Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCSJXM9Q88HBXTXZN4V15JP

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Duration:
35.6s
Cost:
$0.043017
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The iron stairs leading down from the street level had rusted through in three places, forcing Detective Harlow Quinn to drop the last six feet into the dark. Her boots struck the crushed ballast with a flat, heavy thud. She didn't stumble. Eighteen years in the force—and four before that in the Royal Military Police—had trained her knees to absorb impact without a sound. She lifted her torch. The beam cut through eighty years of subterranean damp, illuminating peeling enamel signs for long-defunct tobacco brands and the yellowed, curved tiles of an abandoned Tube station beneath Camden. "Over here, Inspector," Detective Constable Miller called out. His voice was muffled by the thick, stagnant air, which tasted of old coal dust, rust, and something sharp and metallic, like static before a lightning strike. Quinn adjusted the collar of her coat against the subterranean chill. She checked her worn leather watch on her left wrist—2:40 AM. High tide for bad decisions. Miller was standing thirty yards down the disused platform, his torch resting on the hood of a portable halogen rig that threw harsh, unnatural light against the curved brickwork. At his feet lay the body. "What do we have, Miller?" Quinn asked. Her voice was low and clipped, carrying the effortless command of a woman who didn't waste syllables. She stood at 5'9", her sharp jaw set, her brown eyes scanning the perimeter before even looking down at the corpse. Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair caught the blue-white glare of the halogen lamp. "John Doe, mid-thirties," Miller said, shrugging his broad shoulders inside his high-vis jacket. "Looks like a local squatter or an addict who wandered down through the air shaft on High Street. Got into a scrap over cash or kit. Coat’s shredded, pockets pulled inside out. Classical fatal blunt-force trauma to the back of the cranium, plus knife wounds across the ribs." Quinn crouched beside the dead man, her knees popping faintly in the quiet tunnel. "Classical," she repeated. The word tasted dry on her tongue. She pulled a pair of nitrile gloves from her pocket and snapped them on with a sharp crack. "If it's a mugging, Miller, where’s the struggle?" "Look at his boots, ma'am. Scuffed to hell." "These scuffs are old. The mud in the treads is dry," Quinn said. She leaned closer, her torch beam narrowing. "Look at the ballast around him. The gravel hasn't been kicked up. If a man is stabbed in the chest, he doesn't die standing perfectly still. He thrushes. He reaches for the wound." She pointed the beam at the victim's hands. They rested loosely at his sides, palm up. "No defensive wounds on the forearms," she murmured. "No skin under the fingernails. And look at the blood." Miller squinteed, leaning over her shoulder. "What about it? There's plenty of it." "That's the point," Quinn said. She traced the dark red stain spreading across the white ceramic tiles. "The platform slopes toward the tracks at a three-degree angle for drainage. But the blood isn't running down to the ballast. It's pooling in a perfect circle, six feet in diameter, centered precisely on his breastbone." Miller frowned, shifting his weight. "Floor might be warped. Old foundations settle." "It's a concrete slab under three-quarter-inch tile, Miller. It doesn't warp in a geometric circle." Quinn's pulse ticked up a fraction—a cold, familiar hum in the back of her brain. Three years ago, when her partner DS Morris had been found dead in a sealed cellar off Whitechapel, the crime scene team had signed off on a sudden cardiac arrest. They had ignored the way the dust had cleared around his body in a neat, perfect octagon. They had ignored the frost on his skin in mid-July. She hadn't. She had spent thirty-six months staring at those crime scene photos in the dark, knowing the official report was a lie, even if she couldn't prove what the truth was. She reached into the dead man's open coat. The fabric was torn, yes, but the edges weren't frayed like a mugger’s panicked tug. They were sliced clean. Parallel cuts, spaced exactly two inches apart. Inside the interior pocket, her gloved fingers struck something small and hard. She withdrew it and held it under the halogen light. It was a piece of smoothed, yellowed bone, roughly the size of a cigarette lighter. One end was worn soft by the press of many thumbs; the other was notched with three distinct, carved grooves. "What's that?" Miller asked. "A prop? Some kind of dice?" "A token," Quinn said quietly. She didn't know how she knew, only that the weight of it felt deliberate, heavy with purpose. She set it carefully in an evidence bag. She turned back to the body, her fingers probing the dark gap between the victim's shoulder and the brickwork. Her knuckles brushed cold metal. "Got something else," she muttered. She pinched the object and drew it out. It was a small brass compass, heavily weathered, its casing green with a thick patina of verdigris. The brass face wasn't marked with standard navigational degrees; instead, tiny, intricate sigils were etched deep into the rim, surrounding a glass face that was entirely uncracked