Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCVPTG125HBWRRV72GEM7T9

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You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Quinn’s boots struck the cracked concrete of the stairwell with a rhythm that matched her pulse—steady, hard, unyielding. The beam of her Maglite carved through the subterranean dark beneath Camden Town, revealing rust-eaten rails and tiled walls where faded advertisements for cigarettes and wartime bonds peeled like dead skin. The air hung thick with iron and old water, and somewhere deep in the tunnel, a drip echoed with metronomic patience. She had worn her leather coat, the one with the reinforced shoulders, and her left wrist bore the scratched leather watch she never removed—its face glowing faint green at 4:17 in the morning. She stepped onto the platform of the abandoned Northern line station and stopped. Yellow tape cordoned off the far end, near the mouth of a service tunnel that had been bricked up in 1973, or so the records claimed. Two uniformed officers stood near the perimeter, speaking in low tones that died the moment she approached. One of them, a young PC with acne scars and tired eyes, straightened. "Detective Quinn. Scene’s secure." Quinn nodded, her salt-and-pepper hair catching the overhead emergency lamp in sharp silver streaks. "Show me." She followed him past overturned maintenance carts and heaps of rubble that had accumulated over decades of neglect. The tunnel narrowed, the ceiling lowering until she had to duck beneath a sagging concrete beam wrapped in warning paint that had long since flaked away. Then the space opened into a circular maintenance chamber where the tracks dead-ended against a wall of blackened brick. And there was the body. He lay on his back near the center, arranged with an almost theatrical precision. Mid-forties, she guessed, though death had tightened his features into something older. His overcoat was Italian wool, charcoal grey, buttoned to the throat. His hands rested at his sides, palms turned upward. His eyes were open, staring at the vaulted ceiling with an expression that might have been surprise, might have been recognition—Quinn had seen both often enough. Kneeling beside him was Eva Kowalski, her round glasses reflecting the flashlight beams, her curly red hair tied back in a knot that had come loose on one side. She wore her usual corduroy trousers and a wool jumper beneath a canvas jacket, and her worn leather satchel sat open on the ground beside her, spilling old books with cracked spines and pages yellowed by time. At twenty-six, Eva looked like she belonged in a university library, not a corpse-lit tunnel, yet her green eyes held a familiarity with dead things that Quinn had come to rely on—however reluctantly. "You’re late," Eva said without looking up. She tucked a strand of hair behind her left ear, the gesture automatic, nervous, endearing. "Forensics left ten minutes ago. They took samples of—well, of nothing, really." Quinn crouched near the body, her jaw set in its sharp line. She did not touch anything. Instead, her gaze traveled the dead man’s clothing, his shoes, the floor beneath him. "He’s clean," she said. Eva glanced up, her freckled complexion pale in the artificial light. "Clean?" "His shoes are leather-soled, black, expensive. Not a speck of tunnel grime on them. The dust in this chamber is three centimeters deep in places—I can see footprints where your techs walked in. His footprints don’t exist. And that coat—wool that expensive picks up mold spores within an hour down here. The air in this station is saturated with black mold. His coat is immaculate." Eva pushed her glasses up her nose. "So he was brought here dead. That tracks with the lack of blood pooling. His heart stopped before he was placed." Quinn’s eyes narrowed. "Or he was never here alive to begin with." She stood and circled the body, her military precision carrying her in measured steps. The floor was damp in patches, yet the dead man’s coat showed no water stains on the back where he lay. She stopped near his right hand and leaned closer. There, half-hidden beneath his palm, rested a small brass compass. Its casing bore a patina of verdigris that spoke of age and handling, and its face was etched with protective sigils—interlocking triangles and curved lines that seemed to shift in the corner of her vision. The needle was not pointing north. It pointed downward, directly into the concrete, trembling with a faint, almost imperceptible hum that she felt in her teeth rather than heard. Quinn recognized it immediately, though she had never seen one outside of Eva’s descriptions. A Veil Compass. Crafted, if she recalled Eva’s lectures correctly, by a Shade artisan, attuned to supernatural rifts and portals. She looked at Eva. "You touched this?" Eva shook her head, her hair falling forward. "No. I told them not to move it until you came. The needle started that orientation the moment they turned on their lights." Quinn pulled a plastic evidence bag from her pocket, turned it inside out over her hand, and lifted the compass with her fingertips. The needle quivered, then locked dead-center downward, as if anchored to something deep beneath the earth. "That’s not possible," she said, though her tone was flat, analytical. "It is if there’s a rift beneath us," Eva said, her voice dropping into the cadence she used when explaining ancient texts. "The Veil Market operates within a network of these. The compass points toward the nearest active portal. This location—" she gestured around the chamber "—this abandoned station is one of their nodes. Or was." Quinn turned the compass over in her gloved