Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCVDNGMEF3MZG21BT44NPZB

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass slipped in Rory's hand. Not far. Just enough to clink against the mahogany bar in a sharp, bright note that split the low murmur of The Raven's Nest. She hadn't heard that particular rhythm of heels since Cardiff, since shared cigarettes behind the library and promises neither of them intended to keep. The green neon glow filtering through the front window painted the newcomer in sick, elegant light. "Eva." The woman turned. Navy coat, tailored to perfection. The wild blonde hair Rory remembered from university halls had been sheared into a sleek dark bob that framed sharp cheekbones. Eva's eyes, once bright with mischief, scanned the dim room with the cold precision of a barrister assessing a hostile witness. "Rory Carter." Eva's voice carried the old musical lilt, but the warmth had cooled into something polished and distant. "Still polishing glasses in the dark." Rory set the tumbler down gently. Her straight black hair hung to her shoulders, heavier with the weight of London years. The small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist caught the neon as she gripped the bar edge. She wore the black shirt of Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress staff, though her delivery shift had ended an hour before. "I live above," Rory said. "Old habits." Eva slid onto a stool with the grace of someone who had never worked with her hands. The scent of expensive perfume arrived before she spoke again. "I didn't expect you to be here." "You didn't expect me to exist anywhere. Last I heard, you were still in Cardiff, reading law texts to earn your father's approval." Eva's smile tightened. "I qualified. Corporate litigation in the City now. Brendan Carter finally has a reason to speak to me at Christmas." The mention of Rory's father made her jaw tighten. Brendan Carter, the Irish barrister, had mapped her life before she was born: pre-law at Cardiff University, the chambers, the wedding, the respectable death. Rory had fled that map the same night she fled Evan. Silas Blackwood watched from the far end of the bar. His grey-streaked auburn beard was neatly trimmed, matching the hair that caught the dim light. The silver signet ring on his right hand glinted as he dried a tumbler with slow, deliberate strokes. His hazel eyes did not blink. The slight limp in his left leg was visible as he shifted his weight, but he said nothing. The walls behind him were covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs that seemed to watch the conversation with silent interest. The tick-tock of the old clock behind the bar matched the tremor in Eva's hands. "I work delivery for Yu-Fei," Rory said. "Golden Empress. I bring food to people who don't look at me twice. It's honest." "Honest." Eva turned the word like a coin with a false face. "You always were good at making small things sound noble. I remember when you wanted to argue human rights cases. Before Evan. Before everything." Rory felt the scar on her wrist itch, though she didn't touch it. "You told me to run. You stood in our kitchen and said, 'Don't wait for permission, Rory.' So I didn't. I left the books, the flat, the engagement ring he never bought, and I took the train to London." "And I stayed." Eva's knuckles whitened around the strap of her clutch. "I stayed and I made myself small and successful. I read his books. I made father happy. I made partners at the firm by thirty. And now I'm sitting in a Soho bar wondering why you look more alive polishing glasses than I do arguing in chambers." The silence stretched. Somewhere in the back, the hidden bookshelf that concealed Silas's meeting room seemed to exhale a draft of older air. "You changed," Rory said. "We both changed." "Not the same way." Eva leaned closer. The tremor in her hands was visible now, a slight, relentless vibration. "I'm not here by accident, Rory. I knew you lived above this place. Silas Blackwood keeps a network for people who need to disappear. I thought... I thought perhaps you had disappeared completely." Rory's bright blue eyes narrowed. "I'm not disappeared. I'm free." "Freedom's expensive. Your rent is paid by someone who doesn't ask questions. Your delivery routes are mapped by people who know exactly where you sleep. You think you're invisible, but you're catalogued, Rory. Just like the files behind that shelf." Rory glanced toward Silas. He set down the towel. "Eva Morgan." Silas's voice carried the quiet authority of someone who had once commanded rooms far darker than this. "You know better than to come into my bar asking for things that don't belong to you." Eva turned, her composure fracturing for a single breath. "Silas. The Spymaster. I was hoping you'd be here." "Not for friendship. We are acquainted through mutual enemies. Say your piece and leave." Eva looked back at Rory. The mask of the successful barrister had slipped, revealing the frightened girl who had once shared a cramped kitchen in Cardiff. "I need a file. Not for me. For him." "Who?" Eva reached into her coat. Rory flinched. Eva pulled out not a weapon, but a folded photograph, worn at the edges. It showed Rory and Eva at nineteen, laughing in front of the university library. Behind them, partly obscured, stood a man with kind eyes and cruel hands. "He's not dead, Rory. Evan never died. And I'm carrying his child." Rory's breath stopped. Eva's tears finally came, silent and precise. "I need the file that proves he was in Prague the night you left. The file that proves you never touched him. Because if the police find out I'm pregnant, they'll ask where I was. And they'll ask who helped me leave Cardiff." Rory's fingers closed around the bar edge. Then the green neon sign above the entrance flickered twice, plunging the street outside into momentary darkness. The door of The Raven's Nest pushed open. A shadow filled the frame, familiar and wrong. Rory didn't need to turn. She knew the shape of that particular cruelty, the way it filled spaces without asking. "Hello, Laila," Evan said, soft and familiar, using the old alias she had buried. "I've been looking for both of you." Rory's scar burned white-hot. Eva sank back against the stool. Silas reached beneath the bar, and the hidden bookshelf behind him slid open with a mechanical whisper, revealing not files, but a darkness that had been waiting for years.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.129