despite the damp. Quinn held it flat on her palm. The needle wasn't swinging toward north. It was frozen, pointing dead-sideways—straight toward the solid brick wall at the far end of the disused platform, where the original construction had sealed off a dead-end siding in 1932. "Needle's broken," Miller offered, pulling a notebook from his pocket. "Cheap souvenir." Quinn didn't answer. She tapped the brass casing. The needle didn't vibrate. It held its vector toward the brickwork with a rigid, unnatural tension, like a taut wire. "Where's the trespasser you held at the street level?" Quinn asked, standing up straight. Her eyes remained fixed on the compass in her palm before she slipped it into her pocket. "Up top with PC Vance," Miller said. "Found her lurking around the surface ventilation grate on Buck Street. Had a bag full of old books and wouldn't say what she was doing out past two in the morning." "Bring her down," Quinn said. "Ma'am? Scene's not clear, and it's cold as a crypt down here—" "Bring her down, DC Miller. Now." Three minutes later, heavy footfalls echoed along the access tunnel. PC Vance appeared first, guiding a young woman down the metal steps. The girl was small—no more than five-foot-four—wearing an oversized tweed coat that looked decades out of fashion. A worn leather satchel, bulging with heavy volumes, was slung tightly across her chest. Beneath a wild canopy of curly red hair, her freckled face was pale in the harsh lighting, her round glasses fogged slightly from the damp breath of the tunnel. Her green eyes darted frantically across the platform, passing over the body, over Miller, over the chalk lines, before snagging on Quinn. Quinn watched her with silent, practiced evaluation. Age: twenty-six, maybe twenty-seven. No physical threat, but her posture wasn't that of a lost drunk or a confused vagrant. She held her satchel close to her ribs like a shield. As Quinn approached, the girl's fingers twitched, raising her left hand to nervously tuck a stray strand of red hair behind her left ear. "You're far from home," Quinn said, her voice dropping into the quiet tone she used when backed into a corner. "What's your name?" "Eva," the girl said. Her voice was raspy, throat dry. "Eva Kowalski." "What are you doing in a decommissioned station beneath Camden at three in the morning, Miss Kowalski?" Eva swallowed hard, her hand flying back to her ear, tucking the same strand of hair again. "I... I lost my way. I was walking back from a reading room in Bloomsbury and I saw an open maintenance hatch—" "Bloomsbury is two miles south," Quinn interrupted flatly. "And the maintenance grate on Buck Street was locked from the inside with a heavy iron latch until my officers cut it twenty minutes ago. Try again." Eva’s green eyes flickered down toward Quinn's coat pocket—specifically, the pocket where the brass compass now rested. Quinn caught the shift in focus instantly. "You know what this place is," Quinn said. It wasn't a question. "It's just an abandoned station," Eva whispered. She tightened her grip on the strap of her worn leather satchel. "I work at the British Museum. Archives. I’m a research assistant. I have identification—" "I don't care about your library card, Miss Kowalski," Quinn stepped closer, her 5'9" frame casting a long, hard shadow over the younger woman. "I care about the man lying on that platform with a surgical incision through his ribs, a bone token in his coat, and a compass that doesn't point north." Eva froze. The color drained completely from her freckled cheeks. "You found... you found a token?" "A bone token. Three notches," Quinn said, her voice razor-sharp. "And this." Quinn pulled the brass compass from her pocket and held it out on her palm. Under the harsh halogen light, the verdigris casing seemed to absorb the light rather than reflect it. Eva gasped, taking a half-step forward before Vance grabbed her arm. "Don't hold it like that," Eva blurted out, her academic composure shattering. "The sigils—if the casing is compromised—" "It's not broken," Quinn said, watching Eva's face with ruthless precision. "The needle is pointing right at that brick bulkhead. But there's nothing behind that wall, Miss Kowalski. Just forty feet of packed clay and the Northern line tracks fifty yards beyond." Eva looked at Quinn, really looked at her, seeing for the first time the sharp jaw, the dark, hyper-vigilant eyes, and the complete lack of doubt in the detective's posture. "You think you know what happened here," Eva said softly, her nervous habit forgotten, her hands settling firmly on her satchel. "You think it's a murder scene." "It is a murder scene," Miller chimed in from the body. "Clear as day." "It's an entry point," Eva corrected, her voice suddenly steady, bearing the quiet weight of someone who spent her life studying things buried in the dark. "Or it was. Before someone brought violence to the threshold." Quinn took two steps toward the brick wall at the end of the platform. She raised her torch. To Miller, it was just old Victorian brickwork, blackened by soot. But Quinn leaned in close, bringing her face inches from the mortar. There, wedged between the bricks at eye level, was a thin, powdery residue—pale silver, almost iridescent. It didn't belong in a London sewer. And directly beneath it, carved into the stone with