hand, examining the sigils. "The Veil Market moves every full moon. That’s in your reports, isn’t it? Shifts location, changes entry points, requires a bone token for access." Eva nodded, her eyes brightening with the excitement of recognition. "Exactly. The market was here three nights ago, during the new moon cycle. By now, according to their schedule, it should have relocated to—well, they never announce the destination in advance. But this station should be dead space now. Empty. Inaccessible without knowing the current gate." Quinn stood, sliding the compass into the evidence bag and sealing it with a sharp crack. She walked to the wall of blackened brick and ran her gloved fingers along the mortar. "Then explain how he got in." Eva followed, her satchel bumping against her hip. "He had a token. Or someone with a token brought him." "No footprints. No dust. No mold. He was dead weight, Eva. Carried in, placed precisely, and left with a compass that points to nothing—because the market is gone, and the rift with it." Eva opened her mouth, then closed it, her brow furrowing beneath her curls. Quinn turned back to the body. "But that’s not the part that’s wrong." She crouched again, this time near the dead man’s left pocket. With a pair of tweezers she pulled out a folded slip of paper—water-damaged, barely readable, with numbers printed in faded ink. Then she examined the dead man’s neck. Beneath the collar of his expensive coat, a thin silver chain was visible, and hanging from it— "A bone token," Eva breathed. Quinn extracted it carefully. It was small, carved from what looked like human phalange, polished smooth, with a symbol burned into its surface that matched one of the sigils on the compass. "He had entry access. Or he did." She stood, pocketing the token and the paper separately. "Here’s what your forensics missed, Eva, because they were looking for ghosts instead of footprints." She walked back toward the tunnel entrance, her flashlight beam sweeping the ground. She stopped near the body’s feet and pointed. "There. And there." Eva knelt beside her, her glasses nearly touching the floor. Quinn traced the beam along faint impressions in the dust—heavy boots, deep-set, with a distinctive tread pattern of circles and lines. One set led from the tunnel entrance to the body. Another led away, back toward the stairs. "One person brought him in," Quinn said. "Heavy build, maybe six-two, two hundred pounds, given the depth. Work boots, not fashion. The prints are fresh—over the dust, over your techs’ footprints. But look closer." She moved the light to the dead man’s shoes, then back to the boots. "The dead man weighs maybe one-seventy, dead weight distributed. The boot prints are deep near the body, shallow leaving. That means he was carrying weight coming in, walking lighter going out. Classic carry pattern." Eva’s eyes widened behind her glasses. "So he was murdered elsewhere and—" "Dumped," Quinn finished. "But that’s not all." She led Eva back to the body, crouching near his head. "His eyes are dilated, but not from drugs—there’s no needle mark, no chemical residue that your people tested for, I assume. His lips are blue, but not from asphyxiation. His skin temperature dropped uniformly, not in extremities first. He died of cardiac arrest, induced precisely, within a window of four to six hours before he was placed here." Quinn pulled back the dead man’s right sleeve, revealing his wrist. A faint bruise circled it, purple and yellow, in the shape of fingers—too large, too spread. "He was held down," Quinn said. "By someone with big hands. Then he died. Then he was carried here by someone with big feet. Two people, minimum." Eva was silent for a moment, her fingers worrying at a button on her coat. "The compass, though. The sigils. The rift—" "Are misdirection," Quinn said, her voice hardening with the authority of eighteen years on the force. "This location was chosen specifically because people like you—" she gestured vaguely "—people who understand this hidden world, this Veil Market with its bone tokens and shadow compasses—would come in here and see the supernatural. You’d see the compass pointing downward, you’d feel the hum, you’d declare this a ritual killing tied to some rift beneath the tracks. Meanwhile, the actual evidence—the footprints, the carry pattern, the precise placement—gets ignored because everyone’s chasing ghosts." She stood, brushing dust from her knees. "The killer knew this market had moved. Knew this place would be empty for weeks. Knew that if a body was found here, the investigation would be diverted into your underground world—into permits and tokens and artisan-crafted tools—rather than into conventional homicide. He used your hidden world as a curtain." Eva stood slowly, her satchel clutched against her chest. "Then why place the compass? Why risk leaving evidence of—of this?" Quinn looked down at the body, then at the compass in its bag. "Because the compass isn’t evidence of the killer’s world. It’s evidence of the victim’s." She pulled the folded paper from her pocket and held it to the light. The numbers formed an address—Camden Passage, flat 4B—and a date, three days prior. "He was investigating them," Quinn said. "Or buying from them. The compass was his. He was carrying it when he died, and the killer placed it with the body to ensure that when he was found, the narrative was already written. Supernatural death in a supernatural place." She turned to Eva, her brown eyes sharp beneath her close-cropped hair. "Your job now is to tell me everything about this compass, this market, and anyone who might have sold him that token. Because this was murder, Eva. Human hands, human