Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCSYKD08HGDHH4BDDCDYSW4

Run Details

Duration:
24.5s
Cost:
$0.042378
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
A thorn ripped through Rory’s denim jacket, scoring the tender skin of her forearm. She pulled her arm free with a sharp intake of air and thrust her boot into the thick bramble-tangle. The lacquered wooden box rattled inside her canvas delivery bag. Yu-Fei Cheung had paid her double wages to hand-deliver the parcel to an impossible grid reference in Richmond Park, far past the public trails and rusted deer fencing. She stumbled across a sunken ditch and broke through the dense treeline. Massive oak standing stones towered over a circular clearing. Eight ancient trunks, petrified into smooth grey pillars, formed a perfect ring in the dirt. Wild indigo foxgloves and golden primroses choked the grass inside the perimeter, blooming with impossible vibrant colours despite the pitch dark surrounding the woods. Rory checked her wristwatch. The second hand vibrated in place, twitching back and forth between twelve and one. Tick-tock went the mechanism, then skipped backward. Her thumb brushed the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a nervous habit from childhood. Underneath her collar, the thumbnail-sized crimson gemstone flared against her breastbone. Heat radiated through the silver chain, sinking into her ribs like a burning coal. "Hello?" Rory’s voice sounded muffled, as if the air itself absorbed the sound waves. "Delivery for... Mr Vance?" Silence answered. Not the quiet of a park at night, but a hollow, vacuum-like silence. No rustling leaves. No distant drone of London traffic on the main road. She stepped between two oak stones. A subtle shift in pressure popped her ears. The scent of damp earth vanished, replaced by the cloying stench of crushed petals and burnt hair. Rory walked toward the centre of the clearing, where a flat stone slab sat embedded in the turf. A brass lantern rested on the mossy stone. Smoke curled from its glass chimney, grey and thick like rendered fat. She reached into her bag and retrieved the black lacquer box. "Leave it on the rock, she said. Simple." A sharp snap rang out behind her. Rory whirled around. The gap between the oak stones where she had entered looked narrower now. The branches of the surrounding canopy coiled together like tangled fingers, blocking out the sky. "Is someone there?" A rustle came from the grass, not from the edge of the clearing, but directly beside her feet. She looked down. The blue foxgloves bent sideways, flattened under an invisible weight. The crushed stems oozed a black, viscous fluid that bubbled against the grass. Something stepped toward her, leaving deep, wet indentations in the dirt, yet no boots or feet broke the light. The Heartstone pendant thrashed against her chest, pulsing a dark blood-red light through her white shirt. Rory backed away toward the centre stone. Her left hand gripped her heavy metal torch like a club. "I'm leaving the parcel. Whatever this is, I'm out." "Rory..." The voice leaked from the hollow interior of the nearest oak stone. It was dry and papery, like dead leaves dragging across tarmac. It sounded sickeningly like Evan, her ex, but distorted, as if spoken through a long metal tube filled with water. "Rory, come back inside. It's cold out there." Her blood ran cold. Evan was two hundred miles away in Cardiff. She had left him two years ago. "You aren't him," she whispered. Her knuckles turned white around the torch. "He loved you, Laila," another voice piped up, dropping from the branches above. This one sounded high and sweet, echoing like a nursery rhyme sang backward. "Why did you run to London? Why hide in the pub above the beer barrels?" The air grew icy cold. Rory's breath blossomed into white fog. Shadows stretched from the base of the oak stones, reaching out across the crushed wildflowers like black fingers. The shadows did not align with the faint glow of her pendant or the brass lantern; they moved independently, sliding along the dirt toward her boots. She snapped the toggle of her torch on. The LED beam cut through the dark, striking the base of the eastern oak stone. A face stared back at her. It was not human. The skin had the grey, cracked texture of dried river mud, stretched taut over a skull with no visible nose or ears. Two milky white spheres sat deep in its eye sockets, tracking her every movement. It clung to the side of the stone like a bloated spider, its limbs abnormally long, bent at double-jointed elbows. It grinned, revealing rows of thin, needle-like teeth coated in black sap. "The girl brought the warm stone," it rasped, its jaw unhinging with a wet crack. Rory dropped the delivery box. She swung the heavy beam of the torch into the creature's face and bolted for the outer ring. The ground softened beneath her boots. The grass turned into a slurry of rot and squirming roots that grabbed at her ankles. She stumbled, her elbow slamming into the hard edge of a standing stone. Pain shot up her arm, but she scrambled back to her feet, lunging for the gap between the monoliths. The gap was gone. The oak stones had shifted, their massive petrified trunks grinding together to close the perimeter. Wood creaked and groaned like a sinking ship as the gap closed down to a sliver no wider than her palm. Behind her, a wet slithering sound echoed through the clearing, accompanied by a sharp click-clack of bone tapping against stone. "Wrong way, Rory," the high voice sang from right behind her ear. An ice-cold, spindly hand pressed against the back of her neck. Rory whirled around, swinging the iron torch with all her weight. The metal struck hard against wet bone with a sickening thud. The creature shrieked, a sound like tearing metal, and stumbled backward into the wildflower bed. She did not stop to look. She sprinted toward the central stone slab, grabbing the lacquered box off the floor. If this was a trade, she needed leverage. The brass lantern on the altar exploded. Glass shards showered her face, cutting her cheek. Black liquid sprayed from the lantern's fuel reservoir, igniting instantly into a towering pillar of pale blue fire. The fire roared, revealing three more pale, mud-skinned figures crawling out from the hollows of the oak stones. They moved in a hideous rhythm, their jointed limbs snapping in and out of place as they advanced on all fours. The Heartstone pendant flared so violently that the heat scorched through her shirt, searing the crescent scar on her wrist with blinding pain. A dark crimson tear ripped open in the air above the altar, revealing a chasm of endless black emptiness beyond. The largest creature leaped from the stone, its needle teeth inches from her throat.
created_at"2026-07-25T14:13:01.998Z" 7/25/2026, 2:13:01 PM
model"google/gemini-3.6-flash-20260721"
app_id182717
external_user(null)
streamedtrue
cancelledfalse
latency1500
moderation_latency(null)
generation_time24394
tokens_prompt4387
tokens_completion3203
native_tokens_prompt4427
native_tokens_completion4765
native_tokens_completion_images0
native_tokens_reasoning3302
native_tokens_cached0
num_media_prompt(null)
num_input_audio_prompt(null)
num_media_completion0
num_search_results(null)
num_fetches(null)
web_search_engine(null)
origin"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byokfalse
finish_reason"stop"
native_finish_reason"STOP"
service_tier"default"
usage0.042378
router(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id"5d6d133d-a953-4781-a835-7ee76f4e1388"
id"bsRkasuuA4jQ-8YPzpGuoAo"
is_byokfalse
latency1500
model_permaslug"google/gemini-3.6-flash-20260721"
provider_name"Google AI Studio"
status200
user_agent"langchainjs-openai/1.0.0 ((node/v24.18.0; linux; x64))"
http_referer(null)
request_id"req-1784988781-QHbFqezXP70C4TgpcG7t"
session_id(null)
preset_id(null)
api_type"completions"
id"gen-1784988781-4fi9zCZQMmCAgohmwI1t"
upstream_id"bsRkasuuA4jQ-8YPzpGuoAo"
total_cost0.042378
cache_discount(null)
upstream_inference_cost0
provider_name"Google AI Studio"
response_cache_source_id(null)
data_region"global"