microscopic precision, was a symbol that matched the second sigil on the brass compass. She looked back at the dead man. She looked at Eva Kowalski's ink-stained fingers and her bag of ancient texts. She thought of DS Morris, lying cold on a concrete floor three years ago with a chest that looked like it had been opened by invisible glass. The world hadn't changed tonight. The world had always been like this—she had just finally found the keyhole. "Miller," Quinn said, her voice dropping into a register that admitted no argument. "Ma'am?" "Call the coroner. Tell them we're holding the scene. Nobody touches the body, nobody touches the wall, and nobody leaves this platform." She turned back to Eva Kowalski. "Miss Kowalski," Quinn said, tapping the brass compass against her gloved hand. "You and I are going to have a very long conversation about what moves through this station when the moon is full."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
91.89% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags37
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"diameter centered precisely [precisely]"
1"Quinn said quietly. [quietly]"
2"Quinn interrupted flatly [flatly]"
3"Eva said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences65
tagDensity0.569
leniency1
rawRatio0.108
effectiveRatio0.108
68.98% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1934
totalAiIsmAdverbs12
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"loosely"
count1
2
adverb"precisely"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
4
adverb"tightly"
count1
5
adverb"slightly"
count1
6
adverb"nervously"
count1
7
adverb"completely"
count1
8
adverb"really"
count1
9
adverb"softly"
count1
10
adverb"suddenly"
count1
11
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"loosely"
2"precisely"
3"carefully"
4"tightly"
5"slightly"
6"nervously"
7"completely"
8"really"
9"softly"
10"suddenly"
11"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
53.46% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1934
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"effortless"
count1
2
word"scanning"
count1
3
word"traced"
count1
4
word"perfect"
count2
5
word"weight"
count3
6
word"pulse"
count1
7
word"familiar"
count1
8
word"standard"
count1
9
word"intricate"
count1
10
word"etched"
count1
11
word"tension"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count1
13
word"flickered"
count1
14
word"firmly"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"effortless"
2"scanning"
3"traced"
4"perfect"
5"weight"
6"pulse"
7"familiar"
8"standard"
9"intricate"
10"etched"
11"tension"
12"echoed"
13"flickered"
14"firmly"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences103
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences103
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences121
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen108
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1925
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions28
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions77
wordCount1468
uniqueNames24
maxNameDensity1.91
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity5.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Detective2
Harlow1
Quinn28
Royal1
Military1
Police1
Tube1
Camden1
Constable1
Miller11
Got1
Morris2
Whitechapel1
Had1
Scene1
Three2
Vance2
Eva12
Bloomsbury1
Try1
Archives1
Victorian1
London1
Kowalski2
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Police"
3"Constable"
4"Miller"
5"Morris"
6"Had"
7"Scene"
8"Vance"
9"Eva"
10"Try"
11"Kowalski"
places
0"Detective"
1"Royal"
2"Three"
3"Bloomsbury"
4"London"
globalScore0.546
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like it had been opened by invisib"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1925
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences121
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs67
mean28.73
std18.7
cv0.651
sampleLengths
064
133
235
327
435
558
661
724
826
98
1053
1116
1218
1313
1453
1512
1615
17104
1834
1922
2035
2110
2230
2324
245
2555
267
2736
2812
2928
3031
3138
325
3312
346
3522
3682
3738
3824
3923
4012
4117
4239
4335
4424
4512
4633
4753
4816
4912
78.01% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences103
matches
0"was muffled"
1"been kicked"
2"is stabbed"
3"been found"
4"was torn"
5"were sliced"
6"was notched"
7"were etched"
8"been opened"
89.35% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs241
matches
0"was standing"
1"wasn't swinging"
2"was doing"
3"was walking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences121
ratio0.074
matches
0"Eighteen years in the force—and four before that in the Royal Military Police—had trained her knees to absorb impact without a sound."
1"She checked her worn leather watch on her left wrist—2:40 AM."
2"Quinn's pulse ticked up a fraction—a cold, familiar hum in the back of her brain. Three years ago, when her partner DS Morris had been found dead in a sealed cellar off Whitechapel, the crime scene team had signed off on a sudden cardiac arrest. They had ignored the way the dust had cleared around his body in a neat, perfect octagon. They had ignored the frost on his skin in mid-July. She hadn't. She had spent thirty-six months staring at those crime scene photos in the dark, knowing the official report was a lie, even if she couldn't prove what the truth was."
