Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCRB8DWNESE3YTW28ACWEJX

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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"Twelve pounds forty in coins. Someone in Bloomsbury tipped me in five-pence pieces." Rory pushed the little grey towers across the bar, one at a time, like a chess player who had already lost. Her jacket still carried the ghost of the Golden Empress kitchen, star anise and hot oil, and the moped key hung off her finger, swinging. "Students." Silas held a glass up to the light, found it wanting, and breathed on it. "They pay in whatever's under the sofa. Be grateful it wasn't buttons." "It was buttons once." "You kept them." "They were nice buttons." The door opened and the green neon came in with the draught, laying a stripe of sick sea colour across the floorboards. Rory didn't look up. Wednesdays brought the same men to The Raven's Nest, sad-suited, ordering their one whisky and reading the maps on the walls as if the borders might have shifted since last week. Then a voice said, "God. It really is you." Rory's hand closed round the coins. Cardiff. That particular flattened vowel, the way the sentence lifted at the end like it was being carried uphill. Nia Rhys-Morgan stood by the coat hooks with an umbrella she hadn't needed and a wool coat the colour of oatmeal. Camel, probably, if you asked the shop. She'd cut her hair to the jaw. She'd cut everything to the jaw, in fact, the whole shape of her tightened and sanded down, and the girl who had once climbed the Students' Union roof in a bin bag and shouted at the moon had been folded away somewhere inside it. "Nia." "Four years." Nia came over. She didn't hug, she put a hand on Rory's forearm and pressed once, the way a doctor checks for pain. "Four years and I find you in Soho, in a bar, at half nine on a Wednesday." "I live upstairs." "You live upstairs." She said it kindly, which was worse than any other way she could have said it. Silas set a coaster down in front of Nia without being asked. Two coasters. He had the trick of appearing to be somewhere else while standing directly in front of you. "What are you having?" "White wine. Small." Nia glanced along the row of bottles and back to Rory's coins. "You still don't drink whisky?" "I still drink whisky." "Only you look like you've been working." "I have been working." "Right." Nia unbuttoned the oatmeal coat and hung it up herself, smoothing the shoulders. Underneath, a blouse without a single crease. "Delivering, is it? Someone at Lena's wedding said something about a restaurant and I thought, no, that can't be right, that'll be Aurora doing something ironic." "It isn't ironic. It's mopeds." "You were going to be a barrister." "My father was going to be a barrister. He managed it." The wine came. Nia turned the glass a quarter turn on the coaster before she touched it, some new habit, some office learned. Rory watched her do it and felt the years arrive all at once, like a bill. "What are you doing in London?" "Two nights. Client thing off Golden Square. I walked past the sign three times and thought, there's a green light, I'll get a drink and go to bed like a sensible woman." Nia laughed at herself, and for a second the old face came up through the new one, gap-toothed, gorgeous, sixteen bad decisions deep. Then it went under again. "Sensible. Listen to me." "You were never sensible." "I was arrested in Bridgend." "You were arrested twice in Bridgend." "Well." Nia drank. "One of them didn't count." The jukebox in the corner had been broken since March, and Silas played whatever he liked from behind the bar, which meant something old and brass-heavy scraped along under the talk. Two of the sad-suited men left. The room got smaller. "You didn't answer any of them," Nia said. "Any of what?" "You know what." Rory stacked the five-pence pieces into a single tower. It wobbled. "I changed my number." "You changed your city. You changed your number, your name on the internet, your whole self, and you didn't tell anyone where you went. Do you know what that was like? Bethan was ringing hospitals." "Bethan wasn't ringing hospitals." "She rang one." "Which one?" "Heath." Nia's chin went up. "For an afternoon." "For an afternoon." Rory let the tower fall. Coins ticked across the wood, and Silas caught two before the edge without appearing to move. "That's about right, isn't it. An afternoon of concern and then back to the pub." "That's not fair." "No." "That's really not fair, Rory, you vanished." "I know what I did." The moped key dug into her palm. "I know exactly what I did and why, and if you want the year in order I can give it to you, but not on a small white wine." Nia's jaw moved. She put her glass down. Her left hand came to rest on the bar, flat, deliberate, and stayed there, and Rory saw the ring. Not an engagement ring's shy glitter. A wedding band, and above it a stone with real weight to it, the kind that has an appointment rather than a price. "Congratulations." "Thank you." Nia didn't move her hand. She wanted it looked at. That was clear enough. "Last September. Small do, at the Priory. My mother cried through the vows and then asked the photographer to airbrush her arms." "Who?" The brass on the record hit a long, held note. Silas turned away, towards the till, and Rory understood in that moment that he had been listening to every word since the door opened, that he had probably measured Nia's shoes and her umbrella and the fact she'd asked for a small wine and drunk half of it in one. "Nia. Who?" "You'll be cross." "I'm already cross. That's free." "Evan." Nia looked at her steadily. "Evan Pryce." The room held. Somewhere in the ceiling, a pipe knocked. "Say something." "There's nothing to say." "There's plenty to say, you've got a face on you like-" "He broke my wrist." Rory turned her left hand over on the bar. The old crescent scar sat white and small below the heel of her thumb, older than Evan, older than Cardiff, a childhood thing, a garden gate, her mother screaming. It wasn't the point and it was somehow exactly the point. "Not this. The other side. Two places. I told the hospital I came off the moped and I didn't own a moped then." Nia's throat moved. "He said you'd say that." Four words. Rory heard the years inside them, the long calm evenings in which a man had built a shape called Aurora Carter and set it in front of his wife and taught her its habits. "Did