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.417
leniency0.833
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1127
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
60.07% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1127
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"perfect"
count1
1
word"vibrated"
count1
2
word"silence"
count2
3
word"weight"
count2
4
word"echoing"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count1
6
word"searing"
count1
highlights
0"perfect"
1"vibrated"
2"silence"
3"weight"
4"echoing"
5"echoed"
6"searing"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
1
label"knuckles turned white"
count1
highlights
0"blood ran cold"
1"knuckles turned white"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences87
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences87
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences94
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1127
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions19
wordCount1062
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity0.85
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory9
Cheung1
Richmond1
Park1
Silence1
London1
Heartstone2
Evan2
Cardiff1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Cheung"
2"Silence"
3"Evan"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences76
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
22.54% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.775
wordCount1127
matches
0"Not the quiet of a park at night, but a hollow, vacuum-like silence"
1"not from the edge of the clearing, but directly beside her feet"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences94
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean25.61
std15.2
cv0.594
sampleLengths
033
138
212
348
425
541
618
728
831
938
1019
117
1231
133
1418
1545
1616
1727
181
1943
208
2119
2212
2341
2455
2523
266
2760
2812
2915
3023
3154
324
3336
3420
3512
3611
3737
3828
397
4026
4139
4243
4314
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences87
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs161
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences94
ratio0.011
matches
0"The shadows did not align with the faint glow of her pendant or the brass lantern; they moved independently, sliding along the dirt toward her boots."
82.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1073
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
1"dark blood-red light"
2"pale, mud-skinned figures"
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.023299161230195712
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.0065237651444548
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences94
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences94
mean11.99
std5.9
cv0.492
sampleLengths
014
119
210
328
412
59
615
724
84
914
107
1116
1211
1314
1414
154
162
1713
183
1910
206
218
2217
2318
248
2512
2611
278
287
293
3013
3115
323
3318
343
3510
3613
3719
3816
397
4011
419
421
4312
4411
4520
468
474
488
497
59.57% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.4148936170212766
totalSentences94
uniqueOpeners39
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences85
matches
0"She pulled her arm free"
1"She stumbled across a sunken"
2"Her thumb brushed the small"
3"She stepped between two oak"
4"She reached into her bag"
5"She looked down."
6"Her left hand gripped her"
7"It was dry and papery,"
8"It sounded sickeningly like Evan,"
9"Her blood ran cold."
10"She had left him two"
11"Her knuckles turned white around"
12"She snapped the toggle of"
13"It was not human."
14"It clung to the side"
15"It grinned, revealing rows of"
16"it rasped, its jaw unhinging"
17"She swung the heavy beam"
18"She stumbled, her elbow slamming"
19"She did not stop to"
ratio0.259
24.71% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount74
totalSentences85
matches
0"A thorn ripped through Rory’s"
1"She pulled her arm free"
2"The lacquered wooden box rattled"
3"Yu-Fei Cheung had paid her"
4"She stumbled across a sunken"
5"Rory checked her wristwatch."
6"The second hand vibrated in"
7"Tick-tock went the mechanism, then"
8"Her thumb brushed the small"
9"Heat radiated through the silver"
10"Rory’s voice sounded muffled, as"
11"She stepped between two oak"
12"A subtle shift in pressure"
13"The scent of damp earth"
14"Rory walked toward the centre"
15"A brass lantern rested on"
16"Smoke curled from its glass"
17"She reached into her bag"
18"A sharp snap rang out"
19"Rory whirled around."
ratio0.871
58.82% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences85
matches
0"If this was a trade,"
ratio0.012
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The crushed stems oozed a black, viscous fluid that bubbled against the grass."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Rory’s voice sounded, as if the air itself absorbed the sound waves"
1"it rasped, its jaw unhinging with a wet crack"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"the high voice sang (sing)"
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.333
79.1460%