Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCW4ASS4CJMXDX6E68YR78E

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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Rory pressed her back against the scarred wooden bar and scanned the crush of bodies for familiarity that wasn't there. She'd come for silence, not this. The Raven's Nest hummed with Friday-night desperation, bodies packed elbow-to-elbow, voices rising in that desperate London cadence that tried to outrun loneliness. Rory's fingers curled round a half-empty pint she hadn't touched. Behind her, Silas pulled a pint with the economical grace of a man who'd learned patience in prison cells and war zones, his grey-streaked auburn hair catching the green neon that bled through the high windows like sick fluorescence. Then she turned. Not towards Rory, towards the exit, but Rory saw her face in the mirror behind the bottles, and her heart stopped with the hydraulic violence of something long rusted snapping back into place. Eva Marin. She'd gained weight in all the wrong places, her cheeks hollowed out, her dark hair chopped into an asymmetrical bob that reeked of expensive salons trying to look reckless. She wore a coat that cost more than Rory's monthly rent, black cashmere with brass buttons that caught the light. But her eyes, those eyes Rory had once traced with her thumb in the dark of a Cardiff dorm room, had shrunk into something guarded, calculating. Rory's throat tightened. She hadn't seen Eva in four years, not since that winter morning in Cardiff when Eva had pushed her towards the train with a suitcase and a lie about being okay. Eva stopped dead in the doorway, letting the draft in, her gaze locking onto Rory's reflection with the precision of someone who'd been searching for this exact collision. She walked over, slow, her heels clicking a rhythm that made Rory's spine straighten. "We need to talk about that report you filed," Eva said, though her lips hadn't moved, and Rory realised she was already speaking, already breaking. "Eva." The name came out like gravel. Eva slid onto the stool beside her, leaving one empty between them like a moat. She signalled Silas with a tilt of her chin, and he came over with a bottle of red and two glasses without asking. His hazel eyes flicked between them, measuring damage, then he retreated with that slight limp in his left leg, back to the end of the bar where he belonged. "You look like shit," Eva said, pouring wine with steady hands. Rory touched her own face, feeling the hollows beneath her eyes, the pallor of someone who delivered dim sum by day and studied law by flickering lamplight. "Delivery work doesn't come with a skincare routine." "And law school?" Eva swirled her glass, the ruby liquid catching light. "Did you finish? Or are you still running?" "Pre-law was never mine to finish." Rory picked up her pint, drank, tasted nothing. "You knew that." "Didn't stop you applying." Silence pooled between them, thick with the things they'd never said in texts that went unanswered, in letters that never arrived. Eva leaned closer, her perfume expensive, woody, nothing like the cheap vanilla Rory remembered from university bathrooms. "I'm working for a consultancy now. White-collar defence. You'd hate it." "I'd hate the suits." "You'd hate the money, too, then." Eva smiled, but it didn't reach her eyes. "Six figures, Ror. Six figures for telling rich people they didn't do what they did." Rory turned to face her fully, taking in the sharp angles of Eva's jaw, the tension in her shoulders that spoke of years carrying weight Rory hadn't shared. "You came all this way to tell me about your salary?" "I came because Silas told me you'd been asking about Cardiff." Rory flinched. "Silas talks too much." "He talks to people who matter." Eva set her glass down with a soft clink. "I heard about Evan. About you leaving." The air changed. Rory's fingers found the crescent scar on her left wrist, traced it through her sleeve. "Ancient history." "Is it?" Eva's voice dropped, lost some of its corporate polish. "Because I remember carrying your books while you studied. I remember you talking about justice like it was something you could hold in your hands." "And now?" "Now you deliver Chinese food and live above a bar run by a spymaster." Rory laughed, brittle. "The Golden Empress pays rent. Silas gives me discounts. It's not a tragedy, Eva." "It's not a life, either." Eva reached out, her manicured nails grazing Rory's wrist, avoiding the scar with deliberate care. "You were supposed to be brilliant." The words landed like a slap. Rory pulled her arm back, her pint sloshing. "Brilliant according to whose script? Yours? Your father's? The one that said escape Cardiff, come to London, become something?" "You came because I told you to run." "You told me to run towards you." Rory's voice rose, then she caught herself, lowered it to a hiss. "But you were already gone. Already working for some firm that defends criminals. Already changed into..." She gestured at Eva's coat, her hair, her entire polished armour. "This." Eva's jaw tightened. She drank her wine in one swallow, then signalled for another bottle with an imperious flick of her wrist Silas ignored. "People change, Rory. They adapt. They survive." "Some adapt upward. Others just survive downward." "That's not fair." "Life's not fair. You taught me that when you left me with a suitcase and a train ticket." The bar noise seemed to recede, leaving them in a bubble of old grief and new resentment. Eva's eyes glistened, but she blinked it away with the efficiency of someone who'd trained herself not to cry in boardrooms. "I left you because I was dying," Eva said quietly. "Not physically. But I was drowning in Cardiff, in my father's expectations, in that flat with the mould on the ceiling. I came to London, I clawed, I built this..." She gestured at herself, at her coat, her confidence. "And I never looked back because looking back hurt too much." Rory studied her, searching for the girl who'd shared cigarettes on the university steps, who'd cried over failed exams and broken hearts with equal devastation. She