Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCRM2YRQMY5YS51X9MH6GGB

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The voice cut through the Ella Fitzgerald record and the hiss of the pump. "Aurora?" Nobody called her that. Not for three years. Rory set the glass down without turning, because turning would make it real, and for one long second she looked instead at the wall behind the optics, at the black-and-white photograph of a Prague tram Silas refused to explain. "It is you. God. It is." Then she turned. The coat came in first. Camel, wool, the collar still holding the rain in beads that hadn't soaked through, the sort of coat that cost a month of Golden Empress shifts. Above it, a face Rory had watched fall asleep on library desks. Nia Hywel had thinned out. The soft parts of her had gone somewhere, replaced by cheekbones and a haircut that had been paid for rather than requested. "Nia." "Three years." Nia laughed, and the laugh was new too, shorter, trained. "Three years and you're in a cellar in Soho." "It's a bar." "It's got maps on the walls, Rory. That's a cellar with ambitions." Silas moved along the bar towards them, cloth in one hand, glass in the other, the silver signet catching the light. His limp made a rhythm on the boards that Rory could pick out of any noise now, the way some people know a lover's cough. "Drink?" "Whatever's open." Nia glanced at the shelves and revised herself. "The Sancerre. If it's cold." "It's cold." She got her coat off with a small performance, shaking the rain out, folding it over the stool beside her rather than the hook. Rory watched her do it. Underneath, the black dress, the courthouse dress, the one that says nothing and costs everything. "You smell like a takeaway." "I've been in a takeaway." Rory pulled at the collar of the red nylon jacket, the golden phoenix stitched across the back, the zip that had lost three teeth in November. "Twelve till nine. Bank holiday rates." "You deliver food." "I deliver food." Nia's mouth did something complicated. She lifted the wine Silas had set down, drank, and put it back with the stem held between two fingers, the way barristers hold things in front of juries. "Aurora Carter delivering noodles." "Chow mein, mostly. There's a difference and Yu-Fei will tell you about it for forty minutes." "You were going to be the best of us." "I was going to be the loudest of us. It's not the same." The record turned over. Silas withdrew to the far end of the bar, where the bookshelf sat flush against the wall, and made himself busy with a crate of tonic he had already counted twice. He had a talent for being present and absent at once. Rory had come to think of it as a kind of manners. "So who are you now?" she said. "Pupillage. Two years in, tenancy decision in the spring." Nia turned her glass on the wood. "Criminal defence. Mostly men who insist they were somewhere else." "You always liked a liar." "I liked you." "Same thing, apparently." That landed. Nia's chin came up an inch, and for a heartbeat the Cardiff came back into her voice, the flat vowels she'd sanded off in some conference room in Middle Temple. "That's not fair, mind." "No," Rory said. "It isn't." Silas turned the tap on and let the water run over nothing at all, then turned it off. "Whose chambers?" Rory asked. She already knew. She'd known from the second the coat came through the door, from some animal part of her that measures threat before the brain gets a vote. Nia didn't answer straight away. She looked at the photographs, the maps, the pin someone had pushed into Trieste. "Rory." "Say it." "Your father took me on." There it was. Out in the room, taking up space, breathing. "Course he did." Rory picked up her drink, and the ice had gone to slush, and she drank it anyway. "He always said you had the better temperament. He'd say it at dinner. To me. Across the table." "He talks about you constantly." "He has my number." "He says you changed it." "I did." Rory set the glass down. "Twice." The pump hissed again. Somewhere above them a floorboard creaked, her own flat settling, the kettle she'd left on the hob, the life she had built out of eight hundred square feet and a bicycle and a man who asked no questions. "Your mother's ill." Rory heard it the way you hear a car before you see it. "How ill." "They started her on something in August. Brendan said it's manageable." Nia's hand went out across the bar and stopped short of Rory's, the way a hand does when it has learned the room. "He said he'd told you." "He told the version of me he prefers." "She asks after you. At the summer thing, the chambers garden party, she asked me. In front of people. Whether I'd heard." Nia's voice snagged. "I said no. I stood there in a stupid hat and told your mother I hadn't heard from you, and she said, well, she's always been independent, and then she talked about the hydrangeas." Rory looked at her own wrist. The crescent scar sat pale against the skin, the one she'd got at seven from a garden gate that swung the wrong way, the one Nia used to press with her thumb when they were fifteen and drunk on cider on the Taff embankment, calling it her lucky moon. "You could have knocked," Rory said. "I didn't know where you were." "You knew who to ask." "Would you have opened the door?" "You didn't open yours." The silence after that had a shape. Rory watched Nia take it, absorb it, and choose, and it was the choosing that hurt, because at university Nia had never chosen anything. She had blurted. She had spilled. She had cried in the loos over a B minus and told the whole cohort about it. "You had a split lip," Nia said carefully. "I had a split lip and a bin bag of clothes and I stood on your step in the rain for forty minutes." "You wouldn't come in. You kept saying you'd woken me." "You made tea. Two sugars. I remember the mug had a dog on it." Rory's voice stayed level, which was worse. "And then you went into the hall and you rang him." "He was worried sick, Rory." "He was in his car at the end of your road." "I thought he'd calm down if he knew you were safe." Nia's fingers had