Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCVEBNB5HJAYB5EME56GGX6

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1m 47s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolts screamed in sequence, click-click-click, a metallic staccato that sliced through the turmeric-spiced air of the hallway. Rory pulled the door inward, her bare foot braced against the worn frame, and Lucien Moreau filled the narrow doorway like a bad omen tailored in charcoal silk. He stood untouched by the London rain, platinum hair slicked back against a high forehead, one amber eye and one black eye fixed upon her with the stillness of a blade before it strikes. His ivory cane tapped once against the threshold, a delicate sound that concealed its hidden steel, the kind of secret that suited him. "You missed three locks, chérie." She kept her hand on the doorframe. The small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist pulled taut against her pale skin, visible in the weak light. "I didn't miss them. I just don't care if you come in." "Then you'll care about this." He stepped past her, uninvited, the tailored charcoal suit swallowing the weak neon glow that seeped up from the curry house below Brick Lane. "Your ex is looking for you. And he's not looking to apologise." The cramped one-bedroom flat smelled of turmeric, old paper, and secrets long buried. Books teetered in unstable stacks against every wall; scrolls spilled from shoeboxes like sleeping serpents. Ptolemy, Eva's tabby cat, leaped onto a teetering shelf and hissed at Lucien's shadow, tail bristled wide, green eyes furious. Rory shut the door. The deadbolts clicked behind him, locking them in together, the sound heavy and final. "He can't find me here." She moved past him, her bare feet silent on the floorboards scuffed by Eva's years of research, reaching for the kettle that sat atop a stack of grimoires bound in cracked leather. The sleeves of her worn delivery jacket brushed her elbows, the fabric smelling of fried spring rolls and rain. "Eva's place has three deadbolts and enough research notes to bury several bodies." "Two bodies," Lucien said, setting his cane against the wall with surgical precision. The hidden blade clicked softly back into its sheath. "Evan's already buried one. His own conscience, perhaps. Or that girl in Bristol you read about." Rory turned, her bright blue eyes sharp in the low light that filtered through the paper-covered windows. "Don't speak about things you only half understand, Luc." "I understand four languages, Aurora." He pulled a folded paper from his suit pocket, smooth and uncreased, the kind of perfection that spoke of money and violence. "This arrived at my offices. Written in reverse Greek, misspelled, but intent is clear. Someone wants to open a door you don't know exists. And they need your hands to do it." She looked at the paper. Symbols crawled across the page, some familiar from Eva's scattered notes scattered like snow, others twisting like small knives. Her stomach dropped, cold and sudden, a physical reaction she couldn't suppress. "Why me?" Lucien stepped closer. The air between them thickened, carrying his scent, something like sandalwood and approaching storm. "Because you left a scar on my wrist that nobody sees, Rory. And because Evan isn't the only monster you ran from." "The difference," she said, her voice low, her back pressing against the kitchen counter, "is I can leave you. I already did." "You came back to the books." He lowered his gloved hand, not touching her, hovering near her jaw with a restraint that felt more dangerous than contact. "Not to me. To Eva's ghost stories and your father's law books. You want answers. I'm here with the worst kind." She felt the heat of him, closer than memory allowed, closer than the six months of silence permitted. Her delivery job, her flat above Silas' bar, her careful new life built from cardboard boxes and early mornings, all of it felt thin as tissue. "Why now?" she asked, pouring water into a chipped cup though she didn't want tea. The ritual gave her hands purpose. He glanced at the scrolls, then back to her mouth, a flicker of amber and black that betrayed the control in his posture. "Because the Golden Empress doesn't just serve noodles. Yu-Fei Cheung is moving something through that kitchen. Something that wants your blood for the ink in these books. And because I am, unfortunately, still the man who knows your address." She set the cup down hard. "You think I'm some kind of key?" "I think you're a lock that hasn't decided whether to open." His voice dropped, smooth and dangerous, a river running deep beneath ice. "I think you pushed me away in Marseille, and you've been running ever since. I think you're terrified that if you stop running, you'll find out I'm worse than him." "You're not worse," she said, though her voice betrayed her with its tremor. "You're just complicated." "That is a generous interpretation." He straightened, the suit falling into perfect lines that spoke of Marseille tailors and old money. "Read the symbols, Aurora. Then decide if you want me to leave, or if you want me to stay when the door breaks." Above them, a creak in the ceiling. Not old pipes. Not the curry house's ventilation system. The sound carried weight, intention. Lucien's head snapped upward. His cane was in his hand faster than thought, blade singing free, a thin silver line catching the dim light from the single bulb. Rory grabbed the scroll from the table, her mind clicking faster than fear, her fingers tracing the parchment she half-knew from Eva's frantic explanations. She unfurled it, spoke a word she didn't understand but felt in her bones, a sharp syllable that tasted of copper and old magic. The shadow that poured through Eva's bedroom doorway had no face at first, only length, only hunger, wearing a man's outline that melted at the edges like wax in fire. Lucien moved, fast, his cane slicing through the air with surgical precision. "Behind me." But Rory was already moving, her quick thinking overriding instinct. She threw the scroll onto the floor, the words glowing faintly in the dark ink, and grabbed the brass paperweight shaped like a sleeping dragon, its weight solid and reassuring. The shadow screamed, a sound like tearing silk, like pages ripped from a forbidden book. Lucien looked at her, heterochromatic eyes wide with something beyond surprise, something like recognition, like pride. The lights died. In the darkness, Rory felt his breath, warm and close, the scent of storm and sandalwood mixing with the turmeric air. His hand found her shoulder, not pulling, just anchoring her in the chaos. "You never stopped," she whispered, her heart hammering against her ribs. "I never started," he said. "You just never looked back." Then the flat shook, glass exploding inward with a sound like thunder, and something heavier than shadow, something with claws and a human laugh that echoed with familiarity, broke through the window and landed upon Eva's books with a crash that scattered scrolls like frightened birds. Rory raised the paperweight. Lucien's blade flashed in the broken moonlight. The dark romance had only just begun.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences29