boots, human planning. And I’m going to find out who dragged him down here and left him for the ghosts." Eva nodded slowly, her hair falling into her face again. She pushed it back with a trembling hand. "There’s a registry. For the tokens. Not official, but—" "Then we start there," Quinn said. She turned and walked back toward the stairwell, her watch catching the light—4:31 now, the dawn still hours away. Behind her, Eva knelt once more beside the body, not in prayer, but in study, her books already spilling from her satchel as she reached for one with a leather cover stamped with symbols that matched those on the compass. Quinn did not look back. She had seen what others had missed: not a portal, not a curse, but a calculated deception written in dust and footprints, in the absence of grime and the presence of a dead man’s clean shoes. The tunnel stretched before her, dark and echoing, but she walked through it with the steady gait of someone who had learned, three years ago after losing Morris to circumstances she still couldn’t fully name, that the world was full of hidden things—some magical, some merely malicious, and all of them demanding that she look closer, dig deeper, trust the evidence that lay in plain sight for those willing to see past the shadows.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she gestured around [around]"
1"she gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.295
leniency0.591
rawRatio0.154
effectiveRatio0.091
83.54% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2127
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"precisely"
count2
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count2
highlights
0"reluctantly"
1"really"
2"precisely"
3"carefully"
4"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
69.44% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2127
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"echoed"
count1
2
word"measured"
count1
3
word"etched"
count1
4
word"quivered"
count1
5
word"weight"
count3
6
word"furrowing"
count1
7
word"traced"
count1
8
word"ensure"
count1
9
word"calculated"
count1
10
word"echoing"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"echoed"
2"measured"
3"etched"
4"quivered"
5"weight"
6"furrowing"
7"traced"
8"ensure"
9"calculated"
10"echoing"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences94
matches(empty)
82.07% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences94
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences125
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen78
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2100
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Mid-forties, she guessed, though death had tightened his features into something older."
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions58
wordCount1408
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.56
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Maglite1
Camden2
Town1
Northern1
Italian1
Quinn22
Eva22
Kowalski1
Veil2
Compass1
Shade1
Market1
Passage1
Morris1
persons
0"Maglite"
1"Quinn"
2"Eva"
3"Kowalski"
4"Morris"
places
0"Camden"
1"Town"
globalScore0.719
windowScore0.333
55.06% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences79
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like she belonged in a university"
1"lines that seemed to shift in the corner of her vision"
2"looked like human phalange, polished smoo"
9.52% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords1.905
wordCount2100
matches
0"Not official, but"
1"not in prayer, but in study, her books already spilling from her satchel as she"
2"not a portal, not a curse, but a calculated deception written in dust"
3"not a curse, but a calculated deception written in dust"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences125
matches
0"name, that the demanding that she"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs59
mean35.59
std26.44
cv0.743
sampleLengths
0103
113
256
34
416
563
65
772
899
934
1031
114
1212
1365
1428
1512
1644
1774
1834
197
2031
2139
2211
2356
2436
2556
2638
2719
2833
2913
3013
3156
325
3339
3424
3521
363
3710
3838
3934
4014
4134
4212
437
4469
4527
4627
4722
4890
4957
94.06% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences94
matches
0"been bricked"
1"was etched"
2"gets ignored"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs241
matches
0"was not pointing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences125
ratio0.112
matches
0"Quinn’s boots struck the cracked concrete of the stairwell with a rhythm that matched her pulse—steady, hard, unyielding."
1"She had worn her leather coat, the one with the reinforced shoulders, and her left wrist bore the scratched leather watch she never removed—its face glowing faint green at 4:17 in the morning."
2"His eyes were open, staring at the vaulted ceiling with an expression that might have been surprise, might have been recognition—Quinn had seen both often enough."
3"At twenty-six, Eva looked like she belonged in a university library, not a corpse-lit tunnel, yet her green eyes held a familiarity with dead things that Quinn had come to rely on—however reluctantly."
4"Its casing bore a patina of verdigris that spoke of age and handling, and its face was etched with protective sigils—interlocking triangles and curved lines that seemed to shift in the corner of her vision."
5"\"The Veil Market operates within a network of these. The compass points toward the nearest active portal. This location—\" she gestured around the chamber \"—this abandoned station is one of their nodes. Or was.\""
6"With a pair of tweezers she pulled out a folded slip of paper—water-damaged, barely readable, with numbers printed in faded ink."