was in there, buried under layers of ambition and defence mechanisms, but Rory could still see her in the set of Eva's shoulders, in the way she held her wine glass like a weapon. "You never called," Rory said. "You never called either." "We both waited for the other one to break first." Eva nodded, slow. "Stupid, wasn't it?" "Catastrophically." Then Eva smiled, small and sad. "You're still clever, though. Still seeing through people." "I'm not seeing through you, Eva. I'm seeing you clearly for the first time in years. And you're terrified." The colour drained from Eva's face. "Of what?" "Of being seen. Of being the girl from Cardiff who cried over exams. You've buried her so deep you've forgotten she's the one who made you strong." Eva stood up so quickly her stool scraped. She pulled out her wallet, dropped bills on the counter that Rory knew covered her drink and Eva's and then some. "I have a car waiting. I should go." "Of course you do." Eva paused, her hand on Rory's shoulder, brief and burning. "I'm not the villain in your story, Ror. I'm just someone who survived differently." Then she was walking away, through the crowd, her coat a dark slash against the bodies, and Rory was alone with her pint and Silas's knowing gaze from behind the bar. Rory drank, and tasted ash. She heard the crash before she understood it. The front window of The Raven's Nest exploded inward, not with the neat precision of a bomb but with the chaotic violence of something heavy and deliberate. Glass rained down in glittering shards, and through the smoke and screaming, Rory saw figures in black moving with purpose, weapons drawn, voices shouting commands that cut through the panic. Silas was already moving, his limp forgotten, pulling Rory down behind the bar with hands that were suddenly iron. "Down!" he roared, and Rory obeyed, her heart hammering against her ribs. But she saw Eva, paused in the doorway, turning back with her mouth open in a scream that never came, as one of the figures grabbed her, dragged her towards the shattered exit, towards the black van that waited with its doors open like a mouth. Rory reached for her, but Silas pulled her back, hard. "Let her go!" Rory screamed, struggling against his grip. "Not your fight!" "It is now!" She broke free, scrambling over the bar, glass crunching under her palms, and ran towards the door where Eva's coat disappeared into darkness, into the waiting vehicle that roared away into Soho's neon-soaked streets. Rory stood in the wreckage, bleeding from a cut on her palm, watching the taillights vanish, knowing with a certainty that made her bones ache that this was not over, that the past had just come back with weapons drawn, and she was running towards it with open hands.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Eva said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.278
leniency0.556
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.037
93.32% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1497
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
59.92% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1497
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"scanned"
count1
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"traced"
count2
4
word"calculating"
count1
5
word"flicked"
count1
6
word"tension"
count1
7
word"chaotic"
count1
8
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"scanned"
1"silence"
2"weight"
3"traced"
4"calculating"
5"flicked"
6"tension"
7"chaotic"
8"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences66
matches(empty)
99.57% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences66
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences105
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen49
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1497
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions78
wordCount1059
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity3.21
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity5.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven2
Nest2
Friday-night1
London1
Silas6
Rory34
Marin1
Cardiff2
Eva27
Silence1
Soho1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Silas"
3"Rory"
4"Marin"
5"Eva"
6"Silence"
places
0"London"
1"Cardiff"
2"Soho"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences55
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
66.40% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.336
wordCount1497
matches
0"Not towards Rory, towards the exit, but Rory saw her face in the mirror behind the bottles"
1"not with the neat precision of a bomb but with the chaotic violence of something heavy"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences105
matches
0"commands that cut"
1"ache that this"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs68
mean22.01
std18.47
cv0.839
sampleLengths
020
16
271
33
433
52
675
734
828
914
1025
111
126
1367
1411
1535
1620
1717
184
1921
2028
214
2229
2339
2411
256
2622
2720
2836
292
3014
3117
3226
3333
348
3547
3631
377
383
3918
4038
4160
4260
435
444
4510
466
471
4814
4919
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences66
matches(empty)
61.83% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs193
matches
0"was already speaking"
1"was walking"
2"was already moving"
3"was running"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences105
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1065
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.023474178403755867
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.004694835680751174
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences105
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences105
mean14.26
std10.84
cv0.761
sampleLengths
020
16
222
310
439
53
633
72
829
920
1026
113
1231
1328
1414
1525
161
176
1815
1923
2029
2111
2227
238
2412
258
2614
273
284
2921
3017
3111
324
3314
3415
3528
3611
3711
382
394
4015
417
423
4315
442
4511
4625
472
4814
493
55.56% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.3619047619047619
totalSentences105
uniqueOpeners38
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences63
matches
0"Then she turned."
