Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCRKW5XGWT7Z9RBPYFB27P7

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The whisky was already poured before Silas looked up. "Water," the man said. "Tap's fine." Silas set the glass down anyway. Twenty-two years behind bars of one kind or another had taught him that people rarely mean their first refusal, and that the ones who do are worth watching. He watched. Shaved scalp. A neck gone stringy. A grey anorak zipped to the throat in a warm room, and under the cuff of the left sleeve, two fingers missing at the second knuckle, the stumps healed smooth and pink as candle wax. "Duncan." "Aye." Nothing else came. The jukebox in the corner ate a coin from somebody's pocket and started up something with too much brass in it. Silas reached back without turning and pulled the plug out of the wall. The bar dropped into its own noise: a fridge motor, the hiss of the pipes, rain scratching at the window under the green neon. "You look well," Duncan said. "I look sixty." "You look like a man who eats sitting down." He lifted the water, sniffed it the way he used to sniff a cork, and drank half. "That's the trick of it. Chairs." There had been a version of Duncan Reid who could clear a Belgrade hotel bar of Serbian paratroopers with nothing but a filthy song and a bottle of slivovitz. That man had a laugh you felt in the floorboards. He carried it into rooms the way other men carry weapons. Silas kept looking for it, in the eyes, in the mouth, and found instead a great and terrible patience, like a hospital corridor at four in the morning. "Fourteen years," Silas said. "Fifteen in March." "You counted." "I counted everything for a while." Duncan turned the glass a quarter circle on the wood, then another quarter. "Bricks. Meals. The number of steps the man in the next cell took before he turned round. Two hundred and six, if you're interested. Then they moved him and it was somebody who didnae walk at all." Silas found a cloth and a glass that needed nothing doing to it. He did it anyway. "They told me you'd been repatriated in ninety-nine." "Somebody was. A box came home with my name stencilled on it and a Latvian plumber inside." A dry sound came out of him, not quite a laugh, more the memory of where one used to live. "My mother buried him. Full mass. She'd have liked him. He was Catholic." Behind Silas, the wall held its usual freight: a 1963 street map of Beirut, a photograph of three young men squinting on a Cyprus airstrip, another of a woman in a fur hat feeding pigeons in a square that no longer existed under that name. Silas had hung them all himself, one by one, over eleven years, and never once explained a single one to a customer. Duncan's eyes moved across them and stopped where Silas knew they would stop, and Silas felt his knee begin to ache the way weather aches in old timber. "You kept it up there," Duncan said. "Yes." "Vinohrady. That's the balcony." "It is." "Marek took that photograph." Duncan's ruined hand flattened on the bar. "He'd a wee camera the size of a matchbox. He was that proud of it he showed the barman." "I remember." "Do you." The rain got louder. Silas set the glass down and made himself hold still, because the impulse was to reach for the bottle and he had promised himself, sometime around his fifty-fifth birthday, that he would never again pour a drink in order to have something to do with his hands. "I gave the abort," he said. "At eleven-forty. I stood in a stairwell on Anglická and I gave the abort and I walked out with Marek's transcripts in my coat and I left you in that flat." "I know what you did. I was there. Briefly." Duncan's mouth did something complicated. "It's what you did after that I've been chewing on. Fifteen years, mind. That's a lot of chewing for a man with no back teeth." "I filed the report." "You filed a report." "I filed the report I could prove." "Ah." Duncan nodded slowly, and there it was, the closest the two of them would come. "Well then." Silas's thumb found the signet ring and turned it. He was not aware of having done it until he saw Duncan's eyes drop to his hand, and then it was too late to stop, and stopping would have said more than continuing. "You're still wearing my brother's ring." "I offered it back to your mother. She wouldn't have it in the house." "No. She wouldn't." Duncan drank the rest of the water. "Sheila always did know exactly who to punish. It was her one gift." "Duncan-" "Don't." The word landed like a hand on a chest. Silas closed his mouth. "I didnae come for that," Duncan said. "I want you to understand, because you're a man who builds a story out of a silence and then lives in it. I'm not here for an apology. I'd have made the same call. That's the thing I couldnae forgive. Not the leaving. The arithmetic. Two of us in a flat, one set of transcripts, and you did the sum right." He lifted his eyes. "I'd have done it faster." "That isn't absolution." "No. It's worse. It's agreement." Somewhere above them a floorboard shifted, then the click of a door, then footsteps starting down the back stairs. Silas felt them in the soles of his feet and did not move. "I keep bees now," Duncan said, unzipping the anorak at last. "Fife. Eleven hives. You can stand in the middle of them and they'll ignore you entirely if you've the sense to be still, and I have got that, at least. I've the sense to be still." He reached inside his coat, and Silas's hand went by old reflex to the shelf under the till where the sawn-off length of iron pipe lived, and Duncan saw it, and something like affection moved across that scoured face. "Steady. It's paper." The photograph he laid on the bar was cheap, printed on somebody's home machine, the colours pushed too warm. A girl on a