gone white on the stem. "I thought, I don't know what I thought, I was twenty-two, I thought people didn't do that to people like us." "People like us." "Girls with degrees." Silas came back along the bar and set down a fresh glass in front of Rory that she hadn't ordered, along with a small bowl of the salted almonds he only produced when he wanted somebody to stay sitting down. He didn't look at Nia. He looked at Rory, one beat too long, and then at the door, and then away. "Nia." "He found me," Nia said. "Six weeks ago. Outside chambers, on Fleet Street, like it was nothing, like it was coincidence. He's doing an LPC now. He talks about you in the present tense." The record hit the end of its side and the needle ran in the dead groove, tick-tock, tick-tock. Nia's phone lay face-up on the bar between the bowl and the wine. It had been there the whole time. It lit now, and the screen threw its little blue square up onto her jaw, and Rory read it upside down before Nia's hand moved. Evan. Two words. *She there?* Rory picked it up. Held it. Behind her, at the end of the bar, Silas stopped drying the glass, and set it down, and reached under the counter, and the green neon by the entrance stuttered as the door swung in on the rain.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Nia said carefully [carefully]"
dialogueSentences66
tagDensity0.242
leniency0.485
rawRatio0.063
effectiveRatio0.03
96.29% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1347
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
96.29% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1347
totalAiIsms1
found
0
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences69
matches(empty)
80.75% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences69
filterMatches
0"know"
1"hear see"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences119
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen49
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords2
totalWords1347
ratio0.001
matches
0"She there?"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount889
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity2.25
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Nia"
discoveredNames
Ella1
Fitzgerald1
Prague1
Silas7
Golden1
Empress1
Rory20
Hywel1
November1
Nia18
Cardiff1
Middle1
Temple1
Trieste1
Taff1
persons
0"Ella"
1"Fitzgerald"
2"Silas"
3"Empress"
4"Rory"
5"Hywel"
6"Nia"
places
0"Prague"
1"November"
2"Cardiff"
3"Middle"
4"Trieste"
globalScore0.375
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences40
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1347
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences119
matches
0"choosing that hurt"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs76
mean17.72
std18.46
cv1.042
sampleLengths
014
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247
36
43
570
61
721
83
912
1046
111
1215
132
1444
155
1637
173
183
1934
204
2116
229
2313
2458
257
2626
275
283
293
3032
314
325
3318
3433
3519
361
372
385
3911
4038
415
424
435
448
4542
463
4713
482
4939
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences69
matches
0"been paid"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs146
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences119
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount894
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.03131991051454139
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0022371364653243847
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences119
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences119
mean11.32
std10.59
cv0.935
sampleLengths
014
11
24
34
439
56
63
75
826
912
105
1122
121
1312
149
153
1612
1721
1825
191
2010
215
222
2324
245
2515
265
2731
286
293
303
315
3229
334
3416
359
3613
374
3831
3911
4012
417
4216
4310
445
453
463
472
4830
494
54.06% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.3949579831932773
totalSentences119
uniqueOpeners47
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences59
matches
0"Then she turned."
1"Somewhere above them a floorboard"
ratio0.034
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences59
matches
0"His limp made a rhythm"
1"She got her coat off"
2"She lifted the wine Silas"
3"He had a talent for"
4"She already knew."
5"She'd known from the second"
6"She looked at the photographs,"
7"She had blurted."
8"She had spilled."
9"She had cried in the"
10"He didn't look at Nia."
11"He looked at Rory, one"
12"It had been there the"
13"It lit now, and the"
ratio0.237
27.80% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount51
totalSentences59
matches
0"The voice cut through the"
1"Nobody called her that."
2"Rory set the glass down"
3"The coat came in first."
4"Camel, wool, the collar still"
5"Nia Hywel had thinned out."
6"The soft parts of her"
7"Nia laughed, and the laugh"
8"Silas moved along the bar"
9"His limp made a rhythm"
10"Nia glanced at the shelves"
11"She got her coat off"
12"Rory watched her do it."
13"Rory pulled at the collar"
14"Nia's mouth did something complicated."
15"She lifted the wine Silas"
16"The record turned over."
17"Silas withdrew to the far"
18"He had a talent for"
19"Rory had come to think"
ratio0.864
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences59
matches(empty)
ratio0
66.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The soft parts of her had gone somewhere, replaced by cheekbones and a haircut that had been paid for rather than requested."
1"Somewhere above them a floorboard creaked, her own flat settling, the kettle she'd left on the hob, the life she had built out of eight hundred square feet and …"
2"The crescent scar sat pale against the skin, the one she'd got at seven from a garden gate that swung the wrong way, the one Nia used to press with her thumb wh…"
93.75% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Nia laughed, and the laugh was new too, shorter, trained"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Nia laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences66
tagDensity0.106
leniency0.212
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.03
88.2863%