front of me flatten in a wide, spreading circle, forty feet of it lying down as though something enormous were settling on it. Cold closed around my left wrist. Fingers. Small ones, and courteous, thumb resting exactly on the crescent scar as if it knew the shape. "There," said my own voice, right against my ear. "Got you."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences14
tagDensity0.571
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.69% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1204
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
75.08% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1204
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count2
3
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"pulse"
2"warmth"
3"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences105
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences105
filterMatches
0"know"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences110
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen55
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1204
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount1146
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity0.35
worstName"Don"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Don"
discoveredNames
Silas3
Fae1
London2
Park1
Heathrow1
South1
Circular1
February1
Old1
Compton1
Street2
Hammersmith1
Wardour1
Hel1
Eva1
Monopoly1
Cardiff1
Closer2
Mam2
Don4
persons
0"Silas"
1"Eva"
2"Mam"
places
0"Fae"
1"London"
2"Park"
3"February"
4"Old"
5"Compton"
6"Street"
7"Hammersmith"
8"Wardour"
9"Monopoly"
10"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences57
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1204
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean25.62
std22.06
cv0.861
sampleLengths
017
119
267
33
453
517
655
77
81
941
1030
1111
1288
1311
1445
153
1630
1718
185
1945
2027
2134
2210
2318
243
2581
2612
2747
2811
292
3069
3112
3218
3314
3414
354
3634
3713
3817
3931
404
414
4246
4316
4462
4524
4611
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences105
matches
0"been told"
79.52% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs166
matches
0"was listening"
1"were walking"
2"were settling"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences110
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1148
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"cheap tinny double ring,"
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.03484320557491289
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.006968641114982578
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences110
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences110
mean10.95
std9.79
cv0.895
sampleLengths
017
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314
437
518
612
72
81
96
106
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1317
143
1529
162
1721
187
191
201
2111
222
232
2412
2513
265
274
281
2920
3011
316
3220
3330
342
352
3628
3711
383
394
405
4114
4219
433
443
4527
4618
475
483
4924
69.09% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.4636363636363636
totalSentences110
uniqueOpeners51
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences86
matches
0"Maybe I'd been in and"
1"Then the whirr of a"
2"Then the flowers on my"
3"Then, gently, coaxing, the way"
ratio0.047
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences86
matches
0"I'd repeated them all the"
1"I went between the two"
2"I stood inside the stones"
3"I hadn't expected an answer"
4"I got out my phone."
5"I'd been told moonrise, and"
6"I looked down and my"
7"I put my boot beside"
8"I said out loud, because"
9"It came from the far"
10"My bike was behind me."
11"I did not turn round."
12"I'd like credit for that."
13"He'd put his cloth down"
14"It came from behind the"
15"It was my laugh."
16"I'd last used it three"
17"My voice came out level."
18"My hands weren't."
19"I made myself breathe out."
ratio0.279
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount55
totalSentences86
matches
0"I'd repeated them all the"
1"The oaks came up out"
2"I went between the two"
3"That was the first wrong"
4"Richmond Park at night still"
5"I stood inside the stones"
6"The grove opened out ahead"
7"Foxgloves in February."
8"Bluebells and campion and something"
9"The grass under my boots"
10"The pendant sat against my"
11"I hadn't expected an answer"
12"Here the silence had a"
13"I got out my phone."
14"I'd been told moonrise, and"
15"I looked down and my"
16"Those were behind me, a"
17"These others went from the"
18"The nick in the left"
19"I put my boot beside"
ratio0.64
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences86
matches(empty)
ratio0
94.16% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences44
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Bluebells and campion and something with white bells that had no business existing at all, all of it standing upright and open as though the sun were on it."
1"It seared through my shirt and I got a hand up to lift it off my skin, and in the crimson light spilling out between my fingers I saw the grass in front of me f…"
2"Small ones, and courteous, thumb resting exactly on the crescent scar as if it knew the shape."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
78.57% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"the trees agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences14
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.143
92.7371%