delivery bike stopped at lights on Shaftesbury Avenue. Black hair flattened by a helmet, one glove off, a red thermal bag strapped behind her. Taken from a car window, going by the reflected wing mirror at the corner of the frame. "Tuesday," Duncan said. "Half past six." Silas did not touch it. "Who gave you this?" "That's the question, is it not." Duncan tapped the mirror with one whole finger. "Man came to my gate in November. Said he'd business with you and no way of walking into a room you owned. Older, heavier, one of those voices that's had elocution done to it. Told me a great deal about Prague that only three men living could know." "Three." "You. Me. And Renn." Silas felt the floor of fifteen years give way under him, quietly, the way rotten ice does. "Renn went into the Vltava with two rounds in him. I watched them fish out the coat." "Aye, and I went home in a box with a plumber in it." The stairwell door opened. Aurora came through it sideways with her helmet under one arm and the ginger and five-spice smell of the Golden Empress in her jacket, hair stuck to her cheek, already halfway through a sentence about the lock on the yard gate. Duncan turned on his stool and looked at her, and every trace of the beekeeper went out of his face. "Hello, Laila," he said.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Duncan nodded slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.316
leniency0.632
rawRatio0.056
effectiveRatio0.035
96.11% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1284
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
88.32% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1284
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"footsteps"
count1
2
word"affection"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"footsteps"
2"affection"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences56
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences56
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"begin to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences94
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen76
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1284
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions42
wordCount785
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity2.17
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Silas17
Duncan16
Reid1
Belgrade1
Serbian1
Beirut1
Cyprus1
Shaftesbury1
Avenue1
Golden1
Empress1
persons
0"Silas"
1"Duncan"
2"Reid"
places
0"Belgrade"
1"Beirut"
2"Cyprus"
3"Shaftesbury"
4"Avenue"
globalScore0.417
windowScore0.333
14.86% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences37
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"not quite a laugh, more the memory of where one used to live"
1"something like affection moved across that s"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1284
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences94
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean22.14
std25.84
cv1.167
sampleLengths
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16
277
31
41
561
65
73
832
978
104
113
122
1356
1417
158
1650
1795
187
191
204
212
2230
232
242
2551
2637
2739
284
294
307
3118
3242
336
3414
3523
361
371
3813
3977
403
415
4232
4386
443
4564
466
475
484
4962
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs125
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences94
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount789
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.035487959442332066
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.0038022813688212928
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences94
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences94
mean13.66
std14.25
cv1.043
sampleLengths
09
14
22
36
428
52
62
74
835
91
101
113
1221
1313
1424
155
163
1726
186
1929
2010
2111
2228
234
243
252
2619
2737
2813
294
308
3137
3213
3345
3422
3528
367
371
384
392
4011
4119
422
432
444
4547
466
4731
4814
4925
78.37% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.48936170212765956
totalSentences94
uniqueOpeners46
70.92% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences47
matches
0"Somewhere above them a floorboard"
ratio0.021
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount6
totalSentences47
matches
0"He lifted the water, sniffed"
1"He carried it into rooms"
2"He did it anyway."
3"He was not aware of"
4"He lifted his eyes"
5"He reached inside his coat,"
ratio0.128
13.19% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount42
totalSentences47
matches
0"The whisky was already poured"
1"the man said"
2"Silas set the glass down"
3"A neck gone stringy."
4"A grey anorak zipped to"
5"Nothing else came."
6"The jukebox in the corner"
7"Silas reached back without turning"
8"The bar dropped into its"
9"He lifted the water, sniffed"
10"There had been a version"
11"That man had a laugh"
12"He carried it into rooms"
13"Silas kept looking for it,"
14"Duncan turned the glass a"
15"Silas found a cloth and"
16"He did it anyway."
17"A dry sound came out"
18"Silas had hung them all"
19"Duncan's eyes moved across them"
ratio0.894
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences47
matches(empty)
ratio0
83.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences24
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Twenty-two years behind bars of one kind or another had taught him that people rarely mean their first refusal, and that the ones who do are worth watching."
1"There had been a version of Duncan Reid who could clear a Belgrade hotel bar of Serbian paratroopers with nothing but a filthy song and a bottle of slivovitz."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.158
leniency0.316
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.9479%