7"Beneath the collar of his expensive coat, a thin silver chain was visible, and hanging from it—"
8"Quinn traced the beam along faint impressions in the dust—heavy boots, deep-set, with a distinctive tread pattern of circles and lines."
9"A faint bruise circled it, purple and yellow, in the shape of fingers—too large, too spread."
10"\"This location was chosen specifically because people like you—\" she gestured vaguely \"—people who understand this hidden world, this Veil Market with its bone tokens and shadow compasses—would come in here and see the supernatural. You’d see the compass pointing downward, you’d feel the hum, you’d declare this a ritual killing tied to some rift beneath the tracks. Meanwhile, the actual evidence—the footprints, the carry pattern, the precise placement—gets ignored because everyone’s chasing ghosts.\""
11"The numbers formed an address—Camden Passage, flat 4B—and a date, three days prior."
12"She turned and walked back toward the stairwell, her watch catching the light—4:31 now, the dawn still hours away."
13"The tunnel stretched before her, dark and echoing, but she walked through it with the steady gait of someone who had learned, three years ago after losing Morris to circumstances she still couldn’t fully name, that the world was full of hidden things—some magical, some merely malicious, and all of them demanding that she look closer, dig deeper, trust the evidence that lay in plain sight for those willing to see past the shadows."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1247
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"revealing rust-eaten rails"
adverbCount39
adverbRatio0.03127506014434643
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.006415396952686447
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences125
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences125
mean16.8
std13.98
cv0.832
sampleLengths
018
131
221
333
413
526
617
713
84
914
102
1118
1226
1319
145
1514
1612
1711
189
1926
2029
2137
2233
237
2415
2512
2612
275
2814
294
3011
311
3265
337
3421
353
369
3714
3821
399
4010
4135
426
4323
4414
453
4617
474
483
498
53.33% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.344
totalSentences125
uniqueOpeners43
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences87
matches
0"Then the space opened into"
1"Instead, her gaze traveled the"
2"Then she examined the dead"
ratio0.034
72.87% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences87
matches
0"She had worn her leather"
1"She stepped onto the platform"
2"She followed him past overturned"
3"He lay on his back"
4"His overcoat was Italian wool,"
5"His hands rested at his"
6"His eyes were open, staring"
7"She wore her usual corduroy"
8"She tucked a strand of"
9"She did not touch anything."
10"She stood and circled the"
11"She stopped near his right"
12"Its casing bore a patina"
13"It pointed downward, directly into"
14"She looked at Eva."
15"she said, though her tone"
16"she gestured around the chamber"
17"She walked to the wall"
18"She crouched again, this time"
19"It was small, carved from"
ratio0.368
46.21% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount72
totalSentences87
matches
0"Quinn’s boots struck the cracked"
1"The beam of her Maglite"
2"The air hung thick with"
3"She had worn her leather"
4"She stepped onto the platform"
5"Quinn nodded, her salt-and-pepper hair"
6"She followed him past overturned"
7"The tunnel narrowed, the ceiling"
8"He lay on his back"
9"His overcoat was Italian wool,"
10"His hands rested at his"
11"His eyes were open, staring"
12"She wore her usual corduroy"
13"Eva said without looking up"
14"She tucked a strand of"
15"Quinn crouched near the body,"
16"She did not touch anything."
17"Eva glanced up, her freckled"
18"Eva pushed her glasses up"
19"Quinn’s eyes narrowed."
ratio0.828
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences87
matches(empty)
ratio0
33.90% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences59
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Quinn’s boots struck the cracked concrete of the stairwell with a rhythm that matched her pulse—steady, hard, unyielding."
1"Two uniformed officers stood near the perimeter, speaking in low tones that died the moment she approached."
2"She followed him past overturned maintenance carts and heaps of rubble that had accumulated over decades of neglect."
3"The tunnel narrowed, the ceiling lowering until she had to duck beneath a sagging concrete beam wrapped in warning paint that had long since flaked away."
4"His eyes were open, staring at the vaulted ceiling with an expression that might have been surprise, might have been recognition—Quinn had seen both often enoug…"
5"Kneeling beside him was Eva Kowalski, her round glasses reflecting the flashlight beams, her curly red hair tied back in a knot that had come loose on one side."
6"Its casing bore a patina of verdigris that spoke of age and handling, and its face was etched with protective sigils—interlocking triangles and curved lines tha…"
7"The needle quivered, then locked dead-center downward, as if anchored to something deep beneath the earth."
8"The tunnel stretched before her, dark and echoing, but she walked through it with the steady gait of someone who had learned, three years ago after losing Morri…"
86.54% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, though her tone was flat, analytical"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Eva breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.227
leniency0.455
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.045
76.0185%