leniency0.258
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.78% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1085
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
1
adverb"completely"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
1"completely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
49.31% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1085
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"scanned"
count1
1
word"lilt"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count1
3
word"weight"
count2
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"flickered"
count1
6
word"familiar"
count2
7
word"mechanical"
count1
8
word"whisper"
count1
highlights
0"scanned"
1"lilt"
2"warmth"
3"weight"
4"silence"
5"flickered"
6"familiar"
7"mechanical"
8"whisper"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences61
matches(empty)
72.60% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences61
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tended to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences88
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1085
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions56
wordCount684
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity2.63
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory18
Raven2
Nest2
Cardiff3
London1
Yu-Fei1
Cheung1
Golden1
Empress1
Eva15
Carter1
Irish1
University1
Evan2
Blackwood1
Silas5
persons
0"Rory"
1"Raven"
2"Nest"
3"Yu-Fei"
4"Cheung"
5"Eva"
6"Carter"
7"Evan"
8"Blackwood"
9"Silas"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"London"
2"University"
globalScore0.184
windowScore0
91.86% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences43
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"photographs that seemed to watch the conversation with silent interest"
15.67% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.843
wordCount1085
matches
0"not a weapon, but a folded photograph, worn at the edges"
1"not files, but a darkness"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean19.04
std19.35
cv1.017
sampleLengths
06
164
21
350
42
517
66
758
87
927
107
1123
123
1320
1444
15103
1622
171
1811
1924
2013
2139
223
239
2447
2523
264
273
284
2915
3033
315
325
3340
349
352
3617
3717
389
399
4014
4126
429
431
4448
4512
463
477
4843
497
99.51% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences61
matches
0"been sheared"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs107
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences88
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount691
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.023154848046309694
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005788712011577424
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences88
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences88
mean12.33
std9.75
cv0.79
sampleLengths
06
12
222
324
416
51
63
75
821
921
102
1117
126
136
1415
1517
1620
175
182
1917
2010
217
2223
233
2420
259
2624
2711
2810
2915
3018
316
3218
3321
3415
357
3615
371
3811
3924
4013
4139
423
439
4447
453
4620
474
483
494
50.76% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.3181818181818182
totalSentences88
uniqueOpeners28
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences56
matches
0"Just enough to clink against"
1"Somewhere in the back, the"
2"Then the green neon sign"
ratio0.054
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount8
totalSentences56
matches
0"She hadn't heard that particular"
1"Her straight black hair hung"
2"She wore the black shirt"
3"His grey-streaked auburn beard was"
4"His hazel eyes did not"
5"He set down the towel."
6"It showed Rory and Eva"
7"She knew the shape of"
ratio0.143
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount52
totalSentences56
matches
0"The glass slipped in Rory's"
1"She hadn't heard that particular"
2"The green neon glow filtering"
3"The woman turned."
4"Navy coat, tailored to perfection."
5"The wild blonde hair Rory"
6"Eva's eyes, once bright with"
7"Eva's voice carried the old"
8"Rory set the tumbler down"
9"Her straight black hair hung"
10"The small crescent-shaped scar on"
11"She wore the black shirt"
12"Eva slid onto a stool"
13"The scent of expensive perfume"
14"Eva's smile tightened."
15"The mention of Rory's father"
16"Brendan Carter, the Irish barrister,"
17"Rory had fled that map"
18"Silas Blackwood watched from the"
19"His grey-streaked auburn beard was"
ratio0.929
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Just enough to clink against the mahogany bar in a sharp, bright note that split the low murmur of The Raven's Nest."
1"His grey-streaked auburn beard was neatly trimmed, matching the hair that caught the dim light."
2"The walls behind him were covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs that seemed to watch the conversation with silent interest."
3"Somewhere in the back, the hidden bookshelf that concealed Silas's meeting room seemed to exhale a draft of older air."
4"Silas's voice carried the quiet authority of someone who had once commanded rooms far darker than this."
5"The mask of the successful barrister had slipped, revealing the frightened girl who had once shared a cramped kitchen in Cardiff."
6"Silas reached beneath the bar, and the hidden bookshelf behind him slid open with a mechanical whisper, revealing not files, but a darkness that had been waitin…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.129
leniency0.258
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
78.8163%