1"Then Eva smiled, small and"
2"Then she was walking away,"
ratio0.048
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences63
matches
0"She'd come for silence, not"
1"She'd gained weight in all"
2"She wore a coat that"
3"She hadn't seen Eva in"
4"She walked over, slow, her"
5"She signalled Silas with a"
6"His hazel eyes flicked between"
7"She gestured at Eva's coat,"
8"She drank her wine in"
9"She gestured at herself, at"
10"She was in there, buried"
11"She pulled out her wallet,"
12"She heard the crash before"
13"he roared, and Rory obeyed,"
14"She broke free, scrambling over"
ratio0.238
15.56% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount56
totalSentences63
matches
0"Rory pressed her back against"
1"She'd come for silence, not"
2"The Raven's Nest hummed with"
3"Rory's fingers curled round a"
4"She'd gained weight in all"
5"She wore a coat that"
6"Rory's throat tightened."
7"She hadn't seen Eva in"
8"Eva stopped dead in the"
9"She walked over, slow, her"
10"Eva said, though her lips"
11"The name came out like"
12"Eva slid onto the stool"
13"She signalled Silas with a"
14"His hazel eyes flicked between"
15"Eva said, pouring wine with"
16"Rory touched her own face,"
17"Eva swirled her glass, the"
18"Rory picked up her pint,"
19"Silence pooled between them, thick"
ratio0.889
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences63
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences34
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"The Raven's Nest hummed with Friday-night desperation, bodies packed elbow-to-elbow, voices rising in that desperate London cadence that tried to outrun lonelin…"
1"Behind her, Silas pulled a pint with the economical grace of a man who'd learned patience in prison cells and war zones, his grey-streaked auburn hair catching …"
2"She'd gained weight in all the wrong places, her cheeks hollowed out, her dark hair chopped into an asymmetrical bob that reeked of expensive salons trying to l…"
3"Eva stopped dead in the doorway, letting the draft in, her gaze locking onto Rory's reflection with the precision of someone who'd been searching for this exact…"
4"She walked over, slow, her heels clicking a rhythm that made Rory's spine straighten."
5"Rory touched her own face, feeling the hollows beneath her eyes, the pallor of someone who delivered dim sum by day and studied law by flickering lamplight."
6"Rory turned to face her fully, taking in the sharp angles of Eva's jaw, the tension in her shoulders that spoke of years carrying weight Rory hadn't shared."
7"Rory studied her, searching for the girl who'd shared cigarettes on the university steps, who'd cried over failed exams and broken hearts with equal devastation…"
8"Silas was already moving, his limp forgotten, pulling Rory down behind the bar with hands that were suddenly iron."
9"She broke free, scrambling over the bar, glass crunching under her palms, and ran towards the door where Eva's coat disappeared into darkness, into the waiting …"
10"Rory stood in the wreckage, bleeding from a cut on her palm, watching the taillights vanish, knowing with a certainty that made her bones ache that this was not…"
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Eva said, though her lips hadn't moved, and Rory realised she was already speaking, already breaking"
1"Eva swirled, the ruby liquid catching light"
2"She gestured, her hair, her entire polished armour"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he roared (roar)"
1"Rory screamed (scream)"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.111
leniency0.222
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.074
79.2383%