3"It was a piece of smoothed, yellowed bone, roughly the size of a cigarette lighter. One end was worn soft by the press of many thumbs; the other was notched with three distinct, carved grooves."
4"She pinched the object and drew it out. It was a small brass compass, heavily weathered, its casing green with a thick patina of verdigris. The brass face wasn't marked with standard navigational degrees; instead, tiny, intricate sigils were etched deep into the rim, surrounding a glass face that was entirely uncracked despite the damp."
5"The girl was small—no more than five-foot-four—wearing an oversized tweed coat that looked decades out of fashion. A worn leather satchel, bulging with heavy volumes, was slung tightly across her chest. Beneath a wild canopy of curly red hair, her freckled face was pale in the harsh lighting, her round glasses fogged slightly from the damp breath of the tunnel. Her green eyes darted frantically across the platform, passing over the body, over Miller, over the chalk lines, before snagging on Quinn."
6"Eva’s green eyes flickered down toward Quinn's coat pocket—specifically, the pocket where the brass compass now rested. Quinn caught the shift in focus instantly."
7"There, wedged between the bricks at eye level, was a thin, powdery residue—pale silver, almost iridescent."
8"The world had always been like this—she had just finally found the keyhole."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount882
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"Classical fatal blunt-force"
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.024943310657596373
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.01020408163265306
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences121
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences121
mean15.91
std14.54
cv0.914
sampleLengths
028
111
23
322
44
529
68
727
811
911
105
1129
126
137
1417
1534
1631
178
186
1916
2024
2126
225
233
244
2522
266
2714
282
295
3016
3113
325
339
344
3529
369
3715
389
393
408
417
42104
4334
4422
4535
466
474
4830
4924
63.91% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.4380165289256198
totalSentences121
uniqueOpeners53
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences90
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences90
matches
0"Her boots struck the crushed"
1"She didn't stumble."
2"She lifted her torch."
3"His voice was muffled by"
4"She checked her worn leather"
5"Her voice was low and"
6"She stood at"
7"She pulled a pair of"
8"He reaches for the"
9"She pointed the beam at"
10"It's pooling in a perfect"
11"It doesn't warp in a"
12"She reached into the dead"
13"It was a piece of"
14"She turned back to the"
15"She pinched the object and"
16"I lost my way."
17"I was walking back from"
18"I’m a research assistant."
19"She raised her torch."
ratio0.278
54.44% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount73
totalSentences90
matches
0"The iron stairs leading down"
1"Her boots struck the crushed"
2"She didn't stumble."
3"She lifted her torch."
4"The beam cut through eighty"
5"Detective Constable Miller called out"
6"His voice was muffled by"
7"Quinn adjusted the collar of"
8"She checked her worn leather"
9"Miller was standing thirty yards"
10"Her voice was low and"
11"She stood at"
12"Miller said, shrugging his broad"
13"Coat’s shredded, pockets pulled inside"
14"Quinn crouched beside the dead"
15"She pulled a pair of"
16"The mud in the treads"
17"The gravel hasn't been kicked"
18"He reaches for the"
19"She pointed the beam at"
ratio0.811
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences90
matches
0"If a man is stabbed"
1"To Miller, it was just"
ratio0.022
3.97% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"His voice was muffled by the thick, stagnant air, which tasted of old coal dust, rust, and something sharp and metallic, like static before a lightning strike."
1"Miller was standing thirty yards down the disused platform, his torch resting on the hood of a portable halogen rig that threw harsh, unnatural light against th…"
2"Her voice was low and clipped, carrying the effortless command of a woman who didn't waste syllables."
3"She pinched the object and drew it out. It was a small brass compass, heavily weathered, its casing green with a thick patina of verdigris. The brass face wasn'…"
4"The girl was small—no more than five-foot-four—wearing an oversized tweed coat that looked decades out of fashion. A worn leather satchel, bulging with heavy vo…"
5"And directly beneath it, carved into the stone with microscopic precision, was a symbol that matched the second sigil on the brass compass."
6"She thought of DS Morris, lying cold on a concrete floor three years ago with a chest that looked like it had been opened by invisible glass."
80.88% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags34
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Quinn said, her voice razor-sharp"
1"Eva blurted out, her academic composure shattering"
2"Quinn said, her voice dropping into a register that admitted no argument"
42.31% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags23
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"she murmured (murmur)"
1"she muttered (mutter)"
2"Quinn interrupted flatly (interrupt)"
3"Eva whispered (whisper)"
4"Eva blurted out (blurt out)"
5"Miller chimed (chime)"
6"Eva corrected (correct)"
dialogueSentences65
tagDensity0.354
leniency0.708
rawRatio0.304
effectiveRatio0.215
77.3736%