he." "He said there were things you'd say. He said you were ill for a while, that's all, that you were ill and you needed a story to hang it on and he'd rather be the story than have you with nothing." Nia's hand came off the bar at last, and it wasn't steady. "He's been in therapy, Rory. Thursdays. For two years." "Good. That's good." "Don't do that." "I mean it. Genuinely, I hope it takes." "Then why are you looking at me like I'm the one who-" "Because he sent you." Rory said it quietly, and only understood it as she said it, which was the way most true things arrived. "Two nights, client thing off Golden Square. Which client?" "Don't be ridiculous." "Which client, Nia?" Silas set down the glass he was holding. He didn't hurry. He walked the length of the bar with that small hitch in his left leg, and he stopped at the end where the window was, and he moved the edge of the blind with one finger, the silver signet ring catching the neon. "Aurora." She knew before she got there. She went anyway. Across the street, past the fruit crates and the man selling nothing outside the Portuguese place, a black Mercedes idled at the kerb with its lights off and the wipers going, once, twice, on a windscreen that was already dry. In the passenger seat, face lit green from the sign above her door, Evan Pryce lifted one hand and waved.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences75
tagDensity0.24
leniency0.48
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.82% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1392
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"really"
count2
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
92.82% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1392
totalAiIsms2
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"measured"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"measured"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences67
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences67
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences125
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen56
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1392
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions52
wordCount852
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.88
worstName"Nia"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Nia"
discoveredNames
Golden1
Empress1
Raven1
Nest1
Rory13
Rhys-Morgan1
Nia16
Silas6
Underneath1
March1
Coins1
Evan2
Cardiff2
Aurora1
Carter1
Portuguese1
Mercedes1
Pryce1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Rhys-Morgan"
2"Nia"
3"Silas"
4"Coins"
5"Evan"
6"Aurora"
7"Carter"
8"Mercedes"
9"Pryce"
places
0"Raven"
1"Cardiff"
2"Portuguese"
globalScore0.561
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences43
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1392
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences125
matches
0"opened, that he"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs77
mean18.08
std19.99
cv1.106
sampleLengths
013
146
228
34
43
54
657
79
825
979
101
1142
123
1319
1431
154
1620
174
187
194
2047
215
227
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2439
256
2664
274
285
296
308
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328
333
343
3515
3635
374
383
392
408
4139
423
431
447
4541
4627
4729
481
4938
89.55% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences67
matches
0"being carried"
1"being asked"
2"been broken"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs145
matches
0"was holding"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences125
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount561
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.0374331550802139
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.0071301247771836
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences125
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences125
mean11.14
std11.5
cv1.032
sampleLengths
013
121
225
316
412
54
63
74
822
94
1031
119
126
131
1418
1521
167
177
1844
191
205
2120
2217
233
2419
2512
262
2717
284
2915
305
314
327
334
3414
357
3626
375
387
3911
403
4120
4216
436
4455
455
464
474
485
496
64.80% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.432
totalSentences125
uniqueOpeners54
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences61
matches
0"Then a voice said,"
1"Then it went under again."
2"Somewhere in the ceiling, a"
ratio0.049
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences61
matches
0"Her jacket still carried the"
1"She'd cut her hair to"
2"She'd cut everything to the"
3"She didn't hug, she put"
4"She said it kindly, which"
5"He had the trick of"
6"She put her glass down."
7"Her left hand came to"
8"She wanted it looked at."
9"It wasn't the point and"
10"He didn't hurry."
11"He walked the length of"
12"She knew before she got"
13"She went anyway."
ratio0.23
25.57% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount53
totalSentences61
matches
0"Rory pushed the little grey"
1"Her jacket still carried the"
2"Silas held a glass up"
3"The door opened and the"
4"Rory didn't look up."
5"Wednesdays brought the same men"
6"Rory's hand closed round the"
7"That particular flattened vowel, the"
8"Nia Rhys-Morgan stood by the"
9"Camel, probably, if you asked"
10"She'd cut her hair to"
11"She'd cut everything to the"
12"Nia came over"
13"She didn't hug, she put"
14"She said it kindly, which"
15"Silas set a coaster down"
16"He had the trick of"
17"Nia glanced along the row"
18"Nia unbuttoned the oatmeal coat"
19"The wine came."
ratio0.869
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences61
matches(empty)
ratio0
53.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences24
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Wednesdays brought the same men to The Raven's Nest, sad-suited, ordering their one whisky and reading the maps on the walls as if the borders might have shifte…"
1"The jukebox in the corner had been broken since March, and Silas played whatever he liked from behind the bar, which meant something old and brass-heavy scraped…"
2"Across the street, past the fruit crates and the man selling nothing outside the Portuguese place, a black Mercedes idled at the kerb with its lights off and th…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Nia laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences75
tagDensity0.067
leniency0.133
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.027
88.4154%