tagDensity0.414
leniency0.828
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.76% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1179
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
53.35% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1179
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"silk"
count2
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"flicker"
count1
5
word"perfect"
count1
6
word"weight"
count2
7
word"tracing"
count1
8
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"familiar"
2"stomach"
3"silence"
4"flicker"
5"perfect"
6"weight"
7"tracing"
8"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences57
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences57
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences74
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1179
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions26
wordCount846
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.95
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Lucien8
Moreau1
London1
Brick1
Lane1
Eva6
Marseille1
Rory7
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Moreau"
2"Eva"
3"Rory"
places
0"London"
1"Brick"
2"Lane"
3"Marseille"
globalScore1
windowScore1
45.83% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"something like sandalwood and approaching st"
1"something like recognition, like pride"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1179
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences74
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean30.23
std17.71
cv0.586
sampleLengths
018
128
257
35
438
541
648
718
869
938
1026
1159
1236
132
1439
1522
1648
1744
1821
1962
2013
2153
2216
2344
2421
2528
2648
2730
2814
2940
3015
3116
323
3334
3411
3510
3646
3711
387
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences57
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs138
matches
0"was already moving"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences74
ratio0.014
matches
0"Books teetered in unstable stacks against every wall; scrolls spilled from shoeboxes like sleeping serpents."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount556
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount14
adverbRatio0.025179856115107913
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0035971223021582736
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences74
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences74
mean15.93
std9.98
cv0.626
sampleLengths
018
128
234
323
45
57
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712
829
912
1013
1115
1220
134
1414
1537
1619
1713
1813
199
2016
2117
229
2327
2432
255
2619
2712
282
293
3014
3122
3222
3327
3421
3518
3626
3715
386
3923
4039
416
427
4323
4430
4513
463
4721
4823
497
59.01% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.3783783783783784
totalSentences74
uniqueOpeners28
59.52% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences56
matches
0"Then the flat shook, glass"
ratio0.018
55.71% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences56
matches
0"He stood untouched by the"
1"His ivory cane tapped once"
2"She kept her hand on"
3"He stepped past her, uninvited,"
4"She moved past him, her"
5"He pulled a folded paper"
6"She looked at the paper."
7"Her stomach dropped, cold and"
8"she said, her voice low,"
9"He lowered his gloved hand,"
10"She felt the heat of"
11"Her delivery job, her flat"
12"she asked, pouring water into"
13"He glanced at the scrolls,"
14"She set the cup down"
15"His voice dropped, smooth and"
16"she said, though her voice"
17"He straightened, the suit falling"
18"His cane was in his"
19"She unfurled it, spoke a"
ratio0.411
13.57% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount50
totalSentences56
matches
0"The deadbolts screamed in sequence,"
1"Rory pulled the door inward,"
2"He stood untouched by the"
3"His ivory cane tapped once"
4"She kept her hand on"
5"The small crescent-shaped scar on"
6"He stepped past her, uninvited,"
7"The cramped one-bedroom flat smelled"
8"Books teetered in unstable stacks"
9"Ptolemy, Eva's tabby cat, leaped"
10"Rory shut the door."
11"The deadbolts clicked behind him,"
12"She moved past him, her"
13"The sleeves of her worn"
14"Lucien said, setting his cane"
15"The hidden blade clicked softly"
16"Rory turned, her bright blue"
17"He pulled a folded paper"
18"She looked at the paper."
19"Symbols crawled across the page,"
ratio0.893
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
ratio0
15.31% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The deadbolts screamed in sequence, click-click-click, a metallic staccato that sliced through the turmeric-spiced air of the hallway."
1"His ivory cane tapped once against the threshold, a delicate sound that concealed its hidden steel, the kind of secret that suited him."
2"Rory turned, her bright blue eyes sharp in the low light that filtered through the paper-covered windows."
3"Rory grabbed the scroll from the table, her mind clicking faster than fear, her fingers tracing the parchment she half-knew from Eva's frantic explanations."
4"Then the flat shook, glass exploding inward with a sound like thunder, and something heavier than shadow, something with claws and a human laugh that echoed wit…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she said, her voice low, her back pressing against the kitchen counter,"
1"she said, though her voice betrayed her with its tremor"
2"she whispered, her heart hammering against her ribs"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences29
tagDensity0.207
leniency0.414
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.069
79.7356%